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Star Trek The Next Generation Remember Us?

Admiral_Young

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I've posted a version of the following story here years ago but I just finished revising it and there have been a lot of new people that have joined the BBS who might not have read that piece. This is something that I wrote for my Grade 11 creative writing contest and helped win my first and so far only writing award. This version is drastically different from the original version which was wrote in 1998 and did not contain material from "Star Trek First Contact" and "Star Trek Voyager" regarding the Borg. So without further preamble here is "Remember Us?"


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A Star Trek The Next Generation Short Story Written By Adam C. Young
Based on Best of Both Worlds Parts 1 and 2 Written by Michael Piller
Based on Material Depicted in Star Trek First Contact Written By Ron Moore and Brennan Braga
Based on Material Depicted in Star Trek Voyager Created by Rick Berman, Jeri Taylor, and Michael Piller
Based on Star Trek Created by Gene Roddenberry
Final Draft

To: Rear Admiral Norah Satie, Starfleet Command
San Francisco, California
Earth
Sol System
Stardate: 44001.8
Earth Calendar Date Jan 14, 2367

From: Lt. Commander Deanna Troi
Ship’s Counselor USS Enterprise NCC 1701-D

Ship’s Counselor’s Report: Re Mental Status of Captain Jean Luc Picard

I have spent the last two weeks conducting extensive mental analysis and rehabilitation with Captain Picard who continues to show no overt signs of being effective by his recent traumatic experience with the Borg Collective. While the physical scars have nearly healed themselves, his mental ones still give me great concern. In our sessions the Captain continues to be abrasive but cooperative. My empathic abilities tell me that he is deeply affected by what the Borg did to him but is not yet ready to speak about it openly on an emotional level and that will take time. He has given me detailed descriptions of what happened to him physically though and I’ve attached that report in addition to his own reports filed on the incident last week. It is my opinion that time away from the ship and crew will do the Captain some good but he hasn’t voiced any desire to leave the Enterprise and has delved into the ship’s repairs and upgrades here at McKinley Station. I do not believe that his experience with the Borg will affect his ability to command the Enterprise however I am concerned that prolonged self isolation will lead to a complete breakdown will occur if he continues to avoid this subject.


Stardate 43989.1

Captain Jean-Luc Picard remembered the last time he had felt this much fear. It had been back at Starbase Earlheart after graduation at Starfleet Academy. He’d been playing domjot with friends and got into a fight with three Nausicaans that resulted in them stabbing him through the heart which later required him to be fitted with an artificial heart. A sense of that fear crept up inside of him as four mechanically enhanced Borg drones escorted him down an eerie, dark corridor. Jean-Luc took a few moments to observe his surroundings. It was nearly pitch black with only a little lighting. Regeneration alcoves were lined on either bulkhead with glowing green and yellow energy readings on their vital status monitors. There was also the absence of any kind of odor that surprised Picard, he’d never been aboard an odorless ship before. In his experience of conducting and participating in away missions aboard exotic planets and starships there was always the smell of the place he was in. That there wasn’t such a thing onboard this vessel unnerved him all the more. Everything on board the monstrous cubed vessel seemed cold and sterile. They continued marching down the corridor, boot prints clanking against the grated metallic deck plating. The corridor came to a sudden end and Picard gasped as a large—very large—chamber was revealed.

Its vastness took Picard’s breath away. He looked around in all directions and saw nothing but Borg. Decks upon decks of them, there must have been hundreds of thousands if not more. This was the epicenter of the massive ship, the place where central communications took place among the collective consciousness. The uncomfortable silence ceased as suddenly the eerie, mechanical voice of perhaps millions of Borg began to address him. They spoke as one.

“Captain Jean-Luc Picard. You lead strongest ship
in the Federation Starfleet. You speak for your
people.” the Borg announced

Jean-Luc stood in his uniform quite confused by their statement as he did during their earlier communication to him on board the Enterprise. Their sudden interest in him personally was unfounded from previous encounters. It was extremely unusual for the Borg any sort of interest towards a single person. It wasn’t what they had come to understand about their nature. Was it possible that in the year and a half since Q had introduced them to the Borg they had changed their tactics? Picard doubted it. Their sole agenda was the assimilation of entire species…but this was indeed strange. He needed more information from them. He chose to forsake caution and go with a direct approach, the chances were high he would be assimilated anyway.

“I have nothing to say to you and will resist
you with every last ounce of strength.”

