Can you point out some more of the holes? Just to help me.
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Oh, and do you believe the Romulan theory?
It is supported by two things. The first, her crying when at the funeral of Captain Spock. The second, the fact that Leonard Nimoy and William Shatner filming a scene referring to Saavik where Spock says, "She's half Romulan, you know, Jim."
That was cut fro, the final TWoK.
Whether Saavik was half-Vulcan/half-Romulan or full-Vulcan, she was raised on Vulcan as a Vulcan, just as Spock was. Even as a full-Vulcan, I had no problem with her crying. Whether they admit it or not, Vulcans -DO- have emotions.
But you said Barex is full-Romulan, and I took it as being implied that he was born/raise in the Romulan Empire and served in the Romulan military on cross-duty assignment to Star Fleet, much like Riker served (briefly) on a Klingon ship. But let's say that he was somehow adopted by a Vulcan family and raised on Vulcan, that doesn't change the fact that he is a Romulan and therefore should NOT have any mind-meld abilities. However, comma, that would imply that he is serving under false-pretenses as a Vulcan but in fact is not. Star Fleet would not, at this point in history, allow a Romulan, even one raised on Vulcan, to serve. And he'd never pass the physical as a Vulcan. Yes, Saavik got away with it, but she was half-Vulcan and also had Spock vouch for her (in one of the books, he put his reputation on the line to get her into the Academy). I might buy that Barex was able to learn, after a fashion, how to do the neck pinch thing. EDIT: In the dialog, Barex openly admits to being a Romulan.
As to plot holes ... there's too many things that happen without explanation, such as Zeta capturing Jansen or even that Zeta controls the K-computer, and the whole mental flashback thing was totally confusing as to what was happening. A lot of that had to do with the limitations you put upon yourself by writing in script-format. You also limited yourself by restricting your cast to the eight senior staff. In a real military setting, the neither the Captain nor the XO would not beam down to a potential combat zone, but rather they'd have a mid-tier officer in charge. I can forgive this, however, because this policy was set as canon in TOS and TNG (sigh).
But you said Barex is full-Romulan, and I took it as being implied that he was born/raise in the Romulan Empire and served in the Romulan military on cross-duty assignment to Star Fleet, much like Riker served (briefly) on a Klingon ship. But let's say that he was somehow adopted by a Vulcan family and raised on Vulcan, that doesn't change the fact that he is a Romulan and therefore should NOT have any mind-meld abilities. However, comma, that would imply that he is serving under false-pretenses as a Vulcan but in fact is not. Star Fleet would not, at this point in history, allow a Romulan, even one raised on Vulcan, to serve. And he'd never pass the physical as a Vulcan. Yes, Saavik got away with it, but she was half-Vulcan and also had Spock vouch for her (in one of the books, he put his reputation on the line to get her into the Academy). I might buy that Barex was able to learn, after a fashion, how to do the neck pinch thing. EDIT: In the dialog, Barex openly admits to being a Romulan.
As to plot holes ... there's too many things that happen without explanation, such as Zeta capturing Jansen or even that Zeta controls the K-computer, and the whole mental flashback thing was totally confusing as to what was happening. A lot of that had to do with the limitations you put upon yourself by writing in script-format. You also limited yourself by restricting your cast to the eight senior staff. In a real military setting, the neither the Captain nor the XO would not beam down to a potential combat zone, but rather they'd have a mid-tier officer in charge. I can forgive this, however, because this policy was set as canon in TOS and TNG (sigh).
Jansen was only the away team that was sent down.
Zeta did not capture Barex. He captured the full team (the away team was Vance, Jansen, ane Barex).
As to Commander Barex being in Star Fleet, he had Admiral Jansen (mentioned at the end) vouch for him.
Admiral Jansen led the taskforce (as a Captain) to save Barex and saw how well he adapted. Henry Jansen (not to be confused with Lee Jansen, the Chief Engineer) thought Barex would make a good officer. He was not raised in the Romulan Empire (though the K Computer comes from Time Traveling 26th Century Romulans who have devices that can see into alternate universes and into the past; one of the possibilites being Barex was raised with the Romulans and becoming a Romulan Captain).
The others are correct.
I am sorry I caused the "Barex is a Romulan" confusion.
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Should say at the beginning:
Jansen was not the only member of the away team sent to Kerelium 3.
And in the second:
Zeta did not just capture Barex. "and Barex."
And by the way...
Why does Zeta threaten Jansen and not Barex? Because Captain Mason knows Admiral Jansen well and would protect his son however he could. Zeta forced that information from Jansen using the K Computer. Instead of a mind meld (like Barex).
Thanks. I will submit shortly and tell all the elite ST: ANA people (those on this thread) my results.
You should read and learn from the experts there before you submit anything to them. Writing is work, and its important to know how a story is structured, and you have to write and rewrite over and over, gaining skill, and your own voice, through dedicated practice. Imagination isn't enough.
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Good idea.
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