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Star Trek: Supermax

I haven't read/seen the Killing but this felt like it had a certain Tarentino-esqe quality to it. Especially the showdown.

For a long time I was asking myself ... where is this leading to and what does it have to do with the Supermax series? It is quiet risky, I think, to write a story in which your main character hardly appears at all.

Having said that it was a great gangster tale of classic revenge, intrigue and betrayal. And you managed to give it a strong Trek flavoring by involving a number of Trek races (I actually had to look most of them up) including a cool McGuffin featured in The Next Generation.

If I'm not mistaken it is the same device that wrecked havoc to the Gibraltar's efforts in Occupied Cardassian Space. If true, that was a very nice tie in.

You wrote the action, especially Pak's action very methodical which seemed to sacrifice some of the pace but gave us a great feel of what this guy is alla bout and how carefully he does his job. In the end of course it wasn't careful enough.

This was an excellent story, or should I say adaptation.
 
Thanks for the kind words, CeJay.

There seems to be some kind of problem with this thread, though: I can only read your post in 'Threaded' mode; it doesn't show up in 'Flat' mode. I hope this isn't a serious/permanent problem. :(

CeJay said:
I haven't read/seen the Killing but this felt like it had a certain Tarentino-esqe quality to it. Especially the showdown.

Well, if you see The Killing, you'll discover that the opposite is true: that Tarantino's early films actually have a certain Kubrick-esque quality. ;)

Seriously: it's one of the great crime flicks, and such a strong story that all I really borrowed was a bit of dialogue in one scene, and the bare bones of the plot--like that episode of DS9 that was adapted from Casablanca.

The novel on which the movie is based--Clean Break by Lionel White--is quite good as well, and it's interesting to compare the two.

If I'm not mistaken it is the same device that wrecked havoc to the Gibraltar's efforts in Occupied Cardassian Space. If true, that was a very nice tie in.

You are not mistaken. If it's okay with Gibraltar, I would like people to think of "Drawing Dead" as part of the backstory for "Embers of the Fire". Of course, if you re-read "Embers," you'll discover that Legate Turak got a rather garbled version of what happened here from the Xepolite. :D

You wrote the action, especially Pak's action very methodical which seemed to sacrifice some of the pace but gave us a great feel of what this guy is alla bout and how carefully he does his job. In the end of course it wasn't careful enough.

I'm glad you noticed that, because, yes, it was a very deliberate stylistic choice on my part.

This was an excellent story, or should I say adaptation.

Thanks again. :)

EDIT: Well, I don't know what the problem was, but it seems to be fixed. Thats a relief.
 
i liked that story, like CeJay, I was wondering how it was going to tie in, but i did guess that Pak was telling Jaff how he ended up in Supermax, but didn't realise it was not going to be the robbery...
 
Pretty much all I can do is echo CeJay's thoughts here. I enjoyed the pacing to the story and the insights into Pak. I'm also looking forward to your next story. Just by reading the tease I can see why Jaffar isn't really that intimidated by the environment of Supermax--he's already been through hell--there's not much more they can do to him at Supermax than he's already been through.
 
captcalhoun said:
i liked that story, like CeJay, I was wondering how it was going to tie in, but i did guess that Pak was telling Jaff how he ended up in Supermax, but didn't realise it was not going to be the robbery...

Then my fiendish plan worked. :evil:

Glad you liked it! :bolian:
 
DavidFalkayn said:
Pretty much all I can do is echo CeJay's thoughts here. I enjoyed the pacing to the story and the insights into Pak. I'm also looking forward to your next story.

Thanks!

Just by reading the tease I can see why Jaffar isn't really that intimidated by the environment of Supermax--he's already been through hell--there's not much more they can do to him at Supermax than he's already been through.

I'm going to give you all a hint that I hope will further whet your appetites for the next episode.

There's something wrong with that teaser.

That is all.
 
Damn.

Never buy a set of deck plans to help you understand the layout of a starship.

I made the mistake of buying a set of Miranda-class deck plans, to help me with stories set aboard the prison hulk USS Lilienthal. (The Lilienthal is actually Soyuz-class, but the two are basically the same)

Now I've discovered that I'm going to have to revise every story that even mentions the damn thing. :mad:

Among other things:

--I underestimated the number of prisoners it could hold in its crew quarters by half--the damn thing has enough space for more than 300 prisoners :eek:, which means that only one new hulk would be needed, not two;

--the ship's crew quarters are spacious enough to have two beds side by side, so no bunk beds are required;

--I put Jaffar and Pak's cell on Deck Nine, when the crew quarters are actually on Deck Six--there's nothing on Deck Nine but machinery, and an Intelligence Office;

--every two crew cabins share a washroom with toilet, washstand, and sonic shower--so the stabbing at the end of Murtad must have taken place somewhere other than a shower room;

--the enlisted mess is too small to sit more than a third of the total number of prisoners, so they would have to rip out some of the central cabins to expand it;

--and there's no space on Deck Six for a 'Yard' or common area--the rec deck is up on deck five, where the officer's quarters (now the correctional-officers' quarters) are located. Since it's not Federation policy to keep its prisoners locked down all day, I figure they'll just be let out to wander around the halls.

(This is all working on the assumption that Starfleet would modify the ship as little as possible)

Since I stated that the first prison hulk, USS Sagittarius, has 150 prisoners onboard, I figure it must be a Saladin-class destroyer or something--an old 23rd-century piece of shit that no prisoner wants to get stuck on. The Lilienthal would seem fairly luxurious by comparison.

Actually, these deck plans are very interesting, and should really come in handy. I just wish I'd bought them before I transferred Jaff off the planet, instead of months afterward. :brickwall:
 
you don't need to do that. cover up the differences between the plans and the Lilienthal as being the class differences, Soyuz to Miranda.

trust me, it's simpler.

plus, Deck Plans are NOT. CANON.
 
I picked up a picture of the Challenger class for my Seleya stories in a chart of basic ships. Looked around, compared sizes and ran with whatever seemed logical. If you want the ship chart go to the WOLF359 website or give me your email and I'll send it to you. Its a great chart and, remember, when creating fanfic you can say anything you want-so don't sweat it.
 
Thanks for the suggestions, guys. But after sleeping on it, I've come to the conclusion that the revisions these deck plans require are pretty minor, after all. Plus, they really will come in handy when writing the last few stories of this season.

