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ST: Independence 06 "Crimes and Shadows"

This reminds me of the old western TV series, "Branded". In some ways, Windslow puts me in mind of Chuck Connors' character Jason McCord--except that it looks like Windslow actually did break and run--or did he? Also, Windslow's being put through a far greater hell than McCord ever went through.

With Windslow you've created a tragic character caught up in events way over his head. He's drowning and he has no one to turn to.

Powerful stuff.
 
I don't know if anyone else senses this, but I sense the formation of an anti Section 31 unit by Admiral Nechayev.

To be honest, the idea scares me and I'm not sure what I fear more. Section 31 or this new counter-31 unit which has to be smarter and more methodical than 31.
 
Gibraltar said:
:eek:

Wow. Just... wow.

That pretty much sums up my reaction to this.

I gotta give you kudos for your uncompromising decision not to sugar-coat Windslow's crime.

You made him so sympathetic at first but now it’s difficult to like the guy considering his all too obvious crime. As it stands now he just doesn't appear to be fit to be a Starfleet officer. I wonder if there is any way at all to exonerate him.
 
I'm really getting into Independence. I think this was one of the fics I read before registering with the forums. The intrique and the interplay between the characters is excellent.

Hell of an ending, good work!
 
Thank you very much everyone. I really appreciate the comments! As with all authors, readers and posters are the fuel to keep going.

A counter 31 group? ...maybe.

But it's not over yet. There are still a few chapters left in this story...
 
CHAPTER 14

Supplemental
Starbase 17, Admiral Nechayev’s Office
In Orbit of Althos IV



“Tomorrow, either way, commander; I promise,” reassured Admiral Alynna Nechayev to whom ever was on the other end of the comlink. The guest chime sounded. “She’s here. Talk to you soon.” She tapped off the computer. Addressing the door, she said, “Enter.”

Captain Aurelia moved in confidently, “I've found evidence that one of the Chalnoth was convicted two years ago of Maraji crystal smuggling."

Slightly annoyed at the lack of a ‘sir,’ the admiral played her role, "And?"

Sintina folded her arms and shifted her hips, “And, you're still not going to let my officers go, are you?"

Still no ‘sir.’ The admiral shrugged, "There is no evidence as to why I should."

Aurelia’s patients had finally been spent. Her lack of courtesy became outright hostility, "There's no evidence at all! This is just a case of ‘he said; she said’ and you're siding with some Chalnoth thugs!"

The admiral had got what she needed. Appearances, however, still had to be maintained, at least for the moment. She stood and ordered, "As you were, captain."

Unfortunately, the captain didn’t yield. "No, this is bullshit! All the charges should be dropped. Any idiot can see they were defending themselves and the drugs were a misunderstanding!"

Nechayev dropped the pretence, "That’s enough!”

Sintina reluctantly assumed the position of ‘at ease.’ Put Nechayev in the ‘admirals that I’ve pissed off’ column, she darkly mused.

Alynna took a moment to center herself. There was a purpose here. She continued in a more civil tone, “I’ll discuss this with you in the morning. Until then, I suggest you brush up on the protocols for addressing a senior officer. Dismissed."

As Aurelia walked out she kicked her self again. She wanted to bring up Fleet Captain Wilson to Nechayev. Because of her outburst, it would now have to wait. She rubbed the back of her neck as she marched. I wonder if the EMH would give me a massage?

*****

Stardate: 53252.3 (2 April 2376)
Starbase 17
Courtroom 3, United Federation of Planets v. Windslow


Because of his revelation, Ethan Windslow spent the night in the Security Center. He walked past three Independence crewmembers sharing a cell. Ethan was sure they all saw him. It wouldn’t be long before they knew why he was there. Luckily, he didn’t share the cell with them. Only once did the science officer attempt to engage him in conversation. Windslow ignored him. He simply laid down on the cot, faced the wall, and wept in silence. A few hours later, Kimula tried to talk to him. She had just as much success as Tang. The night pasted slowly. He welcomed the final day of his court-martial; for no other reason than to get it over with.

Eventually, the time came. His fate would now be decided.

Admiral Miller sat, two captains flanking her. "Defendant, please stand.”

Ethan, along with his counsel stood.

