Beautiful. I can practically see the matte painting.
Tell a TOS Story, a Little at a Time.
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*Fade up*
Captains Log, stardate 9123.5. After having been lured into a trap by a false invitation to meet with the Prime Minister, Ensign Daniels has now been killed in an attempt to protect us from the strange glowing snake-like creature that, unknown to us, was purposefully set upon us.
Spock: Captain, if it is unbeknown to us, how could you possibly enter it into your log entry.
Kirk: An assumption Spock. It'll make the narrative more interesting and catch the attention of the Admiralty. If I turn out to be wrong I'll just cut that last bit before sending it on to command.
Spock: Captain, I do not believe that that practice serves the greater goals of...
McCoy: Jim! There's something odd going on here.
Spock: The master of observation, as always doctor.
McCoy: No Spock, something else. Look, that creature was glowing hot, like the Magmasians. See, it's genetic profile is very similar. Ensign Daniels grabbed it by the neck and held on to the bitter end, but he's suffered no burns, no signs of intense heat at all. He was killed by venom, and venom alone.
Spock: Fascinating.
Lishen's voice: I think I can explain that gentlemen...
A whip-pan reveals that the door is now open and Lishen has observed at least the last few sentences.
Captains Log, stardate 9123.5. After having been lured into a trap by a false invitation to meet with the Prime Minister, Ensign Daniels has now been killed in an attempt to protect us from the strange glowing snake-like creature that, unknown to us, was purposefully set upon us.
Spock: Captain, if it is unbeknown to us, how could you possibly enter it into your log entry.
Kirk: An assumption Spock. It'll make the narrative more interesting and catch the attention of the Admiralty. If I turn out to be wrong I'll just cut that last bit before sending it on to command.
Spock: Captain, I do not believe that that practice serves the greater goals of...
McCoy: Jim! There's something odd going on here.
Spock: The master of observation, as always doctor.
McCoy: No Spock, something else. Look, that creature was glowing hot, like the Magmasians. See, it's genetic profile is very similar. Ensign Daniels grabbed it by the neck and held on to the bitter end, but he's suffered no burns, no signs of intense heat at all. He was killed by venom, and venom alone.
Spock: Fascinating.
Lishen's voice: I think I can explain that gentlemen...
A whip-pan reveals that the door is now open and Lishen has observed at least the last few sentences.
When the commercials are over, the story resumes. It has now, unaccountably, taken the form of an Ann Beattie-style, present-tense, New Yorker-type story.
Spock sits and ponders this. He is ninety-seven Earth years old. He would like nothing more than to step outside and have a clove cigarette, and feels trapped by the hull of the ship as never before.
Spock sits and ponders this. He is ninety-seven Earth years old. He would like nothing more than to step outside and have a clove cigarette, and feels trapped by the hull of the ship as never before.
Kirk turned angrily to Lishen. "While you are explaining that, would you mind explaining why our communicators, sensors, and phasers aren't working? Or why we were locked in here?"
"The rebels have invaded this Capitol building, and they don't like off-worlders such as yourselves. We don't know where in the building they are hiding, but they have means of interfering with electronic equipment undetected. I suspect they managed to place the snake in the room as well, which means they are nearby."
McCoy looked concerned. "That sounds like a far-fetched explanation to me. You'll forgive us if we don't completely trust you."
"The rebels have invaded this Capitol building, and they don't like off-worlders such as yourselves. We don't know where in the building they are hiding, but they have means of interfering with electronic equipment undetected. I suspect they managed to place the snake in the room as well, which means they are nearby."
McCoy looked concerned. "That sounds like a far-fetched explanation to me. You'll forgive us if we don't completely trust you."
"Says the Vulcan, a species noted for not lying" replied Lishen with a strong hint of sarcasm.
Spock managed to hide his surprise.
"My crewman is dead. We are invited here and then we're attacked and made prisoners - I want to know what is going on" Kirk's anger was rising.
There was an explosion nearby, smoke poured past the door. A Velosian in torn clothing half staggered towards Lishen. He had visible flash burns down one side of his face and arms.
"The rebels, they're here" he gasped.
Spock managed to hide his surprise.
