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Burning Ring of Fire

Re: Burning Ring of Fire - Chapter 4

Well, Aurelia never was much for subtle diplomacy--but, as pointed out, it got the job done. Still, once the current crisis is over, I'd look for the old enemies to once again tear into each other...
 
Re: Burning Ring of Fire - Chapter 4

This United Trek thing is fascinating. Knowing who's assigne d where years after the time you are writing in-way cool. Xeris-I think you nailed Sintina's advanced negotiation skills down. I bet every Captain in the Fleet has wanted to do that at one time or another. Is the rift that the (???) came out of the same kind of rift as the Ch'alav used to attack the Resoto?
 
Re: Burning Ring of Fire - Chapter 4

Mistral said:
This United Trek thing is fascinating. Knowing who's assigne d where years after the time you are writing in-way cool. Xeris-I think you nailed Sintina's advanced negotiation skills down. I bet every Captain in the Fleet has wanted to do that at one time or another. Is the rift that the (???) came out of the same kind of rift as the Ch'alav used to attack the Resoto?
I would answer that but what the hell is (???)? Do you mean the subspace shark or what? It is meant to be the same type of rift each time, yes. And it's Cha'lav. ;)
 
Re: Burning Ring of Fire - Chapter 4

Hey, you haven't actually named the beastie yet and (???) was easier than "Sub-space shark". And I'm lazy. ;)
 
Re: Burning Ring of Fire - Chapter 4

I liked Aurelia in this last post. And what of the Cha'lav? They don't look so tough now. But then of course there is plenty of time left until the 29th century, was it?
 
Starfleet staging ground
Ynelav IV
Stardate 57360.8
Ensign T’Larr, one of only two Vulcans aboard the Weisskopf, had been chosen for this ill-conceived mission because of two reasons; she was the Exobiologist on board the small starship and her physique was close to that of the general populace of Ynelav. She’d vocalised her objections to the mission and her objections had been noted and ignored, which was not unusual. Most humanoid species did not like being told when they were wrong or choosing the wrong path. Captain Dhrex wanted to learn more about the Ynelavii and since he had been ordered to stay off world during the civil war he could not, and as such had therefore resorted to subterfuge. This planet was totally unlike Vulcan in that it had excessive amounts of rainfall, especially in the area chosen for their primary base – on the slopes of the largest mountain range on the continent. In the last seven days they had ventured into the local village and learned that while the coup had been successful, loyalists were fighting back and the people were being slowly swayed by the loyalist propaganda machine. Starfleet might be back within the week, she privately mused.

T’Larr glanced at her companions as they moved closer to the cave mouth that was a secret entrance to the reliquary which held Ynelav’s most sacred relics. Chief Banks and Crewman Chan were both dressed as she was muted tunics the colour of dust which hid her true form. They had originally dressed as peasants but since T’Larr decided to enter the reliquary, they had acquired the robes of acolytes so that they might move freely among the tyros and priests. It was bad enough that they were on this world with minimal backup, but worst of all was the fact that they could not even bring their tricorders, only their communicators, so reading any scrolls written more than five or six thousand years ago would prove difficult at best. Lieutenant Renn provided with a full translation of everything she managed to create before the coup and T’Larr spent the night before the mission going over it line by line. She now believed herself fully conversant in the old language—up to six thousand years ago. Crewman James Chan was taking point and halted just inches from the cave mouth.

He held up his hand and T’Larr stopped immediately. Banks stopped a fraction of a second later, but not before bumping into the Vulcan. Chan’s eyesight was far more suited to the dusty cavern, having spent much of his life in the caves of Mars, and it was for this reason alone that T’Larr allowed him to take point. His reliance on old military hand signals was bizarre but they seemed to work, marginally better than the Starfleet ones—she would have to inform her superiors of this, since Starfleet seemed to be more and more involved in ground combat these past few years—even to the point of resurrecting the Starfleet Marine Corps of a century ago specifically for that purpose. Chan disappeared into the cave and then emerged a few moments later.

‘We’ll be safe inside, the Militia loyal to Furan have herded the priests and everyone else into a holding centre back in the village.’

‘Is it likely they will escape and return to the reliquary?’

‘Not unless they have help from the Loyalists, but from what I’ve seen the Loyalists are having enough trouble just holding on to their lives.’

T’Larr raised an eyebrow. ‘The rebellion is winning?’ she asked, surprised at how humans had the ability to capitalise words and bring that out in their annunciation of said word.

‘For the moment.’

‘The Seer is the only person on Ynelav who can prevent the rebellion from winning,’ the Vulcan replied.

‘How so?’ Banks asked.

‘According to Ynelavii legend, the Seer will unite all the people of Ynelav under a common banner. Perhaps our investigations in the reliquary will provide us with the answer we need to assist them.’

‘What happened to “this is an ill-conceived mission”?’

‘This is an ill-conceived mission but that does not mean that it cannot be a success.’

