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"I Want To Believe" [May Writing Challenge]

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"I Want To Believe"
Story By Jason K. Hauck
Based on "Star Trek" by Gene Roddenberry.

Chapter One

August 12 2262

The spires of the newly rebuilt San Francisco awed Jacob Bucannon. He'd just spent three days on the mag-lev from (geodesic dome habitat) 'New Orleans' on the south eastern edge of what used to be called 'The United States'. There were few windows on the mag-lev, but he'd been fortunate enough to get a seat in the ceiling dome with a three hundred and sixty degree view during some meals.

Despite help from Vulcan and other extraterrestrial benefactors, there were still gaping craters in the landscape where Earth's cities or military bases once stood. Cars no-one had gotten around to recycling were still overturned by the sides of crumbled tar-and-gravel roads with stubborn faint yellow lines that the elements hadn't managed to entirely scrub away. Dilapidated barns and empty fields checkered the landscape. Every few hours, they'd pass a security checkpoint and have to submit to random searches of their person or their carry-on luggage --- often at riflepoint.

The weather modification net had just come online in the last few months.
As a result, there were fewer days when he woke up to mornings tainted with reddish-brown sunrises or potent thunderstorms. Over frequent instant breakfasts from the protein resequencers, Jacob noticed smaller coastal towns with people working outside without a breathing aparatus and radiation guages. Children playing on tricycles and their parents going about business as usual.

Within the last 48 hours, he'd made final preparations to move into delegated Starfleet housing and said his goodbyes to loved ones. Life in the domes was boring and regulated to within an inch of a person's life. He'd been a service-person in a diner for most of his young adult life and gotten good grades. His only other choice was a far harsher life outside New Orleans' habitat in 'The Desert' where young political incorrigibles or idealists either left of their own volition to fend for themselves or were forcibly deposited.

Jacob had models of all the latest starships. He'd studied all the ships' different angles, mostly from videocaptures downloaded from the internet and made-up the rest on-the-fly. He wanted to study engineering and fly the latest shuttles. His dad was a shuttle pilot and flew the ramjet to Luna Colony.

His mom had died of leukemia when he was sixteen. He was unprepared for the loss, even though they'd known about her cancer since he was eight. His long-time boyfriend, Richard, was unhappy at the idea of Jacob leaving but let him go anyway. He left Richard his cat, Gord, a black shorthaired male with a sloth-like personality.

Richard even went as far as to look up places on the internet to go on dates in San Francisco and made Jacob promise to e-mail him more promising venues. Jacob's dad left a message for Jacob on his laptop, saying he'd meet him at the spaceport in San Francisco near the water reclamation plant at the foot of the Golden Gate bridge.
 
An alternative take of a much darker future. I like that.

But only the onset of a narrative so far. How many chapters do you have planned for this?

In any case, it's off to a good start.
 
Like CeJay, I'm left wanting more. ;)

But I really like seeing this acknowledgment of what Earth was like right when the Vulcans arrived. We've had flashes of it in "Encounter at Farpoint" and First Contact, but I always wanted to see more. Maybe some thought it was un-Trek-like to address that...but personally, I'm always glad when people do.
 
A few chapters when I've got days off to think things through, about what I'm trying to say. I'm glad everyone likes the beginning of "I'd Like To Believe".
 
Like CeJay, I'm left wanting more. ;)

But I really like seeing this acknowledgment of what Earth was like right when the Vulcans arrived. We've had flashes of it in "Encounter at Farpoint" and First Contact, but I always wanted to see more. Maybe some thought it was un-Trek-like to address that...but personally, I'm always glad when people do.

Isn't the First Contact era 2163? The date thing niggled at the back of my mind as I read...

This is good, but feels incomplete. It really begs for more.
 
Nah, You're thinking the early 2150's. The Federation was formed in 2261. I was thinking of setting this story just after the launch of the Enterprise's first five-year-mission. Things are improving but as government today behaves, things move incredibly slowly. The Vulcans, et al. are helping Earth pull itself together & mop up the environmental damage of WW3 in order to make a better first impression on Earth's new allies. But, there is still much to be done. There are going to be reconciliations between Earth's native races and political appologies for incidents (think of tragedies like "Camp X-Ray" & the Japanese-American Internment Camps of the 1940's.) But the incidents I have in mind occured immediately following the nuclear horror. I'm trying to think of the kinds of abuses Picard witnessed in Q's visions of Earth's past during "TNG - Encounter At Farpoint". Soldiers controlled with drugs, etc.
 
Definitely a great set up for a story - I enjoyed the descriptions, and I agree with Nerys Ghemor that this part of Trek history needs to be seen more.
 
