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The New Dax - Cooperative Writing DISCUSSION

Now I see what's wrong with the eyes. Back to the drawing board. This was just a rough try anyways, I will take into account your suggestions.
As for pics, I like the one I'm using as it's straight on so I only really have to worry about two dimensions but I can try with another one if you find one you like. :)
Won't be on the BBS as much this week...real life is catching up with me. Keep up the good writing. Might post what I have on Davis in a bit.
 
I dunno...she looks kinda...unimpressive. (Maybe it has something to do with the cheekbones--or, more likely, the eyes being too high up. It makes her face look kinda long.

but it seems as if something's gone, as far as "feminity" is concerned....)

One thing more concrete: the hair seems a little off. It looks a little bit like a wig. Perhaps if you were to adjust it a bit...and then lengthen it, the whole "scale" would look better...? After all, Ezri's face was perfectly suited for short hair. Many girls need it long, to provide a "scale" appropriate for their kind of looks.

(Do that first: make it shoulder-length, and adjust its relation to the head. Make it "fit" better. Then we can see if her cheeks or eyes need changing.)

i agree with Rush on this one. try to make her hair different. didn't notice the eyes until Rush pointed it out but he's right. otherwise she looks good. nice work.

EDIT: With all this talk about the shuttlecraft Ihs'ree (Evening star) i've decided to christen the boat I'm working on to Ihs'ree. I've been looking for a good name and this one never actually occurred to me. You don't mind Rush, do you?

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Ah...sure! Just credit it in writing. :)

(Shucks! I had no idea, in my wildest dreams, that my coining the term would lead to a veritble phenomenon!)
 
So I gave it a try...haven't done anything with skin tone, just removed a mole and lengthened the hair.

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Ah...sure! Just credit it in writing. :)

(Shucks! I had no idea, in my wildest dreams, that my coining the term would lead to a veritble phenomenon!)

Of course, Rush. It shall be done.
And well, you coined a great term. One I'm particularly fond of, so why not? I needed a name and Ihs'ree had both a good backstory and showed off my love to Star Trek.

Its in the early stages and its nothing fancy, but I can show you the boat I'm building it after.
EDIT: Here it is. I'm modeling it after the swedish "Golden Cut" although it will look far less professional. (I'm no Jethro Gibbs :))
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So I gave it a try...haven't done anything with skin tone, just removed a mole and lengthened the hair.

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hmm, me likey! try with the hair over her ears. but i'm liking what i see. :techman: very much in fact.
 
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After ten pages of brainstorming, I'm curious enough to ask when the story is going to come out. Because I can tell you now, I'm hooked to the storyline that you're proposing, gentlemen. :techman:
 
Not sure, Cap...er, Admiral. Ares is working on his installment, I'm still brainstorming, and Rush is gonna write a later installment. It's gonna be great, I think we're as excited if not a little more than you are. :)
 
After ten pages of brainstorming, I'm curious enough to ask when the story is going to come out. Because I can tell you now, I'm hooked to the storyline that you're proposing, gentlemen. :techman:

Hmm, once we settle the characters an the backstory, we're ready to go. Here is a rough first draft. i've added all what we have written (aka brainstormed) into one document.

Please not that this does not represent the final version or story. It may change and will be improved. I'm having a few british and american friends check the grammar of my stories, as will Rush and Tiberius i believe, before release. Unfortunately, i'm the weakest like here so bare with any mistakes, 'cause i have written most of this. The fight and Quark scene was written by Tiberius. Constructive criticism is welcomed.

It’s a well known fact that Orions come from a planet with higher than average gravity, making their bones and muscles significantly denser than the average humanoid. It’s usually best to avoid fighting Orions hand-to-hand unless you have a clear advantage. Pigheadedness and suicidal tendencies do not count as a clear advantage, as Perjon Dax soon realized.
Quark knew, Dax could tell. From the moment Perjon looked up at the bartender, the Ferengi knew what Perjon intended. At first, his suicidal tendencies actually seemed to be a benefit – evidently the Klingons underestimated the damage an angry Trill can do.

“She told you to let go of ‘er.” Dax slurred on purpose, making the Klingon think he was significantly more intoxicated than he really was.

“This does not concern you, Dax.” Galrisan rumbled from his seat. The Klingon glared at Perjon but said nothing, his grip on the Dabo girl’s arm as tight as ever. Perjon smiled and nodded.

“You know what? You’re right. None of my business. I think I’ll sit down.” He replied cheerily.

“That would be wise, Trill.” The Klingon spat. Perjon grinned wider and turned to leave. Well, he pretended to. Pivoting on his heel, he threw his entire body into punching the nearest Klingon directly in the face, and then slammed his elbow into the other Klingon’s throat. Both men went down quickly, but they didn’t stay down, and brandished d’ktaghs for the next round. Galrisan sighed and drained the last of his drink as Perjon knocked the blade from one Klingon’s hand and swung at the other. For a moment, Perjon feared the massive Orion would join in, but he seemed content to watch.
Somehow, it seemed like there were more Klingons than there used to be. Perjon mused on this as a punch connected with his jaw and he fell against a table, lashing out reflexively with his legs and connecting with something that grunted savagely. He could have won the fight right then and there, if Galrisan hadn’t got bored of watching.

“That’s enough!” The Orion crime boss boomed, shoving an angry Klingon away from Perjon. “I have business to conduct!”
It could have been over, but Dax had never known when to quit. It wasn’t until his fist connected with the Orion’s face of granite that he knew he was in trouble.

“Well that was stupid.” Quark chimed helpfully from behind the bar as Perjon had the wind knocked out of him.

Holding Cell A, Deep Space Nine, Bajor system
0900 hours, station time.


“Get up! All of you!” The security guard barked. In spite of his size, the man could scare a Klingon to silence.

Wielding a phaser rifle, the Saurian positioned himself in the middle of the room. There were five more holding cells, all filled with the troublemakers from the day before yesterday. He slowly sat up holding his abdomen. His cellmate, an Orion male, had been the one who gave him the final knockout and the chief of security had found it interesting to put them in the same holding cell. Thankfully Galrisan was a reasonable man when sober, and he hadn’t finished the job.

It took Perjon a few seconds to gather himself as the guard walked past every single holding cell. Finally giving up, he walked to his office for a padd.

Returning to the brig now wielding a padd instead of a phaser rifle, he asked, “Which one of you is Lieutenant Commander Perjon Dax?”


Perjon slowly stood up, still holding his right hand over his aching abdomen. Barely able to stand after the beating he received from the massive Orion, he approached the barely visible force field. “I am Perjon Dax!” he shouted to the guard.

The security guard slowly approached him. “Ah, I should have known. The wiseguy.” He laughed. “You’re being released into your friend’s custody. Step away from the force field.”