‘That’s the spirit, T’Larr!’ Chan said in a whisper.

‘We’d better get started if we want to be out of here before the priests get free, with or without the Loyalists’ help,’ Banks said.

‘You think they might?’ Chan asked, his expression suddenly crestfallen.

‘The Bajorans did without any outside help.’

‘Other than the Prophets.’

‘Hmm,’ T’Larr responded, thinking of an interesting paper she could write on that very subject. ‘Let us proceed.’

Chan led the way into the cave system and she followed him with Banks taking up the rear through several passageways and caverns until they reached the main reliquary, where thousands of sacred artefacts were stored on shelves and in powered cases of some kind.

‘Their level of technology is impressive,’ T’Larr said, ‘considering how they choose to display their technology.’

‘This is not their technology,’ Banks said and T’Larr turned to look.

There was a computer console in the corner of the room which was eminently familiar to them, but quite unfamiliar at the same time. Of the three, only T’Larr knew what she was looking at and made a mental note to contact the Weisskopf as soon as they left the cavern. A theory was developing that might explain the technological advancement in some areas and not in others, precisely the same areas as another race in the Alpha Quadrant. A closer inspection of the cases revealed that they too were constructed of the same alloy from which the console was.

‘How long has all this been here?’ Chan asked.

‘I would rather ask the question, what is it doing here?’ Banks muttered.

‘Approximately three centuries,’ T’Larr answered. ‘I cannot answer your query as to what this technology is doing in this place, although it might explain why Subcommander Sokal has been enjoying the hospitality of Starbase 535.’

‘Why do you say that?’ Chan asked.

‘What you see are the remains of a Romulan warbird from the early twenty-second century, prior to Earth’s first encounter with them.’
 
Oh, that's where I left that warbird! I've been looking for it for quite some time now...Seriously, there seems to be a LOT more going on with this rebellion than I first thought. I figured it was straight forward but there seem to be undercurrents of off-world meddling on several levels. Cool. You have a very twisty mind, Xeris.
 
And the plot deepens as it appears that the Ynelavi have reverse engineered much of their tech. Still...why...other than academic interest...would Sokar be that interested in the remains of a two hundred year old warbird?

Inquiring readers want to know. :)
 
Space Ministry
Xyril City
Stardate 57363.4

Deputy Commissioner Dreno’L smiled in smug satisfaction as the human freighter captain arrived with his cargo. The parts were going to be used to build a prototype space vehicle capable of taking a Xyrillian anywhere he or she wanted to go without the use of the engines that the species had used for the last two centuries. Their own warp propulsion was still primitive and the scientists on the homeworld were reluctant to upgrade it because it did work. The only problem was that it broke down far too often and the Xyrillian crew had to covertly or overtly hitch rides in order to get the engines working again. As his assistant ushered Nicholas Locarno into the office, Dreno’L saw a young girl holding the human’s hand. She looked to be about ten years old, although he knew that was subjective, since different species matured at different speeds.

‘Mister Locarno, I’m so glad you were able to procure my merchandise. The gold-pressed latinum is being transferred to your ship as we speak.’

‘Your merchandise is being taken to the hangar as you requested,’ Locarno replied, eyeing the Xyrillian with suspicion.

‘You didn’t need to come here to tell me that.’

‘Did you know that this little girl was on board still?’

‘I thought all had perished, or so the last report stated. I will speak with the patrol captain.’

Locarno smiled. ‘There’s no need for that, Commissioner. You and I both know what happened aboard that ship a few months ago.’

Dreno’L kept his face neutral as Locarno told him a story, no doubt from the little girl’s perspective, about a group of raiders attacking the ship and killing its crew when they refused to cooperate. He looked at the girl, such a slip of a thing, and realised that neither she nor Locarno would be a problem if his plan made it to fruition. The girl tugged at Locarno’s tunic and he stopped telling the story, kneeling down for her to whisper into his ear.

‘Linnis thinks that you’re putting a bomb on board my ship. Are you?’

Dreno’L knew his face betrayed him and could do nothing about it when he saw the realisation on the human’s face.

‘She’s the real reason you wanted me to get those parts isn’t she? You knew there was a survivor and you knew that she wouldn’t let any of your men near her. So you hired me to do your dirty work.’

‘Very astute,’ the Commissioner replied, abandoning his pretence. ‘Since you know about the bomb I suppose you’ll call the authorities. I must warn you, they will ignore you after a cursory examination reveals nothing.’

‘Linnis has some very interesting gifts, Commissioner,’ Locarno replied. ‘Somehow I doubt that I’ll be having any trouble from you.’

‘What can that little thing do?’ he sneered.

What were you planning to do with us?’ a voice said behind him and he turned to face an adult female who looked like Linnis and wore a military uniform of some kind.

‘Who are you? How did you get in here?’

Did you want our ship? Our minds? What was it you heard about us?’ another voice said, this one male, as he advanced on the commissioner.

