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ST: Independence 11 - "Eyes Uncovered"

I too like your take on the Tamarians--and yes, to me, D'Nas felt more sorry for his former Starfleet shipmates than distrust. In his view, they're so caught up in go-go-go that they can't see what's in front of them. Dnoth, you do do excellent character pieces as well as slam bang action. Very well done!
 
Thanks guys, for the complements. I wouldn't mind doing a 'puzzle' story...but first I'd have to think of a good puzzle. ;)

The next scene is in the Elder Council. I decided not to 'translate,' but I think you can get the gist of the conversation.
 
CHAPTER 3

Supplemental
Sumcha at the Table (The Elder Council)
Bashi, Tama

Rays of sunshine lit the council chambers. The walls were made of adobe and adorned by large paintings of scenes in Tamarian mythology. Seven Children of Tama sat around the heavy wooden table: four females, three males. All were of advanced years.

“Raki’s army waits at the gates! His army large; his fires hot,” warned one of the women, Balah.

“Chenza at court. The court of silence!” started J’tah, another council member, “Picard and Dathon at El-Adrel. The trade…the trade of Itah. Ria and Jiri when the hole was dug.”

A wrinkled male, Soora, added, “D’nas…Hito, his ears listening.”

“Kiteo, his eyes closed!” demanded Balah.

Soora observed, “Mira, once the horse was already gone.”

“Kailash, when it rises,” concluded J’tah. “Temarc. The river Temarc, in winter.” She stood, “The covenant of Tama. Ria…Ria at the crossroads.”

*****

D’nas, Zian, and two junior engineers shared a drink around a table overlooking the vista of space. The engineers, Crewman Jackson and Ensign Berep, sometimes worked with the helmsman and science officer and had developed an association. Berep, a Bolian female was a computer specialist and Jackson, a human male from Vega colony, managed the reclamation systems.

“So,” began Berep, “what will you do now, D’nas?”

He shrugged, “It will be the decision of the Sentinel Council.” The exchange officer added, “Though, I hope to be assigned to an explorer ship.”

“I really hope Starfleet will let us do some exploring while we’re out here,” commented Tang.

“There is a void region between, what you call, the Orion Cygnus and Perseus arms about 20 light years from here,” explained D’nas. “It takes some time to transverse.”

“So there isn’t much to see, is what you’re saying?” surmised Jackson.

“Not at all,” replied the Tamarian, “There are many beautiful places to go; many cultures to see.”

“Do Tamarians have something comparable to the Prime Directive?” asked Tang.

He unnaturally made a ‘so-so’ gesture. “We do not hide ourselves from less advanced civilizations as you do. We sometimes offer them assistance and technology that we feel they are responsible enough to have. But we do not impose ourselves on them either.”

“Holy crap,” came from Zian. He pointed across the room. The others turned. Counselor Kimula was sitting on Petty Officer Cheveyo Runningfox’s lap. She was sensually pushing her breasts near his face.

Jackson laughed out loud, “Looks like Runningfox is going to have a good time tonight!”

Berep chuckled, “So that’s what she’s like when she drinks.”

“For awhile, she was interested in Jinal,” remembered the science officer.

D’nas assumed, “Apparently, she’s stopped mourning.”

“No,” corrected Tang, “she’s drunk.”

*****

Karim bin Nadal gave a semi-concerned look as he observed the fondling of his Andorian friend from across the large recreational room. He recently joined a group around the dom-jot table. Among his company was Ensign Lemipil. He leaned over to the acting security chief, “She’s going to regret that in the morning.”

The Zakdorn jested back, “I don’t think Runningfox will.”

The first officer shifted to ‘shop talk’, “I hope you don’t feel…bitter about me asking for a new security chief, Ensign.”

She said genuinely, “Actually sir, I’m relived. I’m the first one to admit, I’m not ready to be a division head. I’m just thankful that Chief Hatora has been helping me out.”

Karim scanned the crowd, “Where is the chief anyway?”