“Captain Ethan Windslow,” began Miller. “You have admitted your guilt on the charges of conduct unbecoming an officer, impeding an investigation, and desertion.”

Ethan’s legs were weak and his stomach was in knots. But for the first time in a long time, his mind was free of guilt; not regret, but guilt.

The admiral continued, “You’ve had a distinguished career. Receiving the Grankite Order of Tactics, the Campbell Award, and the Starfleet Star Cross. We have taken that into account as we issued your sentence. Frankly, that record saved you from being dishonorably discharged from the fleet.

You panicked, Mr. Windslow; we do not fault you personally for that. Whether we like to admit it or not, all of us have panicked at one time or another. Starfleet captains, however, do no have that luxury. As your charge of captain, panicking the way you did was dangerous, deadly, and totally unacceptable.

But it didn’t stop there. After the adrenaline was gone and your mind was clear, you chose to delete data proving what you did. That fact is what truly upsets me.”

Miller interlocked her hands, “At any time, once you calmed down, you could have attempted to correct your error. You could have turned back and sent a rescue team. You could have turned yourself in to your fleet commander. You could have not blocked your first officer’s efforts to deem you unfit. You could have cooperated with investigators. You have said that Admiral Ross instructed you to stay quiet. IF that’s so, then you had a duty not follow an illegal order. But you didn’t do any of that. It took a court-martial with all the evidence of your guilt before you to finally come clean.”

She leaned forward, focusing in on Windslow, “That is not so much a confession of an honorable man, than an admission of a man who knew he could no longer lie.

Mister, your actions are inexcusable for a starship captain. So, I’m going to make sure you never have the chance to make that mistake again. In addition to a reduction in rank to Lieutenant Commander, a formal reprimand, and four months at the Jaros stockade, I am placing an elucidation in your permanent record. It forbids your promotion to the rank of captain for the entirety of your Starfleet career. You will never work without a net, again.”

Windslow dipped his head. Not quite sure how to react. The admiral must have sensed his thoughts were wondering.

Miller’s voice changed. It almost resembled a concerned mother, “Upon your release, you could resign. Most people would. You could move to some colony where no one would know you and no one would know what you did.

Information flows quickly throughout the fleet, however. If you were to stay in, where ever you go, no matter what ship or station, people will know what you did at Pentath III. It won’t be easy for you. But, if there is some sense of integrity left in you, I ask you to consider this: atone for your actions by continuing to serve in Starfleet.”

Windslow was dubious. Her request probably had less to do with her personal feelings than the practicality of Starfleet’s current situation. He knew Starfleet had gotten more lax about kicking people out. They needed officers in a bad way. He was not the first person to avoid being cashiered out of the fleet because of wartime losses.

Admiral Miller concluded, “Unless you resign, you’ll remain assigned to the Independence as first officer for the time being. You served well on the Mendez in that role, so I believe you are capable of it.

This court-martial is adjourned."

*****

The heavy doors of the Security Center opened to allow Captain Aurelia. With the majority of her bridge crew here, it seemed an appropriate place to visit. She only glanced at the cell containing her first officer. A small feeling of satisfaction came over her. She was informed of the ruling less than an hour ago. He was lying down with his head facing the bulkhead. Sintina entertained the idea of talking to him, but decided it could wait.

She took position just outside the cell holding her officers. They all stood at attention once they realized who it was.

“At ease, gentlemen,” ordered Aurelia. "I've done all I can, short of breaking you three out of here."

Jinal cracked what would pass as a Vulcan joke, “Captain..."

She held up a hand, assuming what he would say, "Don't worry, I'm not planning on it."

Tang Zian laughed for just a moment before snapping back to ‘at ease.’

D’nas just looked confused.

"There’s still some hope,” said the captain. “The admiral wants to see me. With any luck, she's reconsidered.” Then, she tilted her head, “Or she's going to give me a formal reprimand; one of the two."

The Tamarian stepped forward, "Ma'am, I am so very sorry for the trouble I've caused."

At first she was going to scold him. But Sintina couldn’t help but feel sympathy for D’nas. He was a good kid, she concluded. She responded loud enough for Windslow to hear her, "We all get in trouble sometimes, D’nas; it's how we get out of it that counts."