I'm planning on re-posting my Supermax stories over at Trek Writers' Guild, or perhaps on my own website, so I'll make these changes when I do. I've also decided, upon reflection, that episode 201 should actually be episode 203: I've been doing some reading about procedures at real prisons, and realized that, if Jaff was in protective custody, he would have been taking his meals separately from the other prisoners; that way, he couldn't possibly have witnessed the riot in the mess hall. :o

For now, though, I'm just going to roll along, and incorporate any needed changes into the stories without any fuss or further explanation.
 
Sweet! I thought this thread had been lost when the BBS moved.


Supermax 204: "Hard Site"


I woke up sitting in a chair, its metal surface cold against the skin of my naked back and buttocks. My arms were twisted behind me, and my hands were shackled to the chair back. My ankles were shackled to the chair’s legs, high enough so that my feet were off the floor. My whole body hurt.

“Look at me,” said a voice. Someone grabbed me by the hair, from behind, and yanked my head up.

I was in some kind of interview room. There was a metal table in front of me. The Vorta from the courtyard sat on the other side, his hands folded on the table top, a faint look of disgust on his face. The door to the room was behind him. A Jem’Hadar stood behind him as well, in the corner, standing at attention, staring straight ahead, with his polaron rifle at the port.

“This has gone on long enough,” said the Vorta. Then he looked to my left. “Release him,” he said.

The hand let go of my hair and gave my head a shove.

“Where is Kalila bint Ibrahim?” said the Vorta.

I looked left. A Cardassian soldier was standing behind the chair. I turned back to face the Vorta. “Who?” I said.

The Cardassian hit me in the back of the head, open-handed. The Vorta’s expression didn’t change, but he sighed softly, then leaned forward a bit. “Where,” he said, “is Kalila bint Ibrahim?”

“I don’t know who that is,” I said.

“Where is she, Jaffar?” said the Vorta.

“My name is Gamal,” I said.

“Your name,” he said, “is Dawud ibn Jaffar al-Manari. You are a terrorist, and an enemy of the Dominion, like your wife. Where is she, Jaffar?”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about,” I said.

The alien lifted its hands off the table, steepled its fingers, lowered its lips to the tips of its forefingers, and stared at me for a moment. Then it glanced to my left, and nodded: then turned its attention back to me.

The Cardassian moved around to face me, drew his disruptor pistol, and held it down by his thigh, shaking his wrist as if to loosen it. I looked up at him, from my chair, and he looked down at me, with a smirk on his face. He was going to enjoy this.

Across the table, the Vorta raised its head a bit, and said: “Where is Kalila bint Ibrahim?”

“I told you—I don’t know who that—”

The Cardassian whipped me across the face with his pistol. When I recovered, and looked up, he whipped me again, back-handed.

“Look at me,” said the Vorta.

I looked up at the Vorta, blinking away tears. He said, “Where is she, Jaffar?”

I glanced at the Cardassian, and saw that he’d shifted his grip on his weapon. Instead of holding it by the pistol grip, with his finger on the trigger, he was holding it by the frame, like it was a brick, or something. I looked back at the Vorta.

“My name is Gamal,” I said.

The Cardassian smashed me in the left eye with his weapon, once, twice. I shut my eyes tightly and sobbed from the pain.

“Look at me,” said the Vorta.

I opened my eyes, saw double, closed them and opened them again, trying to focus, and failing.

“No more games, human,” said the Vorta—both of them. I still couldn’t focus. The pain was agonizing. The Cardassian had fractured my eye socket.

The Vorta continued. “You have been sentenced to death,” he said. “Your only chance to save yourself is to tell me what I want to know.”

“Now,” he said. “I will ask you just one more time.”

I felt the muzzle of the Cardassian’s disruptor pistol press against the side of my head.

“Where,” said the Vorta, “is Kalila bint Ibrahim?”

***

New Palestine Colony, the Demilitarized Zone. City of New Jerusalem.

I was in a safe-house in the Christian quarter when I got caught. The New Jerusalem Brigade had just pulled off a spectacular operation. We’d wired an empty old apartment building to implode, by attaching explosives to the support columns. Then we’d leaked false information about the Brigade Headquarters holding a meeting inside that building.

The enemy took the bait. At the moment the meeting was supposed to take place, they attacked. As we watched from a safe distance, a swarm of shuttles descended on that building, landed on its roof and the streets outside, and inserted a force of Jem’Hadar and Cardassian assault troops. Once they were inside, we blew the charges, and brought the whole structure down on top of them.

It was beautiful.

Before the dust had settled, we were gone—scattering all over the city. My wife and I split up. I promised to meet her at her cousin’s house, in the country, in a day or two. She kissed me goodbye, fiercely: then we both hurried away, to hide.

Like I said: I wound up in a safe-house in the Christian quarter—a secret room in a prostitute’s apartment. Her name was Rubi. I was just settling down for the night, in my hiding place, when I heard the noise—banging, male shouting, crashing, female screaming.

I sat there in the darkness and listened, trying to figure out what was happening. Did they know I was here? Or was it just a random door-to-door? Had Rubi sold me out? Would she give me up to save herself?

Finally, I heard a rough male voice on the other side of the wall. “You in there,” it said. “Come out with your hands up.”

I didn’t move. A fist banged on the wall. “We know you’re in there,” said the voice. “Come out with your hands up.”

I still didn’t move. No sense making it easy for them. Sooner or later, I figured, they’d get tired of waiting, send for explosives, and threaten to blast me out. Maybe then I’d surrender. Or maybe not.

I figured wrong. “Come out,” said the voice, “or we’ll kill the female.” Then, a woman cried out in pain—Rubi.

Shit! I thought.

“I’m going to count to three,” said the voice. “One…two…”

“All right!” I shouted.

Then I came out, with my hands up.

***

Sundancer Penal Colony, 61 Virginis II. Prison hulk USS Lilienthal, in orbit.

Pak started awake. What was that? he thought

The Markalian prisoner sat up and looked around. He was in his cell on Deck Six—a converted crew cabin. To his right, the stars were moving slowly past the porthole. To his left was Jaffar’s bed, and beyond that, the cell door.

Pak himself was in bed. He’d gone to bed when the lights went out—at 2300 hours. They were still out. What time was it?

Something had woken him up. Something was wrong. But—what?

Then, he noticed.