Perjon complied, a few seconds later, after a nod from the Saurian chief of security, a young human ensign dropped the force fields. It flashed brightly before fading from existence and Perjon stepped through. “I was under the impression that the fight last night would keep me in that cell for two more days. What changed?” he asked as they left the brig. Fad'gh didn't deem it worthwhile to reply. Outside, in the security chief's office, a man was sitting in the chief’s chair. A Vulcan dressed in civvies. Black pants, a yellow shirt and a purple vest. Obviously he had bought his attire on the station. It was, unique. For a lack of a better way of describing it. The man appeared to be someone Chief Fad’gh respected greatly, because he bowed his head slowly and put his right hand to his chest. The traditional Saurian salute. The Vulcan returned it and after a quick nod, Chief Fad’gh left.

The Vulcan looked up at Perjon. Almost like he was trying to probe his mind. And judging from the look, he was minutes away from being able to. “Perjon Dax. Formerly of the USS Ballona. Valedictorian of you class at Starfleet Academy, rank of Lieutenant Commander, advanced tactical training and covert ops, expert in Klingon martial arts and Suus Mahna.” He said, reading from the padd in his hand. “A holding cell. -- Not exactly the place I hoped to find a man like you. Nonetheless, here you are.”

“And you are?” Dax inquired.

“I’m Captain Valom. I’m here to give you a job.” He replied with a very un-Vulcan smile.

Dax shook his head. He didn’t seem to care very much. “If you know so much about me, you should also know that I resigned a year ago. I’m done with Starfleet.“ he said. “If there nothing else, I miss my holding cell.” He rose to leave.

“Just like that?” Valon asked, almost surprised. He had of course read Dax’s file, but not in a million years did he expect this type of treatment. “You don’t even want to know what the job is?”

“No. As I said, I'm done with Starfleet. What I need, they can’t provide.” Dax said. His arms crossed across his chest. Desperately trying to hide the pain in his abdomen his cellmate had cause two days earlier.

"Vengeance?"


"Something like that, yes." Dax replied.

“I see.” Valon shook his head. “Perhaps you’re not the man I was looking for... – Oh, and in case, by some godsend miracle, you turn into the man I was looking for. The Armaita is in spacedock for another 12 hours.” He said, stood up and headed for the door. He halted in the doorway. “My father told me I should look at your file. And I did. Reading it, I was pleasantly surprised. I saw Curzon Dax, the diplomat who negotiated the Khitomer accords. Jadzia Dax, of the house of Martok and a Dominion war veteran. Ezri Dax, one of the officers who stopped the Borg invasion and someone who was a dear friend of mine. And then you. Do you know what I see when I look at you? I see is a drunken, sorry excuse of a Starfleet officer, who can’t do anything but feel sorry for himself. Your ship was destroyed, yes. Your friends died, along with four hundred other officers. It was tragic. But that's no excuse to let you life and career go down the drain. That's a reason to make something of your life since you were lucky enough to survive. -- The great Dax. What a waste...“

Those were Captain Valon’s last words before he disappeared into the crowd outside the security office.


***

"Are you still here?" Fad'gh asked returning from his rounds on the promenade an hour later. Dax was still sitting in the office contemplating what Valon had said. Maybe he's right, he though. I am a waste. And if I am. What do I do about it?

"
Hey! Are you deaf or something? You're free to go. Get out of my office if you don't want to return to the cell!" the chief barked. Dax slowly stood up and headed for the door.

"You know Chief, I liked you predecessor better. Have a good day. If it’s possible for you, that is." he said and left leaving Fad'gh shout something untranslatable after him.

***


“Since when do you tolerate such unsavory characters in this fine establishment?” Perjon quipped as he took a seat once again in Quark’s.
“Ever since I laid eyes on Jadzia.” Quark replied.
“That hurts, Quark, it really hurts.”
“You did start the fight.”
“They had it coming.”
“True, but who cares? Everyone gets what’s coming eventually.”
“So you don’t mind customers pushing the Dabo girls around?”
“She’ll be adequately compensated. Besides, he hadn’t really done anything to her yet.”
“Once a Ferengi…”
“I know, always…rich.”
“That’s not what I was going to say.”
Quark smiled. “So, I heard an interesting rumor.”
“Heard or started?”
“You wound me, Dax. I heard you turned down a job. Apparently Captain Valom thinks you’re a good-for-nothing, lazy brawler with nothing to lose.”
“I am a good-for-nothing lazy brawler with nothing to lose.”
“That doesn’t sound like the Dax I used to know.”
“Well, I’m not as pretty as the Dax you used to know either.”
“True.”
“I don’t know, maybe I should try harder.”
“Where’s the fun in that when you can come here and get beaten half to death? I thought you were a masochist.”
“Never used to be.”
“Cynic.”
“Definitely.”
“You hate this place, don’t you?”
“With a passion.”
“Then what are you still doing here? Your ship leaves in about seven hours.”
“Never thought I’d see the day.”
“What day?”
“Quark encouraging me to go crawling back to Starfleet.”
“I’m not. You always do whatever you want anyways. Sometimes you just don’t know what it is you do want. Until I hit you in the face with it.”
Perjon sighed and leaned back in his chair. “You know as much as I hate to admit it…”
“I’m right.” Quark interrupted.
“You’re right.”
“I’m always right. See you around, Dax.”
“Maybe, maybe not. You’re the best, Quark.”
“I try.”
“Goodbye, scoundrel.”
“Goodbye, masochist.”

***

USS Trafalgar

Captains ready room, Deck 1

The door chime rang, jolting Captain Valon from his thoughts. “Come.” He called out as Lieutenant Donovan stepped in. The engineering noncom turned acting XO remained at attention, something that Valon hated. He made a swooshing gesture for him to loosen up.

“You sent for me, sir?” Donovan asked. Complying with what he considered permission to stand at ease.

“Yes, I did. How’s the resupply going? We need to be in orbit of Cardassia Prime in 14 hours. We’re being sent out again. Once we drop off the parts for the DaVinci, we’ll be heading out to the border. And I don’t want hear it, Lieutenant. I know precisely how much you despise border patrol.”

“Aye sir.” Donovan smiled. “If I may ask, sir. – How’s the hunt going?”

“Hunt? – Oh, you mean Dax. I found him in holding cell. He wasn’t very… How should I put it? Optimistic about returning to Starfleet.”

Donovan looked quizzical. “Returning, sir? I wasn’t aware that he left in the first place. – Ah, you didn’t tell him about the status of his resignation, did you? Or the arrest warrant for that matter.”

“No. I didn’t want to threaten him. If he reconsiders, he’ll be here in…” He looked at his computer. “six hours. If not, he’s not the man I’m looking for and don’t want him as my XO anyway. So no harm done. Starfleet security can take him on the desertion charge if they want to.”

“So how was he? Should I worry if he’s going to bash my head in if he has a bad day? With all due respect, sir. He doesn’t seem so stable.” Donovan pointed out.

Valon shook his head. “I'm not saying he's the model officer. Not after the Ballona, at least. But if he’s half the officer Ezri was, I need him.” He said. “I don’t know if he was just beaten and hung-over or plain indifferent, but he didn’t recognize me. I just hope there still some Dax in him after everything he’s been through.”

Donavan noticed the sad look on Valon’s face. “You miss her, don’t you?”

Valon paused for a moment, and nodded. “Yes...I do. Very much." He looked off, the face of an old, dear friend filling his mind. When he spoke, it wasn't to Donovan, as much as to himself.

