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ST: Gibraltar - Prophets and Loss

Prophets and Loss - Chapter 7

Chapter 7

USS Argonaut
Federation Task Force Peacekeeper
The Ichimide Vortex
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


It had been such a little thing, really. The storm of micrometeorites had been brief, clattering against the hull of the ship like a squall of hail against the roof of a metal shed. The navigational deflectors were designed to protect every square meter of the ship against damage from such commonplace dangers. On this day, however, there had been a freak mishap, a statistical anomaly. One of the roughly thee-hundred and twenty-two million shards of meteoric debris had made it past the defensive screens.

The resulting microfracture along the starboard nacelle strut was laughably minute, a veritable pinprick only a few microns in diameter. It was so small that the ship’s diagnostic sweeps wouldn’t have detected it until it had grown to twice its size. But tiny as it was, it allowed a few stray molecules of drive plasma to escape into the void.

Captain Sharoudin had initiated a hard impulse turn as the ship swept through the trailing tendrils of the vortex’s outer rings. Navigational hazards were endemic in this part of the Briar Patch, which explained why the Son’a had elected to build a covert anchorage here, a fallback position in the event something catastrophic befell their people.

The crew of the Argonaut had been attempting to locate this outpost in hopes of offering rescue to anyone taking shelter there when they’d received a distress call from the Bellerophon. The brief yet chilling message informed them that their comrades had fallen victim to a gravitic mine. The ship was crippled, running on minimal power, and had just detected two Alshain warships on approach. They’d had to abandon their away team on the surface of an Elloran colony to prevent panicked rioting, and feared that even if the Alshain vessels failed to detect Bellerophon’s presence, they would destroy the Elloran settlement and their landing party along with it.

Determined to aid their fellows, Captain Sharoudin had ordered the ship to come about and lay in a course for the Delta Arigulon system. As the Steamrunner-class starship had executed the turn, the microfilament of superheated plasma trailing from the micrometeorite strike had drifted into a pocket of volatile metreon gas. Even had the shields been raised, it likely would have made little difference in the outcome. The explosion jarred the ship off course, and before anyone aboard could react, the plasma filament had ignited. Like a burning fuse it had retraced its path back to the nacelle strut and into the plasma conduit within.

The destruction of the matter/anti-matter reaction chamber was followed less than a second later by the rest of the starship. Three hundred and twenty-seven people were dead before they’d even fully processed the shockwave from the exploding metreon pocket.

Argonaut had been assigned as Bellerophon’s patrol partner, the only vessel in close enough proximity within the chaotic EM environment of the Klach D'Kel Brakt to receive subspace transmissions from the other in the case of an emergency. As such, their stricken sister ship would find no help on this day when, despite their best efforts, their presence at the Elloran colony was indeed discovered by the unforgiving Alshain.

*****

Forward Observation Post B'hala
Aulerg Moon
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


Anij steeled herself against the needle’s intrusion as it lanced beneath her flesh, drawing up blood, various other bodily fluids, and perhaps the future of her very race.

Adhar Wuuten looked on as the Tarlac medical technician carried out the last in a series of thorough tests designed to map the Ba’ku genome for what he hoped would be a successful attempt at cloning the next generation of his dying species.

The doors parted behind him, and an enraged Gallatin entered the lab. The disruptor he clutched in his hand made short work of Wuuten’s two bodyguards, both of which collapsed onto the concrete floor, stunned. Holstering the weapon, Gallatin rushed Wuuten, barreling into him and knocking the Son’a leader over a table cluttered with diagnostic equipment.

Landing heavily atop Wuuten, Gallatin wrapped his hands around the man’s throat and began to squeeze, hissing, “This is how you treat your guests, Adhar? Strapping them down and running obscene tests on them? Your own people you sick bastard?”

Wuuten clawed ineffectually at Gallatin’s hands, gurgling, “She… volunteered!”

Anij called out from where she lay restrained on the inclined exam table, “Gallatin, it’s true! He asked me and I agreed to help.”

This gave Gallatin pause, but only just. Glaring down into Wuuten’s bulging eyes, he inquired, “What is this about? Why have you brought us to this Bajoran moon and kept us isolated?” Finally, realizing that his victim was about to lose consciousness, Gallatin relaxed his grip and clambered awkwardly to his feet amidst the littered chaos of their brief struggle.

Wheezing, the Son’a leader took a few moments to collect himself before pulling himself to his feet with the support of a nearby table. Gallatin made no move to help him. Rubbing his neck ruefully, Wuuten took a seat in a nearby chair. “I let you live, and this is the thanks it gets me?”

Gallatin’s hand caressed the handle of his holstered disruptor. “You let us live? What cause would you have for killing us?”

Wuuten, suddenly inflamed, spat back. “Not her, you traitorous dolt, you! You betrayed Ru’afo. You betrayed us all. Why shouldn’t I have killed you for wrecking our plans to resettle Ba’ku after moving its inhabitants? We might have succeeded had you not joined with Picard and his crew.”

Gallatin relaxed his hand, having to forcibly resist the urge to shoot his former underling. “What we were doing was wrong. It was immoral. We should be better than that. We can be better than that.”

Wuuten shook his head sadly, “We are dying, Gallatin. Our attempts at longevity treatments have rendered us sterile, and the healing energies of our homeworld were our last, best hope for a cure.”

Gesturing to the surrounding lab, Gallatin scowled, “Is that what all this is about? Are you still chasing that perverted dream of immortality?”

“No,” Wuuten croaked. “I am trying to ensure that our race has a future, Gallatin. The Ba’ku, or what remains of them, still possess our people’s original, uncontaminated genetic heritage. I am using Anij’s tissues to help in establishing a genetic pool from which we will try and clone the next generation.”

“Clone?” Gallatin looked appalled. “You can’t clone a race from just a handful of people. Without genetic diversity the species would die off from inherited abnormalities in just a few generations.” His eyes widened in sudden realization. “Dear gods, is that why you allied yourselves with the Dominion? Their cloning technology?”

“That is precisely why. They needed ketracil-white, and we needed their expertise in cloning and genetic engineering.” Finally having recovered some of his strength, Wuuten sat up in his chair. “With what knowledge we gleaned from the Dominion before their defeat, we can artificially introduce enough genetic variation into the clones’ DNA to ensure viability. We can have a future, Gallatin. Our people will not be extinguished from the universe.”

Gallatin considered this, taking a moment to disarm the two bodyguards who were beginning to stir on the floor. Standing with his back to the wall beside the door, the former general queried, “What about these Bajorans? Where do they figure into your scheme? You obviously don’t want me having any interaction with them because you’ve gone to great lengths to keep me away from them.”

