Thanks for all the comments, guys.
Even with the Ryan Church design as comparison it needs something more.
I think it's repeating to much. The JJ style neck and it's goose back on engineering are supposed to be traits of the Constitution. So it's like it's really mimicking the original Enterprise not the excelsior. Excelsior is a platform design. All the ajoining parts are fitted tot he same level on the engineering hull. This doesn't beget that concept. The nacelles aren't over-sized like the JJstyle.
There was a guy that did an excelsior JJstyle on the forums. It was pretty good.
(I personally don't like Ryan Church's design at all though)
Well, the idea here is to reference the 2009 Movie Style of the Enterprise, while keeping some of the same ideas of the real Excelsior.
I get that you don't like this ship... I knew not everyone was going to.

Of course, I'm still not finished yet...
Which other other Excelsior are you talking about, though? The only one that I really saw was over at SFM, by "Don't Shoot". It was pretty cool, if not a little weird.