END OF CHAPTER 14
 
Well, it looks like Windslow has hit a crisis point--now it's up to him whether he pulls himself up or sinks further as Sintina said, "We all get in trouble sometimes...it's how we get out of it that counts."

And it looks like Sintina and Nechayev are getting ready for a bout of bare knuckles brawling...Sintina's temper is going to get her into a lot of trouble one day!

Very well done!
 
CHAPTER 15

Supplemental
Starbase 17, Admiral Nechayev’s Office
In Orbit of Althos IV


The door hissed open. Aurelia was taken aback by the sight of her security chief already there and chatting it up with the admiral.

She entered cautiously. Her confusion no doubt amused Karim. Sintina, on the other hand, was not entertained. "Bin Nadal, what are you doing here?"

Nechayev regarded her with moderate offence. "Half a brain?" she quoted back to the captain.

Aurelia accused Bin Nadal, "You told her?"

Before Bin Nadal could defend himself, the admiral chimed in. "No, he didn't. The person you talked to was a hologram."

Confused, Aurelia could only point out, “But that was the day before yesterday.”

The admiral nodded, “That’s right.” She made her way around to the front of her desk and leaned on it. “I abducted your security officer and replaced him with a hologram. I've installed a new security protocol in your ship's computer to prevent others from doing the same thing.” As an afterthought, she added, “No need to thank me."

Sintina stood, unresponsive. After a few seconds, she asked in a perplexed voice, "What the hell is going on?"

The admiral gestured to Bin Nadal, "Would you care to explain, commander?"

The tactical officer stepped up. He was excited to finally share this with Sintina, "Admiral Nechayev arranged for those two Chalnoth to plant that crystal and start a fight with D'nas. I found out the Chalnoth had a connection to her and she ...” He broke off for a moment to find the right wording, “Well, she’s been briefing me ever since.”

“Why did you do that?” blurted Aurelia to Nechayev. She immediately followed up with, “Briefing on what?”

“Would you please use the word ‘sir’ occasionally when you’re talking to me,” responded the admiral. She continued, "I'll address your first question before the second. The two Chalnoth are some of my double agents. We caught them smuggling drugs for our adversaries.” She got off on a minor tangent. Obviously she and Karim had been discussing it before, since she glanced at him, “What better way to get a monopoly on something than to make it illegal. Capitalism is still alive and well in the Federation, it's just gone underground.” She came back to the matter at hand, “We could've sent them to prison, but they are more useful to us in other matters.”

Sintina simply stood, dumbfounded.

Alynna casually began to pace, “As to the 'why,' we wanted to assess your character. And the characters of your bridge crew, for that matter."

"For what?"

"That leads to the second question,” said Nechayev, “I'll answer that in a moment.

You demonstrated that you would stand up to an injustice. And you were willing to protect an innocent, even if the rules and your superiors say otherwise.”

Bin Nadal interjected, “I could’ve told you that, sir.”

She looked back at him, “You did.” The admiral turned back to Aurelia, “Your report claiming your friend, Ro Laren, was involved in a revolt; for instance, was something else that told me you had integrity.”

A sick, twisted feeling emerged in Sintina’s gut at the mention of the incident. She didn’t correct the admiral.

“Now to address your second question,” started Nechayev. “I belong to a small group of officers that resist the efforts of a covert group known as Section 31.”

The captain’s jaw dropped. Her response was an extended, “No…”

Karim offered, “Don’t you hate it when I prove you wrong?”

“What about the rest of the stuff he told me?” asked Sintina.

Alynna crossed her arms, “You’ve already helped Section 31 without even knowing it. Your transport of the Founder on the Midas to Starbase 375, was a 31 operation. As far as the public is concerned, she never left the Bajoran System.”

“Was she telling the truth about prior knowledge of the Academy attack?” pressed the captain.

The admiral shrugged, “We honestly don’t know for sure. Jupiter Station has the most advanced sensors in the sector and its records didn’t show anything; which itself is odd.”

Aurelia shook her head vehemently, “No, this is some type of trick. Or a test that’s part of the Captain’s Course.”