*****

Hatora of J’bel sometimes felt like the grandfather of the boat, not the chief of it. He knew about the party, but had no desire to attend. That was for young people or idiots…often the same thing. He walked casually around the commons of Starfleet Academy. It wasn’t the real thing, of course. His daughter, Latora, often sent him holographic messages. She knew how much he enjoyed his time on Earth…and how proud he was that she made it to the academy.

He smiled as a recreation of his daughter walked toward him. It would be a one-way conversation; but he enjoyed it, none the less. Latora sat on a nearby stone bench. Her hair was long and black. Her eyes were artificially colored violet, a choice he didn’t endorse. She wore the gray cadet uniform with gold shoulders. Latora was a sophomore.

Hatora joined her and said, “Hello, Latora,” which began the program.

The hologram of his daughter looked at him and smiled, “Hello, father. I visited the Night Owl, like you recommended. You’re right, it a great place to get away and study.

My roommate is driving me crazy. She’s a Starfleet brat, but her parents are both command officers. She has such a sense of entitlement. She doesn’t even study because she expects her parents to pull in favors for her to pass. It’s so annoying.”

The Chief of the Boat listened with a grin as his daughter relayed her hopes and complaints.

*****

Folana Lemipil, prompted by alcohol, asked a fateful question, “Commander bin Nadal, what’s your opinion of our chief engineer?”

A curious look crossed Karim’s face, “What do you mean?”

“Well,” she elaborated, “as his superior, are you…concerned at all.”

He looked at the carpet for a long moment. “I see,” he said. Karim made a decision. He wasn’t sure if it was appropriate or not, but he followed through. “There was a time when I wanted him off the ship and out of the uniform. I felt just like you do now. What he did was…inexcusable. Leaving people behind is a cardinal sin in Starfleet.”

She injected, “So you agree that ‘Runsfast’ is a coward!” In her enthusiasm, her voice carried.

A few meters away, Commander Zo’Kama overheard the outburst.

“You’re talking about a senior officer, Ensign,” chided the XO.

“Sorry sir, but I don’t feel comfortable…”

His tone became even, “I understand where you’re coming from, but…”

A disembodied voice interrupted, “Commander bin Nadal, could you report to the bridge, please. The Tamarians are requesting the number of personnel participating in tomorrow’s ceremony.”

Karim tapped his compin, “Alright, bridge. I’ll be there in a minute.” He returned to Lemipil, “We’ll pick this up later.”

She timidly nodded, “Aye sir.”

The first officer walked to the exit and left. Not a second passed after the door shut when Zo’Kama addressed the security chief.

“What did you call Commander Windslow?”

The ensign, too inebriated to sense the reptilian’s animosity, answered, “’Runsfast’…since he ran so quickly from…”

The Arkonian could hear no more. Out of instinct, Zo’Kama insulted the young Zakdorn in the traditional Arkonian way. Her mouth opened and a short jet of liquid squirted out. The substance landed all over Lemipil’s face. The saliva wasn’t harmful, in fact, it had healing properties.

Folana wiped at her face in disgust, “What is this!”

“You will not insult Ethan Windslow or his family!” demanded Zo’Kama.

The liquid courage in Lemipil’s veins caused her discretion to fail. Her wet, gooey face morphed into a picture of rage. The Zakdorn’s fist connected with the doctor’s cheek. The tough scales scuffed up Folana’s knuckles.

The entire room froze as Zo’Kama fell to the deck. No one came to the doctor’s defense. No one aided the Zakdorn, either. Everyone was in shock.

The Arkonian slowly returned to her feet and glared at Lemipil.

The security officer regained her senses too late. She put up her open hands, “Doctor, I’m sorry. I…”

A scaled fist made a quick, right jab that rocked the ensign’s face. She stumbled back and shook it off. Folana’s logic was short lived. She rushed back at Zo’Kama. The two females punched, kicked, and scratched each other for several seconds before people began to realize this shouldn’t be happening.