Wuuten nodded soberly. “They are the Bajora Tava, an offshoot of the Bajoran people who fled here following the Cardassian occupation of their planet.”

“They’re a long way from home.”

“Indeed,” Wuuten agreed. “And they’ve been completely cut off from the outside galaxy during their time in the nebula. Their entire society is founded on the belief that it’s their destiny to one day return to Bajor and free the planet from the Cardassians. They’ve gone from being a militaristic fundamentalist monastic order to a full-fledged warrior culture in less than fifty years.”

Gallatin gave the adhar a scathing look. “You haven’t told them that Bajor’s been free for almost a decade now?”

“Absolutely not.” Wuuten motioned for the Tarlac med-tech to complete his duties as Anij listed with rapt attention to their conversation. “I’ve convinced them that if they can help us survive the Alshain onslaught, we’ll assist them in overcoming the Cardassians and driving them from Bajoran soil.”

“Typical,” Gallatin fumed, “You lie and cheat and deceive everyone standing between you and your goals.”

“You speak as if I’m defrauding a business partner, Gallatin. I’m trying to save our race from extinction, just as you and Ru’afo once did.” He stood stiffly, moving toward the exit. Stepping over the groggy guards as if they were refuse to be avoided, he shot one final heated look at Gallatin as he approached the doors. “Pack your things, Gallatin. We’re taking a trip back to Ba’ku.”

“To what end? Everyone’s dead.”

“Anij says there were between twenty and thirty villagers who were away from the settlement when the Alshain attacked. If they fled along the kelbonite veins back to the same caves they used to hide from us, they may have avoided detection. Those people, and their collective genetic inheritance, may be exactly what I need to complete this project. That is, unless you’d like future generations to see the Son’a in an exhibit of extinct cultures, right next to the Iconians?”

Gallatin’s only reply was an embittered scowl.

*****

USS Gibraltar
Federation Task Force Peacekeeper
Periphery of the Ba’ku System
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


As Gibraltar lurked at the edge of the Ba’ku’s home star system, the tension on the bridge was palpable. The senior staff were all assembled, with the additional presence of Lt. Commander Pell at the auxiliary station in the well opposite Ramirez.

Lt. Commander Elisto Plazzi, the seasoned science veteran stood watch over the man who would soon replace him, Ensign Kuenre Shanthi. The younger man sat at the Sciences station, the expression on his ebony face one of deep concern as he reported, “Our probe indicates no signs of humanoid life on Ba’ku, Captain.”

The worry lines around Sandhurst’s eyes which had deepened during his recent ordeal were now especially pronounced. Their advanced probe sent into the system to orbit Ba’ku told a sad tale of a vibrant community snuffed out in a matter of moments. Their first mission within the Briar Patch was a sad disappointment. The captain dreaded having to inform Picard of this turn of events.

Adrift within the Oort cloud at the system’s furthest boundary, the ship was rigged for silent running. Aside from the encrypted tight-beam datalink to the probe, Gibraltar was emissions quiet. Main power was on standby, along with tactical and defensive systems, the starship utilizing minimal auxiliary power only. It was nowhere near as effective as a cloaking device, but against the background radiation of the surrounding nebula the vessel’s signature was greatly diminished.

Ramirez stood from her seat, walking to the upper deck of the bridge to get a firsthand view of the probe’s telemetry. Focusing on Sandhurst, she postulated, “There could very well be survivors, sir. Picard’s logs of their encounter with the Son’a nine months ago indicate the mountains surrounding the village are rife with kelbonite deposits.”

Picking up on Ramirez’s line of reasoning, Lar’ragos added, “If they’d followed those kelbonite veins they’d be virtually undetectable to sensors, sir.”

Sandhurst emitted a reluctant grunt from the command chair. “Maybe, but we’ll have to break cover to find out for sure.”

“We could make a stealth approach,” Ramirez offered. “Keep power systems at minimum and ramp up just enough speed to coast into the system at one-sixteenth impulse?”

“And we’d only spend a week crawling to the planet at that velocity,” Plazzi commented dryly, rolling his eyes.

“Ten hours, actually, sir.” Lightner offered from the Helm.

“Any faster and our EM emissions and thermal signature will light us up like a beacon, Elisto.” Ramirez said defensively.

The heavyset, bearded scientist’s response was accompanied by an expansive shrug, “Don’t shoot the messenger, Commander.”

Lar’ragos frowned, “If it weren’t for the speed restrictions imposed by the nebular density, I’d suggest a near-warp transport. Jump into orbit, beam down an away team, and warp out before anyone could respond.”

Juneau joined the conversation, sounding incredulous, “And leave the away team stranded?”

Meeting her gaze impassively, Lar’ragos answered, “I prefer the term ‘engaged in detached operations.’”

Her eyes narrowed and the junior lieutenant shot back with, “Sounds a lot like ‘abandoned’ to me, sir.”

Sandhurst started to interject between the squabbling officers when Ensign Lightner coughed into his fist, “Shuttle!”

They turned their heads collectively to look at the young helmsman. He grinned broadly, swiveling around in his chair like a stage performer in the center spotlight. “A Type-8 shuttle has a significantly lower sensor return than a starship. I can put an away team on the surface with a very good chance of zero-detection by potential threat forces and still be in position for an emergency egress should things get hairy.”

A slow smile spread across Sandhurst’s face. “That’s quite a boast, Ensign.” Turning to Ramirez, the captain gave her an expectant look. “Well?”

Cocking her head to one side, she pursed her lips thoughtfully. “Best idea I’ve heard so far, though it does leave the away team vulnerable. At half impulse, it will still take Gibraltar well over an hour to reach the planet from our present coordinates.”

Juneau looked pointedly at Lar’ragos, mouthing ‘stranded’ and eliciting an icy glare in return.

Lightner cleared his throat. “We’ve seen no signs of capital ships anywhere in the vicinity of this system, sir. If the Alshain have anything smaller hiding nearby, we’ll still stand a very good chance of outrunning them long enough for you to come to our rescue.”

“And you’re comfortable operating in a ‘detached’ capacity, Exec?”

“Aye, sir.” Ramirez affirmed with a wry smile. “I’ll need a security detachment, a science officer, a medic, and of course, a pilot.” Looking behind her at Plazzi, Ramirez inquired, “You ready for away duty, Mr. Optimist?”

