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ST: Independence 11 - "Eyes Uncovered"

Ha ha ha ha! Um, seriously, the use of the word like, well, you'll see. Sintina will keep your interest, let's put it that way. Kind of the way a cobra holds a desert rat's interest.(Hey, I finally figured out how to describe Sintina! 'Bout time!)
Seriously, Independence grows on you(I'll forgo all of the obvious gags available at that comment). Dnoth paints vivid pictures of people and events. In an aside to Dnoth-All I have left are some of the Dark Territory stories-and that's just because I can only take so much Glover in one sitting. I've read the rest of UT.
 
Well not much I can add to what has been said. I definitely think Windslow is doing his best to redeem himself, perhaps even too much. I wonder if he'll ever get to the point where he just can't or won't take it anymore ... watch this space, eh?

I love that you have a doctor who doesn't mind to dish out a few punches when the occasion calls for it. That's not like any docotor we've ever seen before.
 
Thank you, for the complements, sirs!

I've got to say, for those of you who were looking forward to seeing a great deal of Tamarian culture are going to be disappointed. :( I realized, I could have written about the ceremony, but it wasn't critical to the story I wanted to tell. Besides which, this was always intended to be a short story. So...
 
EPILOGUE

Stardate: 54094.1 (4 February 2377)
USS Independence
En route back to Federation Space

“Captain’s log; supplemental. After spending a week on the Tamarian homeworld, Starfleet is sending us to the Klingon-Gorn border area. Tang, and several others, were disappointed that Command didn’t let us off the leash for awhile. I’m not surprised, though, exploring is still low on Starfleet’s list of priorities.

On the upside, the diplomatic part of the visit went pretty well. I didn’t piss anyone off and my crew behaved themselves…for once. There is some residual tension from the confrontation between Zo’Kama and Lemipil…I have a feeling, that’s going to be an ongoing issue.

For now, however, we’re back on the road. It will take awhile to get there, but we’re scheduled to dock at Starbase 90 for crew replacements and supplies in early May.”

*****

A wall of cool air hit Karim as the door to Counselor Kimula’s office opened. Coming from an ice world, she often kept it cool. An entire wall was fitted with a recirculating waterfall. The Andorian loved the sound of the cascading water. She was forced to get a new one when the ‘old’ Indy exploded. Blues, greens, and purples filled the room.

Kimula smiled wide, “Hello, Karim. I was surprised when you made an appointment.”

“Well,” he began as the hatch hissed shut, “I just felt like talking.” He plopped on the couch.

She placed a padd on a nearby end table, giving him her complete attention. “You can talk to me about whatever you want. You know that.”

Karim joshed, “I heard a story from young Crewman Runningox.”

The Andorian turned a dark blue, “I ah…don’t really recall much.”

He grinned, “I know. But it made me wonder, who does the counselor talk to when she needs to vent?”

She looked down, “I guess I’m a bit of a martyr when it comes to that.”

He touched her knee, “If you need to talk…”

Kimula nodded and her eyes watered. She placed her hand on his, “Ok…I will. But not right now, ok?”

“Fair enough.”

The room was silent for a few moments.

Karim decided to put Kimula back into her more traditional…and more comfortable role. “I was thinking about Nicole, again.”

Kimula hesitated. She knew the hatred and guilt Karim felt. She suspected that he believed he was responsible for the destruction of the Independence and the deaths of eighty people. She had tried to persuade him otherwise, but he merely placated her.

The first officer continued, “I wonder who killed her if it wasn’t us. Nechayev swears her group had nothing to do with it.”

“There was no evidence of foul play aboard the Gibraltar,” she remembered.

Bin Nadal sighed, “To quote a great Terran scientist, ‘God doesn’t roll dice.”

“What?”

“There’s no such thing as coincidence.” His gaze wondered, “Section 31 must have had her eliminated.”

The Andorian grimaced as the secret organization was mentioned. She never really bought into the idea of it. The deaths of so many friends…Jinal’s death, however, turned her into a reluctant believer. “It’s so frustrating. We don’t even know who those people are. It’s like they don’t even exist.”

“Oh they exist, alright,” Karim countered. “Nechayev is in the process of identifying their operatives. She and Uhura have been trying to figure the hierarchy for years.”

“And then what?”

The question hit Karim like a ton of bricks. He had never considered the next step. How could Section 31 possibly be purged from the government? They were so entrenched. Where did they end and the Federation begin? He met her eyes, “I don’t know.”

*****

D’nas walked into the candle lit chamber. The great images of Tamarian mythology stared back at him. He approached the seven Elders. The former exchange officer removed the blade from its sheath. The seven each produced their own Betoken of Uzani. The knives were held high in the air for a moment. Then, each Tamarian kissed the side of the blade, and returned it to their sheaths.

Balah, one of the old women, started, “Temba, his arms wide.Kira at Bashi. (Give us your story.)

He nodded and said, “Ria…the trade of Itah. Sokath, his eyes uncovered. Kira at Bashi. Opii, when she wrote. The kingdom of Soma. Morden and his shadow. When Nek saw the temple. As Rafa’s arrow flew. (Via the exchange program with the Federation, I learned great things. The story the Federation gave us about them is not entirely true. Most are honorable people, but there is a hidden force at work. We should gather more intelligence. I know some people we can trust.)

END OF “EYES UNCOVERED”
 
Excellent story! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and was sorry to see it end. However, I think you made a wise choice - putting too much focus on the Tamarian ceremony would have distracted from the overall plot. I think you gave us some nice hints and glimpses which were plenty for the story.

My favorite line in this last segment was from Sintina - "On the upside, the diplomatic part of the visit went pretty well. I didn’t piss anyone off and my crew behaved themselves…for once." That one made me laugh! It also showed the continuing maturity of Captain Aurelia.

Looking forward to the next adventure of the Independence! :techman:
 
Soon, Sintina, whose eyes are uncovered. Next, D'nas, with his friends at Jinal's. Kimula, with cold water, finds the warmth.
 
A very well written tale. Sintina is maturing as a captain and I have a feeling we haven't seen the last of D'nas. I liked the metaphors you used--especially Morden and his shadow--a nice shout out to Babylon 5 plus maybe a bit of foreshadowing...
 
I kinda liked the Tamarian talk better before you decided to translate it ... oh, well I understand it had to be done. And it is interesting to see them taking an interest in the whole Section 31 one thing even if I think that the agency has had way too much exposure already. They can hardly call themselves a secret agency any longer.

I was quite surprised and at least a little bit disappointed to see the epilogue already. I guess I was hoping for a lot more story here. A testament to how much I've enjoyed this one. Seriously, a great deal of fun and I hope you'll keep the crew dynamic (or lack thereof) going in the coming adventures.

Big thumbs up for this entry in the Indy saga. :techman:
 
Aw! Over already! Was waiting for a diplomatic dispute. Aw well. tamarians probably would be the greatest enemy or competition to Section 31 in terms of double speak and misdirection.
 
Thanks for comments everyone! And as others have said, I'm sure D'nas and the Tamarians will appear in an Indy story again (though, it may be awhile).

Next on the agenda is "For the Empire," a collaborative effort between David Falkayn, Gibraltar, Darkush, and me. I hope to start posting it before the end of May.
 
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