“I’m afraid not, captain,” rejoined Nechayev as she sat down on a nearby couch. She reasoned she would have to give a history lesson, “Ever since the twentieth century, agencies like this have operated on behalf of Earth nation-states. Back then, it was common knowledge that these organizations existed. Despite all the rhetoric you heard in school, the same type of group existed when Earth was united. By the time the Federation was founded, they had perfected their techniques. Instead of operating in the open, this new group wouldn’t even officially exist. We only call them ‘Section 31’ because of some obscure reference in United Earth’s original Starfleet Charter. Article 14, Section 31 says, certain rules of conduct could be "bent" during times of extraordinary threat.”

Aurelia wasn’t ready to dismiss everything she had been taught as easily as Bin Nadal had. Her face said as much, so the admiral continued.

“For a while, it served its purpose. It protected the Federation. Sure it’s tactics were less than honorable, but it worked. Power corrupts, however, especially when you don’t have to answer to anyone. Soon this group began seeing themselves not as sentinels of the Federation, but as the Federation itself. They’ve slowly been working their way into the halls of power and undermining the democratic process.

Over one hundred years ago, a group of Starfleet officers discovered the existence of Section 31. We’ve been fighting them anywhere we can; placing people in key positions. They have been doing the same.”

“I don’t believe it,” Aurelia said with resolve.

Nechayev grew wary of convincing her, “There’s a difference between being a skeptic and being close-minded, captain.”

Sintina came back with, “And why should I trust you? If what you say is true, you’re just as bad as they are. You falsely imprisoned my officers. Hell, one of them was stabbed thanks to you!"

“I regret the injury,” said Nechayev with sincerity, “Kavak and Apash were told not to severely hurt them.”

Aurelia cocked her head mockingly, “Oh, how considerate.”

“Sintina…” began Karim.

The admiral waved him off. She asked Aurelia, “I assume you’re aware of the Federation-Cardassian Treaty of 2370.”

“One of the most hated treaties in recent memory, yes.”

Nechayev stood up again, “Soon after it was implemented, I was ordered to remove the colonists at Dorvan V. I remember arguing with Picard over it. I was just as infuriated with it as he was. I went all the way to the Federation Council to try to stop it. I couldn’t.”

The captain didn’t want to listen to her story, “What does that have to do with anything?”

“You see,” elaborated Alynna, “most of us have unwittingly advanced Section 31’s agenda. That incident and those like it created the Brigade and later the Maquis. All those people responded exactly the way 31 wanted them to. They…we…were tools for Section 31 to ferment a war and create fear. I did my best to rein in those elements, but then the Dominion gave them all the pretext they needed to break down the liberty in the Federation; to 'protect' us from the outside threat."

“You still haven’t given me a reason to trust you, sir,” challenged Sintina.

The admiral grinned, “Now was that so hard?” Then, she addressed the question, “I deceived you to gauge if I could trust you. A bit counter-intuitive, granted. But I will not lie to you again. Nor will I threaten you like Fleet Captain Wilson did.”

Aurelia threw up her arms, “Is everyone watching me!”

Bin Nadal broke in, “We were actually watching him. We suspected he was pro-31.”

“We?” protested Aurelia.

“Do you remember what Independence’s motto is?” asked the admiral.

Sintina didn’t what to suffer anymore questions, “Something about being apathetic.”

Nechayev looked disappointed, “It says, ‘The Only Thing Necessary for the Triumph of Evil is for Good Men to do Nothing.’ Edmund Burke said it. He was an eighteenth century statesman.”

“Ok,” said Sintina, to riled up to understand.

“I know it because I chose it.” explained Alynna. “For a time, I was in charge of overseeing the Courageous class project. Through an ingenious play of political maneuvering I was removed from the project, but not before I could place the dedication plaques. It was a small act of resistance.”

Aurelia said nothing, the significance eluding her.

Bin Nadal made it more clear for her, “You see, captain, there’s an evil out there, but there are good people doing something about it.”

Nechayev added, “I believe you to be a good person as well. The only decision you have to make, captain, is whether you choose to do nothing.”

END OF CHAPTER 15
 
CHAPTER 16

Supplemental
USS Independence, Executive Officer’s Quarters
Docked with Starbase 17


Ethan had been released for two hours to say his good-byes and pack his things. A reminder of the verdict was the tracking anklet he bore.

There was no point in hiding anything anymore. He told Susan everything that wasn’t revealed during the trial. She listened between his sobs.