Plazzi leaned against a console, touching a hand to his chest dramatically. “Oh, no, sir. I’m afraid my skills are too valuable to the captain and crew for me to risk myself on such a harrowing assignment.” Gesturing to the tall African man seated beside him, Plazzi said, “Ensign Shanthi has been requesting more planet-side experience and I think this would be a terrific opportunity for him to display his aptitude.”

To his credit, Shanthi actually did look enthused at the prospect. Sandhurst was briefly torn, a small part of him hesitating to send the only son of Fleet Admiral Thousana Shanthi into harm’s way. He caught Ramirez’s steady gaze out of the corner of his eye, and her non-verbal message came through loud and clear. ‘The man’s a Starfleet officer. Let him do his job.’

“Alright, Commander. See to it.”

Ramirez moved to the lift, triggering the doors to open. “Lar’ragos, Lightner, and Shanthi, you’re with me.”

As the officers filed past into the turbolift, Lar’ragos turned to the helmsman. “I hope your flying is as sharp as that silver tongue, kid. I’ll take substance over style any day.”

Lightner just smiled wistfully, vowing to let his piloting skills speak for him.

Following them into the lift car, Ramirez chuckled, “He’ll be okay, Pava, so long as he steers away from dragons this time.”

A moment after the doors closed on the away party, Sandhurst stood. Looking to Ojana, he said, “Commander Pell, would you join me in the ready room?” Glancing at Plazzi as he headed for the door to his office, he murmured, “Elisto, you have the conn.”

Pell followed the captain inside, observing him as he rounded the desk and settled lightly into his chair. “Computer, recognize Donald M. Sandhurst, Captain.”

“Recognized.”

“I am logging a temporary transfer of executive officer authority to Lt. Commander Pell Ojana. Authorization, Sandhurst Tango-Epsilon-Zero-Four-Zero.”

The computer processed that with a series of quick tones. “Temporary transfer of stated authorities logged and accepted.”

Pell looked at Sandhurst pensively. “Expecting trouble?”

He shook his head, “Precautionary. Should something happen to me, you’re the most qualified officer onboard to take command.”

She looked doubtful, “What might happen to you?”

Locking eyes with her, he replied evenly, “The possibilities are limitless.”

“What about Commander Plazzi?”

“He’s not command certified, and he’s spent most of the past two decades teaching planetary geology at Berkley.” Sandhurst forced himself to settle back into the chair and relax, though his instincts were howling for him to take some kind of action in the face of his mounting anxiety. “You, on the other hand, are an experienced first officer with all the necessary certificates and qualifications.”

Pell pulled out a chair and took a seat across the desk from him. “Would you like to tell me what this is really about?”

“Absolutely.” Sandhurst interlaced his fingers, resting his hands in his lap. “It’s about uncertainty, and my wanting this ship and crew to survive whatever might be in store for us out there.” He pointed in the general direction of the Ba’ku planet.

She searched his eyes, a hint of disapproval in her features. “You were never this much of a fatalist, Donald.”

He met her gaze unflinchingly. “The man you’re looking for isn’t in there anymore, Ojana.”

“And he’s been replaced with whom?”

Sandhurst answered after only a second’s hesitation. “The captain.”

*****

Forward Observation Post B'hala
Aulerg Moon
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


Vadark Jobrin Adnai stepped into the room hesitantly, awed by the ethereal glow of one of the Orbs of the Prophets. The holy icon floated within its open containment vessel, casting a shimmering radiance upon the form of the leader of the Bajora Tava as he prayed before it. Jobrin was uncomfortable intruding upon the man as he embraced the physical representation of their religion, but he had been summoned.

The vadark knelt, holding his arms out with palms up in a gesture of supplication. “Emissary, I am to serve.”

Closing the containment case reverentially, the Emissary ceased his contemplation on the Orb of Transcendence. Rising slowly, he turned to look upon the vadark, the chief military officer of the Bajora Army of Light. “Adnai, my friend. Rise.” Jobrin stood obediently, moving to the Emissary’s side. “And what is it that our new Son’a friends ask of us now?”

“A protection detail, Emissary. They wish to send a ship to the Ba’ku planet to ‘reclaim their genetic heritage.’” Jobrin’s mouth twitched with dark amusement at the notion. “Their words, not mine. Had they not chosen to pollute their bodies with artificial organs and their heretical longevity treatments, perhaps they would not now need to sift through the remains of their parent’s village looking for bits of flesh and bone to render for their DNA sequences.”

The tall, white haired man harrumphed with a kind of detached disdain, “Perhaps, Adnai, perhaps. The collapse of the Son’a civilization may well be the will of the Prophets, but it has not yet been revealed to me as such. Until then, we must aid them when and where we can. The Alshain pogrom against them is too similar to what we suffered at the hands of the Desecrators.” So hated were the Cardassians by the Emissary that he would not deign to speak their name.

Nodding deferentially, Jobrin intoned, “It is your will that guides my hands, Emissary.”

“And if we can help them to overcome this assault on their nation, they may become powerful allies in our bid to free Bajor from the yoke of the Desecrators.”

“As you say, Emissary.”

The spiritual and military leader of the Bajora Tava stood in contemplative silence for a moment. “Send a squadron of our ships to guarantee safe passage for the Son’a to the planet. They are to provide overwatch and see to their safe return.” He reached out a hand, brushing Jobrin’s earlobe before grasping the man’s shoulder in a gesture of camaraderie. “Your pagh remains strong, Adnai. It burns like a star. You must remain true to this course, despite your misgivings with the Son’a. They have strayed from the path the Prophets set out before them, and they have been punished as a result. However, with our help, they will come to realize the folly of striving for eternal life in the physical universe.”

Jobrin bowed his head silently.

Patting his shoulder, the Emissary offered the customary parting salutation. “Free Bajor.” It was as much a prayer as a statement of intent.

“Free Bajor,” came Jobrin’s reply, as he moved to do the Emissary’s bidding.

****

Sickbay - USS Gibraltar

“Can I have a moment, Lieutenant?”

Taiee looked up from her work, then nodded curtly as she stood to join Dr. Murakawa. “Of course, sir.”

She followed Murakawa from the main ward into the corridor just outside the CMO’s office. The doctor turned to face her, “Commander Ramirez is assembling an away team to travel by shuttle to the Ba’ku planet. My first inclination is to go with them, but seeing as this is your ship and crew, I thought I’d give you the choice of joining the mission.”

Without pause, Taiee announced. “I’m in.”

Murakawa nodded approvingly, taking note of the nurse’s strong attachment to her crewmates. “When you get back, we’re going to sit down and go over the 24/QPS. Both you and your staff are more than proficient enough to pass this test, but I’ve got the feeling you’re psyching yourself out.”