“Strength is irrelevant. Resistance is futile. We
wish to improve ourselves. We will add your
biological and technological distinctiveness to
our own. Your cultures will adopt to service us.”

Well that was as useless as he thought it would be, but it proved that they are still interested in assimilation. It would seem that they wanted to use him as a type of liaison. His fear increased as he realized the genius of their plan.

“Impossible. My culture and those I represent are based
on freedom and self determination.”

“Freedom is irrelevant. Self determination is irrelevant. You
must comply.”

There was only one obvious question left to ask them, a question he was really dreading but couldn’t avoid anymore.

“What is it you wish of me?”

“Your archaic cultures are authority driven. To
facilitate our introduction into your societies
it has been decided that a human voice will
speak for us in all communications. You have
been chosen to be that voice.” Answered the Borg

A chill shivered down Jean-Luc’s spine as he finally grasped the Borg’s actions and intentions with him. The four Borg escorts then grabbed his elbow and forced him away from the vast chamber and back down the corridor where they had come from. It was an ingenious strategy, one that would work. Their plan was not just to assimilate him but all of his Starfleet operations knowledge as well. Years of security codes, fleet schematics, tactical weaknesses and strengths of starships, combat tactics of many of his fellow captains, they would use it all to disable or destroy the fleet. Not only was Captain Jean-Luc Picard scared, he was angry and helpless.

The Borg drones led him through several corridors until they reached a room that resembled Doctor Frankenstein’s laboratory only considerably more gothic and mechanical looking. It was dark like the rest of the ship. Situated in the middle of the room was a long silver metallic surgical table. Sharp looking needle devices hung above the table in a complex apparatus that looked menacing as anything Picard had ever seen before. A few meters above the table was a console that had scrolling Borg hieroglyphs, it looked like some kind of status reader. Before Jean-Luc could react, a drone lifted his arm and injected tiny thin black nanites into his bloodstream, piercing his neck. If you were to examine them under a microscope these mechanical creatures would resemble microscopic spiders.

Jean-Luc gasped and reached upwards for his neck as he felt his body quickly convulse before becoming numb. He felt like he was choking violently but he wasn’t. Veins grew extremely visible all across his body as it seemed like it would burst with internal pressure. The tiny devices inside of his body quickly swarmed through his bloodstream and clamped onto his cells beginning the process of assimilation. Across his face black smudge began to form, as it did along his arm. On the left side of his face a small spider-like device pierced his cheek and extruded outwards clamping on to his skin and extended its micronized pincers into his skin. Jean-Luc Picard ceased moving after several minutes of this process and dropped to his sides, motionless as the Borg dragged him up and onto the table. Everything in his mind started to become dark and before he lost consciousness Jean-Luc Picard managed one final scream that no one could hear.

His eyes were wide open but there was no evidence of surface awareness in them. Still in the crimson and black shoulder striped Starfleet uniform, Picard was attached to an alcove. Right now the device was amplifying the assimilation process and monitoring his biorhythms He was also essentially asleep with the rest of the Collective and would receive prior modification when the cycle was complete. The tiny nanites were clamped on to his blood cells and converting them with Borg programming data. They were also wiring mechanical “software” into his body so that the drones could attach the “hardware” onto it later on. The collective hive mind was also in the process of extracting Picard’s Starfleet knowledge from him already but encountering significant resistance from him. It wouldn’t matter he would break and they would get what they wanted. Resistance was futile. They also were writing his new personality and identity, what he would be known while serving as their speaker to humanity. Picard…or what was left of Picard was lost in his own mind. A mind that was being overwhelmed by the multitude of so many thousands of voices, they were transferring data to each other and to a central location, and a common thread was repeated over and over again. One that Picard would have interrupted if he was conscience as a name, that name was spoken to him in a whisper, “Locutus”.
Jean-Luc Picard was becoming nothing but a faint memory. The entity that now assumed his form was aware of nothing else but the constant chatter inside of his mind. While other beings might perceive this as being somewhat chaotic, the being formerly known as Jean-Luc Picard had a sense of calm about them. He had now being stripped of his uniform and was wearing a black body suit that had wires and cables along with Borg machinery on it. On his left cheek a face plate had been attached, an external data port that could be manually upgraded by a drone or receive upgrades while in the alcove. He had emerged from the alcove and been given instructions to report to an observation port. The USS Enterprise NCC 1701-D was on approach and preparing to attack them or at least attack had been anticipated. Transporter detected. Drones escorted Locutus down the corridor and he was about to turn a corner when he heard a voice in his direction that seemed vaguely familiar.