Jaffar’s bed was empty. The blanket and sheet were half-pulled off

“Jaffar?” he whispered.

No response.

Where was he?

The Markalian reached down, and pulled out the shank he kept hidden under his bed.

“Jaffar!” he hissed.

Still nothing.

Slowly, quietly, Pak pulled back the covers, turned to the left, put his feet on the deck, and stood up. With his shank ready in his right hand, he crept over to the foot of Jaffar’s bed.

There. The human was lying sprawled on the deck, between his bed and the cell door.

“Jaffar?”

Pak moved over, bent down over his human cellmate, and checked him for signs of life. Then he stood up, slipped his shank into his underpants, moved over to the celldoor and pounded on it with his fist.

“Officer!” he shouted. “Officer!”

***

New Palestine Colony. Al-Balat Detention Center, City of New Jerusalem.

Twenty-four hours.

That’s what they told us, in Starfleet Intelligence College. And that’s what I told recruits, in the New Palestine Maquis. In case of capture, say nothing for twenty-four hours. After that, you can say anything you want—anything that will make the pain stop. After twenty-four hours, you’ve done your duty.

You’ll talk, I told them. Don’t kid yourselves. The Cardassians can make anybody talk. But if you can hold out for just twenty-four hours, then what you know can’t hurt us—or help them. Give us that much time, and you can tell them everything. After twenty-four hours, it won’t matter any more.

I never thought I’d have to follow my own orders.

In a way, I was lucky. I hadn’t been betrayed. The Cardassians hadn’t even known I was there. They simply threw a cordon around the city’s Christian quarter, searched every building, and found my rat-hole with a tricorder. I told them my name was Gamal Abdul Masihiri.

They knew I was in the Maquis. But they didn’t know who I was, or what I’d done, or what I knew. So they put me in the back of a transport, took me to the nearest detention center, and processed me. When dawn came, I was sitting in the courtyard at the Al-Balat, under guard, with about a hundred other detainees, all naked, shivering in the cold night air.

The yard was divided in half by a force-field wall. We all sat on one side. The other side was empty, except for a guillotine—a head-chopping machine: one of the Dominion’s little innovations. There was a large rectangular box sitting beside it, and a circular tub in front of it.

I was tonguing a painful hole in my gums where they’d pulled out a tooth, and wondering what came next, when a Cardassian Gul marched out onto the empty half of the courtyard, followed by a Vorta. The two of them advanced up close to the force-field and stopped. The Vorta stood a deferential step behind the Cardassian’s right shoulder and looked at us curiously. There was no curiosity on the Cardassian’s face—only contempt.

“Prisoners!” he shouted. “You have all been found guilty of treason, and sentenced to death.”

There was a shocked silence. The Cardassian officer looked back over his shoulder. “Bring him out,” he said. A mixed party of Cardassian and Jem’Hadar guards entered the courtyard with a human prisoner, his hands tied behind his back. They marched him over to the guillotine.

The prisoner’s face was grey with fear. He was saying something. At first I couldn’t make it out, but once he got closer I could hear him. He was reciting the Shahada, over and over, again and again. “There is no God but Allah,” he said, “and Muhammad is his prophet. There is no God, but Allah, and Muhammad is his prophet. There is no God but Allah…”

The guards led the prisoner over to the machine: one of them cranked a handle that lifted the blade, and another lifted the collar that would hold his head in place; the others tilted up a board with leather belts attached. He tried to struggle at that point: “No!” he cried. “No! No! No!” But it was no use. They belted him to the board, and tilted it down.

He began to recite again—faster this time, frantic. “There is no God but Allah,” he said. The guards slid him forward until his head was under the blade. “And Muhammad is his prophet,” he said. One guard grabbed him by the ears while another lowered the collar and fixed it in place around his neck. “There is no God but Allah,” he said.

Then the blade fell, and his head came off. Blood began to pool on the ground, under the blade, as they unbelted his body from the tilting board. Then they tipped his body over into the coffin.

The Gul pointed at the guillotine. “That,” he said, “is the fate that awaits you all. There is no escape. Your only chance is to cooperate with your interrogators. Those who provide us with valuable information will have their sentences commuted. Tell us what we want to know, and save yourselves. That is all.”

He nodded to the guards at the guillotine. “Continue,” he said. Then he strode out of the courtyard, followed by the Vorta, while another prisoner was brought in.

And another.

And another.

***

Sundancer Penal Colony, 61 Virginis II. Prison hulk USS Lilienthal, in orbit.

Jaffar lay on the biobed, in Sickbay, unconscious. The Ship’s Doctor stood on one side, scanning the prisoner with a medical tricorder and frowning. Captain Hardcastle stood on the other side of the bed, waiting. “Well?” she said.

Finally, the Doctor shook his head in frustration, looked up at the readouts above the head of the bed, and closed his tricorder. “I don’t understand,” he said. “I’d say this man was in a coma. Except…”

“Except, what?” said the Captain.

“Here,” said the Doctor, pointing at the readouts. “His limbic system. The parts of the brain that support emotions and long-term memory. I’ve never seen readings like this before.”

There was an electronic chirp. “Chief Guzman to Captain Hardcastle.”

The Captain tapped her combadge. “Go ahead, Chief.”

“Captain, I’ve completed my interrogation of Jaffar’s cellmate. He says he doesn’t know anything. He woke up, and found Jaffar lying on the deck. I’m pretty sure he’s telling the truth.”

The Captain rubbed her eyes. “All right,” she said. “Thank you, Chief. Captain out.”

What the hell is going on here, she wondered.

***

New Palestine Colony. Al-Balat Detention Center, City of New Jerusalem.

I don’t know how they found out who I was. I must have left some DNA behind, somewhere, after an operation. They must have matched it to the samples they took when they processed me.

All I know for sure is that the guards came to my cell, grabbed me, hauled me away to an interrogation room, and started questioning me about the ambush at the abandoned apartment building, the day before. When I stuck to my story, they got angry.

They shackled my hands, in front of me, and forced me to sit down, hugging my knees to my chest. They took a metal bar and passed it over my forearms and under my knees. Then they lifted me up, and put the bar on a rack, hanging me upside down. The parrot’s perch—an old Obsidian-order favourite.

They kicked me with their boots and beat me with metal pipes. The pain was unbelievable. I screamed, and sobbed, and cried, but I wouldn’t talk. I kept thinking, twenty-four hours, twenty-four hours…

A Cardassian stood over me, screaming questions into my face. Who were my accomplices? Where were they? Confess! Confess!

