New Excelsior Release

Discussion in 'Fan Productions' started by MikeH92467, Nov 3, 2019.

  1. MikeH92467

    MikeH92467 Admiral Admiral

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    Our latest release "Fast Friends" is available at starshipexcelsior.com. It's not as long as the epics we've been releasing lately, but it's too long for a vignette. Any comments, suggestions, criticisms are welcome. Enjoy!
     
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  2. Wowbagger

    Wowbagger Commodore Commodore

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    It's got art, too!

    Like the man said, it's at StarshipExcelsior.com and hopefully on all the podcatcher services the kids are using these days. Between Stitcher and Castbox and Spotify, it's harder to keep up with all of them than it was in 2007! :)

    I feel in my heart that maybe this is going to be the one Maurice likes. But we will have to see about that!
     
  3. ozzfloyd

    ozzfloyd Commander Red Shirt

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    Can't wait to listen!
     
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  4. MikeH92467

    MikeH92467 Admiral Admiral

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    ...and just when you thought it was safe....you can hear our first ever commentary track as James Heaney and I discuss the making of our pilot episode "There You Are". Follow this link to stream or download it. It should also be available on your favorite podcatching app.
     
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  5. Maurice

    Maurice ATARI CX5200 Premium Member

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    Mine is but one opinion.

    And, fair warning, I am probably not the target audience here, despite my love for audio drama. I realized 4 seasons into TNG that my affection for TOS didn't carry over, and the way the subsequent shows have evolved largely leaves me cold. This is why you really don't see me much outside the TOS and Movie forums.

    In short. It was okay. The gimmick was cute, and I like the wordplay of the title. The audio production is better than I remember from years past. But I can't say this would compel me to listen to more. As above, a big part of that is the conventions of modern Trek that don't speak to me.

    As with so many fan productions the problem for me is the main character doesn't drive the story. Stuff happens, he reacts. He doesn't even come away from the experience seeming to having learned anything. I'd have given the President's last line to him (minus the soup thing), since really, it's where the story ends.

    No one seems to take the situation very seriously. They're all pretty glib about it. Where's the shocked WTF moment for any one them? Yes, I realize this story is light hearted but people can behave believably even when you play it funny.

    The show takes too long to get going. It was 1:50 before the first line was spoken. Even with a Chesterfield ad at the top Gunsmoke would be 30 seconds into the story by this point, at that was 1950s pacing. There's a reason most radio shows put their credits at the end because you want the lowest friction possible for your audience to get into the show. And when the show does start there's this dialog about meetings and stuff that would be fine if it paid off but never goes anywhere. It's rote, like the crew investigating the disappearance, thus feels like It's there because it's the convention and not because it adds anything to the story. As is you could whack off the framing scenes at the front and the back and not affect anything but the running time.

    Or maybe there's something there I missed because I'm unfamiliar with the characters.

    Putting on my writer's hat (okay, I never really take it off) I'd have suggested that something about the experience move the lead emotionally from where he starts at the top and where he gets off the ride. He starts at A and ends up at B. What is the story about thematically, and whose story is it, and why should I care? That's the question I always ask writers, including myself.

     
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  6. MikeH92467

    MikeH92467 Admiral Admiral

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    Thank you!
     
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  7. Maurice

    Maurice ATARI CX5200 Premium Member

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    You're welcome. I always try to give practical feedback/advice.
     
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