“Jean-Luc!”

Locutus stood still and observed what was happening. There were intruders. Two human Starfleet officers and one Klingon. Officers from the Starfleet ship. Through a swift command through the collective Locutus ordered intervention and protection. He quickly analyzed that they had come to find out what had happened to the human Picard. Drones marched single file towards them and were fired upon by their phasers. The first and second drone fell. Locutus heard retrieval orders being given now. Those Borg would be taken and repaired or salvaged for their parts and knowledge reassimlated back into the collective. The third drone had adapted and the Starfleet officers noted it as the personal shielding device was erected around the drone and absorbed the phaser blasts. The Klingon foolishly decided to charge it and was immediately thrown backwards by the discharge. Locutus once again detected the matter/anti-matter conversion activity, ordered the shields back up but observed as the three officers were beamed back to their vessel. Locutus received reports that the ship was departing and he ordered pursuit.

The Starfleet officers managed to inflict minimal damage as well as temporally bring them out of warp speed. External sensors detected a high energy build up originating from Enterprise’s main deflector dish. Locutus was standing in an observation port viewing the other ship. From knowledge extracted from Picard he knew that the ship planned to use the dish as a modified weapon, it would prove futile as the Borg adapted to it using that knowledge. He provided suitable measures knowing of the cube’s defenses to adapt to the attack. The collective gave orders to hail Enterprise, Locutus was to confront Picard’s shipmates. The hive mind was curious to see their reactions. A moment paused and the viewscreen was activated displaying the great ship’s bridge. Locutus stepped forward to address the bridge crew.

“I am Locutus of Borg. Resistance is futile. Your life
as it has been is now over. From this point forward
you will service us.”

There were looks of shock among the bridge crew as they saw that their captain had been turned into a Borg, they exchanged quick glances with each other before Commander William T. Riker stood with a determined look on his face and gave the only order Locutus knew he would…

“Mr. Worf…fire.”
 
Locutus remained unconcerned as he watched the ship unleash a colossal amount of energy towards the lower section of the cube. It impacted the ship but the bubble shaped deflector shield absorbed the blast that would have knocked out or even destroyed any other ship. The collective reported no other damage as Locutus continued his observations, the bridge crew of the Enterprise exchanged banter on why the weapon had no effect on the Borg. Locutus decided to explain it to them.

“The knowledge and experience of the human Picard is apart
of us now. It has prepared us for all possible courses of
of action. Your resistance is hopeless…number one.”

The communication was terminated as Locutus’s chilling words affected the first officer of the Federation flagship. Orders were sent to resume their course to sector-zero-zero-one as the Borg cube left the powerful Starfleet vessel alone, and crippled.

Jean-Luc Picard was conscience, ever so slightly, as he fought valiantly as he felt his humanity and individuality slipping away. He was lying on a metallic surgical table as the Borg underwent further enhancement and augmentation of his body. Drones brought a metallic arm that they slipped on Picard’s as he raised it. Tiny injection tubes pierced Locutus’s skin through the bodysuit sending another swarm of nanites into his bloodstream. This was to ensure the arm gauntlet was fused properly and couldn’t be easily removed. Overhead a needle descended downward towards Locutus’s left eye while another inserted into the data port in his faceplate. A single tear streamed down his cheek as the needle pierced his eye, the last display of defiance from Jean-Luc Picard before the assimilation process was complete.

Sometime later the Borg cube entered the star system designated by the Federation as Wolf 359 as proximity sensors detected several dozen Starfleet vessels on an intercept course outside of the system as they were passing through. The first such vessel though had already managed to approach them, Locutus identified it as the USS Saratoga NCC 31911 currently commanded by Captain Storil, a Vulcan.

“Vessel identified. USS Saratoga NCC 31911 Miranda
class, minimal weapons and defense technology.” The Collective
stated aloud

Locutus saw the ship entered the viewing grid on the screen along with its name hovering above it. He accessed the tactical data on the vessel and transmitted it to the collective. Rapid images of starship schematics, codes, modulation frequencies, and combat strategies flashed briefly. He addressed the vessel as the cube answered its hail. He saw that the Vulcan Captain, Storil recognized him instantly as did his dark skinned human first officer standing next to him.

“Picard…” he uttered while interlacing his fingers

“I am Locutus of Borg. You will lower your shields and
disarm your weapons and escort us to sector zero-
zero-one where we will begin to add your biological
and technological data to our own. You will comply,
resistance is futile.”

“Go to hell!” spat out the first officer Sisko.