I sobbed: “My name is Gamal Abdul…”

Then one of them hit me in the head. That’s when I blacked out, I think.

***
 
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Sundancer Penal Colony, 61 Virginis II. Prison hulk USS Lilienthal, in orbit.

The Ship’s Counselor was Betazoid. He stood beside Jaffar’s biobed, with one hand resting lightly on the unconscious prisoner’s forehead. His dark eyes were closed, and his brow furrowed with concentration. Captain Hardcastle, Chief Guzman, and the ship’s Doctor stood nearby, waiting, looking worried.

Finally, the Counselor opened his eyes, looked at the Captain, and nodded. “Definitely some kind of psychic damage,” he said.

Hardcastle’s jaw tightened. “From where?” she said.

“I’m not sure,” said the Counselor. “I’m not even sure how. It’s like…”

“What?”

The Counselor considered. Finally, he said: “It’s like he’s been attacked by a Lethean. But Letheans are touch-telepaths. We don’t have any Lethean prisoners onboard, do we?”

“No,” said the Captain.

The Counselor shook his head. “Then I don’t know how this could have happened.”

“Can you bring him out of it?” said the Doctor.

“I don’t think so,” said the Counselor.

“Can you reach him at all?” said the Captain?

The Counselor looked down at the unconscious prisoner, and sighed. “I can try,” he said. Then he closed his eyes again.

***

New Palestine Colony. Al-Balat Detention Center, City of New Jerusalem.

I felt the muzzle of the Cardassian’s disruptor pistol press against the side of my head.

“Where,” said the Vorta, “is Kalila bint Ibrahim?”

I closed my eyes again. In my mind’s eye, I saw Kalila’s face. Her mouth moved, silently. I love you.

“I don’t know,” I said.

“Jaffar.”

I waited for the shot.

“Jaffar, can you hear me?”

I opened my eyes. My double vision was worse. The Vorta was completely blurred.

“Can you hear me?”

“Yes,” I said.

“Jaffar, listen to me. None of this is real.”

“What?” I squinted, tried to focus through the pain. The Vorta looked… different. Its uniform… was that a Starfleet uniform?

“Jaffar, think,” he said, urgently. “Your attacker has made a mistake. You and your wife were captured by Starfleet, months before the Cardassians joined the Dominion. None of this is real. It never happened.”

I blinked, opened my mouth…

But it was the Vorta. It shook its head.

“Hood him,” it said.

And somebody pulled a hood over my head.

***

Sundancer Penal Colony, 61 Virginis II. Prison hulk USS Lilienthal, in orbit.

“Definitely Lethean,” said the Counselor.

“But how?” said Captain Hardcastle.
The Counselor threw up his hands. “I have no idea. Some kind of psionic amplifier, that would allow a touch-telepath to cast its thoughts through space? All I know for sure is, if we can’t stop it, he’ll die.”

“Computer,” said the Captain. “Are there any Lethean prisoners confined at the Sundancer Penal Colony?”

YES, the computer said.

“How many?”

ONE.

“Where?”

IN SPECIAL SECURITY.

“Unit Zero,” said the Captain. She tapped her combadge. “USS Lilienthal to—”

“Whoa,” said Chief Guzman. “Whoa, Captain, wait a minute.”

“What?” said the Captain.

“Think about this,” the Chief said. “The Counsellor says a Lethean would need a…a…”

“Psionic amplifier,” said the Counselor.

“Right,” said Guzman. “That prisoner is in Unit Zero, Captain. The only way in or out is by transporter. Think about that.”

The Captain hesitated. Then, she said: “The guards. He must have bribed the guards.”

“Or somebody bribed the guards for him. Either way—we need to know who we can trust before we contact anyone.”

The Chief thought for a minute. Finally, he said: “I have an idea.” He tapped his combadge.

***

New Palestine Colony. Al-Balat Detention Center, City of New Jerusalem.

Through my hood, I heard the Vorta’s voice. “Take it off.”

Somebody pulled off my hood. I squinted in the harsh light of the interview room.

“Repair his eye. I want him to see this.”

A hand grabbed me by the chin, twisted my face to the right. I felt an electric tingle from the protoplaser. Slowly, the pain subsided, and my vision cleared. I could focus again.

“Look here, Jaffar.”

I turned back to look at the Vorta. He had something on the table in front of him. A container of some kind—a jar, filled with some kind of fluid, and—something else.

“Look closely,” said the Vorta.

I looked closely. Then I screamed. I screamed, and screamed, and fought against my shackles, trying to get out of my chair. But I couldn’t look away.

There was a head in the jar. It was the head of the executed prisoner—the one who’d kept reciting the Shahada. But that wasn’t what made me scream.

Its eyes were blinking. Its mouth was moving.

It was alive.

They were keeping the head alive, in a jar.

“Now you see,” said the Vorta.

One of my guards clapped a hand over my mouth to stop my screaming. I kept staring at that thing in the jar. I couldn’t stop myself.

“Tell us what we want to know,” said the Vorta. “Or I promise—you’ll be next.”

He put his hand on top of the jar, and said: “Where is Kalila bint Ibrahim?”

***

Sundancer Penal Colony, 61 Virginis II. Unit Zero, undergound.

Ensign Song looked up from his book, startled, when the transporter activated.

Three figures in Starfleet Security uniforms materialized on the transporter pad. One of them was a Vulcan, with a lieutenant-commander’s pips on his collar.

“Uh…commander?” said Song.

The Vulcan ignored him. “Follow me,” he said. The new arrivals hurried down off the platform and out of the transporter room.

“Hey,” said Song. “Are you—hey, stop!” He tapped his combadge. “Song to Commander Steinbock! Emergency!”

***

New Palestine Colony. Al-Balat Detention Center, City of New Jerusalem.

The guards pushed me into the cell, from behind. I stumbled and fell to my hands and knees, weeping.

Behind me, one of them said: “Get dressed.” Then I heard the cell door close.

For a moment, I stayed where I was, down on my hands and knees, like a dog, sobbing, the tears dripping down onto the floor.

I’d told them.

I’d told them where Kalila was.

She’s at her cousin’s house, I said. Outside the city.

Give me a name, the Vorta said.

I gave him a name.