"My crewman is dead. We are invited here and then we're attacked and made prisoners - I want to know what is going on" Kirk's anger was rising.
There was an explosion nearby, smoke poured past the door. A Velosian in torn clothing half staggered towards Lishen. He had visible flash burns down one side of his face and arms.
"The rebels, they're here" he gasped.
TIMEOUT
TIMEIN
I can see the makeup job and the torn wardrobe as well as I can see Argus’s matte painting. I just want to say everybody here is doing a great job of capturing the flavor of an episode of TOS. Not a particularly good episode, but that’s half the fun.
TIMEIN
14 - INT. VELOSIAN HOTEL ROOM (OPTICAL)
Two bright green energy beams split the air from out in the corridor. Lishen and the wounded Velosian let out blood curdling screams as they both disintegrate. Before Kirk can rush out into the corridor to see what's up, two new Velosians, brandishing some very nasty looking energy pistols march in and take positions to either side of the door. They are immediately followed by one big, burly mother of a Velosian; clearly, the guy in charge.
ROSHAN
Welcome to Velos III, Captain Kirk.
FADE TO BLACK
END OF ACT I
Two bright green energy beams split the air from out in the corridor. Lishen and the wounded Velosian let out blood curdling screams as they both disintegrate. Before Kirk can rush out into the corridor to see what's up, two new Velosians, brandishing some very nasty looking energy pistols march in and take positions to either side of the door. They are immediately followed by one big, burly mother of a Velosian; clearly, the guy in charge.
ROSHAN
Welcome to Velos III, Captain Kirk.
FADE TO BLACK
END OF ACT I
TIMEOUT
D’oh! We have a Veros/Velos confusion. It’s “Veros” in the first post of the thread. I’m the idiot who started calling it “Velos.” I wish I could go back and edit my mistakes, but I guess the posts become set in stone after a certain period of time.
The correct name of the planet is Veros.
TIMEIN
A beautiful young woman spoke up.
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captrek let out a sigh. That’s a drink. No, it’s not in the drinking game, it just makes me feel like I really need a drink. He took another shot. For the record, I do have a girlfriend, but she works the graveyard shift, and that’s why I’m watching Star Trek at two in the morning with only a bottle of bourbon for company. No, really.
TIMEOUT
Let’s do Lt. Maddock a favor and have a few more commercials before we return to the show. I get the feeling he’s not going to last very long after the break is over.
TIMEIN
D’oh! We have a Veros/Velos confusion. It’s “Veros” in the first post of the thread. I’m the idiot who started calling it “Velos.” I wish I could go back and edit my mistakes, but I guess the posts become set in stone after a certain period of time.
The correct name of the planet is Veros.
TIMEIN
A beautiful young woman spoke up.
“Are you looking for some hot action?” she asked. “Do you want to meet exciting local singles? Call 1-900-HOT-CHAT. You can talk to exciting people right in your area. Let’s face it, you’re watching Star Trek on Spike at two o’clock in the morning, so it’s a good bet you’re lonely and desperate enough to think there just might be something here for you and pay $2.99 per minute to find out. So call now. I’m waiting for your call.”
captrek let out a sigh. That’s a drink. No, it’s not in the drinking game, it just makes me feel like I really need a drink. He took another shot. For the record, I do have a girlfriend, but she works the graveyard shift, and that’s why I’m watching Star Trek at two in the morning with only a bottle of bourbon for company. No, really.
TIMEOUT
Let’s do Lt. Maddock a favor and have a few more commercials before we return to the show. I get the feeling he’s not going to last very long after the break is over.
TIMEIN
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*** The screen goes blank. Argus checks the other channels. All static. Argus slaps his forehead, remembering that all non-digital TV broadcasts in the US are supposed to stop today. Glad that he used that government coupon, he quickly installs his converter box.***
*** The screen goes blank. Argus checks the other channels. All static. Argus slaps his forehead, remembering that all non-digital TV broadcasts in the US are supposed to stop today. Glad that he used that government coupon, he quickly installs his converter box.***
... just in time to see the end of the preview of the Voyager episode on next:
Janeway turns to Seven saying: "The Borg Queen's taken all the coffee - I'm not going to stand by and let that happen!"