"I wouldn’t be here if it wasn’t for Ezri. The Borg destroyed Shi’Kahr...and there was nothing I could do. I thought my life was over. Quite frankly--I wanted to die. Everyone I ever cared about was dead. Ezri Dax...she taught me to live again."

He sighed. "You know...I handed in my resignation three times. She denied every single one. When I sent her my fourth, she called me into her ready room. She took the padd and approved it. Just like that, without a word. Then, when I turned to leave, she stopped me. She said that I had a chance to do something with my life. To do some good. To honor everyone who had lost their lives, instead of letting survivor’s guilt take over my life."

He shrugged. "I just brushed it off as an attempt to make me feel guilty about leaving my shipmates in a time like that. But...I’ll never forget the look on her face. That’s when I knew I had made a mistake. She didn’t yell at me, she didn’t say I was wrong by leaving. But that look she gave me, I will remember for the rest of my life. Like… I don’t know how to describe it. Like endless disappointment...”

“Yes, she had a notorious way of looking at people. She could make a Klingon sink into the floor, just by looking at them. I heard about that that. Never met her myself, though. Unfortunately... – I take it you didn’t resign then?”

“No, I didn’t. I transferred to command track instead. After three years of service aboard the Aventine, she recommended me for the captaincy of the Hood.”

“So you’re trying to help him because you went through something similar? No offense captain, noble as it is, but you don’t owe this man anything. The moment Ezri Dax died, the slate turned blank again. Its Trill tradition.”

“Yes, you’re absolutely right. I don’t owe Perjon anything. I owe it to Ezri.”

“Captain, you know that I consider you a man of great integrity and honor. But if you are trying to repay a debt by bringing an unstable man aboard to serve as you XO, with all due respect, that’s not honorable, that just plain stupid. And as your XO, albeit merely temporary, I must object. There must be someone else.”

“Like you?” Valon shot back.

Donovan shook his head, looked down at Valon and said, “The thought had crossed my mind, but there is no chance Starfleet command is going to permit that. Not after Melcor IV… I’m not regretting anything, scrapping the mission was the right thing to do. I don’t mind covert ops but when civilians are in the line of fire…”

Valon raised his hand to silence Donovan. “Yes, I heard all that already, Lieutenant. And just to clarify, I did try and I was stonewalled.” He said.

“So you will reconsider Commander Dax?” Donovan asked. Sounding almost like he was afraid of the answer.

“No. That is all. Contact me if and when he’s aboard. Dismissed.” Valon said flatly. Since the usual permission of free speech had obviously been revoked. Donovan left the ready room.

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part 2
Few hours later
USS Trafalgar
Deck One, Main Bridge

Finished with the incredibly dry status report about the new modifications to the deflector, Donovan reached for his combadge. With a quick tap he opened a channel to the captain. Still hoping for him to rethink his choice of XO. Mostly because Donovan was going report directly to the man. The ship and the crew was, in this case, a second priority. “Sir, you told me to inform you when we departed. We are undocking as we speak.”

Very well, Lieutenant. I’m on my way. Valon out,” came the Captain’s half tired, half annoyed reply through the comm. Exactly two minutes later, the Vulcan stepped onto the bridge.

Donovan relinquished the center seat in a heartbeat and returned to his OPS position. “Systems are green. Current speed, full impulse. Warp speed on you command, Captain.” Donovan said turning back towards Valon.

Valon nodded. “Excellent. Set course to Cardassia Prime. Warp eight. Engage.”

“Aye aye, Warp eight.” Lieutenant Andrew Davis replied bitterly from the helm. “Warp…” he muttered under his breath. “We just got a new slipstream drive and we don’t use it. Unbelievable…”

Blaming it on new-toy-it is, Valon completely disregarded the helmsman’s bitter tone. He got up and nodded to Donovan. “Ready room. Now.” He said. Donovan rushed after him momentarily as a relief officer replaced him.

Taking a seat in the couch as instructed, Donovan spoke up. “So, Captain. Was he a no-show?”

Valon took his cup of Raktajino from the replicator and sat down. “Well…” he scratched his head. “He’s here alright. That’s why I asked you in here. You might want to get to know the man.”

The door chime rang. Both men looked at the door. Donovan a bit more negatively than usual.

“Speaking of the devil…” Donovan said silently and put on the most diplomatic mask he could muster. After Valon’s command, the doors parted revealing a Trill male dressed in civvies. Lieutanant Commander Perjon Dax. He walked past Donovan without even noticing him and approached Valon.

Valon looked up from the padd in his hands. “Changed your mind, have you?” he asked trying to sound as nonchalant as he could.

“Yes…” Dax nodded. “But don’t give me another lecture about how I’ve wasted my life, all right?” he handed a padd to Valon. “My request to be reinstated into Starfleet.”

“Ah…” Valon smiled. “We won’t be needing this. But I appreciate the formality. What changed you mind, Perjon?”

“You did. And I would have been here sooner if one of your men hadn’t insisted I go through the security checks. Apparently I was flagged as a Ferengi cargoship.”

“That’s because you were a Ferengi cargoship. Your fancy transponder can make your little ship look like a goddamn Borg Cube.” Donovan snapped. Noticing the look on Valon’s face upon the mentioning of the Borg, he quickly added. “Sorry sir.”

Valon gave him an appreciative nod. “It’s perfectly all right, Lieutenant. No matter. Let’s get down to business. – Dax. You currently hold the rank of Lieutenant Commander and you were the XO of the Ballona for two years before its destruction, correct?”

“Yes, sir. I was.” Dax replied. Valon tried to read him, an old trick he had learned from Ezri Dax. But the man’s poker face remained inscrutable. Not even when mentioning the Ballona did he flinch.

“What would you say if I would offer you the XO position on the Trafalgar?”

“Permission to speak freely?” Dax asked. Upon Valon’s quick gesture with his right arm that could loosely be translated into ‘go ahead’, he continued. “Truthfully sir. I’d ask you if you are completely sane. Who would want me as their XO?”

“No one.” Valon replied. “Jack, – could you give us the room? Your shift is over anyway. Get some rest.”

Donovan nodded and shot Dax a glare that said everything he needed to know. “Get yourself together or I will kick you out the nearest airlock.” He mentally reached out and tried to strangle the man. But when no invisible arms extended he gave up and headed for the door.

Dax smiled at the Second officer wryly as he left. Something that just added to the hostile tension between the two men.

“No one, but me.” Valon added. “I’m inclined to give you some slack because I know you. You could be one hell of an XO if you put your mind to it. But…”

“With all due respect, Captain. You don’t know me. And you never had.” Perjon cut in.

Seeing his point, Valon lowered his gaze and gave his desk a fleeting look. He wasn’t an overly personal man. His desk was spartan. It had always been. My ready room is my workplace. Not my quarters. He always said when someone asked him why he had no personal affects present. But there were three things he held dearly. Two pictures and an IDIC medallion. The medallion had been given to him by his late mother as a child and the two pictures were the last memories of his good friend and mentor, Ezri Dax. Ironically, he never really got along with her husband, Julian Bashir. In the beginning, he couldn’t stand the man. But now, he couldn’t imagine them not being friends and missed him just as much as he missed Ezri.