I talked. I couldn’t hold out. Not for twenty-four hours. Not for twenty-four minutes.

I gave her up. I betrayed my wife, to save myself—to keep my head out of that jar. The Cardassian assault shuttles were probably on their way right now.

Maybe she wouldn’t be there, I told myself. Maybe she’d heard that I’d been captured. Maybe she’d found someplace else to hide.

But deep down, I knew that wasn’t true. She’d be there when the Jem’Hadar kicked in the door. She’d be there, waiting for me.

If she was lucky, she’d die fighting. If she wasn’t…

If she wasn’t…

Oh, God.

Would she think of me?

Would she be worried about me? Would she pray for my safety?

Oh, my God.

What have I done?

Then, I remembered what the guard had said. Get dressed

I wiped the tears from my eyes, and the snot from my nose, and I turned around, on my hands and knees, to face the cell door. My street clothes were there, in a heap. My pants and shirt. My shoes and socks.

My belt.

I looked up. A couple of exposed pipes ran across the ceiling, from left to right.

I looked around. There was a bucket in the corner.

I picked up my belt.

I pulled the tongue through the buckle, to make a noose. Then I stood up, walked over to the corner, and picked up the bucket.

I turned the bucket upside down, and put it on the floor, beneath one of the pipes. Then I stepped up on top of the bucket.

It was just high enough.

I tossed the loose end of my belt over one of the pipes, and tied it in a knot. I tugged on it, to see if the pipe and the knot would hold.

I was worried that my head wouldn’t fit through the loop—that I wasn’t tall enough after all. But it finally fit, and I was ready.

I stepped off the bucket.

***

Sundancer Penal Colony, 61 Virginis II. Unit Zero, undergound.

The Lethean sat on the stone floor of his cell, hunched over, with his back to the force-field. Lieutenant-Commander Tomak hit the button on the control panel outside the cell, and the force-field came down. “What are you doing?” he said.

The Lethean looked back over his shoulder, startled. “No!” he shouted. “No—I’m not finished!”

“Lie down on the floor,” said the Vulcan, “and put your hands behind your head.”

He advanced into the cell. The Lethean jumped to its feet, snarling, its hideous face contorted with rage. It was holding a glowing crystal sphere in his hands.

“Put that down,” said Tomak, still advancing.

The prisoner threw the glowing sphere at the Commander’s head and charged. The Vulcan ducked, and recovered just in time to catch the Lethean by the wrists.

The prisoner shrieked in pain and fell to his knees. “Let go!” he cried. “Let go!

Finally, Tomak let go. The Lethean slumped to the floor, its injured wrists limp.

The Vulcan looked down at the prisoner without any apparent emotion. “Attacking a correctional officer is a serious violation of the code of conduct,” he said. “You are under arrest.”

He took out his stun baton.

The Lethean’s red eyes widened. “What are you doing?” he said.

“You are resisting arrest,” the Vulcan said, mildly. “Resisting arrest is a violation of the code of conduct.”

Behind him, the two guards glanced at each other. Then they each drew their own batons.

“I’m not resisting,” the Lethean whined.

“You are forcing us to defend ourselves.”

“I surrender!

“Subdue him,” Tomak said.

The Starfleet officers moved in.

***

Sundancer Penal Colony, 61 Virginis II. Prison hulk USS Lilienthal, in orbit.

Jaffar thrashed on the biobed, gasped, opened his eyes, and looked around wildly.

“Jaffar,” said Captain Hardcastle. “Jaffar, can you hear me?”

Jaffar looked at the Captain, his face blank, uncomprehending.

“Can you hear me?” said the Captain. “Do you know where you are?”

The prisoner looked around again. “No,” he said.

“You’re on the USS Lilienthal,” the captain said. “You’re safe now. None of what you just experienced was real. Do you understand?”

Jaffar stared. His eyes welled up with tears, and he sobbed, shaking his head back and forth. “No,” he said.

“Jaffar?” said Hardcastle. She looked up. “Doctor, is he all right?”

“I’m not sure,” said the doctor. He picked up a hypospray. “I think I’d better sedate him.”

On the biobed, Jaffar curled up into the fetal position, sobbing and weeping. “No!” he cried, as the hypospray hissed.

“Oh, God—no.”

“No…”

THE END
 
(I liked this story so much I decided to make it 'official.' From now on, I'll use 'Season Zero' for any stories that are related to Supermax, but aren't part of the main stream of the series)


Supermax 001: “The Combadge”


Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen. I’m Captain Robert Charlebois, Starfleet Security.

Four months ago, Admiral Ross asked me to take command of the south-central district of the city of Sanjal, here on Cardassia Prime. Since the end of the Dominion War and the beginning of the Occupation, South Central has been one of the most violent and dangerous areas of the city. Some reporters have even suggested that the south-central district was a “no-go zone” for Starfleet personnel.

Today, with the release of an independent study of Cardassian security statistics, I am proud to announce a steep decline in the frequency of insurgent attacks in this district over the past six months.

With the continued help of community leaders and ordinary citizens, we will continue to make the south-central district a safer place for all of us…”

***

The predawn darkness was nearly total: the sky was cloudy, and the power had failed again the previous afternoon, blacking out South Central. The air was thick and warm, promising more thunderstorms later in the day. The city streets were deserted, and silent, except for the chirping and clicking of insects.

Quickly, quietly, the SURGE teams moved in, surrounding the house. They wore black Starfleet combat uniforms, and black balaclavas to hide their sweating faces. Their type-3 phasers were optimized for close-quarter battles, with tactical flashlights and forward pistol grips. They gathered at the front and back doors and waited for the signal.

“Knock, knock,” said a voice on the communicator.

Raiders at both doors swung battering rams. The doors crashed open. Weapons at the ready, the team at the back rushed into the kitchen, moving to clear the first floor and basement. The team at the front door charged into the front hall and up the stairs.

A New Order terrorist appeared at the top of the stairs, running out of a bedroom on the left, a disruptor rifle in his hands. The leading raider lit him up and fired twice.

The first shot hit the Cardassian in the chest. The second hit him in the face. He collapsed like a rag doll. His disruptor clunked on the floor, unfired.

Someone was shouting in Cardassian downstairs. There was a burst of disruptor fire, the snap-snap of the tactical phasers, and a dying scream.