Cheveyo and Kimula didn’t notice the brawl, as they were necking.

D’nas went to restrain the doctor. Berep and Tang held Lemipil’s arms. The combatants were pulled away, though; they still attempted to kick each other.

Jackson panicked. He found his combadge and uttered, “Captain Aurelia, there’s a problem in Jinal’s

END OF CHAPTER 3
 
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Lot of good stuff in this segment! :) I enjoyed the scene with the Elder Council - trying to decode Tamarian-speak is challenging but kind of fun!

And Hatora viewing his daughter's message was a nice touch too - especially the roommate issues. Very nice character work.

Then we have the main event! Folana v. Zo'Kama in a grudge match! :lol: And Jackson goes and calls the Captain! Not cool at all!!! :eek:
 
All of what TLR said and -I kinda got what the Council was saying. You did a superb job on the dialogue. I've been wondering how you would handle the bizarre speech patterns-you did very well.
 
CJ ... CJ who does not understand Tama. I really didn't. But I like how you incorporate their language. It does sound kinda cool and feels very authentic ... in an alien kind of sense.

I also agree that pretty much everything in this segment was a lot of fun to read. I'm liking this story immensly already.
 
Thank you. Later in the story, I will translate it, but I wanted at least one scene with out it.

To address an earlier post. The scene with D'nas thinking to himself, he doesn't feel deceived by the Federation. What I was trying to imply was that, before the exchange program and during Tamarian negotiations with the Federation, the Federation put their best foot forward (as any power would do). But D'nas has learned that the Federation isn't as nice and shiny as they would have the Tamarians believe. Which is usually the case in the realm of diplomacy.

Again, thanks to all for reading. The next section will be up momentarily.
 
CHAPTER 4

Supplemental
USS Independence, Deck Five
In Orbit of Tama

Sintina strode down the corridor with a groggy face. Her boots were back on, but not her jacket. She was more annoyed at being disturbed than the conflict itself…she wouldn’t let anyone else know that, of course.

The door to the lounge parted for the captain. Needless to say, the party had broken up by then. Most people, including Runningfox and Kimula, had left. Zo’Kama and Folana were still restrained, though calmer. Everyone looked at Sintina like they were teenagers caught with pornography.

Aurelia pointed to the doctor, “You,” then Lemipil, “and you. Follow me.”

The two agitators grimaced and reluctantly left with the captain.

The trio walked in silence. Aurelia didn’t look back at them. Folana was certain the captain was leading them to the brig. Aurelia, however, didn’t take the turn to the turbolift. Neither Zo’Kama or Lemipil spoke, though; it was obvious both had a question.

Aurelia paused at the entrance to the gymnasium. She opened the hatch and gestured the two to go in. She joined them and the door slid shut. The brawlers stood expectantly. The captain showed no emotion and paced a bit.

After a few anxious moments, Aurelia began, “I could give you both a reprimand.” Her voice rose and octave, “Hell, by all rights, I could charge you both with striking an officer and conduct unbecoming.”

The security officer stood at perfect ‘attention.’ The Arkonian was more lax. Wisely, they said nothing.

“But I’m not going to do that.”

They relaxed a bit.

“You two want to fight,” Sintina continued, “fine. This is the place to do it. Fight.”

Folana and Zo’Kama shared a perplexed glance. The Zakdorn regarded Aurelia, “Ma’am?”

“Fight,” she repeated.

“You can’t be serious,” said the doctor.

Aurelia’s response was deadpan, “Yes, I am.”

Lemipil stepped forward and began to explain, “I’m sorry, ma’am. It was my fault…”

“Shut up,” stated Aurelia.

The coarse comment took the two by surprise.

The captain continued, “Save your excuses. I don’t know what it’s about and I don’t care. I can’t make you get along and I won’t try.” She moved forward, pointed at them both, and said with resolve, “But I warn you now, it had best not get in the way of your duties.” She turned for the door, “Computer, once I leave, secure the gym.”

