Re: A VERY SPECIAL Star Trek, MY Way...
CeJay said:
What an action-packed story! Unrelenting and fun. I think I said it before but I will say it again, military inspired combat sounds a lot cooler than Trek inspired combat. It just feels and sounds much more professionals. These people a military pros and they now exactly what they’re doing.
Thank you.
(And theoretically, Trek inspired combat is
supposed to be military-inspired. It's just that canon Trek writers use WWII and Age of Sail warfare as their basis. I use Tom Clancy, Larry Bond, and the modern United States Navy.)
Even though the story was extremely focused on the combat I really liked Montoya’s small part in it and her realization of what it means to be human. It gave the story a somewhat deeper feel.
Glad you liked it.
I really liked the interchange between her and Silas in the end, it was poignant and extremely funny “You can sleep with me …”
(it gave me unclean thoughts as well)
That line was blatant theft, but I figured it would work here as well. I'll leave it to others to figure out who I stole it from.
Characters still have a tendency to break into lecture mode from time to time. It’s obviously justified at times but at others I wonder if some of the ‘explanations’ aren’t better suited for the prose. In the end this is probably nothing more than a subjective view on different writing styles.
Y'know, for such an obvious fan of TNG era Trek you seem to have a big problem with lectures. I don't see why. Most of the time TNG was nothing but one huge lecture disguised as space opera. Oh well...
I was surprised to see Enterprise delivering such a decisive victory to such a seemingly stronger enemy. Okay, Enterprise was a wreck afterwards but they still dispatched their enemy with relative ease. (Any words on casualties?)
An exact number, no, but there were wounded, though nobody died this time. (That is, no Humans died...) Pike mentioned that there were wounded in his report in the final segment.
Of course they had those handy warp torpedoes but if this battle was a sign of Starfleet’s strength compared to the Klingons they must have had an easy time during the war (especially considering that massive task force).
This reminds of a comment someone made about the respective forces in
The Cavalier Incident. Let me say again what I said then: Don't let what you saw in this one episode make you think it shows a complete picture of Starfleet and the Klingon Armada. The Klingon force depicted here is a small fraction of the force the Empire could deploy against its enemies in a full-scale war, and MW-Prise is a refit, remember? It wasn't anywhere as capable during the war as it is under Pike's command, and Starfleet didn't have warp-capable torpedoes back then. The Reunification War lasted seven years for a reason.
What you saw here was more a testament to training and command ability. Pike used the forces available to him better than Kor used the forces available to him.
Enterprise won because Pike was the better commander.
Also, USS
George Bush I can believe but the
John Wayne? That seemed kinda silly. What’s next? The USS
Tom Cruise?
The real US Navy has at least one transport named
Bob Hope. Why can't I name one after the Duke?
Overall terrific effort as usual, sir. And it seems you have drastically increased your rate of production. Five seasons not at all that unlikely anymore, huh? Looking forward to see what’s next.
Dude, we're still only at episode SIX. We're a long way off from five seasons. But I'm still working on it.
). 
). Your use of naval parlance and battle tactics provide a tremendous amount of realism. When the Enterprise and Klingon ship went head to head, I could almost feel the tension on both bridges. Excellent writing and a most enjoyable story!
