Outstanding writing. Even though we know very well that Scotty will survive the night and go on to be an exemplary officer, you do wonderfully at immersing the reader in his NOW, when things aren't so certain.
Very well done.
That's the biggest problem; when you know canon, you know how the story goes. But, if I am able to at least drag a reader in, then I'm not doing too bad -- thanks for the comment! I sure hope it doesn't disappoint.