“Acknowledged,” responded the computer.

“You’re just going to lock us in here?” asked the doctor.

Sintina nodded and pointed to a distant corner, “The sparring equipment is in that locker. I work out in the morning at 0600. I’ll get you out then.” Without another word, the captain left.

Lemipil held her head. Her buzz was totally gone. She looked over at the doctor.

Zo’Kama half-mocked, “Do you prefer the red gloves or the black?”

*****

Captain Aurelia found herself, once again, at Jinal’s. It was all but empty. To his credit, Crewman Jackson was helping Pm’ta clean up. She walked up to him, “Crewman.”

He snapped to attention, “Yes ma’am.”

Her eyes were half open, “The next time a fight breaks out, don’t call me. Solve problems at the lowest level. That’s what the chain of command is for.” She didn’t wait for a response and promptly returned to her quarters.

*****

Cheveyo and Kimula entered the lieutenant’s darkened quarters. The caresses started…continued as soon as the hatch shut. The Pueblo passionately kissed the nape of the Andorian’s neck. She moaned softly in pleasure.

Deep in the security specialist’s mind, he knew she was compromised. The toxins in his system, however, pushed that fact to the back burner. He said in between kisses, “I’ve never… been with…an Andorian before.”

She grabbed the sides of his head, “There’s a first time for everything.”

The kissing moved lower and lower, finally reaching her breasts. He looked up, “Remember that thing you like to do that you told me about at Jinal’s? I’m up for it.”

At the mention of her late friend, the inebriated counselor’s mood switched. “Jinal,” she said. Tears formed, “Gods, I miss Jinal.”

It took a few moments for the petty officer to realize his companion was no longer receptive.

She pushed him away, “Let me tell you about my friend, Jinal. I don’t think you ever met him. He was so shy. I wished it wasn’t so shy.”

He examined her in confusion. “Huh?”

Her legs slowly failed and she slumped to the deck. “I miss him,” she sobbed.

Runningfox, in his altered state, only stared at her. It didn’t take long for her sobs to evolve into snores. He murmured to himself, “Well, hell.” Dejected, he exited Kimula’s quarters.

*****

On deck three, Tang and D’nas walked abreast of each other down the corridor. The ship’s lighting had gone dim, indicating the late hour.

“So much for your going away party,” commented the Asian.

“It’s alright,” D’nas rejoined, “it was an experience.”

Zian chuckled, “That it was.”

They parted ways to their respective rooms.

“Good night, D’nas.”

“May your soul rest well, Zian.”

END OF CHAPTER 4
 
I love the way Aurelia handeled this situation. It was just so ... so ... so like Aurelia. Excellent.

And poor Kimla needs to get wasted before she can morn for Jinal. It must have been difficult for her losing him.

This continues to be a terrific read!
 
Yeah, what CeJay said. Aurelia showed good command sense - let 'em sort out their own differences. And Jackson - for God's sake, don't bother the Captain with the small stuff! :lol:
 
I did like the way Aurelia handled Zo'kama and Lemipil's dispute and as for poor Crewman Jackson--someone must have been dozing off during the chain of command lecture in Basic--although, in fairness, the situation did happen quickly and when two senior officers are exchanging blows...
 
I really dug this sequence-Sintina at her best. I wondered if Runningfox was gonna score-Kimula might be a pistol but I originally questioned her racy behavior in light of recent emotional hits she's taken. Well done as always.
 
CHAPTER 5

Stardate: 54074.6 (28 January 2377)
USS Independence, Gymnasium
In Orbit of Tama

The double doors of the gym parted. Captain Aurelia looked rested…almost chipper, in fact. She wore a sports bra and shorts. Her petite, mocha body was toned and amorous. Secretly, the captain enjoyed it when some of the crew ogled her when she worked out. She examined the facilities. Lemipil and Zo’Kama slept on the deck on opposite sides of the room. Sintina grinned mischievously and pressed on a computer terminal inlaid in the bulkhead. “Computer,” she began in a hushed tone, “conduct a five second test of the audio fire alarm in the gymnasium. Authorization: Aurelia gamma-eight-one-five.”