And now the next act of Star Trek starts.....
Janeway turns to Seven saying: "The Borg Queen's taken all the coffee - I'm not going to stand by and let that happen!"
And now the next act of Star Trek starts.....
Roshan instantly fired his energy weapon at Maddock, disintegrating him. He then turned the weapon on Daniels corpse and destroyed that too.
"As you can see" said Roshan, "I have a zero-tolerance policy for the color red".
Kirk fumed, helpless whilst the Verosians guns were trained on him.
"I expect you are wondering what is going on?" mused Roshan. "I am the leaer of the People's Nomenclature Society, a group determined to rename this world as Veros! Its true name, forged in the dawn of our civilization and corrupted by our feeble government's lackys to - ugh - ''Velos''" - he spat the final word as if it was causing stomach pains just to mouth it.
"But you just called it Velos" said Kirk.
"See!! See how pervasive their tainted language is! See how necessary the struggle of the PNS is!"
"As you can see" said Roshan, "I have a zero-tolerance policy for the color red".
Kirk fumed, helpless whilst the Verosians guns were trained on him.
"I expect you are wondering what is going on?" mused Roshan. "I am the leaer of the People's Nomenclature Society, a group determined to rename this world as Veros! Its true name, forged in the dawn of our civilization and corrupted by our feeble government's lackys to - ugh - ''Velos''" - he spat the final word as if it was causing stomach pains just to mouth it.
"But you just called it Velos" said Kirk.
"See!! See how pervasive their tainted language is! See how necessary the struggle of the PNS is!"
Kirk said, "We came to this planet in peace, and you have killed two of my men for no reason."
"And we will kill more of if the government does not cooperate," said Roshan. He turned to his companions. "Transport our hostages to the holding cell above the volcano's caldera."
"And we will kill more of if the government does not cooperate," said Roshan. He turned to his companions. "Transport our hostages to the holding cell above the volcano's caldera."
TIMEOUT
But captrek, I spent ages thinking that up....
END TIMEOUT
The red-alert sirens were sounding on the bridge of the Enterprise. Sulu whiped the sweat from his brow as he sat in the Captain's chair. The shift had changed just after the landing party had left...
"M'Ress, any luck breaking through the interference?" asked Sulu.
"No sirrrrrrrr" she replied.
"Arex - what's our status?"
"Orbit still decaying sir," said Arex "projecting impact on the moon's surface in three hours, 27 minutes".
Cut to an exterior shot of the Enterprise above the moon's surface. This is one of the re-mastered episodes, so the moon is nicely textured and barren looking.
But captrek, I spent ages thinking that up....
END TIMEOUT
The red-alert sirens were sounding on the bridge of the Enterprise. Sulu whiped the sweat from his brow as he sat in the Captain's chair. The shift had changed just after the landing party had left...
"M'Ress, any luck breaking through the interference?" asked Sulu.
"No sirrrrrrrr" she replied.
"Arex - what's our status?"
"Orbit still decaying sir," said Arex "projecting impact on the moon's surface in three hours, 27 minutes".
Cut to an exterior shot of the Enterprise above the moon's surface. This is one of the re-mastered episodes, so the moon is nicely textured and barren looking.
M’Ress and Arex remastered? Kick ass! I want to see that!
Yes - it would have been great if they could have appeared in the remastered S3 (as long as they weren't replacing one of the original cast or extras). Even if it was just in the background of a corridor shot
Mr. Scott glanced over from his engineering console. “You can stop yer sweatin’ now, Mr. Sulu. I’ll just use this transporter formula that Spock Prime taught me. Energizing...”
And the moon was safely beamed away.
“Mr. Scott,” asked Sulu, somewhat confused. “The Velosian — excuse me, Verosian — moon. Where is it?”
“In Admiral Archer’s swimming pool,” smirked Scotty.
And the moon was safely beamed away.
“Mr. Scott,” asked Sulu, somewhat confused. “The Velosian — excuse me, Verosian — moon. Where is it?”
“In Admiral Archer’s swimming pool,” smirked Scotty.
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