Taiee looked away, choking back an angry retort. Finally reestablishing eye contact, she replied. “Aye, sir.”

“Gather your gear and report to the shuttle bay.”

*****

The team members were busy packing every square centimeter of the shuttle Heyerdahl with equipment and supplies when Taiee lugged her medical pack and away mission gear through the pressure doors. A chorus of whoops and celebratory shouts greeted her as she approached.

Ramirez poked her head out the lowered aft hatch of the shuttle, “Doc, you’ve come to join the party. Welcome.”

Taiee set her gear on the deck, and walked along the side of the shuttle, running her hand over the name emblazoned on the side of the craft. Stenciled neatly below the name of the famous 20th century explorer was the title, ‘Gibraltar Ambulance Service, Holograms Need Not Apply.”

Looking into the cockpit through the window, she found Lightner in the pilot’s seat and gave him a mock accusatory glare. Pointing to the shuttle’s designation, she shouted, “This your idea, smartass?” The last time she’d been aboard the Heyerdahl, she’d been medically evacuated in the shuttle from an attack on a Cardassian refugee camp.

Activating the shuttle’s exterior speakers, Lightner replied, “We’ve only got four shuttles, Lieutenant. There’s a rotation.” He emphasized his point by making an exaggerated rotational gesture with his hands. Taiee laughed in response, returning to haul her gear onboard and stow it with Lar’ragos’ assistance.

Giving Taiee a welcoming smile, Pava said, “Glad to have you with us, Doc.”

As she settled into the side-bench seating between two security personnel, Taiee came to the strange realization that given the choice, this is exactly where she would choose to be in all the universe.

Ramirez slid into the copilot’s seat next to Lightner, helping to finish the preflight checklist. Satisfied that they were loaded and ready, she glanced back into the main cabin. “Okay folks, everyone settled in?”

One by one, each of the occupants replied with a raised thumb.

“Alright, then.” Toggling the comms, she announced, “Bridge, shuttle Heyerdahl ready for departure.”

“Acknowledged Heyerdahl,” came Juneau’s reply from Ops. “You are cleared for departure. Suggest you take an initial heading of 273-mark-042 to avoid cometary obstructions.”

Settling his hands on the controls, Lightner looked totally at peace with the universe. “And away we go…”

*****
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 7

Another solid installment. I absolutely loved Wuuten's explanation for why the Son'a joined the Dominion. It makes perfect sense. Well thought out rationale.

All of your character interaction scenes were on the money as well. I really enjoyed seeing more of Lightner and Taiee.

The Bajora Tava, with their own Emissary ( I wonder how Sisko and Kira would feel about that?), and the "Free Bajor" saying, are already on their way to becoming perhaps my favorite Star Trek Gibraltar adversaries. If they are in fact adversaries.
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 7

DarKush said:
Another solid installment. I absolutely loved Wuuten's explanation for why the Son'a joined the Dominion. It makes perfect sense. Well thought out rationale.

All of your character interaction scenes were on the money as well. I really enjoyed seeing more of Lightner and Taiee.

The Bajora Tava, with their own Emissary ( I wonder how Sisko and Kira would feel about that?), and the "Free Bajor" saying, are already on their way to becoming perhaps my favorite Star Trek Gibraltar adversaries. If they are in fact adversaries.

Agreed, everything Darkush said. Everything. And, I loved Lightner in this chapter. I'm hoping to see even more development of his character in this one. :thumbsup:
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 7

Another solid installment. I absolutely loved Wuuten's explanation for why the Son'a joined the Dominion. It makes perfect sense. Well thought out rationale.

This seemed to make so much sense and seemed such an obvious alliance that I thought it was established in the movie or the show at first. Only then I realized: This is all you.

Excellent.

I didn't get the joke about the 'Holograms need not apply'

Otherwise this is a remarkably solid story that only promises to get better with each chapter. I continue to be impressed. Looking forward to more.
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 7

Thanks for the compliments, folks. :) I'm glad you're still hanging with it.

I didn't get the joke about the 'Holograms need not apply'
That was an inside joke aimed at Taiee. The 'Gibraltar Ambulance Service' was a reference to her being hauled back to the ship onboard the Heyerdahl after the attack on the Glanisuur refugee camp. The 'Holograms Neet Not Apply' was in reference to Taiee's ongoing conflict with Dr. Murakawa in regards to her use of the EMH.
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 7

A very good and powerful chapter. I found your reasoning behind a Son'a/Dominion alliance to be most plausible. The Bajora Tava also are an interesting wrinkle--they're not going to like it when they find out the Son'a have been lying to them.

I also like how you're maintaining the tension between Taiee and Murakawa--Taiee is being tempered and will end up a better, more effective officer. Plus the 'Gibraltar Ambulance Service: Holograms Need Not Apply' was a nice touch. Lightner is also coming into his own as a character.

One of the things I like about splitting off small groups of the crew on shuttle missions etc. like what you're doing now and what I did in "Ties" is that it does give you the opportunity--actually it forces you--to really develop the characters you're working with.

Nicely done and I'm looking forward to reading more.
 
Prophets and Loss - Chapter 8

Chapter 8

Shuttle Heyerdahl
En-route to Planet Ba’ku,
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


The shuttle Heyerdahl bulled through the nebular gasses at one-quarter impulse on a heading for Ba’ku. In the back of the craft, the security, science, and medical personnel all checked and re-checked their equipment in a complex ballet of activity designed as much to allay their pre-mission jitters as it was to ensure their safety.

Having ramped the engines to full for a brief burst of speed, they were now coasting towards their destination, trying to project the most minimal EM cross-section possible. In the darkened cockpit, Ramirez finished situating the gear on her tactical vest. Looking over at Lightner in the pilot’s seat, she inquired, “So, how’s your brother doing?”

Lightner’s entire body tensed at the mention of his brother. He hadn’t been aware that Ramirez even knew of his sibling’s sordid history, though in retrospect he knew he shouldn’t be surprised. His brother’s Maquis affiliations featured prominently in Brett’s own service records.

Reading the ensign’s reaction, Ramirez allowed, “It’s okay if you don’t want to discuss it; I realize it’s a personal issue for you.”

“No, sir… it’s okay. It’s just that I honestly don’t know where he’s got to. Karl was released from prison a month ago, but neither my parents nor I have heard from him since.”

Ramirez pondered that. “Any idea where he’s headed?”

Sighing, Lightner murmured, “For all I know Karl could be headed back to Ronara Prime.”

