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The adventure begins again...

Magister

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The Opening: 24th Century – Spock as he stands surrounded by dignitaries and family members on the edge of civilization — a vast desert behind him. Through the whispering voices of the gathered guests, we hear tales about the venerable Vulcan. We are told of his legacy, his numerous accomplishments as Starfleet officer and later as an ambassador. We are also told that now he has come home to Vulcan to die. Like his father, he has contracted a disease that will soon tear away at his mind and that he wishes to die a death of dignity on his own terms.

Acknowledging that his “friends“ are gone and that his missions are now complete, Spock begins his ceremonial final walk and enters the great wasteland. A Romulan boy emerges from the crowd and anxiously calls out to him, “When will you return, Grandfather?” Spock looks back at the boy and shakes his head. “I shall not return.”

A desert canyon as Spock continues his final journey. He begins to weaken not only physically but also in controlling his emotions, his mind. He begins to hear voices from his recent and then distant past. He imagines enemies and friends he has encountered over the span of his lifetime. And then he hears one distinctive voice which becomes clearer over all the others. It becomes his point of focus, his need to hang on. The desert sands turn into stars as we travel back and Spock remembers…

The Main Narrative: Spock on board the Enterprise under the command of Captain Pike. They are being sent to a planet whose main city has had an ecological disaster wipe out its main energy sources and turn a once habitable planet into a frozen wilderness. Spock is sent down as part of the science team to help save the inhabitants and to get to the bottom of the disaster’s cause.

Other Starfleet vessels have also responded to the distress call and Spock finds that he has to compete for command of the situation with a Lt. Commander Kirk from another landing party. Spock sees Kirk as “cocky, hardnosed and unrelenting.”

Spock also finds that as the only “alien” of the Starfleet personnel, he encounters a great deal of animosity and prejudice from the humans. But as they continue their investigation a mutual respect begins to be shared between Kirk and Spock as they both become impressed with each other’s qualities. There is even a defining moment when Kirk berates his own men after they make several hateful slurs against Spock.

The mystery of the ecological occurrence deepens as Kirk and Spock find that some type of weapon was used to create the disaster. Before they can make their reports, their respective ships are called away to report to yet another planet bound disaster. Kirk and Spock continue their investigation anyway.

The commander of the planet’s inhabitants who had been blocking Spock and Kirk’s efforts all along is revealed as the villain behind the plot. It turns out he was not the real commander but an altered “enemy” who planned on using their ecological weapon on many of the planets of the Federation. When enough disruptions had occurred, they were then planning a massive invasion.

Kirk and Spock and their men are imprisoned on the planet. Kirk and Spock manage to escape and they fight their way out of their prison, many of their men are lost in the battle. Eventually they steal the commander’s ship; and as they get away, Spock is able to make contact with the Enterprise.

Meanwhile our villain has contacted his fleet and they are now in hot pursuit of Kirk and Spock. It is here that Kirk shows his brilliance for command as they outmaneuver the invading force. However, as the come into visual contact with the Enterprise the impact from enemy fire on their ship is too great, they are only seconds from destruction…

Cut To: 24th Century – Spock has fallen to his knees his body begins its final shutdown. The sun in his face. A shadow. An arm reaches down and grabs Spock – steadying him.
Spock looks up and shakes his head. “How can this be?” Before him, aged and in a strange uniform, but very much alive is … James T. Kirk.

Kirk leans over and holds onto his dear friend. He injects him with a hypo. “A little present from the 26th Century,” he whispers. Almost immediately, Spock regains his strength and stands up.
He questions Kirk on the probability of him being there after all this time. “I’ll explain it to you later, we have to hurry.”
“Hurray? To where?” Spock asks.
Kirk explains that they are both needed in the 26th century, a problem only the two of them could solve. “Our world needs you. The future needs you. I need you,” Kirk explains.
Spock and Kirk banter back and forth until Spock sees an element of “logic” in continuing with his old friend.
Kirk goes to his communicator. “Enterprise, two to beam up.”
As they begin to “beam up” we see them one final time. Kirk – a widening grin. Spock – his eyebrow raised.

The Main Narrative: On the transporter pad aboard the Enterprise, Kirk and Spock materialize. The enemy ship had been destroyed, but they were pulled out by Pike in the nick of time.

The Enterprise stares down the invading force and as the rest of the fleet arrives, the invading force makes the smart move and heads back to their space.

Meanwhile, by virtue of the injuries they received on their adventure, Kirk and Spock end up in sickbay. They talk cordially to one another as they receive care in sickbay. They wonder if their paths will ever cross again.

As they continue to talk we hear a young country intern tell them to “stop yappin’ and get some rest.” Which, of course, they do.

The Enterprise as it sails away. The adventure begins again…
 
I'm assuming that was a bit of fanfic or speculation - now I seldom say this, but I got chills at the image of Spock walking into the desert (which echoed for me Paul Atreides doing the same in Children of DUNE)

Sharr
 
Not to feed your ego, Magister, but this hardly sounds like typical fan speculation.

It sounds like a real professional teaser! I got chills too.

Hmmmm....makes me wonder who this relative newbie really is...wonder if his name is Orci? Adams?

Nah... couldn't be....

But,a good way to surreptitiously gauge fan reaction to a premise...

Nah....
 
Doomsday said:
Not to feed your ego, Magister, but this hardly sounds like typical fan speculation.

