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My take on Voyager

On the whole, a pretty interesting take on Voyager. I'd probably watch it. It all comes down to execution, though. The ideas are good, though. I like what you've come up with. The only request I would have (and apologies if mentioned this) is that we revolve the bridge crew around a bit. Maybe have another pilot who gives Tom a run for his money, a few field medics who take turns in sick bay and only rely on the EMH for emergencies and surgery. And lets kill off some regulars every so often. Kill Torres and Harry and deal with the prospect of Tom having his lover and best friend both killed.
 
Yeah, I would have the Tom/B'Ellana thing up to the point she gets split, then he'd go with the Klingon B'Ellana and she gets killed which makes it harder for him to be around the human one. His attraction to Kes starts when she matures into her adult stage but he finds it ackward over having feelings for someone who was just a kid when they first met.

Then his best bud dies too and is replaced by a Borg, which would probably drive him more to Kes.

I'd have Neelix taken off the main cast list after the Conclave arc begins and Talax is liberated. He'd be a recurring char but not a main one anymore.

Then I'd ditch B'Ellana (human half) when they go back to the Federation.

That would leave only Janeway, Chakotay, Paris, the Doctor and Kes as the regulars now wouldn't it?

Paris, yeah I could have Tom alternate with other pilots while he decides to be part of a scavenger team or shuttle recon or something.
 
Methinks Anwar could actually write for a Star Trek or Scifi series.

I really get into these massive synopses.
 
Anyways, VOY goes back to the Alpha Quadrant using the Slipstream Drive and plot co-ordinates that will land them near DS9. When they get there their scanners detect over ten times the normal amount of vessels than should be there, including Romulan Warbirds.

Wondering what the devil is going on, and receiving some Fed messages about wartime status they fear that it's a Romulan Invasion and in the state they're in (powering up the Slipstream Drive took up almost all power except for what they could spare for life-support and basic stuff) a light Cardassian ship would take them out.

But then they see the Romulans arriving to pick them up along with Fed and Klingon ships, they're more confused than before when the Fed Admiral mentions "Good thing we picked you up before the Jem'Hadar did."

The next arc would be a homecoming episode where the VOY crew are taken to Earth for debriefing.

They learn about the Dominion, the Cardassian alliance, and the destruction of the Maquis. Chakotay and the surviving Maquis take this hard and to make matters worse they realize now they're likely to just end up in prison for their actions prior to being on VOY.

But Starfleet tells them that Janeway spoke up on their behalf, and more importantly Denara Pel and the Conclave delegation also spoke up for them and the Feds are willing to make concessions in exchange for peaceful relations with a new potential ally.

Tom would then go (with Kes) to tell Harry's family about what happened to him, while B'Ellana's family would learn of how they now had two daughters and one is dead (the human B'Ellana being the only one left). The Doctor would undergo examination for his sentience and Seven of Nine would be a big point of interest.

This version of Seven wouldn't be the "I want to go back to the Collective" version but more like a combo of Hugh and maybe Kai from LEXX since her past memories are gone and she wasn't openly conscious of what was happening to her all these years. She wouldn't even remember her human name (and how a human who wasn't from Wolf 359 got to the Borg would be a mystery). Her skin color and hair start to grow back but other implants stay in just so the Feds don't accidentally activate that Borg self-destruct.

Going over everything VOY encountered in the Beta Quadrant, especially the Fluidics, Starfleet wonders what to do especially with the Dominion situation happening now. They also are studying the Slipstream drive.

Due to their services Locarno is granted an official commission as a Lt. Cmdr, and the Maquis are granted Amnesty. Chakotay decides to re-enlist to fight the Dominion and gets his old Commander rank back, Denara and co are put on maximum security to keep them safe from potential Dominion assassination or capture. Human B'Ellana decides to just resign as she's been through enough and is grateful to be home. Tuvok sees his family on Vulcan.

I think I'd do something radically different and have Seven revealed to be Annika Ransom, daughter of the missing Captain Ransom, who was lost years ago when Ransom's wife took her with her on a science mission and never returned (like the Hanson's in Seven's official backstory). Seven wouldn't really feel that bad since she doesn't remember her father at all and she's mad at her mom for endangering her.

Then I'd do a jump 1 year ahead with a text explanation of how Janeway, Tom, Tuvok and Chakotay fought in the Dominion War and are now recalled to Starfleet HQ for a new mission.

They're surprised to see each other again (they all fought separately). Tom is a Lt. Cmdr, Chakotay is a full Commander and Janeway received a promotion to Captain and is in command red now, having had her own ship in the war.