The exec frowned, “That’s in Cardassian territory now; he couldn’t hope to head back there. He’d be thrown in detention the moment he stepped off the transport.”

“Three years in prison haven’t done anything to mitigate his views on our old colony’s sovereignty. Karl’s just one of those people who can’t admit when he’s wrong. He’d rather die first.”

Studying the young officer’s features, Ramirez ventured, “Starfleet Intelligence reports there are whispers of a Maquis resurgence among their members who survived the Dominion purges in the DMZ.”

Lightner checked their course and speed, making a slight adjustment with the maneuvering thrusters in the bow. “That wouldn’t surprise me. I’m sure in Karl’s mind he’d not only be trying to retake his home, but avenge the deaths of all his Maquis comrades.” He shook his head in frustration, “It’s a vicious cycle.”

“How do you feel about that?”

Lightner turned to face her, looking as severe as she’d ever seen the usually lighthearted youth. “I love my brother, Commander. Despite everything he’s put my parents and I through, I still believe that there’s a decent man somewhere at the core of him.” He turned back to the flight controls. “That being said, if he’s taking up arms against the Federation again, I’ll hunt that son-of-a-bitch down myself.”

Ramirez knew that Brett blamed his brother’s Maquis connections for his being assigned to a mere escort ship after having graduated in the top third of his academy class. Like any talented pilot fresh from the academy he’d yearned for a position with a fighter squadron or with a more formidable ship of the line.

Turning her attention back to the planet that now loomed large in the viewport, Ramirez commented, “All things considered, Ensign, I hope it doesn’t come to that.”

*****

Kuenre Shanthi sat wedged uncomfortably between a security specialist and Pava Lar’ragos. He’d carried out a brief inspection of his equipment, tricorder, hand phaser, and various specialized science gear, but now felt self-conscious as he watched the others repeatedly checking theirs. Leaning over to Lar’ragos, he asked, “Why do you keep doing that, sir?”

Lar’ragos gave him an amused look as he locked the power cell back into his phaser sidearm. “I can’t speak for the others, but for me it’s pure superstition.”

Shanthi looked equal parts confused and skeptical.

Continuing, Lar’ragos explained, “I check all my equipment five times before each deployment as a kind of good-luck ritual.”

Still appearing incredulous, Shanthi asked, “Whatever for?”

“Fear,” Lar’ragos smiled patiently. “It helps me to deal with my anxiety.”

“You still get anxious? After all these years of service?”

Lar’ragos nodded, checking the propellant pressure on a strange, non-Starfleet looking gun that he slipped into a holster on his tactical vest. “Every time.”

Shanthi frowned, “I’d hoped that eventually I’d learn to stop feeling like this before a mission.”

“Fear is your friend, Ensign.” The older man looked at the young science officer, his expression serious. “It keeps you from taking foolish risks when they aren’t necessary.”

Shanthi digested that. “How will I know when they are necessary?”

Smirking, Lar’ragos finished his ritual fiddling. Placing his hands on his knees he leaned back against the bulkhead and closed his eyes. “Don’t worry, Ensign. You’ll know.”

Nodding wordlessly, Shanthi pulled his phaser from his holster, and began field stripping the weapon.

*****

“Sir, we have a sensor contact.”

Prylar-Captain Bral Insofuss shifted in his seat within the cramped cockpit of the Bajora-Tavan Taluno-class attack ship. Accessing the incoming sensor readings, Bral squinted at the meager return. “Whatever it is, it’s small.”

“Yes, sir. I’d guess a shuttle or a small corvette. Extremely low power emissions. It appears to be moving on inertial thrust only.”

“How close?”

The combat-sensor officer made some quick calculations. “At its present speed, the craft will enter planetary orbit around Ba’ku in less than ten minutes.” He adjusted the sensors to filter out more of the background radiation caused by the surrounding nebula. “It’s pure chance that I detected it, sir. It was only the ship’s differential against the backdrop of the Prophet’s Veil that made its approach briefly visible.”

“Is it Alshain?”

Studying the hazy computer-generated cross-section of the incoming ship, Bral’s underling looked dubious. “I don’t think so, sir. Even the tiniest of their small craft tend to be larger than this. I don’t recognize the design.”

“Understood.”

Craning his neck to see around the side of his acceleration chair the combat-sensor officer noted, “I would point out that it appears to be on a deliberate stealth approach, Prylar-Captain.”

“You’re implying there could be more that we’ve yet to detect?”

“Yes, sir.”

Bral reached up and pulled the communications screen down on its swing-arm. “Maintain sensor contact, and prepare to shadow the vessel if it moves to land on the surface.” Activating a heavily encrypted tachyon transmitter beam, he opened an emergency channel. “This is Sentry Four to FOB B'hala. Contact report to follow…”

*****

Son’a Battlecruiser Ru’afo
Joint Son’a/Bajora Tava Ba’ku Mission
En-route to Planet Ba’ku,
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


Adhar, incoming message from the Bajoran outpost.” The Elloran comms officer turned in her chair to direct a concerned look at Wuuten. “They say an unidentified spacecraft has just landed on Ba’ku, only a few kilometers from the village. The Bajorans have a ship tailing the intruders but have not yet made contact. They’re asking for instructions, sir.”

Wuuten cast a glance from his throne-like chair to where Vadark Jobrin Adnai stood, flanked by his personal protection detail. The adhar addressed the vadark, “What would you have me tell them?”

Jobrin’s expression was neutral. “Are they your enemy?”

Shifting uneasily in his chair, Wuuten again silently cursed the need for joint leadership on this mission. The Bajorans were too concerned with the moral implications of their actions, not wishing to give unintentional offense to their Prophets. “They are trespassing on Ba’ku. Is that not provocation enough?”

“Do you not already have enemies enough, without making more by stumbling blindly in the dark?”

Wuuten held his temper in check, though only barely. “It can only be two possibilities, Vadark. They are Alshain, in which case, we should set upon them without mercy. Or, they are Federation, allies to the Alshain and enemies to the Son’a people.” He allowed his eyes to meet and hold the vadark’s icily impassive gaze. “Either way, the outcome should be the same.”

Jobrin closed his eyes, murmuring a prayer under his breath as he sought the counsel of the Prophets. Two minutes passed in tense silence before Jobrin finished his discourse with the divine. “You may tell them to close with and capture these trespassers, Adhar. Then we may determine what kind of threat they pose.”

‘Why can’t these people ever make anything easy?’ Wuuten fumed internally. Turning back to the comms officer, he said, “Tell them to engage and capture the intruders, and that their actions carry the blessing of the ranking vadark.”