The leading raider went left at the top of the stairs, into the dead Cardassian’s room. The man behind him kicked open the door to the second bedroom, on the right. A shrill female scream came from inside.

A third man hit the top of the stairs, turned right, and right again, to face the last bedroom door. “Starfleet!” he shouted, and kicked at the door. The door didn’t open.

Shit! he thought. “Open the door,” he shouted, and kicked again. This time the door crashed open, and he rushed in.

***

Warak had been sleeping, in the nude, on a mattress upstairs, when the house’s doors were breached.

What was that? he thought. Then shouts and screams, gunfire, boots pounding on the stairs. The enemy!

He scrambled to his feet, grabbed a can of liquid fuel off the floor, uncapped it, and started splashing it all over his desk and workstation.

He heard a bang at the door, and a human shout. He had to destroy the files! But where was his lighter?

He turned to look—but someone was behind him, dressed all in black, and the butt end of the phaser rifle hit him in the face.

***

“Wake up, snakehead.”

Warak woke up. For a moment, he was confused. Where was his lighter? Then he remembered.

His head ached. He was tied to a chair, still naked, with his hands bound behind him. The chair was in the middle of a large, empty room, dimly lighted. There were three figures in front of him—human, all dressed in black. The one on the right had a fire extinguisher. The one on the left had a can of liquid fuel. Briefly, Warak wondered if it was the same fuel can.

There—on the floor, under a sheet—was that a body?

“Hey there,” said one of the black-uniformed humans—the one in the centre. “How’s your head?”

“It hurts,” Warak said.

“That’s a shame,” said the human. “Do you know who we are?”

The Cardassian thought for a moment. Then he said: “Federation death squad.”

The human nodded. “That’s right,” he said. “I’m Lieutenant-Commander Mack Vickers. Maybe you’ve heard of me?”

Warak felt a chill. “No,” he lied.

“Yeah,” said the human. “You’ve heard of me.” He gestured to the man on his right—the one with the fuel can. “This is my second-in command, Lieutenant Nash Delvern.”

“Hey,” said the man with the fuel can.

Then Vickers gestured to the man on his left—the one with the fire extinguisher. “And this is Junior Lieutenant Russ McKinley.”

“Just call me Rusty,” said the man with the fire extinguisher.

“The rest of my team is outside,” said Vickers. “Now that we’ve been introduced, I’m going to ask you a few questions.”

“I won’t answer,” said Warak.

“No?” said Vickers.

“No. You can torture me all you want. I’ll never talk.”

“Torture?” said Vickers. “Who said anything about torture?” He looked to his right and gestured at the Cardassian. “This guy thinks we’re going to torture him.” The man with the fuel canister shrugged.

Vickers turned his attention back to Warak. “You’ve got the wrong idea, pal. I don’t torture people. It’s against Federation law. Besides, I’ve got my own way of getting information.”

“What’s that?” said Warak.

“Answer my questions, or we’ll kill you. Like we killed your friend here.” He gestured at the body under the sheet nearby. “You want to see?”

“No,” said Warak.

“Sure you do,” said Vickers. He turned to the man on his left. “Let him see.”

The man with the fire extinguisher—Lieutenant McKinley—bent down, and pulled the sheet back. The sight and smell made Warak gag, but he couldn’t look away. The dead Cardassian’s body was burnt black, but still recognizable. It was a member of his resistance cell—Imskel.

“I’m surprised all that screaming didn’t wake you up,” said Vickers. “Rusty must have hit you pretty hard.”

“Federation murderers!” Warak said.

“Who’s your handler?” said Vickers.

“Ratunka!”

“Give us the name of your handler, and we’ll let you live.”

“Nu ka breyet’U, human scum! For Cardassia!”

The Starfleet commander shrugged. “Suit yourself,” he said. He turned to the man on his right. “Do it.”

The man on his right—Lieutenant Delvern—stepped forward, uncapped the fuel can, and started pouring fuel on Warak’s head. The liquid stung the Cardassian’s eyes, burned in his nostrils, made him cough and retch.

“Oh, I’m sorry,” Delvern said. “Did I get some in your eyes? Here—let me wash them out.” He splashed more fuel in Warak’s face.

Warak spluttered and gasped. “You can’t do this!”

“Why not?” said Vickers

“I am a prisoner of war!” cried Warak. “I have rights!”

“You’re a terrorist piece of shit,” said Vickers. “You’ve got nothing.”

“Done,” said Delvern, his fuel canister empty.

“Okay. Step back,” said Vickers. He took out a flare. Then, to Warak, he said: “Tell us your handler’s name.”

“Ratunka!” cried Warak, struggling against his bonds. “You can’t—”

Vickers lit the flare. Warak froze. His eyes widened in terror.

“Is that your final answer?” said Vickers.

***

Two Type-15 shuttlepods were parked on the abandoned factory’s roof. The two remaining members of the SURGE team stood nearby, their balaclavas rolled up into caps. Ensign Coriander Koenig chewed gum and watched the sun rise, her face expressionless. Ensign Greg Mathers sweated and fidgeted nearby, glancing over at the building’s roof exit.

“Relax,” Koenig said, finally.

“Sorry,” said Mathers. Then: “What if he doesn’t talk?”

“He’ll talk,” said Koenig.

Mathers looked unconvinced. A few seconds later, the door to the roof banged open. Vickers came out first, followed by Delvern and McKinley, dragging their prisoner between them. The Cardassian was still naked, except for a black hood over his head, and the plasticuffs that held his hands behind his back.

Koenig went over to the nearest shuttlepod and opened the cargo hatch. Mathers said: “Did he talk?”

“Of course he talked,” said Vickers, pulling off his balaclava, using it to wipe the sweat from his heavy brow, shaved head, and thick neck.

Delvern and McKinley shoved the Cardassian into the shuttlepod’s cargo space. McKinley chuckled. “You should have seen his face when we showed him the body,” he said. “Or when Mack lit the flare.” He hit the button to close the hatch. “I thought for sure he was going to piss himself.”

The hatch closed. Delvern said: “Later, scumbag.” Then, to Vickers: “When are these buttonheads going to figure out, the guy was dead before we set him on fire?”

Vickers grinned, shrugged, tapped his combadge. “Vickers to Lewis,” he said.

“What if he’d called your bluff?” said Mathers.

Delvern and Mackey were pulling off their own headgear. They paused, looked at each other, then back to Mathers. “What bluff?” said Delvern.