They learn that Starfleet has decided to make Voyager into a sort of memorial ship/museum ship since it was near the end of its operational lifespan anyways and was really jury-rigged from the Vidiian, Talaxian and Krenim tech they grafted onto it to make repairs. They took out the Slipstream Drive to study and have discovered that the resources that help stabilize and power it (which is different from Dilithium) don't exist in the Alpha Quadrant. They're able to synthesize it but not in large enough amounts to mass-produce the Slipstream Drive.

They have built some smaller ships for testing their own Slipstream drives and have constructed large mining/transport vessels and have been speaking with the Conclave Delegation. They've agreed to open relations with the Alpha Quadrant and will return to the Deep-Beta Quadrant now so to help in opening trade negotiations for the resources needed in the Slipstream Drive. Starfleet has prepared a new vessel to escort them home and the Conclave Delegation have requested that the crew of VOY be in command.

VOY has enough of the synthesized Slipstream material for 2 Slipstream usages: 1 to go back to the Deep-Beta Quadrant and 1 to go back home to deliver a status report of whether they were successful or not in gaining access to the needed resources.

The crew agree and Starfleet christens their new vessel, a new class known as the "Intrepid-class", "Voyager" in honor of its predecessor.

And so Captain Janeway, 1st Officer Chakotay, Helmsman Lt-Cmdr Paris, Tactical Officer Lt-Cmdr Tuvok, Science Officer Seven, the Doctor (uploaded from the Old VOY to the New VOY) and Kes take off to go back to the Deep-Beta Quadrant with their new mission.
 
I had originally thought of giving the League the Quantum Slipstream Drive, but looking back I realized that makes it too easy for the VOY crew to just get one themselves and go home with it, so I completely re-thought it out and decided to give them an FTL drive that's (visually) kind of like Solar-Sails but much more powerful. They deploy these energy sails outside their ship and then a focusing device for their engine core extends outside the ship and lets out a powerful energy pulse that only affects the sails, propelling the ship at high warp velocities in what direction they were facing. Slowing down or changing course can be done, but it's a lot harder than with Warp Drive.

Kind of like each ship being a sort of catapult.
 
Very intersting Anwar and I like the ending...seems very Star Trekish. Now the question is how would you re-write Enterprise?
 
OH! Ok...and I'm re-reading the thread from the begining and I'm starting to change my mind on the Janeway not being a Captain at the start part of it. I think it does make a certain amount of sense however making her a new Captain with no command experience like I think she was supposed to be in the original Voyager works as well. I like also Chakotay is an advisor to Janeway and sympthatic to her plight. Janeway as you say can go to him for his advice as a former first officer...I think it important also to focus more on his Native American heritege. We got a bit of that every once and a while for the first few early seasons then the writers seemed to forget about it.

I like the concept of the League of Space Faring Civilizations (man that is a mouthful to say) kind of reminds me of the League of Non-Aligned Worlds from B5 only a little more sophesticated in their organization and more technologically advanced. I like the fact that they are a militarized version of the Federation...I could see in some episodes Janeway becoming conflicted on weather or not she should petition to join them or continue efforts to get the crew home.

Paris is still Nick Locarno correct? Its kind of confusing sometimes because you still refer to him as Paris lol. I trust that we're still going to see Kes die? Probably around late season seven or something like that, since in the series proper Ocampans only posessed a nine year life spand. Would her telepathic abilties still develop? Or are you scratching that idea since she becomes Tuvok's apprentice during this process and you've tweaked Tuvok a bit as well. Like Neelix and the more aggressive characteristics...I Liked him best when he was serious or showing emotion other than his happy-go-lucky attitude.

There is one aspect of Voyager that I don't think you've mentioned yet...the birth of Naomi Wildman. I take it that since she doesn't appear in your synopsis there is no Samantha Wildman (I think it would be awesome if after the Caretaker incident in the pilot kills most of the senior staff that Janeway promotes Sam as the new science officer and sort of takes her under her wing).

Finally I don't think you've mentioned anything about the EMH yet...is he still the same old Doctor or different? I trust no time traveling to the 20th Century to visit Ed Bagley or Sarah Silverman and no mobile emitter?
 
The EMH is the same, since he's in no need of fixing ;)

The mobile emitter, maybe they build it from the combined Krenim/Talaxian/Vidiian/Federation tech they have, so he can be more mobile (even though Kes would be a second Doctor).

Kes wouldn't die, because Ocampans with their mental abilities live longer. One of the Ocampans who lived with the female Caretaker was 15 years old.

I keep calling him Paris because I forgot about the Locarno thing until someone reminded me...I know, I'm bad...

Her powers would emerge on their own, but Tuvok would teach her even though she would break away from his teachings and use her powers her own way (since her nature would conflict with Tuvok's more cold approach to things).

I'd keep Naomi too. Maybe she'd be born in the second season premiere to serve as a "We're out of the darkness and have a new start" thing to symbolize that they made it out of the Kazon-infested Periphery and are now in the Central Core where they had find more help and not worry about constant attacks.
 