‘I wasn’t going to do anything with you,’ he answered, scrabbling backward. ‘It was all the patrol captain’s fault.’

What was?’ the woman asked as she walked toward him.

‘Our engines are out of date, we needed something new. Your minds can help us!’ he said, trying to regain his dignity as the two soldiers continued to advance from different directions. ‘You would have been handsomely rewarded.’

‘I think he’s had enough, Linnis,’ Locarno said as Dreno’L sank to the floor and began moaning.

‘He’s a bad man,’ the Ocampan replied with a strong voice.

‘Yes, he is,’ Locarno agreed. ‘But if you hurt him, you become just like him. Your parents wouldn’t want that, would they?’

Linnis looked up at him and shook her head.

The apparitions vanished and Dreno’L looked up. ‘What happened?’

‘I told you she had some interesting gifts.’

‘Then I will use her for the ship!’ he said, regaining his equilibrium.

‘How? What exactly can the Ocampa do?’

‘Their minds are so powerful. They can guide anywhere, and they can do it fast.’

‘How do you know that?’

‘One of my colleagues found a ship adrift and experimented on them,’ the commissioner replied as he returned to his desk. ‘I’m just continuing his work.’

‘Not anymore you’re not. I’ll tell the police here everything you’ve just told me.’

‘You won’t get that far,’ he said and pulled a Klingon disruptor pistol from his desk.

‘Linnis, I think we should leave.’

‘I can hurt the pistol,’ she replied, looking up at Locarno.

‘How?’

‘Like this.’

Nothing happened.

‘Hah!’ Dreno’L replied and pressed the firing stud.

Nothing happened.

‘Goodbye, Commissioner,’ Locarno headed for the door.

‘Security!’ Dreno’L called. Two Xyrillians reached the doors as Locarno did. ‘Arrest them,’ he added, waving the disruptor around.

The Xyrillians raised their own pistols and pointed them at the Commissioner.

‘These people are unarmed, Commissioner. Were you going to shoot them?’

‘It’s not working, an antique, see,’ he retorted and shot the guard in the chest.

As the first guard collapsed with a smouldering burn, the second fired at the commissioner.



Linnis buried her face in Locarno’s leg, crying.

‘I can hear him dying,’ she said of the guard.

‘So can I,’ Locarno replied. ‘Come on, I want you to meet some friends of mine who can help you.’

‘Sir, please wait. We need to take statements from you both.’

‘You can take a statement from me, not from her,’ he replied gently. ‘She’s already traumatised from the loss of her parents.’

The guard nodded and pulled out a padd. ‘Where are you based?’

Starbase 535, and I shall be heading directly there once we are finished. You will find a number of parts from her parents’ ship in the hangar where my ship is berthed, the Kolvoord. I was hired to steal them by the Commissioner for use in what I gather was an illegal project.’

The guard said nothing as he took all the information down. ‘Everything’s going to be alright,’ he said to the girl. ‘You can leave now, Mister Locarno. I’ll deal with this. Thank you for your cooperation.’
 
Never underestimate the power of little girls, I say. I guess that is a lesson that will come to late for the good (bad) commisioner.

You have an interesting series of parallel events here and don't really see how any of this is connected. But I'm a patient reader and I'm looking forward to find out.
 
A family of Ocampa near Federation space. I say there's a story in and of itself. I wonder if the second Caretaker is involved here somehow.
 
Never underestimate the power of little girls, I say. I guess that is a lesson that will come to late for the good (bad) commisioner.
The Commissioner is done for, his part in my grand scheme has come to an end.

You have an interesting series of parallel events here and don't really see how any of this is connected. But I'm a patient reader and I'm looking forward to find out.
Oh, it'll all come together before the end of the first season, and I'll have plenty more questions for you to ask in the second.

A family of Ocampa near Federation space. I say there's a story in and of itself. I wonder if the second Caretaker is involved here somehow.
So so cold.
 
I like what you've done with Locarno in this story. I always thought it would be interesting to know what became of him after he left the academy. You've done a nice job of fleshing out his character - something of a tragic/heroic figure.

And, thank heaven for little girls! ;)
 
Ocampan military? Did I get that right? The ghost was in uniform, yes? Now I don't know what's going on but I do not recall any Ocampan military in Voyager-so, as usual, you're up to something.
I am reminded of the little girl that befriended the kid on Next Gen when I read about Linnis-which is creeping me out. That little girl was bad news if I recall the ep correctly.
Nick is great-you just keep adding depth to him and I like it. I was always intrigued by the final court scene from his ep-He seemed somewhat more than the shallow character he originally came off as. Good Job, Xeris!
 
Nice. Linnis is one tough little girl. And what are Ocampan's doing this far out from the Delta Quadrant? I'd like to add my voice to the others in praise of how you're handling Nick Locarno--it's a shame they didn't do to him and Jean Hajar what they did for Sito Jaxa and Wesley Crusher on the series--give us a chance to see what became of them.

Nicely done!
 
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