Valon picked up one of the picture frames, gave it a long and thorough look, remembering the good memories behind it. ‘The last meal’, he called the picture. The last time they had all met. Ezri, Julian, Sam, and him.

“What’s that Captain?” Dax asked as Valon was looking at the picture frame.

Valon smiled. “Nothing. Just some old memories. – Here.” He said handing the picture frame to Dax.

Dax carefully probed every inch of the picture. He didn’t remember it being taken, but he recognized the place where they were. Benjamin Sisko’s Restaurant in New Orleans. He looked at the faces. Samaritan Bowers, Julian Bashir, Valon and Ezri Dax. “She was very beautiful, wasn’t she?” Dax said. It was more of a statement than a question. He returned the picture to Valon.

“Yes,” he said. “She was also very married.” Smiling, Valon looked up at Dax and then back at the picture of Ezri. “You’re right. I knew her.” He finally said. Still looking at the picture. “I don’t know you. But I know how you work, how you think. And I’m confident that you will do a good job if you really want to.”

Valon carefully put the picture back. Cleaning off the thin layer of dust with his right index finger. “I could order you to do this, but I won’t.” he said. Letting his words sink in. “I know how Trill traditions work. I pride myself in knowing everything that is possible about different cultures. But, I still consider you a friend. -- It is your choice, Dax.” He said.

“It’s your choice, Dax…” Valon voice was kind and friendly. Not commanding or demanding. It would have been so easy to simply say no. To simply keep running. To keep avoiding the memory that had haunted him for so long. A mistake that hadn’t even been his. Yet he still felt responsible. But… He couldn’t run anymore…

“I accept.” Dax finally said. Valon’s expression didn’t change. But Perjon could still see that he was glad.

Valon reached for a padd and handed it to Dax. “Computer. Record that from this date, effective immediately, Lieutenant Commander Perjon Dax is promoted to the rank of Commander and assigned as Executive officer to the USS Trafalgar, NCC-91225. Authorization: Valon- 2-4-Kappa-blue.”

The computer responded with a short chime. “Ships log and roster has been updated. Commander Perjon Dax has been given command level clearance…

As the computer finished it’s long and drawn out list of every system and area Commander Perjon Dax had no access to, only two words came to mind for Perjon. “Now what?” he asked.

“Now?” Valon inquired. “Now you download everything in your ships databanks into my personal mainframe. Every name, every job, every location. And I’ll call an old friend and say that Dax needs a favor. If you can produce anything worthwhile he will make sure that you’ve been working undercover for Starfleet intelligence your entire criminal career.”

“What old friend?” Dax inquired, looking incredibly quizzical.

Valon simply leaned back in his chair and smiled. “I’ll tell you some other time. Right now, got and get some sleep. Your shift starts at oh-eight hundred hours. Dismissed.”

“Aye.” Dax nodded and headed for the door. Before the doors closed, he could here Valon address the computer.

“Computer. Open a private channel to Captain Samaritan Bowers, USS Aventine.”

this is not the full tale. my part will end after the cardassia prime section mentioned earlier in the story.

EDIT: missed your post Tiberius.
 
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So I gave it a try...haven't done anything with skin tone, just removed a mole and lengthened the hair.

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Hmm...not sure, but...she kinda looks a little too much like Ezri....

I dunno. Maybe I'm being too critical, but on the other hand....

I'd say...try making the long hair a bit more "airy". More...flowing, if you know what I mean.

I'm seeing something...I guess. Spectifically...see what happens if, say, you make the hair a bit "wider" on the side with the ear showing. Cover the ear a bit.

(Sorry if I'm being pushy. I just...I see something....)
 
Thanks for the tip Rushbo, I'll see what I can do.

In the meantime, here's Davis' character sketch.
Andrew Davis is the son of Mitchell Davis, a cargo pilot. Andrew took naturally to piloting and on one occasion assisted with the evacuation of a doomed planet. The Starfleet vessel T’Pol was also present and the captain took note of Andrew’s impressive skills – while Andrew was 15 at the time.
The captain of the T’Pol eventually sponsored Davis’ entry into Starfleet. Davis was assigned to the T’Pol for several years before transferring to the Trafalgar under Captain Valon, his current assignment.
On one occasion Davis was captured by a contingent of Romulan spies and tortured under the instruction of Commander Sevasha of the Warbird _. She was reluctant to torture him, but he didn’t know that, and eventually the Tal Shiar took over his interrogation. When it became apparent that he did not have the information they were after nor would he surrender the knowledge he did have, the Tal Shiar operative planned to kill Davis. Sevasha’s sense of mnhei’sae (honor, sort of) wouldn’t allow her to kill him and instead she helped him to escape without telling him why.
Some time after Perjon Dax came aboard, the Trafalgar crew found Sevasha severely injured on a Romulan research facility outside the Neutral Zone. She was taken aboard, as was her young daughter and her injuries were tended to. Davis took the opportunity to find out why she let him escape and found that he liked her as a person. She explained her mnhei’sae and said she would do all in her power from now on to make it up to him for what she did. He replied that it wasn’t necessary, since he’d already forgiven her.

Personality:
Davis is somewhat pacifist by nature, but that doesn’t make him weak – he simply does not like to fight. In his words to Valon: “When it comes down to ‘fight or flight’, I’ll always choose flight, sir. I’m a pilot, it’s what I do.”
If needed, he can fight or use weapons but it will never be his first choice. He’s a ‘nice guy’ in other aspects as well, easy going, forgiving, and relaxed. His largest flaw is that his pacifist nature sometimes causes him to run away from his problems instead of solving them head on.

I realize you're not really working on the character per se, ares, but it is in honor of your friend so let me know if you like it or if there's anything you want added or changed. :)
 
After ten pages of brainstorming, I'm curious enough to ask when the story is going to come out. Because I can tell you now, I'm hooked to the storyline that you're proposing, gentlemen. :techman:

Hmm, once we settle the characters an the backstory, we're ready to go. Here is a rough first draft. i've added all what we have written (aka brainstormed) into one document.

Please not that this does not represent the final version or story. It may change and will be improved. I'm having a few british and american friends check the grammar of my stories, as will Rush and Tiberius i believe, before release. Unfortunately, i'm the weakest like here so bare with any mistakes, 'cause i have written most of this. The fight and Quark scene was written by Tiberius. Constructive criticism is welcomed.

It’s a well known fact that Orions come from a planet with higher than average gravity, making their bones and muscles significantly denser than the average humanoid. It’s usually best to avoid fighting Orions hand-to-hand unless you have a clear advantage. Pigheadedness and suicidal tendencies do not count as a clear advantage, as Perjon Dax soon realized.
Quark knew, Dax could tell. From the moment Perjon looked up at the bartender, the Ferengi knew what Perjon intended. At first, his suicidal tendencies actually seemed to be a benefit – evidently the Klingons underestimated the damage an angry Trill can do.

“She told you to let go of ‘er.” Dax slurred on purpose, making the Klingon think he was significantly more intoxicated than he really was.

