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Kaziarl

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Ok, so I spend a lot of my time just coming up with starts to stories, which at some point might get expanded on later. I tried one a little different this time, and wanted to know what people thought. If I were to use this one, it would continue with the admiral probably complaining about what used to be on the screen of that PADD.

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A standard issue Starfleet PADD had a hard life. In battle, the PADD was always getting knocked around as it would fall off tables. PADD 0717843-A was the last of its kind. Not the last PADD mind you, but the last of a particular serious of PADD which had been boxed up and shipped to the Gamma Quadrant. There, 0717843-A would be used by the staff of Miranda Outpost and eventually come to the hands of Admiral Julia Hera. If 0717843-A had feelings, or perceptions of the world around it, then this quiet little PADD would probably be quite scared about what was going to happen to it. It was the same thing that had happened to PADD 0717759-B, all the way up through PADD 0717842-Z. None of them new it, none of them could understand as each one in its own time began to sail through the air, on a collision course into the bulkhead. 0717843-A didn’t feel any pain as its crystalline display shattered into a cloud of dust, nor did it feel sadness as its broken components rattled to the floor. It didn’t have any questions about what would happen next as its pieces were picked up and discarded, and a new crate of PADD’s were opened, and distributed as needed.
 
Admiral Julia Hera uttered a curse under her breath and threw the PADD she had been reading across the room. As it flew like a rocket towards the bulkhead, PADD 0717843-A only had time for one brief thought before it was smashed into a handful of broken components, "So this is what happened to my predecessors".
 
I have a horrible habit of anthropomorphizing objects, so that made me feel bad for the poor PADDs. It's an interesting start, to be sure.
 
Admiral Julia Hera uttered a curse under her breath and threw the PADD she had been reading across the room. As it flew like a rocket towards the bulkhead, PADD 0717843-A only had time for one brief thought before it was smashed into a handful of broken components, "So this is what happened to my predecessors".
I like that!
I have a horrible habit of anthropomorphizing objects, so that made me feel bad for the poor PADDs. It's an interesting start, to be sure.
Thanks, I have often thought that PADDs got the short end of the stick when it came to starfleet equipment.
 
Sorry to steal your opening like that. But I just couldn't resist sharing the Douglas Adams imagery that came to mind.
 
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