“Open fire on the Borg cube. Full spread, all
weapons.” ordered Storil

The streak of red energy struck the Borg ship with no effect. Volley after volley continued to hit points across the cube’s hall along with phaser strikes powerful enough to scorch a city. Locutus gave counter orders, pin point weapons discharge from the cube slammed against Saratoga’s warp nacelles, all four of them. They also fired on the main bridge and engineering sections of the ship. In less than fifteen minutes the ship had been left dead in space. Locutus watched as escape pods and shuttles scurried from the destroyed vessel and ignored them, they weren’t a threat. He ordered the collective to resume course. This would be the result of their engagements with the rest of the fleet they encountered, all 38 other ships they would engage in the next hour. The Battle of Wolf 359 was a disaster for Starfleet, a monumental historical event that when final tabulations were calculated 12,000 lives would be lost along with a third of their fleet. Deep inside Locutus, trapped within the prison of his own mind, Jean-Luc Picard watched with horror what he was doing but before he could manage to scream he was pushed back down and locked away by the overwhelming force of the collective.

Sometime after Wolf 359 and after some more modifications and upgrades Locutus was once more escorted to the observation port where the view screen once again displayed the USS Enterprise. The ship received a hail and Locutus answered it. Across from him sat Captain William T. Riker in the command chair on the ship’s battle bridge.

“Locutus of Borg, this is Captain William T. Riker
of the USS Enterprise.”

“You may speak.”

“We wish to end the hostilities.”

“Then you must unconditionally surrender.”

“We are prepared to meet your terms.”

Locutus paused for a moment to process this information. Knowing Riker as he did that this was a distraction of some sort. It was more likely that he was plotting some kind of surprise tactical maneuver against the collective. The collective concurred with his analyses.

“It is unlikely that you are prepared to
discuss terms. It is more than like that
this an attempt at deception.”

“Come now Locutus, if Picard’s knowledge
and experience is part of you, then you
know you that I’ve never lied to him…in
fact you should implicitly trust me, is that
not so?” asked Riker

Locutus aborbed Riker’s words matched with data that Picard had possessed on the first officer’s character. He was forced to agree as was the collective.

“Picard implicitly trusted you.” he replied in a near whisper

“The trust me now. Meet with me to discuss terms.”

Locutus felt a strange sense of conflict within him. His mind conversed with the collective which counseled him on his next course of action, he once again heard that weird feminine voice in his head with the others that whispered his name “Locutus. You are of us.” They reinforced their agendas and assured Locutus that he was functioning within correct parameters. The brief doubt passed.

“Discussion is irrelevant. There are no terms. You
will disarm all weapons and escort us to sector
zero, zero one where we will begin the assimilation
of your culture and technology.”

The transmission was cut abruptly and the Borg worked to reestablish them and after a few minutes communications were restored. Riker appeared again.

“We would like time to prepare our people for
assimilation.”

“Preparation is irrelevant. Your people will be
assimilated as easily as Picard has been.”

“Does it involve any needles? Because I just hate
needles.” retorted Riker with a coy smile

“Your attempts at delay will not be successful Number
One. We will proceed to Earth and if you attempt to
intervene we will destroy you.”

“Take your best shot Locutus, because we’re about to
intervene!” declared Riker as the transmission ended
 
Gazing at the viewscreen it showed the starship separating suddenly. This was not surprising either as this tactic was a part of Locutus’s knowledge now as well. The larger saucer section separated while the secondary hull that housed the battle bridge remained. It was the more powerful of the two sections as it contained warp drive, forward and aft torpedo launchers, and phaser arrays. Locutus ordered weapons discharge on the secondary hull, ignoring the saucer section despite its forward phaser array, it was not a threat. Suddenly something totally unexpected occurred as the saucer began emitting a dazzling display of anti-matter pellets, momentarily distracting Locutus and the collective. Locutus began analyzing the puzzling move and forming countermeasures. He ordered a cease fire on the secondary hull and redirected their focus on the primary saucer section; too distracted to notice a small shuttle craft moving slowly towards the cube masked by the anti-matter spread.


Locutus heard the intruder alarm as transport was detected, there had been another security breach. Internal sensors had detected two Starfleet officers. Bio-signs indicated the Klingon again along with the artificial life form named Data. Unexpected strategy and Locutus was not able to recommend a counter strategy. The two officers materialized only a few meters away from him but before he could react they fired wide spread phaser fire struck down drones that moved to intercept them. Both officers set their phasers for a wide dispersal beam to disable his personal shield leaving him exposed and vulnerable. Taking advantage, one of the officers, the Klingon, rushed Locutus tackling him to the deck. A brief struggled occurred between both of them when the artificial life form injected Locutus with a hypospray causing him to lose consciousness.

