Yay a new outline! I know I was not speaking literally, merely saying that the "crystalline tree" sounds a lot like the CE and that the design might have been reused even, similarly to the theoretical design of the reptilian people in the draft of "Code of Honour" and the televised version of "Lonely among us" Like Dave Cockrum said "nothing creative ever goes to waste." but can be re-used somewhere else. On topic: Woah....the broadcast version of Justice is awful....but this early draft is not better, just different. Once again we have that theme of "going where Kirk has gone before"...and it's quite annoying. Otherwise this sounds 100% like a TOS episode, just change a few names, juggle a bit of dialogue around and you're there. It even has a "redshirt death" something most of TNG thankfully avoided. Also I'm worried that the whole mention of "city streets" and "cars" and such would have led to the episode being shot at one of the studio back lots with contemporary (or historical) cars and wardrobes like it happened in TOS to save money. No thank you, I'd rather have the "Greek Ken and Barbie planet" than "Planet 1987" (not saying that I liked the Edo, I effing hated them, just that I'd take them about a planet that looks exactly like America in the 1980s for no reason.) Also doesn't the outline seem a bit to long for a TV episode? Too much seems to be happening for the allotted time-span. We have the initial scouting, then the explanation of the planet's history, the second meeting with the natives, the banquet, the redhsirt death, the redshirt funeral...the new locations and scenes just don't stop! They had to streamline that somewhat. The only plus side I can see of the early draft is that there was at least an explanation as to why the Enterprise had contact with a (seemingly) pre-warp civilisation.