The lieutenant commander concluded with, "There’s less stigma attached to being a mass murder like Captain Glover than a coward like me.” He blurted after a moment, “I'll go ahead and file for divorce if you want. You and the kids would be better on Earth without me, anyway."

Her reaction was quick, “There you go running again.” The comment hit with more punch than she had intended. Susan continued somewhat apologetically, “You never wanted command anyway. You're not a man of war; you're a man of peace. You were put in a situation you weren't made for. I don't think less of you because you didn't handle it well."

“But then I lied,” pro-offered Ethan.

She repeated, “But then you lied.”

“How can you or anyone else ever trust me again?” asked Windslow.

“I don’t know,” responded Susan. “But I’m not quite ready to give up on you.”

Ethan wanted to smile at the revelation, but then his thoughts went back to where they always go, "I'm responsible for 25 deaths."

Susan knew he was fishing for sympathy, but gave none, “Yes, you are."

He shot her a look of disbelief. He expected her to rush to his defense. Disappointed, he wondered, “How can I look my children in the eye?"

She spoke with a determination he had not seen in several years, “By learning to look at yourself in the eye, first.” She placed a hand on his shoulder, “As long as you don’t give up on yourself, neither will I.”

A glimmer of hope sparked deep in Windslow’s soul as he covered her hand with his.

Then Susan asked with steely eyes, "Tell me more about this Admiral Ross.”

*****

Karim had just got back on board. He was heading for his quarters as he thought. Sintina was still not totally convinced, but she wasn’t dismissive either. He had hoped for a better outcome, but wasn’t terribly surprised.

After the meeting with Nechayev and Aurelia was over, he went over to the starbase security office and released Tang, Jinal, and D’nas. Windslow was already gone to gather his things when he got there.

A sharp jolt abruptly ended his contemplation. He ran into something, someone. He looked to see Commander Windslow holding his forehead.

“Sorry commander,” offered Windslow. “I wasn’t paying attention.”

Instinctively, Bin Nadal rejoined, “Don’t worry about it, sir.”

Ethan restarted his gate before Karim inquired, “Did you really do it, commander?”

Windslow stopped, hung his shoulders, and turned back. And so it begins, he thought. With a long deep sigh, he answered honestly, “Yes.”

Karim immediately felt betrayed; if not for himself, then for all officers and crew in the fleet. He had been on away teams with him man before. It could have just as easily been him that Windslow abandoned. “If that’s the case,” said Bin Nadal, “You got off easy. People like you don’t belong in the uniform.”

Ethan walked away without response. He couldn’t help but wonder if there was any truth in his words.

*****

Now in the captain’s ready room, Bin Nadal discussed Admiral Nechayev’s claims with his captain.

“So what was her explanation for what Admiral Whatley and General Wo’toth were doing on Cardassia Prime?” asked Sintina.

“They were probably unwitting pawn like most everybody else,” offered the security officer. “The only thing Admiral Nechayev and me could think of was something an agent once said to Dr. Bahsir,…‘after the war, the Romulans would be the greatest threat to the Federation.’”

“This is just too much…,” began the captain. She halted once the door chime activated. “Enter.”

Windslow walked in. He glanced at Karim, but said nothing to him. He handed Aurelia a padd. “Last minute transfers, ma’am.”

“Your last duty before going to the stockade?” inquired Sintina; surprisingly, the comment didn’t seem to be intended as an insult.

The first officer put his hands behind his back and confirmed, “Yes, yes it is.”

“Who are we getting?” questioned the captain; again, in a casual tone.

Ethan wasn’t sure what to make of her disposition. Were they so uninterested? Had they already written him off? Did they expect for him to turn in his commission? He could only answer, “Two new crewmen and an ops officer.”

Aurelia read the padd, “Lieutenant Nicole Chase, huh? Ok.” She put the padd down and looked over, “Karim, would you take care of them for me?”

“Aye, ma’am,” he curtsied and exited.

After the hatch slid shut, she addressed the commander, “We need to talk.”

“Yes, ma’am.”

Aurelia said matter-of-factly, “I don’t want you, and no one else will have you. It appears we’re stuck with each other.”

“Yes, ma’am,” responded Windslow, simply.