“This does not concern you, Dax.” Galrisan rumbled from his seat. The Klingon glared at Perjon but said nothing, his grip on the Dabo girl’s arm as tight as ever. Perjon smiled and nodded.

“You know what? You’re right. None of my business. I think I’ll sit down.” He replied cheerily.

“That would be wise, Trill.” The Klingon spat. Perjon grinned wider and turned to leave. Well, he pretended to. Pivoting on his heel, he threw his entire body into punching the nearest Klingon directly in the face, and then slammed his elbow into the other Klingon’s throat. Both men went down quickly, but they didn’t stay down, and brandished d’ktaghs for the next round. Galrisan sighed and drained the last of his drink as Perjon knocked the blade from one Klingon’s hand and swung at the other. For a moment, Perjon feared the massive Orion would join in, but he seemed content to watch.
Somehow, it seemed like there were more Klingons than there used to be. Perjon mused on this as a punch connected with his jaw and he fell against a table, lashing out reflexively with his legs and connecting with something that grunted savagely. He could have won the fight right then and there, if Galrisan hadn’t got bored of watching.

“That’s enough!” The Orion crime boss boomed, shoving an angry Klingon away from Perjon. “I have business to conduct!”
It could have been over, but Dax had never known when to quit. It wasn’t until his fist connected with the Orion’s face of granite that he knew he was in trouble.

“Well that was stupid.” Quark chimed helpfully from behind the bar as Perjon had the wind knocked out of him.

Holding Cell A, Deep Space Nine, Bajor system
0900 hours, station time.

“Get up! All of you!” The security guard barked. In spite of his size, the man could scare a Klingon to silence.

Wielding a phaser rifle, the Saurian positioned himself in the middle of the room. There were five more holding cells, all filled with the troublemakers from the day before yesterday. He slowly sat up holding his abdomen. His cellmate, an Orion male, had been the one who gave him the final knockout and the chief of security had found it interesting to put them in the same holding cell. Thankfully Galrisan was a reasonable man when sober, and he hadn’t finished the job.

It took Perjon a few seconds to gather himself as the guard walked past every single holding cell. Finally giving up, he walked to his office for a padd.

Returning to the brig now wielding a padd instead of a phaser rifle, he asked, “Which one of you is Lieutenant Commander Perjon Dax?”


Perjon slowly stood up, still holding his right hand over his aching abdomen. Barely able to stand after the beating he received from the massive Orion, he approached the barely visible force field. “I am Perjon Dax!” he shouted to the guard.

The security guard slowly approached him. “Ah, I should have known. The wiseguy.” He laughed. “You’re being released into your friend’s custody. Step away from the force field.”

Perjon complied, a few seconds later, after a nod from the Saurian chief of security, a young human ensign dropped the force fields. It flashed brightly before fading from existence and Perjon stepped through. “I was under the impression that the fight last night would keep me in that cell for two more days. What changed?” he asked as they left the brig. Fad'gh didn't deem it worthwhile to reply. Outside, in the security chief's office, a man was sitting in the chief’s chair. A Vulcan dressed in civvies. Black pants, a yellow shirt and a purple vest. Obviously he had bought his attire on the station. It was, unique. For a lack of a better way of describing it. The man appeared to be someone Chief Fad’gh respected greatly, because he bowed his head slowly and put his right hand to his chest. The traditional Saurian salute. The Vulcan returned it and after a quick nod, Chief Fad’gh left.

The Vulcan looked up at Perjon. Almost like he was trying to probe his mind. And judging from the look, he was minutes away from being able to. “Perjon Dax. Formerly of the USS Ballona. Valedictorian of you class at Starfleet Academy, rank of Lieutenant Commander, advanced tactical training and covert ops, expert in Klingon martial arts and Suus Mahna.” He said, reading from the padd in his hand. “A holding cell. -- Not exactly the place I hoped to find a man like you. Nonetheless, here you are.”

“And you are?” Dax inquired.

“I’m Captain Valom. I’m here to give you a job.” He replied with a very un-Vulcan smile.

Dax shook his head. He didn’t seem to care very much. “If you know so much about me, you should also know that I resigned a year ago. I’m done with Starfleet.“ he said. “If there nothing else, I miss my holding cell.” He rose to leave.

“Just like that?” Valon asked, almost surprised. He had of course read Dax’s file, but not in a million years did he expect this type of treatment. “You don’t even want to know what the job is?”

“No. As I said, I'm done with Starfleet. What I need, they can’t provide.” Dax said. His arms crossed across his chest. Desperately trying to hide the pain in his abdomen his cellmate had cause two days earlier.

"Vengeance?"


"Something like that, yes." Dax replied.

“I see.” Valon shook his head. “Perhaps you’re not the man I was looking for... – Oh, and in case, by some godsend miracle, you turn into the man I was looking for. The Armaita is in spacedock for another 12 hours.” He said, stood up and headed for the door. He halted in the doorway. “My father told me I should look at your file. And I did. Reading it, I was pleasantly surprised. I saw Curzon Dax, the diplomat who negotiated the Khitomer accords. Jadzia Dax, of the house of Martok and a Dominion war veteran. Ezri Dax, one of the officers who stopped the Borg invasion and someone who was a dear friend of mine. And then you. Do you know what I see when I look at you? I see is a drunken, sorry excuse of a Starfleet officer, who can’t do anything but feel sorry for himself. Your ship was destroyed, yes. Your friends died, along with four hundred other officers. It was tragic. But that's no excuse to let you life and career go down the drain. That's a reason to make something of your life since you were lucky enough to survive. -- The great Dax. What a waste...“

Those were Captain Valon’s last words before he disappeared into the crowd outside the security office.


***

"Are you still here?" Fad'gh asked returning from his rounds on the promenade an hour later. Dax was still sitting in the office contemplating what Valon had said. Maybe he's right, he though. I am a waste. And if I am. What do I do about it?

"Hey! Are you deaf or something? You're free to go. Get out of my office if you don't want to return to the cell!" the chief barked. Dax slowly stood up and headed for the door.

"You know Chief, I liked you predecessor better. Have a good day. If it’s possible for you, that is." he said and left leaving Fad'gh shout something untranslatable after him.