I'm a little surprised no one has come down on me for making Seven into Captain Ransom's daughter in this version. Maybe I wasn't clear enough in my previous post.
 
What do you suppose a Tactical Drone would look like? I always envisioned them as having no exposed flesh and maybe tageting systems one one eye and a scanner on the other. The arms would then have either wrist-mounted disruptors or forearm cannons or something.

Problem is trying to envision that with the dark techno-gothic look of the Borg, and make it clear these are partially organic beings with grafted on mechanical weapons/armor, not just a bunch of black armored robots. I want to keep their appearance in the "spirit" of the Borg.
 
I like making Seven Captain Ransom's daughter. I never liked her backstory anyway. It seemed too forced.

I imagine tactical drones along the lines of the concept drawings Rob Delgado did for the Borg for 'First Contact' (I've always loved his Nefertiti-inspired Queen)... with lots of heavy carapace-type armor with a heavily organic look (marble patterns, etc), a scope eye imbedded into the head, a claw arm on one side and the other an ordinary hand with an energy weapon attached at the wrist. I also envision there being a few areas of exposed skin and innards perhaps with clear covers over them.
 
Anwar, you did an excellent job. I think I might have preferred your version better..it would have been an entirely different show though, but it would have been also very interesting. You would make an excellent writer!
 
Well, it's still not done. I think I may have thought up a way of ending it though, without there having to be a 2nd Fluidic War.
 
I forgot to mention before, Think Tank is in this version. They'd first be encountered back in S2 as a private corporation of geniuses who pretty much are intellectual mercenaries that do anything you hire them for (design new weapons, new ships, analyze artifacts found from digs, etc) for extremely high fees.

They'd play a big part in the next story arc when VOY gets back to the Deep-Beta Quadrant.

Anyways, after leaving back for the Deep-Beta Quadrant, VOY detects another Fed ship along the way. It's the Equinox.

Wondering what another Fed ship is doing so far from home (they're not at the Deep-Beta region yet) they find the badly damaged ship and Captain Ransom. Janeway decides not to immediately tell him that they have his missing daughter on-board and that she was a Borg for a long time, and Seven (who has no memory of her father anyways) just goes with it.

In this version the Equinox accidentally found the Barzan Wormhole that deposited them far from the Federation (The boundary between the Delta and Beta Quadrants) where they were attacked by the Kowtowan Guard, etc and have been making their way home ever since.

Janeway figures that since they can only go back to the Federation once they may as well tractor beam the Equinox to the Deep-Beta Quadrant and have them stay there until they all go home together.

On the way there Ransom finds out about Seven and explains what his ex-wife and Annika were doing out in space where they were captured by the Borg in the first place. He doesn't seem too distressed over Annika's fate and is more impressed that she survived at all (he's a lot colder in this version).

The VOY crew eventually find out about the Nucleoic lifeforms Ransom was using for fuel, and he pretty much tells them he knew they were sentient all along but he was willing to kill them to go home and thought data collected on the enhanced warp drive would help Starfleet more so why not? (He's a LOT colder)

Combining the Equinox's enhanced drive with the Slipstream tunnel they're in, the Equinox gets to the Deep-Beta Region before VOY does, and upon arriving Janeway vows to hunt Ransom down because now the Nucleoinic lifeforms are attacking the new VOY as well.
 
I like the Seven being Rnsom's daughter idea a lot better than the Hanson backstory. I just don't like changing Ransom, I did like him the way they wrote him.

I like your think tank concept 100 times more than the way it was portrayed.

I hope the Equinox doesn't get destroyed in your revisioning. It would be a testament to Starfleet officers skill and determination to have both ships make it home.
 
If Seven is Ransom's daughter in your version then I trust that he would be older than he was in the Voyager proper? Or would you recast Seven with a different actress than Jeri Ryan who despite her beauty seems a little old to play Ransom's daughter? Or maybe you could theorize that the Borg assimilation process did something to her age or whatever?
 
In VOY proper it was explained that Annika spent time in a brog incubation chamber that accelerated her aging to an adult and that she spent most of the 18 years of her Borg life as a full adult.

So if Annika and Ransom's wife were captured by the Borg 10 or so years before VOY started (Ransom's deep exploration mission being his way of dealing with their disappearance) she could've been aged by the Borg to Jeri Ryan's age (Ryan was in her late 20s I think).

I think I'd do both, Ransom being in his late 40s and Annika being accelerated aged. That way Ransom was in his early 30s or so when Annika was born but due to accelerated aging she's Jeri Ryan's age when Ransom in his late 40s.

I picture this version of Ransom similar to Doctor Tenma from the Astro Boy 2003 series.
 
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