Flashing his eyes open abruptly, Locutus saw a human female with long reddish hair standing over him wearing a blue Starfleet uniform with a blue lab coat. He recognized her instantly.

“Beverly. Crusher. Doctor.”

“Yes…don’t try to move…” she said a hand on his shoulder

Locutus observed his surroundings and saw he was onboard the Enterprise. He was having difficulty establishing a connection with the collective. The distance apart was disrupting the flow of data and connectivity. He sat up ram rod straight.

“I am…onboard the Enterprise.

Riker was standing on Crusher’s right, his left and replied to his statement.

“That’s right.”

“A futile maneuver.”

Both Riker and Crusher reacted to his statement. Locutus surmised that they possibly assumed because he was separated from the Borg ship he would once again be Picard. An incorrect assumption, but they were human afterall. Indeed while the connection wasn’t as strong he could still hear the collective in his mind, reaching out to him, assuring him. His left gauntlet enhancement began spinning around as it scanned sickbay.

“Locutus…” started Riker

“Incorrect strategy Number One…to risk
your ship and crew to save one man…Picard
would never have approved.”

“Security to sickbay.” ordered Crusher

“You underestimate us to believe that this…
abduction would be of any concern.”

The Klingon appeared along with two security officers with their phasers armed and raised at Locutus. Seeing them approach he reacts.

“There is no need for apprehension…I intend no
harm.”

While the officers conversed with one another Locutus ignored their irrelevant ramblings which he could hear and attempted to reinforce his link with the collective, which was starting to weaken; possible interference from Enterprise or perhaps Picard himself. It was as if a door had been opened and Picard was trying to kick it down and peer through.

“No harm…” he repeated again but no one seemed to catch the glitch

“I will continue...aboard your ship…for the Borg. As they
continue without further diversion to sector zero zero
one where they will force your unconditional surrender.”

Locutus got up and started to scan the consoles and stations in the room with his arm. Once he completed he moved towards the large Klingon, Worf, who tensed ever so slightly as he scanned him with his arm scanner.

“Worf. Klingon species. A warrior race. You
too will be assimilated.”

A defiant almost disgusted look came across Worf’s face as he snorted and replied,

“The Klingon Empire will never yield!”

“Why do you resist? We only wish to raise the
quality of life for all species.”

“I like my species the way it is.” answered Worf

“A narrow vision. You will become one with the Borg. You
will all become one with the Borg.”

Riker, Crusher, and the android Data returned from their conversation. Locutus studied the android and stated,

“The android, Data, primitive artificial
organism…you will be obsolete in the
New Order.”

Locutus raised his arm and started to scan Data with it but he suddenly lost consciousness. Panic engulfed him as he struggled to establish connection with the collective. Sub-routines were operating at less than peak effectiveness.




More than likely his systems were being interfered with considerably. There was another unusual event occurring. He could detect the feint presence of Picard struggling to the surface once again. He was having difficulty evading the other mind and making contact with the collective. Locutus sensed yet another presence, this must be the Betazoid Troi attempting to make contact with Picard. His weakening link with the collective allowed this invasion of his systems and he suddenly heard himself say

“Sleep…”


Jean-Luc Picard began to fight harder than he had in his life. It was like waking up from a long term comatose state, those first few glimpses of awareness. He wasn’t free yet by any means, he could still feel the mind clamp of Locutus threatening to close off his connection again. Picard in feint flashes could see his crew working on the outside of his body to free him. He was partially aware of Deanna’s voice calling to him. The collective was finally breaking down and Picard was emerging. He decided it was time to break down these walls, using what did remain of his link to the Borg to help free him. He was aware that the Enterprise didn’t have much time left.

“Sleep Data.” Picard said.

Everything seemed to happen fast then…the Borg attempted one last time to reestablish control over him but because of the time separated from them and lack of upgrades Locutus faded away and Picard restored; Data’s intervention worked! The connection was finally broken! Jean-Luc’s body began to shake violently as he rocked back and forth for a few moments and in his mind he could hear that female voice sharp and cold shriek his name one last time “LOCUTUS! NOOOOOOO!” Then Jean-Luc opened his eyes, gazed upwards from his Borg enhanced arm that was holding Data’s and he smiled to his crew. Never before had Picard seen a more welcomed sight or felt more close to these people.