***


“Since when do you tolerate such unsavory characters in this fine establishment?” Perjon quipped as he took a seat once again in Quark’s.
“Ever since I laid eyes on Jadzia.” Quark replied.
“That hurts, Quark, it really hurts.”
“You did start the fight.”
“They had it coming.”
“True, but who cares? Everyone gets what’s coming eventually.”
“So you don’t mind customers pushing the Dabo girls around?”
“She’ll be adequately compensated. Besides, he hadn’t really done anything to her yet.”
“Once a Ferengi…”
“I know, always…rich.”
“That’s not what I was going to say.”
Quark smiled. “So, I heard an interesting rumor.”
“Heard or started?”
“You wound me, Dax. I heard you turned down a job. Apparently Captain Valom thinks you’re a good-for-nothing, lazy brawler with nothing to lose.”
“I am a good-for-nothing lazy brawler with nothing to lose.”
“That doesn’t sound like the Dax I used to know.”
“Well, I’m not as pretty as the Dax you used to know either.”
“True.”
“I don’t know, maybe I should try harder.”
“Where’s the fun in that when you can come here and get beaten half to death? I thought you were a masochist.”
“Never used to be.”
“Cynic.”
“Definitely.”
“You hate this place, don’t you?”
“With a passion.”
“Then what are you still doing here? Your ship leaves in about seven hours.”
“Never thought I’d see the day.”
“What day?”
“Quark encouraging me to go crawling back to Starfleet.”
“I’m not. You always do whatever you want anyways. Sometimes you just don’t know what it is you do want. Until I hit you in the face with it.”
Perjon sighed and leaned back in his chair. “You know as much as I hate to admit it…”
“I’m right.” Quark interrupted.
“You’re right.”
“I’m always right. See you around, Dax.”
“Maybe, maybe not. You’re the best, Quark.”
“I try.”
“Goodbye, scoundrel.”
“Goodbye, masochist.”

***

USS Trafalgar

Captains ready room, Deck 1

The door chime rang, jolting Captain Valon from his thoughts. “Come.” He called out as Lieutenant Donovan stepped in. The engineering noncom turned acting XO remained at attention, something that Valon hated. He made a swooshing gesture for him to loosen up.

“You sent for me, sir?” Donovan asked. Complying with what he considered permission to stand at ease.

“Yes, I did. How’s the resupply going? We need to be in orbit of Cardassia Prime in 14 hours. We’re being sent out again. Once we drop off the parts for the DaVinci, we’ll be heading out to the border. And I don’t want hear it, Lieutenant. I know precisely how much you despise border patrol.”

“Aye sir.” Donovan smiled. “If I may ask, sir. – How’s the hunt going?”

“Hunt? – Oh, you mean Dax. I found him in holding cell. He wasn’t very… How should I put it? Optimistic about returning to Starfleet.”

Donovan looked quizzical. “Returning, sir? I wasn’t aware that he left in the first place. – Ah, you didn’t tell him about the status of his resignation, did you? Or the arrest warrant for that matter.”

“No. I didn’t want to threaten him. If he reconsiders, he’ll be here in…” He looked at his computer. “six hours. If not, he’s not the man I’m looking for and don’t want him as my XO anyway. So no harm done. Starfleet security can take him on the desertion charge if they want to.”

“So how was he? Should I worry if he’s going to bash my head in if he has a bad day? With all due respect, sir. He doesn’t seem so stable.” Donovan pointed out.

Valon shook his head. “I'm not saying he's the model officer. Not after the Ballona, at least. But if he’s half the officer Ezri was, I need him.” He said. “I don’t know if he was just beaten and hung-over or plain indifferent, but he didn’t recognize me. I just hope there still some Dax in him after everything he’s been through.”

Donavan noticed the sad look on Valon’s face. “You miss her, don’t you?”

Valon paused for a moment, and nodded. “Yes...I do. Very much." He looked off, the face of an old, dear friend filling his mind. When he spoke, it wasn't to Donovan, as much as to himself.

"I wouldn’t be here if it wasn’t for Ezri. The Borg destroyed Shi’Kahr...and there was nothing I could do. I thought my life was over. Quite frankly--I wanted to die. Everyone I ever cared about was dead. Ezri Dax...she taught me to live again."

He sighed. "You know...I handed in my resignation three times. She denied every single one. When I sent her my fourth, she called me into her ready room. She took the padd and approved it. Just like that, without a word. Then, when I turned to leave, she stopped me. She said that I had a chance to do something with my life. To do some good. To honor everyone who had lost their lives, instead of letting survivor’s guilt take over my life."

He shrugged. "I just brushed it off as an attempt to make me feel guilty about leaving my shipmates in a time like that. But...I’ll never forget the look on her face. That’s when I knew I had made a mistake. She didn’t yell at me, she didn’t say I was wrong by leaving. But that look she gave me, I will remember for the rest of my life. Like… I don’t know how to describe it. Like endless disappointment...”

“Yes, she had a notorious way of looking at people. She could make a Klingon sink into the floor, just by looking at them. I heard about that that. Never met her myself, though. Unfortunately... – I take it you didn’t resign then?”

“No, I didn’t. I transferred to command track instead. After three years of service aboard the Aventine, she recommended me for the captaincy of the Hood.”

“So you’re trying to help him because you went through something similar? No offense captain, noble as it is, but you don’t owe this man anything. The moment Ezri Dax died, the slate turned blank again. Its Trill tradition.”

“Yes, you’re absolutely right. I don’t owe Perjon anything. I owe it to Ezri.”

“Captain, you know that I consider you a man of great integrity and honor. But if you are trying to repay a debt by bringing an unstable man aboard to serve as you XO, with all due respect, that’s not honorable, that just plain stupid. And as your XO, albeit merely temporary, I must object. There must be someone else.”

“Like you?” Valon shot back.

Donovan shook his head, looked down at Valon and said, “The thought had crossed my mind, but there is no chance Starfleet command is going to permit that. Not after Melcor IV… I’m not regretting anything, scrapping the mission was the right thing to do. I don’t mind covert ops but when civilians are in the line of fire…”

Valon raised his hand to silence Donovan. “Yes, I heard all that already, Lieutenant. And just to clarify, I did try and I was stonewalled.” He said.

“So you will reconsider Commander Dax?” Donovan asked. Sounding almost like he was afraid of the answer.

“No. That is all. Contact me if and when he’s aboard. Dismissed.” Valon said flatly. Since the usual permission of free speech had obviously been revoked. Donovan left the ready room.

***
20000 char limit...


Now, THIS is EXCELLENT! Fast-paced, and it gets you RIGHT into things. (Kinda reminds me of the first half hour or so of X-Men Origins: Wolverine, the most fast-paced film I'd ever seen.) I...LIKE IT!!!

NOW...a couple of ways to keep this excellent pace:

(Break the "brawl" paragraph to emphasize the "big" moves in the action. Consider):

“That would be wise, Trill.” The Klingon spat.

Perjon grinned wider and turned to leave. Well, he pretended to.

Pivoting on his heel, he threw his entire body into punching the nearest Klingon directly in the face, and then slammed his elbow into the other Klingon’s throat. Both men went down quickly, but they didn’t stay down, and brandished d’ktaghs for the next round.

Galrisan sighed and drained the last of his drink as Perjon knocked the blade from one Klingon’s hand and swung at the other. For a moment, Perjon feared the massive Orion would join in, but he seemed content to watch.

Somehow, it seemed like there were more Klingons than there used to be. Perjon mused on this as a punch connected with his jaw and he fell against a table, lashing out reflexively with his legs and connecting with something that grunted savagely.

He could have won the fight right then and there, if Galrisan hadn’t got bored of watching.

(The last sentence is by itself as a kind of "punch line". ;))

And later:

Perjon complied, a few seconds later, after a nod from the Saurian chief of security, a young human ensign dropped the force fields. It flashed brightly before fading from existence and Perjon stepped through.