Immediately, an ear piercing klaxon reverberated throughout the room. Both the doctor and security officer jumped up in a daze. Aurelia observed with a smirk. It took a moment, but the brawlers found the captain and became aware of the prank.

Once the alarm ended, the captain stated in an innocent voice, “Good morning!”

Lemipil and Zo’Kama weren’t as enthusiastic. They drudged closer. It was then, Sintina noticed the Zakdorn’s black eye and the dried blood from the Arkonian’s lip.

Aurelia addressed them without malice. “From now on, keep it in the gym, understood?”

Two meek, “Yes ma’am’s,” was the response.

She gestured to the exit, “Now get out of here and get cleaned up. We beam down to the surface at 1100 hours.”

Without acknowledging each other’s presence, the two left.

The door shut behind the captain. She shook her head with mild amusement. Sintina walked toward the equipment, “Computer, begin Aurelia workout playlist.”

*****

Da-da-da.

“Come in,” called Susan Windslow as she rose from the breakfast table. The two boys, Ethan, and an adolescent Arkonian continued to eat and small talk. She smiled wide when the entrance revealed Doctor Zo’Kama.

The Arkonian began, “Thank you for watching Zo’Kala. I apologize for the sudden change of plan.”

Susan approached her, “That’s fine. ‘Kala was the perfect guest. …Well, once we got her warm.” She saw the line of blood coming from the doctor’s mouth. “What happened?”

“I was forced to defend your family’s honor,” she proudly stated.

By now, everyone was focused on the conversation.

“What are you talking about?” questioned Susan.

The doctor’s eyes met Ethan’s.

*****

“Three crewmembers still haven’t reported for duty,” elaborated Karim. He sat across Aurelia in her ready room. “…including Kim.” He tapped his padd, “But Runningfox did.”

“What does that have to do with her?”

He tipped an eyebrow, “Oh…nothing.” The first officer changed the subject, “So I heard there was a fight last night.”

Sintina chuckled, “Yeah, and Crewman Jackson called me about it.”

“Sorry about that ma’am,” he said, “I’ll ask Chief Hatora to instill certain, unwritten protocols on the lower ranks.”

She waved it off, “It’s a rookie mistake.”

Bin Nadal stood, “If there’s nothing else, I’m going to embarrass Kimula.”

“By all means,” the captain jested.

As the door parted, Karim nearly ran into Commander Windslow.

“Excuse me, sir,” offered the chief engineer.

The Persian quickly recovered, “Not a problem.” He moved off.

“Captain?” requested Windslow.

She waved him in. The door closed.

“You need something, Commander?” Aurelia started.

The Oregon native took an ‘at ease’ stance. “Ma’am, it has come to my attention that I’ve become a divisive figure among the crew.”

She huffed, “That’s not news, Windslow.”

“Still,” he persisted, “it’s never come to blows before.”

Aurelia assumed that was the reason for Lemipil’s and Zo’Kama’s confrontation. It was no secret how the young ensign, and several others, felt about the disgraced former captain. She shrugged, “Are you offering a suggestion?”

Ethan glanced down for a moment. He had no course of action for her. There were always people onboard that didn’t care for someone else. It was a fact of life on a starship. He had dealt with it himself when he commanded the Bismarck.

There was only so much a captain could do. Still, he felt…guilty. This situation involved intense emotions. Once, a crewmember even called him a traitor to his face. He didn’t report it. …Maybe he was getting exactly what he deserved. Finally, he looked up, “No ma’am. I don’t have any specific recommendation. I just…I want you to know, I regret making your job more difficult.”

Sintina leaned back and swiveled in her chair slightly. A small smile crossed her face. Her respect for man was upped a few notches. She leaned forward and rested her arms on the desk, “You let me worry about that, Commander.”