“Lewis here. Go ahead, Mack.”

“Hey, Lew,” said Vickers. “Have I got a TIP for you. Our prisoner gave up his handler. You ready?”

“Go ahead.”

Vickers recited a name and address. The name was Cardassian. The address was in different part of South Central. “Hit that place as fast as you can, and arrest everybody. This intelligence is getting colder by the minute.”

“I’m on it,” said the voice on the combadge. “Anything else?”

“No, that’s it. Thanks, Lew. Vickers out.”

“You think they’ll get him?” said Koenig.

“Maybe,” said Vickers. “The target personality has a day job and a family. If we’re lucky, they’re either still asleep, or just getting up.”

“So what do we do now?” said Mathers.

Vickers went over to the second shuttlepod. “You and Connie take the spoon back to civilization,” he said. Then: “You two with me.”

“Shotgun!” said Delvern.

“Aw,” said McKinley.

“Where are you going?” said Mathers.

Vickers paused at the pilot’s hatch. “You don’t need to know that, new guy.”

Koenig said: “Come on, Mathers, move your ass.” She climbed into the first shuttlepod, took the pilot’s position, and started the impulse engines. After a moment’s hesitation, Mathers joined her. The pod’s gull-wing hatches closed

“Where are you taking me,” the hooded Cardassian whined, from the back.

“Shut up,” said Koenig.
 
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Two Starfleet officers watched as the shuttlepods took off.

Captain Charlebois said: “Follow Vickers.”

The picture on the viewscreen zoomed out and panned right, following one of the two pods across the skies over south-central Sanjal.

Captain Brownridge, Starfleet Intelligence, blew on his coffee, sipped, and said: “Tell me more.”

Charlebois shrugged. “There’s not much more to tell,” he said. “Over the past six months, the Phalanx has become the largest, most powerful faction in the city. Forty per cent of the south-central district is under their control.”

“And you suspect Vickers of leaking classified information to the Phalangists?”

“Yes. Along with his racketeering, and other illegal activities.”

“Why would he do that?”

“Because they hate the New Order almost as much as they hate the provisional government. Dozens of known and suspected insurgents have been killed in this district since Vickers and his team arrived. I suspect they’ve been passing Target Information Packages to the Phalanx, and letting its death squads do the rest.”

Brownridge drank more coffee and considered. Finally, he said: “That’s pretty rough justice.”

“It’s cold-blooded murder,” said Charlebois, flatly.

***

The shuttlepod landed in a deserted parking lot, near an improvised armored vehicle and a small group of Cardassians. The pilot’s hatch opened, and Vickers got out. One Cardassian stepped forward to greet him.

“Commander Vickers,” he said.

“Gul Yurat,” said Vickers. He motioned for the Cardassian to follow him. “Come on around back. I’ve got something for you.”

Yurat followed Vickers around to the back of the shuttlepod. Vickers looked around, then banged on the cargo hatch with his fist. The hatch opened, revealing Lieutenant McKinley holding out a Cardassian disruptor rifle.

“Just fell off the truck this morning,” said Vickers.

Yurat accepted the rifle and examined it. “Excellent,” he said. “How many?”

“Six pistols, twelve rifles,” said Vickers. “Compliments of the New Order.”

Yurat looked up, smiled. “I look forward to thanking them for their generosity.” He waved his men over to the shuttlepod.

While Delvern and McKinley distributed weapons, Vickers held out a folded piece of paper. “I need a favor in the meantime,” he said. “A couple of black marketeers who think they don’t have to pay tax.”

Yurat accepted the paper, unfolded it, read it, and nodded. “These men are known to us,” he said. “We will remind them of their civic duty”

“I appreciate that,” said Vickers.

Gul Yurat slung his disruptor rifle and offered Vickers his hand. “Shoulder to shoulder, Commander Vickers.”

The Federation officer shook the Cardassian’s hand. “Shoulder to shoulder,” he said.

***

The shuttlepod on the viewscreen took off again, heading for district headquarters.

“What do you think?” said Captain Charlebois.

Captain Brownridge finished his coffee. “I think it’ll take a lot more than this to prove that Vickers has been colluding with Phalangist death squads.”

“I’ll get more,” said Charlebois. “I’ve got an informant, on the team.”

Brownridge’s eyes widened in surprise. “Are you serious?” he said. “Who?”

***

“Lewis to Vickers.”

“Vickers here.”

“The cat is in the bag.”

“Nice work, Lew. We’re on our way back to civilization right now.”

“No problem. One thing: the target personality has a wife and young son. I brought them all in, like you said.”

“Good to hear it. I owe you one, buddy. Vickers out.”

***

The occupation authority’s district headquarters was a step pyramid of grey stone. Starfleet personnel called it “civilization.” They were discouraged from calling it that in official correspondence, for obvious reasons.

The interior lighting was low, the walls close and oppressive. The interrogation rooms were converted offices on the first floor. The detainees were in room 101. Vickers opened the door and walked in, followed by Delvern and McKinley.

There were three Cardassian civilians inside. The target personality was a mature male, sitting handcuffed to a metal table. A mature female and a very young male—the target personality’s wife and son—were sitting at the table as well. All three looked at the door when it opened. They looked scared, confused, and a little angry.

Vickers gave them a cold smile. “Mr. Atwar?” he said

The target personality said: “Yes—I’m Atwar.”

Vickers nodded. “This is your wife Rayal and your son Rishkat?” he said.

Warily, the handcuffed Cardassian said: “Yes.”

“I’m Lieutenant Commander Mack Vickers of Starfleet Security. We just need to ask you a few routine questions.” Vickers looked back at McKinley and Delvern. “Why don’t you guys take Mr. Atwar’s family next door?”

“Sure thing,” Delvern said. He opened the door, looked at the wife. “Ma’am?”

The female looked at the target personality. When he nodded, she took the child by the hand, and led him out of the room. Delvern and McKinley followed them out. The door closed behind them.

Vickers took a seat across from the target personality.

“I want to speak to a nestor,” the Cardassian said.

“In a moment,” said Vickers. “First, I want you to tell me the names and addresses of all your associates in the New Order.”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about,” said the Cardassian.

Vickers sighed, lowered his head, rubbed his scalp. Then he raised his head and looked the prisoner in the eye. “Why do you do make me do this?”

The Cardassian looked back. “Do what?” he said.