“I was under the impression that the fight last night would keep me in that cell for two more days. What changed?” he asked as they left the brig. Fad'gh didn't deem it worthwhile to reply.

Outside, in the security chief's office, a man was sitting in the chief’s chair. A Vulcan dressed in civvies. Black pants, a yellow shirt and a purple vest. Obviously he had bought his attire on the station. It was, unique...for a lack of a better way of describing it.

The man appeared to be someone Chief Fad’gh respected greatly, because he bowed his head slowly and put his right hand to his chest, in the traditional Saurian salute. The Vulcan returned it and after a quick nod, Chief Fad’gh left.

(With Volan's speech--again, you want to make sure the reader doesn't miss the important things he says, because in a giant paragraph, things in the middle tend to be lost in said reader's mind....)

“I see.” Valon shook his head. “Perhaps you’re not the man I was looking for... – Oh, and in case, by some godsend miracle, you turn into the man I was looking for. The Armaita is in spacedock for another 12 hours.”

He stood up and headed for the door. He halted in the doorway. “My father told me I should look at your file. And I did. Reading it, I was pleasantly surprised. I saw Curzon Dax, the diplomat who negotiated the Khitomer accords. Jadzia Dax, of the house of Martok and a Dominion war veteran. Ezri Dax, one of the officers who stopped the Borg invasion...and, incidently, someone who was a dear friend of mine."

Dax made sure to show no reaction. He had no memory of the Vulcan...but on the other hand, he wouldn't be suprised if the man was telling the truth.

The Vulcan then turned to lock eyes with Dax. And then...his voice seemed to turn...bitter. "And then you. Do you know what I see when I look at you?"

Dax met his gaze, saying nothing.

"All I see...is a drunken, sorry excuse of a Starfleet officer, who can’t do anything but feel sorry for himself. Your ship was destroyed, yes. Your friends died, along with four hundred other officers. It was tragic. But that's no excuse to let you life and career go down the drain. That's a reason to make something of your life since you were lucky enough to survive."

He shook his head in what looked like disgust. "The great Dax. What a waste...“
 
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Thanks for the tip Rushbo, I'll see what I can do.

In the meantime, here's Davis' character sketch.
Andrew Davis is the son of Mitchell Davis, a cargo pilot. Andrew took naturally to piloting and on one occasion assisted with the evacuation of a doomed planet. The Starfleet vessel T’Pol was also present and the captain took note of Andrew’s impressive skills – while Andrew was 15 at the time.
The captain of the T’Pol eventually sponsored Davis’ entry into Starfleet. Davis was assigned to the T’Pol for several years before transferring to the Trafalgar under Captain Valon, his current assignment.
On one occasion Davis was captured by a contingent of Romulan spies and tortured under the instruction of Commander Sevasha of the Warbird _. She was reluctant to torture him, but he didn’t know that, and eventually the Tal Shiar took over his interrogation. When it became apparent that he did not have the information they were after nor would he surrender the knowledge he did have, the Tal Shiar operative planned to kill Davis. Sevasha’s sense of mnhei’sae (honor, sort of) wouldn’t allow her to kill him and instead she helped him to escape without telling him why.
Some time after Perjon Dax came aboard, the Trafalgar crew found Sevasha severely injured on a Romulan research facility outside the Neutral Zone. She was taken aboard, as was her young daughter and her injuries were tended to. Davis took the opportunity to find out why she let him escape and found that he liked her as a person. She explained her mnhei’sae and said she would do all in her power from now on to make it up to him for what she did. He replied that it wasn’t necessary, since he’d already forgiven her.

Personality:
Davis is somewhat pacifist by nature, but that doesn’t make him weak – he simply does not like to fight. In his words to Valon: “When it comes down to ‘fight or flight’, I’ll always choose flight, sir. I’m a pilot, it’s what I do.”
If needed, he can fight or use weapons but it will never be his first choice. He’s a ‘nice guy’ in other aspects as well, easy going, forgiving, and relaxed. His largest flaw is that his pacifist nature sometimes causes him to run away from his problems instead of solving them head on.

I realize you're not really working on the character per se, ares, but it is in honor of your friend so let me know if you like it or if there's anything you want added or changed. :)

I love it!

ares, what do you think? :)
 
Aye, I like it. Its far from Andy but that's exactly what i want. I didn't want him to be a clone personality wise, the name is enough. Its one excellent piece of writing Tiberius :techman: Good characterization! (I love the fight or flight thing since Andy was a chopper pilot in the military.)

Rushbo: I'll edit the story with your suggestions. Thanks! Is it fine otherwise?
 
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As I said--awesome, fast-paced, high quality!
Thanks, Rushbo! That's high praise coming from someone whose native tongue is english. I guess CAE and a year of constant writing had some effect, eh?

Go ahead and edit my section too, Ares. :) If you want.

Very well, I was meaning to ask you about that as Rush said i need to work on my dialogs. Figured i add some "punch" into your quark discussion, as Rushbo so poetically put it. I wont mess with the overall story though, its great.
 
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Sounds good, ares. :)

So I've been writing some characterization for my own benefit. It doesn't have to be in the story but it helps establish a feel for the characters. You're welcome to use it anywhere you want. :) Oh, and I've changed Kelshayar's name to Kelsara Raitar. Easier for me to remember somehow...anyways here it is. Let me know what you guys think, I'm especially eager to hear what you have to say about
Jadzia.

The door swished closed behind Jack Donovan as he ran a hand through his dark hair and sighed, stepping away from Captain Valon’s ready room as the turbolift opened and Lieutenant Raitar entered the bridge.
“Lieutenant.” He acknowledged the Captain’s wife with a smile and a nod, the magenta-haired Boslic responding with an impish smile of her own.
“Commander.” She nodded and stepped towards the ready room. “Is the Captain alone?” She asked.
“He is.” Donovan nodded and turned his attention to the bridge. “You are relieved, Commander Ru’mel.”
“Yes, sir.” The Tactical Officer replied. “Routing command functions back to your console. The Bridge is yours.” Donovan glanced back at the ready room as Raitar disappeared inside.
Donovan sighed once more and accessed Dax’s file for the fifth time in as many hours, hoping to find something that would explain why Valon wanted Dax so badly for this position. It wasn’t so much that Jack wanted the position – that ship had sailed – but giving the position of Executive Officer on a Sovereign-class vessel to a deserter seemed horribly wrong.
The political part of Donovan’s mind told him to find something further to use against Dax, something to convince Valon his choice was wrong…but he quickly discarded the notion. The Captain’s decision was final, and Jack would say no more about it unless asked. All he could do now was have everything was in order for the changeover to a new XO and hope Perjon Dax didn’t show up in the next seven hours.
There has to be someone better for the job, Jack thought. I won’t bring it up, but if the Captain asks…I’ll be prepared. He started writing a list of possible recommendations for the position, just in case Valon reconsidered.
Raitar exited the ready room just then, Valon a step behind her. She turned to the right, he continued straight forward, just barely brushing her arm with his hand as he passed her. Donovan stood. Raitar turned back for a brief moment and smiled over her shoulder, then entered the turbolift.
“Status, Donovan?” Valon asked without sitting down.
“Everything’s in order, sir. No change in our situation. And you, sir?”
“I beg your pardon?”
“Your status?”
Valon smirked. “Quite fine, thank you. If everything’s in order, I will see you in approximately 5.5 hours. You have the bridge, Number One.”
“Yes sir.” Donovan agreed. Valon’s smile got wider and he left the bridge.
“For five hours.” Donovan muttered. “Let’s see what I can do in five hours.”. “Is your Security Protocol and duty roster summary finished yet, Commander A’kel?” He asked the Security Officer.
“Yes, I will transfer the files to you immediately.” Kel replied.
“Thank you. I want everything organized for the new First Officer, whoever that turns out to be.”