“Yes ma’am.”

“You’re dismissed.”

“Yes ma’am.” He turned to leave.

Sintina added, “Commander, you’ll have the bridge when we beam down.”

He respectfully curtsied, “Aye ma’am.”

*****

Lieutenant Commander bin Nadal pressed the enunciator for the fourth time. He gave up, “Computer, open Lieutenant Kimula’s door. Authorization: bin Nadal…”

Suddenly, the hatch slid open. Kimula stood near it and held her head. “Shut that damn noise off,” she pleaded.

He smirked at the sight of the hung over Andorian. “It’s 0945.”

“Oh no,” she retreated back into the room.

Karim added before he left, “Remember, Dress Whites for the ceremony.”

“Oh gods,” he heard from Kimula before the door shut.

*****

About an hour later, Captain Aurelia entered transporter room one. She observed her senior officers loitering. When they noticed her presence, they made their way to the dais. All wore the white and blue tops with black slacks. The formal uniforms were trimmed in gold. On her uniform, the blue portion of was white, denoting her status as captain.

Aurelia had mixed feelings as she looked upon them. Ensign Lemipil, minus the black eye, was rigid. Luckily, Zo’Kama wasn’t in attendance. Tang looked nervous…or excited…maybe he just had to pee. D’nas was adorned in a very formal, earth-toned long coat; apparently, the Tamarian version of the dress uniform. He looked serene, as he usually did. Kimula’s skin was a deeper blue than normal. When Sintina made eye contact with her, she offered a weak grin. Karim greeted the captain.

“Thank god for the wonders of modern medical technology,” he whispered.

Sintina rolled her eyes and commented, “Have I ever told you how much I hate diplomatic affairs?”

He grinned, “You might have mentioned it a few times.”

She sighed and joined the others, “Let’s do this. Energize.”

END OF CHAPTER 5
 
Again, I'm impressed with how Sintina handled the tiff between Lemipil and Zo’Kama. Let 'em work it out in the gym, but leave it there.

Windslow did show some character in this segment. He didn't whine about his situation, merely acknowledged it. Maybe there's hope for his redemption yet.

And now, off to the ceremonies! I have yet to come across any character, whether canon or fanon, that enjoys wearing the dress uniform. One of the immutable laws of the universe, I suppose. :lol:

A very good segment!
 
Sometimes the best way to handle an interpersonal dispute is to let the disputers battle it out behind closed doors until they're black and blue. In this instance it didn't seem to completely resolve the issue, but at least it allowed them to work out their anger at each other. They don't have to like each other so long as they can work together to get the mission accomplished.

Windslow did show a great deal of class here--he's not making excuses for what he did, nor is he seeking pity. He's just going to do his job to the best of his ability.

And poor Kimula...hope the detox works before the fancy dress ceremonies--it'd created a heckuva diplomatic incident to have the counselor throw up at the feet of a Tamarian dignitary...
 
this is my first reading of an Independence story. Have been trying to catch up on all the various guys writing over at unitedtrek and this is my first foray into this particular series.

The comments here suggest an action packed series at the best of times but the tone of this story (more character driven) is action packed in its own way. There are lots of good interactions and a lot of dramatic conflicts between different characters. Even the doctor gets into a fist to cuff, never mind the tensions building surrounding Windslow's presence on the ship. It appears only a Captain with the mettle of Aurelia would contemplate having him aboard.

She herself comes across as a very interesting character and I can't wait to back read and find out about the fate of the old Indy and Kimula's distress.

I have a feeling the diplomatic meeting might not go so smooth
 
Have been trying to catch up on all the various guys writing over at unitedtrek...

Best of luck on that one. :)

But thank you for reading (and everyone else)! I know I say that often, but I feel you can never say it enough. :techman:
 
Best of luck on that one. :)

Yeah a bit of a mammoth task but an enjoyable one and especially going by this story I think I am going to like the Independence and her Captain
 
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