1730 Hours
May 26 2381


Lieutenant Commander Brennan Bucannon got up from his chair, walked around the desk to the replicator and ordered a Chicken Donair. Warbling from the door interrupted Brennan's delight at an opportunity to finally sink into the Caesar Salad that accompanied the Acting Captain's favorite meal.

"Come."

"Sir. You asked me to notify you of anything...er, uncontemporary on sensors. At dead stop, awaiting further instructions."

"Thanks, Liz. Be there in a moment." Momentarily mourning his dinner, he sated his gurgling stomach with one of the two Spinach pastries on the plate and strode onto the bridge of the Norway-Class starship. Lieutenant (j.g.) Elizabeth Garlinski, his Acting X.O., returned to the bridge awaiting Brennan's next move and ordered Science updates from her position at Tactical. They'd just sent their senior crew down to enjoy Liberty on Deep Space 9. Kira assured them the Defiant would be manned and dispatched close behind the Myanmar, pending their threat analysis.

Their Tellarite Science Officer, Ensign Borta Tralk, leaned over the science console with widening eyes.

"I'm reading a motherfucking massive temporal anomoly at zero zero three mark zero two four. No movement or growth since last scan, Liz."

"I've got Warp Nine and three evasive courses ready at a single touch of my board, sir." A young Human Female at helm/flight-op's, Kristie Parker, gulped hard and tried to steady her anxiety with forcing herself to breathe steadily and wiped her brow with her uniform sleeve.

"Communications - I want DS9, Bajor, and Cardassia on continuous updates of our situation. Get this thing on viewer. Liz - launch a probe into the anomaly and send messages of friendship via the probe in all catalogued languages and frequencies." After a moment to think, "Include radio."

Their Edosian Officer at Communications got the Detapa Council on subspace, Captain Elias Vaughn and Vedek Vor on split-screen.

"Good work, Por."

"No worries, Sir."

"Can they see and hear one another?"

"Loud and clear, sir. They may as well be having Raktajino's with you in your office."

"Understood. Anything from the other side, thus far?"

"Nothing beyond background noise, Bren."
 
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1351 Hours
August 12 2262


Jacob was met at the mag-lev station in San Francisco by his dorm-mates that had been informed of his arrival about six hours in advance.


  • A Female Andorian with a wicked white/blue scar beneath her left eye and a small but noticeable edge of her left antennae missing.
  • Two Humans - both male, one caucasian and the other noticably Australian Native with dark skin and various cosmetic / ritualistic adornments.
  • A female Bolian named Teela.
  • An Android that appeared Human in appearance but effeminately male, carrying something called a 'Medusan' in its abdomen. He prefered the name "Charlie".
  • A male Tellarite, that simply wished to be addressed as 'Sak'. Not quite friendly but not traditionally confrontational as he'd heard Tellarites were accustomed to being.
 
Fleet Captain: Well, think more along the lines of a "Yesturday's Enterprise" (Ent-D meets the Ent-C,) type of encounter. Things get a bit muddled at the temporal crossroads of the TOS and TNG Relaunch eras.
 
Jacob spent his first afternoon with his classmates getting accustomed to the earthy scents of freshly grilled imported meats rather than the usual tofu experiments that passed scrutiny at the diner, or whatever passed for edible at the replimat at school. He was almost surprised by the sounds of people that were genuinely happy rather than content to turn the other cheek. There were skyscrapers and blue skies rather than vertical farms and lighting schedules, distinguishing night from day.

Cats were growling or hissing at each other over discarded fish-heads in the back alleys of the city, and a dog was performing like a show animal for the local butcher. There were signs in almost every language in the known Alpha Quadrant displayed in shop windows. Street signs in both Federation Standard and a language he'd never seen before. He saw his first genuine Starfleet Shuttle glide overhead, tapering its flight vector in corkscrew fashion toward the Presidio.

They eventually made their way back toward the campus dorms where the Resident Advisor screened incoming baggage for contraband, shook hands, paws, (or whatever was applicable.) He was something called a 'Brikar', basically a Humanoid stone wall with barely noticeable slits for facial features. Jacob headed to his room to stow his gear in an additional foot locker left in the drawer beneath his bed. A map of the campus hung on the wall, between the two sets of bunk-beds embedded into the walls with a singular computer desk, chair & terminal in the middle.
 
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1800 Hours
May 26 2381


The Myanmar flew in close enough to fling a probe into the anomaly, bank and streak for safety at two thirds impulse. Telemetry was uncertain at first as the recordings said it had been in five hundred places at once, for the first three seconds. After four to six seconds, the telemetry coalesced into a coherent feed of reliable information.