“Life signs are stable…the DNA around the
microcircuit fiber implants is returning to
normal...” Beverly reported

“How do you feel?” asked Deanna

Jean-Luc was exhausted, and felt a migraine coming on. Truthfully though despite what trauma he had just been through he was just really happy to be back. Smiling he said,

“Almost human…with just a bit of a headache.”

“We’ll get you to sickbay.” said Beverly helping him out of the chamber
and reported to Captain Riker that they wouldn’t have any trouble
removing any of the implants.

Riker nodded and asked Picard

“How much do you remember?”


Jean-Luc’s smile fell for a few seconds as flashes of Wolf 359 ran through his head, all of those people gone and by his hand…this would be with him for the rest of his life.

“Everything. Including some brilliant unorthodox
strategy from a former first officer of mine.”

The two captains shared a knowing look with one another but Jean-Luc Picard would always be aware of the events of the last six days. He would always remember…

To Rear Admiral Norah Satie
Starfleet Command
San Francisco, California
Earth
Sol System
Stardate 44011.5
Earth Calendar Date: January 17, 2367

From: Lt. Commander Deanna Troi
Ship’s Counselor USS Enterprise NCC 1701-D


Ship’s Counselor Report Re: Mental Status of Captain Jean-Luc Picard

An unexpected development occurred during our session this morning in which Captain Picard revealed to me in detail the full extent of his experience as Locutus. I have attached the full report with this message and hope that it will help you and Starfleet Command further understand the process of assimilation and the extent of which it effects a subject. While the Captain has started to be more open in his iteration of his experience I still maintain that this will be with him for a long while but will not effect his ability to command a starship or judgment. He has expressed great regret and feels guilty regarding his part in the Battle of Wolf 359. I have explained that It was not his fault and that no one will blame him for what Locutus did but he disagrees with me. Recently he has expressed a desire to return to his home town of Labarre, France. This is another unusual decision from the Captain but understandable given his current emotional state. I would have preferred another destination but perhaps this will be helpful in his recovery. I will continue to send reports to Command regarding the Captain’s health and mental state as required per Starfleet orders.


THE END
 
So almost 70 views and no one wants to let me know their thoughts? I'll take anything you've got even if it is criticism.
 
Sorry to keep you waiting on this, Adam.

I think the concept is sound and solid, though I think there could be some more work on the execution of it. You have a lot of description of the actions of Picard/Locutus from his perspective, but I think the far more interesting stuff is what's happening inside his head. As he gets assimilated, what happens to his mind? We've seen some of the process already in the episode itself, so why not delve deeper into the psychology? Something that would help is if you came up with some sort of overarching metaphor for Picard as a Borg. Maybe you could say it was like being trapped behind a glass wall as he watches events unfold; maybe he can still see out through his eyes but be powerless to do anything about it.

Another angle of this: I think we could see Picard undergo a sort of psychological torture as the Borg extract his knowledge and information. That could happen in his head, too. An interrogation session with the Borg Queen? That would be sweet.

I also think I'd lose the frame device of Troi's report to Starfleet. It doesn't really add much. There were some minor typos and wrong words used here and there, but nothing a quick proofread wouldn't cure.

You've got the beginnings of a good short story here. Keep working on it.
 
Thanks for your comments Steven...Dan has suggested that I turn this into a novel although I'm not sure I would have enough material to expand it, but you're suggestions to delve into the pyschological aspects is interesting. My only problem with that is that we really what goes on in a persons mind after assimilation. I know that "Star Trek Voyager" implicated a type of unimatrix construct but I don't think that was created until much later. I agree with you regarding the Deanna Troi stuff, she wasn't in the original story...but I wanted something to frame the story with rather than just go right into the thick of things.

Regarding the Borg Queen, I really was tempted to include her more in the story but fought the urge due to the fact that Jean-Luc doesn't remember her presence at all until he physically meets her in "Star Trek First Contact" I wanted to honor that part of continuity in the story. I suppose that if I attempted a sequel or expanded this I could include Jean-Luc remember more of his "sessions" with the Queen. That revelation in First Contact has always intrigued me. I do give the reader a kind of sense of what Picard is going through during the Battle of Wolf 359 and how the Borg uses his information. I'll have to think about how to use more of it maybe. Thanks again for the comments.
 
I was hoping for some more feedback than just one person, especially after so many views. Any thoughts would be greatly appreciated. Including criticism.
 
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