The captain got up from her chair, “Well, now that you’re not hiding anything any more, I need you to get out of this funk. Understood? I can’t have a clinically depressed first officer anymore.”

“Believe it or not,” Windslow said, “I do feel better now that it’s over.”

A dark sarcasm entered her voice, “You feel better. Well that’s great.” She ordered a root beer from the replicator before she continued, “Have you decided if you’re going to get out?”

Windslow considered as if it was the first time he had thought about it, “I don’t think so. Starfleet is all I’ve known for all of my adult life. …And I want to make it right.”

The sarcasm moved into the realm of belligerence, “You want to make it right? I wonder what the families of those officers would tell you to do with yourself to make it right.”

Ethan licked his lips and looked at the carpet.

“Fine,” concluded the captain, “I hope four months is enough time for you to get your head out of your ass. Dismissed.”

He considered getting off some snide remark, but his position was far too weak for it. He left with what little pride he could muster.

*****

A cylinder of energy coalesced on the transporter padd. A human woman officer, in her mid-twenties, with shoulder length blonde hair, appeared.

“Welcome on board the Indy!” greeted Karim kindly.

The young woman stepped down and offered a hand, “Thank you, Commander …”

“Karim Bin Nadal.”

“Karim,” smiled the new officer, “I like that name.”

He returned the grin, her hand shake now lingered, “Thanks, now it’s your turn.”

The female seemed lost in the Persian’s eyes, “Oh, Nicole…you can call me Nicole.”

Amused, he said, “Ok, I will. But on the bridge I might have to call you lieutenant something.”

“Oh, sorry.” stammered the young lady, “Lieutenant Chase.”

Karim finally broke contact, “I think you’ll like this ship and her crew.”

“Good…I’m always a little nervous when I transfer to a new ship.”

Bin Nadal ventured, “Tell you what, I’ll give you some time to settle in, but then you could meet me in the game room.”

“Where’s that?”

He thought about explaining it to her, but came up with a better idea, “I’ll pick you up and show you…say in an hour?”

Chase smiled widely, “I’d like that.”

*****

It had taken hours for her to locate that tailor, but Aurelia was determined to get some answers from that man. A Cardassian’s image now filled her small computer’s screen.

It didn’t take long for the captain to come to the point, “So was there ever a conspiracy against me or not?"

Garak smiled wickedly and shrugged, "Who's to say, captain. It certainly appeared that way didn’t it?”

A look of enmity shrouded Sintina’s face.

The Cardassian continued, “I do know one thing, if Admiral Nechayev had discovered that you covered up for that Bajoran friend of yours, she would have never considered letting you in."

"So what you’re saying is,” countered Sintina, slightly missing the meaning of his statement, “you’re not going to tell me if you where telling the truth or not."

Garak showed his teeth, "My dear captain, truth, like most things in the universe, is a matter of perspective."

*****

An elderly voice asked, “How did the encounter go?”

“About as expected,” reported Nechayev, “Mister Bin Nadal is in, but Aurelia is skeptical. It may have been a mistake to introduce ourselves to her.”

The form of the old woman walked about the admiral’s office. Alynna knew, however, it was merely a hologram. The former admiral always preferred using holograms for communication. She was one of the first people in the Federation to have access to holographic technology. During her stint as Head of Starfleet Intelligence, the elderly woman had used it quite often.

The dark-skinned, white-haired hologram said, “She’s headstrong, defiant, and she thinks she’s fighting the good fight. In fact, she reminds me of another captain I used to know. …Don’t worry, she’ll find out sooner or later what’s at sake and she’ll make the right choice.”

“If you say so, sir,” said Nechayev, obviously not convinced.

“I haven’t officially been in Starfleet for a long time…which explains a few things if you ask me. Anyway, how many times do I have to ask you to call me Nyota?”

The admiral counter-offered, “How about Miss Uhura?”

The old woman smiled with a wrinkled face, “It’s a start.”

END OF CHAPTER 16

END OF “CRIMES AND SHADOWS”
 
There it is. I hope you enjoyed it. Comments are always welcome, even if it's not a glowing review. ;)

The next story will be titled "Way of the Gun." It will involve DarKush's character, Ivan Cherenkov and the Independence crew.

I hope to begin posting it the second week in September.
 