Two minutes into the recording, a reply came over the probe's relays, "This is Captain Harry Thompson of the Bonaventure-Class Federation starship Washington. To whom am I speaking?"

All of a sudden....things changed. Brennan found himself bizarrely dressed and wearing a sidearm. His thinking crystalized and his bridge changed. Even the Master Situation Display changed to a configuration/outline he didn't immediately recognize and then it felt so completely understandable to be here.

His original crew was gone. The one he'd been serving with for the last two years. A Romulan or Vulcan, (Brennan couldn't immediately tell which she was,) at Engineering. A extremely large Klingon at Tactical in a strange Federation-like uniform. A starchart with a strange emblem indicating an ~extremely~ large swath of territory in eggplant-purple. The second in blood red about one-tenth the size of the purple one and then the blue one, (just a speck on the starchart,) ceased to be altogether.

"Sir! Incoming report from Belle Terre. The one hundred and first fleet is gone. Two ships have evaded The Dominion. The Mandela and the Vonnegut. They're attempting to lead the Armada away from the convoy. Nothing more. The signal's dead or being jammed." The fat Klingon picked his teeth with his blade, farted and continued to stare at him for a response.
 
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"I Want To Believe"
Story By Jason K. Hauck
Based on "Star Trek" by Gene Roddenberry.

Chapter One

August 12 2262

The spires of the newly rebuilt San Francisco awed Jacob Bucannon. He'd just spent three days on the mag-lev from (geodesic dome habitat) 'New Orleans' on the south eastern edge of what used to be called 'The United States'. There were few windows on the mag-lev, but he'd been fortunate enough to get a seat in the ceiling dome with a three hundred and sixty degree view during some meals.

Despite help from Vulcan and other extraterrestrial benefactors, there were still gaping craters in the landscape where Earth's cities or military bases once stood. Cars no-one had gotten around to recycling were still overturned by the sides of crumbled tar-and-gravel roads with stubborn faint yellow lines that the elements hadn't managed to entirely scrub away. Dilapidated barns and empty fields checkered the landscape. Every few hours, they'd pass a security checkpoint and have to submit to random searches of their person or their carry-on luggage --- often at riflepoint.

The weather modification net had just come online in the last few months.
As a result, there were fewer days when he woke up to mornings tainted with reddish-brown sunrises or potent thunderstorms. Over frequent instant breakfasts from the protein resequencers, Jacob noticed smaller coastal towns with people working outside without a breathing aparatus and radiation guages. Children playing on tricycles and their parents going about business as usual.

Within the last 48 hours, he'd made final preparations to move into delegated Starfleet housing and said his goodbyes to loved ones. Life in the domes was boring and regulated to within an inch of a person's life. He'd been a service-person in a diner for most of his young adult life and gotten good grades. His only other choice was a far harsher life outside New Orleans' habitat in 'The Desert' where young political incorrigibles or idealists either left of their own volition to fend for themselves or were forcibly deposited.

Jacob had models of all the latest starships. He'd studied all the ships' different angles, mostly from videocaptures downloaded from the internet and made-up the rest on-the-fly. He wanted to study engineering and fly the latest shuttles. His dad was a shuttle pilot and flew the ramjet to Luna Colony.

His mom had died of leukemia when he was sixteen. He was unprepared for the loss, even though they'd known about her cancer since he was eight. His long-time boyfriend, Richard, was unhappy at the idea of Jacob leaving but let him go anyway. He left Richard his cat, Gord, a black shorthaired male with a sloth-like personality.

Richard even went as far as to look up places on the internet to go on dates in San Francisco and made Jacob promise to e-mail him more promising venues. Jacob's dad left a message for Jacob on his laptop, saying he'd meet him at the spaceport in San Francisco near the water reclamation plant at the foot of the Golden Gate bridge.

I liked it. I liked the setting you described. Would be interesting to see where you take this..so get on it!!!

I would cast the kid who played Micah on Heroes. then again, I am not sure how old this character is. If he's older, in his mid twentys or thirties, I would go with the dude who played Chase on 24 a couple years back.

Rob
 
Jacob is 18. His bf Richard is about four months younger at 17. His Dad is 48 years old. Brennan and the crew of the Norway-Class U.S.S. Myanmar range from 39 to early 50's.

I was thinking of an alternate timeline where a borderline ENT / TOS-era Borg-decimated Dominion came through the wormhole under duress of Founder extinction, rather than wait for First Contact with Starfleet / The U.F.P. via the destruction of the Galaxy-Class Odyssey in the TNG-era.

There was a MAJOR throwdown, the A.Q. Alliance came into being much as it did in the canon universe with some minor changes in the contributing factors that led to the creation of The A.Q. Alliance.
 
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