It sounds like a real professional teaser! I got chills too.

Hmmmm....makes me wonder who this relative newbie really is...wonder if his name is Orci? Adams?

Nah... couldn't be....

But,a good way to surreptitiously gauge fan reaction to a premise...

Nah....

Sorry, Magester, but on the offchange that Doomsday is correct, I can't read this. At least, not all of it. I did read up to the point where Spock starts flashing back, and I think it was a pretty good way to induce the flashbacks. In a way, more poetic than just having Spock in his drawing room saying to someone, "Let me tell you a story..." It doesn't really leave too much for Nimoy to do, though. Interesting, and thought-provoking.
 
That was a good read. It would have been better with out the 26th century stuff. Could use some more action too.
The way you got Lieutenants Spock and Kirk together was the best part.
 
The Kirk from the 26th Century bit lets it down, you can't just stick him in there like that. If there is no good way to put him in - don't bother.

If he isn't there, then there will be inevitable whines from some people. My advice to the team working on it is to ignore them! Shatner does NOT have to be in it.
 
Shatner should not be in it. If old Kirk appears, it would have to be handled perfectly. Otherwise, it is going to sink this thing.
 
^ i agree, but this was really cool. If it is fanfic great job, if it is real, JJ's crappin his pants. Still was a great little read.
 
Doomsday said:
Not to feed your ego, Magister, but this hardly sounds like typical fan speculation.

It sounds like a real professional teaser! I got chills too.

Hmmmm....makes me wonder who this relative newbie really is...wonder if his name is Orci? Adams?

Or someone who leaked a part of the script. Oh, that would kick so much ass! If someone did just to see how the fans would respond.

Flake said:
The Kirk from the 26th Century bit lets it down, you can't just stick him in there like that. If there is no good way to put him in - don't bother.

Actually, that's probably the best way to put him in. Not over thinking it.

Flake said:
If he isn't there, then there will be inevitable whines from some people. My advice to the team working on it is to ignore them! Shatner does NOT have to be in it.

And if he is there, then there will be inevitable whines from other people. My advice to the team working on it is to ignore them! Shatner would enhance this movie. Especially the way written here.
 
There's something about this... (Oh I'm all for the Kirk showing up minus any overt explanation - why can't we take it on faith that he managed to even beat death we just haven't learned how... yet...)

...its interesting how the poster hasn't gone into detail the nature of the weapon or even who exactly the baddy is... just acknowledges that they are there. Almost like not wanting to give that away.

Now when I first stumbled on this late last night I thought. Whoa! Man nice bit of speculation/fanfic there - pretty powerful stuff.

I guess the only way we'll know for sure is once we start to get more details to compare this agianst.

Has the OP posted in any other threads?

Sharr
 
TheLoneRedshirt said:
Real or not, it's a very well done story line. I'm not quite as keen on the Kirk appearance, but that's just me.

Yeah, I agree. I could go either way at the moment, but am still aimed towards leaving Shat out unless absolutely necessary.

If this were the real film I'd have 3 main concerns (that I can think of right now):

1. The whole plot seems to hinge around Kirk & Spock doing something really amazing on the planet. New fans need a reason to give a crap about them enough to be happy about the ending and not just scratch their heads. They have to be sold as guys who can be concidered important enough to put the universe in their hands in the 26th century.

2. I'd really like to see Kirk as a space cowboy in command of a starship, which seems to be absent here.

3. I'm still jittery about a flashback movie, but that's an Abrams 'must' so I hope it works.

still, it's a well done write-up.
 
If this is a 'tease' of the new movie, then color me impressed.

I really like the set-up for the flashback being something substantial in its own right, and Nimoy would play this very well. I think the 26th Century Kirk part needs to be fleshed out a little more, but this is certainly in the right direction--I think it is imperative for older Kirk and older Spock to exit on a positive, optimistic note that conveys the idea that they have many more adventures ahead of them. I think this will make the transition to the new actors portraying young Kirk and Spock much more graceful and even poignant depending on how well it is executed.

As to the young Kirk and Spock part of the story, I think it has a lot of potential. I like that Kirk and Spock begin as rivals for command on the planet, with the possibility of demonstrating very different command styles. It should provide many opportunities for showing how different they are, yet how those differences can compliment each other.
 
Sorry, I'm not buying. It's a fairly clever plot line but it's doesn't ring true for what I'd expect from these writers.
 
The nitpickers miss the point of the elegance of this idea...

You dont have to explain how Kirk came back, you dont have to explain what happens to Kirk and Spock after they go off into the sunset in the 26th century. The fans can invent their own explanation which is for the best. The casual fan is happy that Kirk and Spock are alive.
 
It is indeed an elegant idea, even with the 26th century angle. However, I'm not so sure about the Enterprise plot. First, I'd love to see Kirk's first mission as Captain, and then, the "ecological disaster-as-weapon" thing smells too much like a certain VGR episode to me. Otherwise this would be a worthwhile story.
 
Vektor said:
Sorry, I'm not buying. It's a fairly clever plot line but it's doesn't ring true for what I'd expect from these writers.

Besides the fact that this can't possibly be from the actual writers, because old Kirk is in it, and they've said they still haven't found a way to put Shatner in (unless this is them specifically trying out a way to put Shatner in). You never know, but I really doubt it.
 
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