I truly did enjoy this yarn that you've spun. I find myself both feeling sorry for--and disgusted with--Windslow. You've created a truly complex character here--no mean feat. I'm interested in seeing where you're going to take him in the future.

Also, I like your portrayal of Nechayev--I find that fans either really like her or really hate her. I think you've done a good job in providing solid motivation for her actions and in painting her in an understandable--and even likable--manner.

And the final reveal was choice--a nice connection with the past.

Very well done indeed, I'm looking forward to your next installment!
 
Another fantastic installment in your series, Dnoth. The trial scenes were riveting, and the insights into Windslow’s past were as shocking as they were revealing. Nechayev’s machinations and her inclusion of Aurelia and Bin Nadal into her plans is a rather foreboding development. Undoubtedly, going up against the nefarious plotters within Section 31 will prove every bit as dangerous as one might imagine.

Windslow’s got a lot of work to do in order to redeem himself, if that’s even possible at this point. I’m going to enjoy watching him try.

Terrific work! :thumbsup:
 
I have to admit that I usually try to stay clear of stories trying to shake-up the established Trek universe too much. I'm a bit of a wuss in that regard.

And you're clearly shaking things up big time with your Section 31 storyline. But not in a bad way. I'm not sure if I'm that willing to buy into Nechayev and her explanations but the scope here is quite mind-boggling.

Overall I don't quite feel like this story provided as much closure as you promised us. You started this series by amassing a great number of open question, not all of which have been answered (or at least answered to my satisfaction) And not all of it makes sense to me at this point.

If this sounds harsh, do not take it that way. Open-ended storytelling is not a bad thing and not everything that happened needs to be explained. In fact sometimes it is more fun when you don't know all the answers. Besides there's obviously more Independence to come and I'm looking forward to reading it. You have clearly established yourself as one of the most fascinating writers on this board.

Congratulations on another great story!
 
First off, thank you very much to everyone who reads and comments.

I'm glad readers have a mixed impression of Windslow.

As far as still having loose ends (I had to refer to my last thread to remember all of them) :D:

-Did someone in the Federation have prior knowledge of the attack on Starfleet Academy as per the Founder's accusations? --I think I'm going to focus less and less on this. The answer simply isn't known to my characters. I don't plan on making it a big issue in the future. (maybe I should)

-Obviously the Windslow/Pentath III arc is over. (or at least the mystery of it)

-What were Adm. Whatley and Wo'toth trying to do by framing the Romulans any way in "Retributions?" -- I'm going to leave that as it stands. S31 believed that the Romulans would be that next great threat (going back to what Sloan said in "Inter Arma Enim Silent Leges", I believe). Whatley and Wo'toth were "encouraged" to muddy the reputation of the Romulans by SI and the So'Taj. I don't really think they were even aware that Section 31 was pulling the strings. Because of interference from the Indy's crew, that plan backfired.

-Who set up Aurelia? -- The short answer...no one. Presumably, Garak knew of Nechayev's group and floated Aurelia's name to them. He wanted to make sure Aurelia didn't mess up her opportunity (or soil his connections) by covering up for Ro Laren and her group. Once Garak found out that Ro and Aurelia knew each other, he contacted her and put a seed in her mind so she wouldn't send a false report. But I don't think anyone, not Section 31, not Whatley or Wo'toth, set her up for anything. Garak simply took advantage of the situation.

-Jinal's Romulan heritage will be resolved in the episode after "Way of the Gun," assuming I keep to my plans.

-I wanted to find a ...well, "cooler" way for Nechayev to test Aurelia, but I just couldn't think of one. I'm not really satisfied with the whole D'nas/Chalnoth thing, but I guess it worked.

-As far as toppling Section 31...that is something that is very, very long term. (if it happens at all) For the moment, it is only a small, under-the-table, resistance struggle. But I've read some comments about this and they are right...I'm going to have to rack my brain: not only to 'plan' for Section 31, but to 'plan' how Uhura's group is going to react. That's no small challenge. :vulcan:

I hope that answers some of the confusion. ...The rest of the confusion, I'm leaving. ;)

I probably should have made things more clear in earlier stories. I just left some things (perhaps too many) for the reader to assume.

At any rate, again, I thank you all for reading. I hope to have "Way of the Gun" begin in about a week.
 
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