It would still be three hours before the Ru’afo and her Bajoran escorts arrived in the Ba’ku system. The battle would be underway before then, and Wuuten savored the idea of joining the ensuing melee. If it were representatives of the Federation, he would kill them slowly for having wrecked his people’s attempt at collecting the restorative energies of their homeworld. Bajorans or no, Wuuten vowed he would have his pound of flesh, and then some.

*****

USS Bellerophon
Federation Task Force Peacekeeper
Retreating from the Delta Arigulon System
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


“Wait… wait for it…” Captain T’Agdi coughed into her sleeve as she watched the approaching Alshain cruiser on the grainy, flickering main viewscreen. Smoke drifted throughout the bridge, and half the consoles were inoperative. Three of her senior staff were in Sickbay, two of them were dead. She could barely bring herself to think about the fate that had befallen her away team to the doomed Elloran colony. Their desperate cries for help had been cut short by an orbital bombardment that had vaporized the colony and every living thing within a twenty kilometer radius of the settlement.

T’Agdi had wanted to turn around and attempt a rescue of her people, but the damage from the Son’a orbital mine had made that impossible. Instead, the ship had been forced to seek escape from its pursuers as the away team was obliterated. She would not sacrifice her entire crew for twenty-six people, now matter how badly she felt about abandoning them.

Bellerophon’s distress calls to the Argonaut had gone unanswered, and in an act of sheer desperation, T’Agdi had ordered the launch of twelve probes rigged with subspace communications relays toward star systems within the Briar Patch scheduled to be reconnoitered by other task force vessels.

The crippled starship had then fled, limping from one occluding cloud to another as the Alshain warships prowled the area like sharks following a blood trail.

Now, one of those sharks had wandered too close to where Bellerophon had gone to ground.

“… Wait… wait…” T’Agdi leaned forward as the cruiser entered their established kill zone. “Fire!” she roared, sending a concentrated phaser spread followed by four photon torpedoes at their enemy.

“Direct hits, sir. Their port shields are damaged and I’m reading structural weakening all along their port quarter.”

T’Agdi leaned back in her chair, “Now the quantums, Lieutenant.” She watched with muted satisfaction as the two bluish missiles streaked towards the warship on the viewer. Blasting through the cruiser’s depleted shields, the torpedoes detonated against the ship’s hull, buckling the superstructure and sending white-hot electrical discharges arcing across the outer surface of the craft.

“Captain, sensors indicate main power has failed aboard the cruiser. Shields are down, and their propulsion systems are offline.”

Calling back to the senior chief manning Tactical, T’Agdi ordered, “Phasers only, Chief. Disable their weapons emplacements and engines. I don’t want to see these people again any time soon.”

As the phasers cycled in accordance with her wishes, the captain gestured to the Helm station. “Get us out of here, Mr. Crowley.”

“Evasive pattern, sir?”

“Yes, initiate evasive pattern run-the-hell-away, best speed.”

This brought a few grim smiles despite the bleakness of their circumstances. The battered Intrepid-class starship slid from her berth within the cloud of fluorine and made a dash for a nearby stellar crèche, where T’Agdi hoped the radiation and fluctuating magnetic fields would dissuade the Alshain from pursuing them further.

‘I don’t so much mind playing cat and mouse with these bastards,’ the Caitian thought dolefully, recalling the human aphorism. ‘But how the hell did I end up playing the part of the mouse?’

*****

USS Enterprise
Federation Task Force Peacekeeper
In orbit of Son’a administrated Tarlac colony Norfander XII
The Briar Patch (Klach D'Kel Brakt)


Silence reigned on the bridge of the Enterprise as the crew tried to absorb the enormity of the tragedy that had consumed Norfander XII. The debris field still held a generally spherical shape, suggesting that a planet had once occupied this particular point in the cosmos. What had once been a vibrant, living world had been reduced to assorted rubble.

Picard cleared his throat, rising slowly from his chair. “Mr. Data, any signs of escape craft that might have survived?”

“No, Captain.” Data’s voice was troublingly free of inflection, a clue that he’d taken the opportunity to deactivate his emotion chip.

Deanna Troi followed Picard to her feet, stepping forward, her eyes wide with disbelief. “What did this?” Her expression shifting to one of mounting anger, she looked to the android at Ops. “Who did this, Data?”

“The energy signature permeating the planetary debris is consistent with the detonation of a Class-7 subspace weapon, Counselor.” Shifting in his seat to glance back at Picard, he added, “As we learned from our firsthand experience with them, the Son’a regularly arm their vessels with such devices, sir.”

“Are we in any danger, here?” This from Riker, who was studying the sensor returns on his console.

“Not at present, Commander. However, I would recommend increasing power to shields if we intend to move any closer to the asteroid field.”

Troi was still processing Data’s assessment. “But this was a Tarlac colony. Why would the Son’a destroy an entire planet of their own servants?”

“Maybe they didn’t want it falling into Alshain hands,” offered Riker. “In the history of human warfare it was referred to as a ‘scorched earth’ policy. As you retreat you destroy anything of value that could be used by your attackers.”

Forcing her eyes away from the screen, Troi murmured, “Unbelievable.”

Picard finally tore himself from his dark reverie, turning to face his senior staff. “Let’s not jump to conclusions. If a forensic examination is what’s in order to determine culpability here, then that’s what we’ll do. The guilty party must be identified and brought to justice.”

“Correct me if I’m mistaken, Captain,” spoke Lt. Commander Seb N’Saba from the Science station, “But wouldn’t hunting down the offending party here exceed our purview as established by Starfleet Command?”

Riker shot to his feet, but Picard waved him off. The captain turned to face N’Saba. “I take it you disagree, Commander?”

“To be frank, sir, either side in this conflict is equally capable of having committed this atrocity. It was my understanding that we were dispatched here to attempt to establish a diplomatic dialogue between the warring factions, and failing that we were to evacuate non-combatants from the nebula.” N’Saba’s ears twitched with indignation, “I fail to see how launching a punitive campaign against whichever nation is responsible for this war crime meets those criteria.”

Deciding a change in venue would be more appropriate for this conversation, Picard stepped towards his ready room door, looking back to the Science station. “Mr. N’Saba, join me in my ready room.” The Alshain stood from his console, walking calmly past the incensed XO and followed Picard into his office.

Taking a seat behind his desk, Picard marshaled his composure before addressing the outspoken science officer. “I’m not accustomed to having my orders questioned openly on the bridge, Commander. I realize you’re new to this ship, and I’m willing to make allowances to a point.” He directed a hard stare at N’Saba. “You have now reached that point, Mr. N’Saba.”