“Hello, Donovan.” Perjon Dax said cheerfully. Jack looked up as humorlessly as possible. It was the first time he’d seen Dax in uniform, and he had to admit the Trill wore it well. One could almost be fooled by that façade of charisma, could almost forget that Dax was a good-for-nothing deserter. Almost.
“Sir.” Jack nodded politely and returned to his PADD. Dax chuckled and sat down across from him.
“Something funny, sir?” Jack asked without looking up.
“Not really funny…just… amusing.”
“And what would that be, sir?”
“You don’t like me, do you, Jack?”
“Sir?”
“Stop that. It’s obvious?”
“Stop…what, sir? What’s obvious?”
“Stop calling me ‘sir.’ It really isn’t necessary and I know you’re not a stickler for protocol so it must be something else. And you grimaced, just a little, when I called you Jack. You’re being just polite enough but you’re staring at your PADD and trying your best not to look at me.”
“Sorry, sir.” Jack turned the PADD off and looked Dax in the eye.
“Thank you, Donovan. Now be honest. You don’t like me.”
“It’s nothing against you personally, Commander, I don’t know you. I just…”
“Don’t think I deserve this job.”
“Well…no, sir, I don’t.”
“Good.”
“I beg your pardon?”
“Your right, Jack, I don’t deserve it. What I told Valon earlier wasn’t out of modesty. By all accounts, the job should be yours.”
“The Captain doesn’t believe so.”
“We both know that’s not true, Jack. However, the Captain has been around long enough to know that preparing for this kind of mission isn’t the time to be wrestling bureaucratic stupidity. Once this mission is over, don’t be surprised if Valon…”
“Please don’t try to console me, Dax.”
“What, no ‘sir’?” Dax said in mock offense. “We’ll see what happens. But don’t give up on yourself just yet.”
“If you say so, sir.”
“And we’re back to stonewalling. If you’ll excuse me, I have to review your crew evaluations. Goodnight, Commander.”

“That was fun.” Perjon rolled his eyes as an imaginary tall woman suddenly threw an arm around his shoulders.
“Shut up.”
“You’re the one who ‘channeled’ me.”
“I didn’t say you could show up whenever you felt like it.” He opened the door to his quarters and she disappeared as he stepped inside. He took off his coat and pips and collapsed face down onto the couch.
“You look tired.” Suddenly she was sitting on the arm of the couch looking down at him.
“Go away, Jadzia.”
“You say that, but you don’t really mean it.”
“Yes I do!”
“Don’t be mad at me, it’s your brain we’re dealing with.”
“I don’t have a problem with my brain. Please stay out of it.”
“Alright, fine. Let’s talk about Donovan instead.”
“What about him?’
“I like him.”
“Me too.”
“He doesn’t like us.”
“What do you mean, us? It’s me he doesn’t like.”
“Sum of the parts, Perjon.”
“Then maybe it’s you he doesn’t like.”
“No, he’d like me. And he’d flirt with me, and I’d shut him down and walk away.”
“So you don’t like him?”
“Oh, I like him, I’ve just seen his personality before.”
“Is there a point to this?”
“You tell me. It’s still your brain.”
“If you say so.” Perjon shook his head and picked up a PADD, trying his best to ignore the self-induced hallucination he wished would go away.
The door chimed after a moment and Perjon stood to answer it. A thin human Lieutenant with bright blue eyes and a ready smile greeted him.
“Hello, Commander.”
“Lieutenant…Davis, right?”
“Yes sir. Just thought I’d come and introduce myself.”
“Good idea, come on in.” Perjon said with a smile and a wave.
“Thank you, sir.”
“Sit down, relax. Can I get you anything?”
“No thanks, sir.” Davis shook his head and sank into the couch.
“You can stop calling me sir every second sentence, Davis.”
“Alright…Dax. You know, my grandfather knew a Dax.”
“Torias. I remember your grandfather, I think. Michael Davis was an excellent pilot. And an excellent thief.”
“Yes, that he was.” Davis laughed and the chime rang again. “You’re popular today.”
“Apparently. Come in.” Perjon said, turning to face the door. A beautiful Engineering Commander with magenta hair and a three-pronged ridge on her forehead stepped in and flashed a brilliant smile.
“Commander Perjon Dax.” The Boslic said warmly. “It is a pleasure to meet you.”
“And you as well, Lieutenant Commander Kelsara Raitar.” Dax smiled and returned to Boslic custom of stating one’s rank and full name on the first meeting. “Come in, sit down.” He gestured and she sat beside Davis.
“A’jay, koovay.” She said quietly to Davis, good-naturedly elbowing his arm.
“Meesa’jay.” He glanced at her and smiled even wider.
Perjon sat down and said, “You know, I really don’t see the family resemblance.” Raitar and Davis both laughed.
“You speak Boslae?” Raitar asked. “I had no idea.”
“Just well enough to recognize the words for brother and sister.” Dax replied.
“He’s like my koojay.” Raitar said. “Irritating but lovable.”
In what became a pattern of interruptions, Davis’ combadge chirped and an unfamiliar voice beckoned him elsewhere.
“I’m sorry to leave so abruptly Commander, I will see you on the bridge.” Davis smiled, shook Perjon’s hand, and left.
Raitar’s face got a little more serious when Davis left and the room was silent for a moment, as if she was thinking of how best to say something.
“Just say, it, Commander.” Dax smiled.
“I…would you mind, Commander, if I spoke to you for a moment as the Captain’s wife and not as the Chief Engineer?” She said after a moment.
“Not at all, permission to speak freely.”
“Thank you. Dax, let me put this plainly. My husband took a chance in giving you this job. As nothing more than someone who loves Valon with her entire being, I’m asking you not to let him down. He has faith in you, but please don’t abandon him.”
“I…I won’t, ma’am.” Perjon said with more confidence than he felt.
“Good.” She was smiling again. “Now that that’s over with, I’m afraid I have to leave as well. It was good to meet you, Dax.”
“You too, Raitar. Have a pleasant evening.”
“I will.” And she was gone.
“She’s pretty.” Someone who wasn’t even there said.
“Leave me alone, Jadzia.”
“Alright.” The Emergence was fading, and soon Perjon Dax would be alone in his own mind.

A Sickbay, is a Sickbay, is a Sickbay. They’re all the same, pleasant enough for a short visit but maddeningly dull after more than a few hours. They all have the same cheerfully sterile scent, the same bright lights, and the same soothing and yet irritating sounds.
 
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