“You’ll talk,” said Vickers. “You know you’re going to talk. I’m going to make you talk. I always make you snakes talk. So why do you do this? Why?”

“I want a nestor,” said the Cardassian.

Vickers shook his head, then tapped his combadge. “Vickers to Delvern,” he said.

“Delvern here.”

“Go to work on the wife,” said Vickers.

“Acknowledged.”

The Cardassian’s eyes widened. “What are you doing?” he said, uncertainly.

There was a moment of silence. Then, in the next room, a woman screamed.

“Rayal?” said the Cardassian. There was another scream next door. “Rayal!”

“Names and addresses, Mr. Atwar,” said Vickers.

The Cardassian shouted, swore, jumped to his feet, fought against the handcuff.

“Names and addresses.”

The Cardassian started to weep. “Stop it!” he cried, still struggling to pull his hand loose. “Stop it! Rayal! Rayal!

The screaming continued. “Give me some names, and the pain will stop,” said Vickers.

“Bastard!” the Cardassian shouted. “Federation bastard! Rayal!

Then, suddenly, the screaming stopped.

After a moment, Vickers’ combadge chirped. “Delvern to Vickers.”

“Vickers here.”

“Mack…Mack, I’m sorry man…the guy’s wife…”

Vickers frowned. “What happened?”

“She’s dead.”

The Cardassian looked stricken. Vickers jumped to his feet. “Dead?” he shouted. “You idiot—you weren’t supposed to kill her! What the hell did you do?

“I didn’t do anything, I swear! I was giving her electroshock, and she just…she just died!

“Ah…shit!”

“She must have had a weak heart, or something. I’m sorry, sir.”

The Cardassian collapsed back into his chair. “Yeah, okay,” said Vickers, disgustedly. “It’s not your fault. Go to work on the kid. But be carefull this time.”

“What?” said Atwar.

“Acknowledged.”

“No!”

“Vickers out.” The Starfleet officer sat back down and eyed his prisoner.

“Does your son have any medical conditions we should know about?” he said.

***

Vickers and his teammates walked out of the detention area, laughing and joking. At the security station, Lieutenant Barbara Hardcastle scowled and lowered the force-field gate. “Vickers,” she said, “what the hell were you doing in there?”

Vickers grinned and waved his hand dismissively. “Relax, Hardcastle,” he said. “No animals were harmed in the making of this film.”

“Are you kidding?” said Hardcastle. “I could hear the screams from here! You guys are going to get me court-martialled!”

“Nah,” said Vickers. He held up an optolythic data rod. “What you heard was a recording of an old Obsidian-Order interrogation. We put the prisoner in one room, and played this in the next. Made him think we were torturing his wife and kid.”

Hardcastle stared, open-mouthed. Finally, she shook her head and held up her hands. “You guys are sick,” she said.

The three SURGE officers laughed. “Let’s go, sickos,” said Vickers, pocketing the data rod. “We’ve got work to do.”

The group started to walk away when Hardcastle called after them. “Vickers!” They stopped, and Vickers looked back.

“Yeah?”

“I almost forgot. I have a message here for you. Your eyes only.”

Vickers looked back at his teammates, shrugged, and said: “Go on ahead, I’ll catch up.”

Delvern and McKinley left the detention area. Vickers went over to the security station, where Hardcastle was raising the force-field gate once again. “Who’s it from?” he said.

Hardcastle held out a padd. “Captain Brownridge, Starfleet Intelligence,” she said.

“Brownridge?” said Vickers. He took the padd, tapped a button on the screen, and read the message that came up. Then, for a moment, he just stood there.

The message read: MATHERS IS A RAT. HE’S WORKING FOR CHARLEBOIS. WATCH YOUR ASS. BROWNRIDGE.

“What does Intelligence want?” said Hardcastle.

Vickers glanced up, smiled. “Nothing,” he said. He blanked the screen, and handed the padd back. “Just a TIP. See you later, Lieutenant.”

***

It was another hot, humid night in the south-central district of Sanjal. Sheet lightning flashed and thunder rumbled in the distance. The power had not yet been fully restored, so the streets were dark, deserted.

Swiftly, silently, the SURGE team closed in on their objective—another nondescript house in one of the district’s poorest neighborhoods. Koenig and McKinley set up a ladder in the back yard, beneath a second-floor window. As they began to climb, Vickers, Delvern and Mathers crept around to the front of the house and stacked up next to the front door.

Vickers held up his left fist. Delvern hefted the battering ram. Mathers readied his weapon. Behind their balaclavas, their faces were tense with excitement.

They heard the sound of glass breaking in the rear of the house. Vickers pumped his fist. Delvern shouted “Starfleet!” and swung the ram. As the door splintered inward, Mathers charged in and moved left.

Vickers went in, moving right, Delvern close behind him. As they rounded a corner, a Cardassian opened fire with a disruptor pistol.

Vickers ducked back, under cover. Then both Delvern and Vickers leaned around the corner and returned fire. The Cardassian was hit and fell.

The Starfleet officers advanced into the room, covering the Cardassian on the floor. Vickers reached down and carefully removed the disruptor from the dead alien’s hand. Behind them, they heard Mathers say “Clear!”

Delvern and Vickers exchanged a look. Mathers entered the room. He lowered his weapon.

Then Vickers raised the disruptor, took aim, and shot Mathers in the face.


(Adapted from The Shield, Episode One: “Pilot”)
 
Hello everyone.

First, apologies for my long silence, and almost equally long absence. I just haven't been writing, and I don't know why.

The good news (if anyone still cares about this series) is that I am now writing again.

Part of the problem was that I went off half-cocked and started a season-long story arc without any clear idea what I was doing. But after almost a year (:() I now have a much better sense of what I need to do and where these stories need to go.

At some point in the near future, I will be opening a new thread entitled Supermax: Season Two Redux.

This will feature:

--links to Season One's eight stories, here, in the proper order, for anyone who hasn't read them before;

--revised and rearranged versions of Season Two's first four stories;

--and most importantly, new stories--beginning with Episode 205, "Fathers and Sons".

I don't know exactly when this will be, as I would like to get two stories in the can before I start posting again, to make sure that my current productivity isn't just a blip.

So, hopefully, you'll hear from me again soon. Cheers!
 
Welcome back! :techman: Looking forward to the redux editions, as well as eagerly anticipating your new stories. :)
 
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