Unflustered, Seb replied “Permission to speak candidly, Captain?”

Picard nodded, “Granted.”

“I understand what you’re trying to accomplish here, sir. Your goals are laudable, and are in the finest tradition of both Starfleet and the Federation.” N’Saba straightened, his ears flattening as he anticipated an adverse reaction. “That being said, Captain, this is a fool’s errand.”

Pursing his lips, Picard muttered incredulously, “Is that so, Commander?”

“Neither side here gives a damn about our overdeveloped Federation morality, sir. They mean to kill one another, and if we get in their way, they’ll have no compunction about cutting through us to get at their enemy.”

“And what would you recommend we do?”

N’Saba answered quickly and with utter sincerity. “Gather what refugees we can and immediately withdraw from the Briar Patch, Captain. Nothing awaits us here but death and sorrow.”

Picard stood, “I appreciate your viewpoint, Commander, but you’re going to need to—“

“Riker to Picard.”

“Go ahead, Number One.”

“Captain, we’ve detected an incoming message buoy that appears to be from the Bellerophon. They say they’ve come under attack by the Alshain Starforce in the Delta Arigulon system and need immediate assistance. They also indicate they’ve lost contact with the Argonaut, sir.”

Frowning, Picard tried to ignore the vaguely satisfied look on N’Saba’s face as he made for the door. “Mr. N’Saba, we’ll have to continue this conversation later. In the interim, I expect you to use greater discretion in front of the crew.”

Following the captain back onto the bridge, N’Saba replied obediently. “Of course, sir.”

*****

Planet Ba’ku
Dorian Mountains


Ramirez paused to take a break in the away team’s rigorous hike. “Alright, people, ten minutes.” Following her lead, the remainder of the group stopped to drop their packs and rest. They had been ascending a worn path up the ridge face of one of the mountains overlooking what had been the Ba’ku village.

The breathtaking vistas of snow capped peaks crowning densely forested valleys were intoxicating after so many months aboard ship. Even the slightly agoraphobic Ramirez, raised aboard a space station, had to admit the view was stunning.

The group had left the shuttle hidden under camouflage netting in a valley below, hoping that the ruse in conjunction with a localized sensor scattering field would conceal the presence of the craft.

They were following in the footsteps of the Ba’ku who’d fled the Son’a attack on their community the year before with the assistance of the Enterprise’s senior officers. The away team was climbing towards the cave system that had sheltered the refugees from that incident. The hope was that those Ba’ku who’d been away from the village when the Alshain obliterated it from orbit would retrace their steps and seek shelter in the same caverns.

Lightner set his pack down took a seat next to Saihra Dunleavy from Lar’ragos’ security detail. The pilot had been pleasantly surprised when, against his expectations, Ramirez had ordered him to accompany the rest of the team. He’d anticipated getting stuck babysitting the shuttle. Ramirez had reminded him that in order to qualify for advancement, it helped to have active away mission experience.

Smiling shyly at Dunleavy, he opened a ration packet from his backpack and withdrew a pair of energy bars. Offering one to the petty officer, he blushed slightly as she accepted the bar with a wink. “Careful, Ensign,” she admonished, “You’re going to turn the shade of your collar.” He’d admired the young woman from afar for months, repeatedly struggling with the impulse to pursue her romantically. She’d apparently picked up on the vibe, and constantly took advantage of his unwillingness to approach her openly about his intentions.

A few meters further up the trail, Lar’ragos squatted on his haunches, studying the patterns of woodland debris littered atop the surface of the rocky pathway. Ramirez approached, crouching down beside him. “Lieutenant?”

Pointing to some random looking patterns in the pine-needle analogues covering the path, Lar’ragos said, “Someone or something has been through here recently. Whatever it was, it was at least as big as a humanoid adult.” He looked around, breathing in a deep draught of the crisp mountain air. “It’s likely animals use this trail as well, and with the interference from the kelbonite, the tricorder’s no help.”

“So, maybe-maybe not.” Ramirez assessed

He nodded unhappily, “That’s pretty much the size of it. Unless someone’s left a more pronounced track farther up the trail, we’ll have to wait until we reach the caves to see if anyone’s home.”

She chuckled, “Let me guess, in addition to all your other misadventures, you were also a big game hunter?”

“Quite the opposite,” he replied in a heavy voice, his briefly haunted expression erasing the amusement on Ramirez’s features. “I was prey. Learning to cover my tracks was a high priority.”

The exec had no response to that disclosure, and merely gave Lar’ragos a curious look.

“There are worse things in the Delta Quadrant than the Borg, Commander.” Lar’ragos elaborated cryptically, then stood and stretched.

Rising to her feet, Ramirez reached out and put a hand on the El-Aurian’s arm, stopping him as he was about to turn back to the rest of the party. “If I haven’t said so before, it’s good to have the old Pava back.”

His smile washed away his earlier gloom. “Thank you, sir. It’s good to be back.”

Moving past the security chief, Ramirez announced. “Break’s over, folks. We’ve got another eight kilometers to cover before nightfall.” Despite the physical exertion required of this mission, there were no complaints from the team members. The view more than compensated for a few aching muscles.

*****

Prylar-Captain Bral finished putting on the last of his reconnaissance/combat gear, sliding a lethal looking knife into a scabbard on his thigh. As he slung his rifle over one shoulder Bral spared a glance at the path snaking upward into the mountains looming overhead. The Bajora-Tava had landed their attack ship as stealthily as possible in the foothills of the mountain range, preparing to set out on foot in pursuit of the intruders.

Bral’s comlink crackled, “Feina to Prylar-Captain, we’ve located the intruder’s craft. It appears to be a small shuttle and its markings indicate it’s some kind of medical transport.”

“Acknowledged, Feina,” he replied. “Tactical assessment?”

“Low-yield phasers only, sir. It certainly doesn’t appear they came armed for bear. The craft was crudely camouflaged and they attempted to mask it with a distortion field.”

“Understood. Put an observation team on the shuttle in case they return to it before we’ve tracked them down. Then return to the ship with the remainder of your detachment. We’ll be leaving on a pursuit mission in five minutes, and you’ll be in command until I return. Remember, this is a capture detail. No lethal force unless absolutely necessary.”

“Yes, Prylar-Captain.”

He deactivated the comlink, sighing. ‘And now, in their wisdom, our leaders have us hunting doctors through the mountains.’ Bral thought dourly. Their new Son’a allies did not sit well with the young captain, who found their obsession with youth and longevity to be a perversion of the Prophet’s grand design.

