Errand of Fury:Book 3 Question/Confusion??

[MarciaCat]

I'm about halfway through and really enjoying it but I seem to be counting a total of six people in Kirk's five member away team! On page 15 Kirk asks Giotto for a four person security team which is introduced on pages 31-34 as Fuller, Jawer, McCalmon, and Quatrocchi. The number of people is again confirmed on page 108 when Kirk says "No, just the five of us" when a Klingon asks if there are any more of them; however on page 112 there is a recount of the activities of six Starfleet personnel on the mission: Kirk and Fuller are discussing strategy, McCalmon is on medic detail, Jawer is in the cockpit and Quatrocchi and Parmet are guarding the stunned Klingons. I'm puzzled and confused; when did Parmet join the away team? He's there for the remainder of the mission and activities for six people are recounted until Kirk requests permission for five to beam aboard the Enterprise on page 181?!??

I've scanned other threads discussing this book but saw no other mention of this discrepancy. I can't believe no one else noticed it.

 

[MarciaCat]

One other quibble- on page 156 Kirk takes a communicator from Parmet and calls Fuller who responds "Fuller here... Ensign Parmet is with me" The first "Parmet" should have been Jawer.

Isn't that (along with my previous post) something an editor should have caught?

 

[Kaziarl]

Well Editors should be better at it. But I know in my writing I can have four or five people read it, and something still gets missed. But then again, thats a rather large something.

 

[MarciaCat]

Well Editors should be better at it. But I know in my writing I can have four or five people read it, and something still gets missed. But then again, thats a rather large something.

It really bugged the daylights out of me & kept drawing me out of what was otherwise a good story!

 

[Scout101]

enjoyed the book, but think it was hurt a bit by how spread out the series was. Still 'kinda' remembered the previous events (the starbase attack came back more as I read on), but it would have had a lot more impact spread over 3-4 months rather than a couple years...

 

[Therin of Andor]

Isn't that (along with my previous post) something an editor should have caught?

Very often an editor does catch a correction, but the "save" doesn't take.

When I used to edit a professional journal, we had two sets of corrections contracted with our layout designer, and each return of galleys had to meet very tight deadlines. If there were additional changes during the second pass, it was always a big gamble because there was no third pass to check they were all corrected properly, otherwise we'd be charged per correction and our budget couldn't cope.

Sometimes, another urgent job would turn up at the same time as galley proofing deadlines were being met, so time didn't allow the normal thoroughness.

 

[Hoshi_Mayweather]

I caught some errors in 'Mutiny on the Enterprise' myself...

As for the Errand of Fury series, I'm looking to add this to my reading list....and come to it when I have the time.