Yeah, it feels forced to me. The framing device doesn’t work. I don’t find Old Jake’s conversations with the aspiring author to be, well, particularly inspired.
Not growing up with a father figure, I used to assume “The Visitor” didn’t hit for me the same way it does for others because I lack a point of real relation. And that might still be part of it, certainly. But on my most recent rewatch, my takeaway was that it’s got the potential for a good story. It doesn’t get there. A deep reworking of that framer would have helped.
Also, I realize there’s nothing that could have been done about it, but what a weird timeline this Jake grew up in - the Dominion never actually attacks outright? The Klingons keep being bullies for years and years, and it all blows over re: the Gamma Quadrant? An odd potentiality! Taken on its own, “The Visitor” would suggest to any first-time DS9 viewer that there’s really not much to worry about, going forward. I know that’s getting unnecessarily meta, but it kind of hurts my head, haha.
Obviously, I’m aware that I am in the slimmest of minorities on this one. Most adore the episode. I’ve only ever met one other person who dislikes it. Heck, I’m not even sure I dislike it, so much as I find it to be decidedly average.