Regardless, he was a soldier-priest in the Army of Light, and he had his orders. Distasteful as they were, he would see them through. He turned to examine his men, clad in their newly acquired mimetic combat armor. It had taken more than a generation to train and forge such elite warriors, and he looked on them with the pride of a father for his children. ‘Prophet’s help the people we seek here this day,’ he mused, ‘For we will be like the hara cat hunting the hapless vole.’

“Move out!” he ordered, activating the holomatrix embedded into his armor as he and his men began their ascent.

*****
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 8

Niiiiice! And special kudos to Seb N'saba for having the guts to point out to baldy that there may be a flaw in his thinking!

And Ramirez is right. It's nice to have Lar'ragos back!
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 8

I have to repeat my earlier praise on the warrior-monks. They are a very clever inventions and the more I read about them the more intriguing I find them. I also love the dynamic you are creating among your characters here.

I am still not convinced if I like the way your treating the Enterprise crew though and it will probably be hard for you to convince me otherwise (which of course is not, necessarily, your job).

While I think you capture the tone of the characters meticlously here I'm also getting slightly wary of the many times your characters have pointed out to Picard & Co what a bad idea this whole mission is. I would hate to see this all turn out into a big 'I-told-you-so'-triumph at the end.

Having uttered my usual criticism I am still entirely rapt to see what will happen next.
 
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CeJay said:I am still not convinced if I like the way your treating the Enterprise crew though and it will probably be hard for you to convince me otherwise (which of course is not, necessarily, your job).
Picard's no idiot, and I certainly hope I haven't portrayed him as such. He's advocated a risky course of action, and war-weary colleagues have voiced their criticisms. It’s true there’s plenty of danger inherent in this mission, but success could help stabilize a vital border region at a time when the Federation can least afford such conflicts.

We’ll just have to wait and see what happens. :D
 
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Gibraltar said:
CeJay said:I am still not convinced if I like the way your treating the Enterprise crew though and it will probably be hard for you to convince me otherwise (which of course is not, necessarily, your job).
Picard's no idiot, and I certainly hope I haven't portrayed him as such. He's advocated a risky course of action, and war-weary colleagues have voiced their criticisms. It’s true there’s plenty of danger inherent in this mission, but success could help stabilize a vital border region at a time when the Federation can least afford such conflicts.

Actually, I firmly believe Picard is an idiot, and that assessment has nothing to do with your portrayal of him, G. In fact, if your Picard does come across as an idiot, I feel that all it means is that you´re keeping him solidly in character.

But that´s just me. Anywho, I stick with my previous opinion of the latest chapter.
 
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Gibraltar said:
CeJay said:
Actually, I firmly believe Picard is an idiot

You're only saying that because he's French ... :lol:
Please do not taunt the cheese eating surrender monkeys! :devil:

Be careful with the taunting of the French, or they may fart in your general direction. And we have enough trouble with all the cow flatulence. :p

And, on topic, I'm reading the chapter tonight, my friend, I promise. :cool:
 
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Cut the anti-french comments please. That sort of bigotry doesn't fly on this BBS. :)
 
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S'okay, I actually have nothing against the French. My great-grandmother was French. They are, however, deliciously fun to taunt! :lol: I've always wondered why the French in the 24th century speak with a British accent, though? Was there an invasion we weren't privy to, perhance?
 
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Oh Absolutely - as a Brit, the entente cordiale has always contained a healthy amount of cross channel insult, both ways. However, that doesn't show up on a BBS, and bigotry is something we have to be watchful for.
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 8

Once again, just a wonderful chapter to read. As I've said before, I very much like the way you convey information, background, philosophy, etc., via dialogue, vs. straight narration (e.g., conversation re: Lightner's brother, Lar'ragos and Shanthi re: "fear", the Bajora-Tava philosophy and tension with the Son'a.) I was especially taken with Lar'ragos' explanation of his preparatory ritual and the healthy role of fear. Reminded me of things I've seen and heard from people who've actually been in combat (including my late father-in-law and a friend who was in Iraq 1.) And, as always, I loved your additional little insights into Lar'ragos past. The idea of him having learned his tracking skills from "the other side" was very nice. Equally nice was how you "allowed" Ramirez actually to have no response to his revelation. That's real. In real life, people don't always have a witty or even sage response to something like that, as they often do in the media.

I also have to say again, I really appreciate your concise summaries of relevant information from prior movies. One of the frustrations I have with the "published" Trek novel I'm reading now (a sequel) is the excruciating detail the author goes into reminding the reader what happened in the last book. While I know this is necessary to an extent -- due to the time lag -- I frankly think you do a much better job of hitting the salient high points, without dragging down the pace of the story.

Also, as I believe I've said previously, I definitely agree that your portrayal of Picard (and Riker) is spot on, but I don't think he's an idiot. I liked the scene with N'Saba. I will admit that I was a little surprised that, after his encounters with both the Borg and Son'a, Picard would need to be reminded other races don't necessarily value or abide by Federation style high mindedness, but maybe N'Saba was there for just that reminder.

And finally, a few little nice touches that I appreciated:

1. Finally, a starship commander actually thinking about what's going on in the rest of the fleet (Bellerphon sending probes to systems where they think they might find help);

2. Vadark Jobrin Adnai - related to Adonai? Foreshadowing, perchance? :vulcan:

3. The Caitian Captain being the "mouse" in the cat-and-mouse game. :lol:

4. And finally, yes, I got the Monty Python reference. Not only was it amusing for Python fans, but it went one more step toward establishing the Captain's character, internally, which is particularly good for a secondary character. :thumbsup:

As always, can't wait for Chapter 9!!!! :drool:

p.s. -- apologies, RevdKathy, I just couldn't resist the clear opening for a Monty Python bit. :o
 
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Sorry about the delay in posting feedback, but between holiday guests and getting ready for the Spring semester which starts next week it's been rather hectic. I agree with the other posters that your portrayal of the canon characters is spot on. Picard isn't an idiot--but he can be single-minded when he thinks he's right and he does suffer to an extent from tunnel vision where Federation idealism is concerned, so having N'Seba to remind him that not everyone thinks the Federation's values are the cat's meow is a nice touch.

You're doing an excellent job fleshing out the Bajorans as well. They've developed their own culture and it'll be interesting seeing how they react to Pell when she tells them about the changes on Bajor.

Very nicely done!
 
Re: Prophets and Loss - Chapter 8

Much obliged for everyone's input on the chapter. :) I hope you enjoy where I take it from here...
 
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