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Dec. Challenge - The Lights of Lakarian City

Count Zero

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The Lights Of Lakarian City

by Count Zero


On the outskirts of what, just one day ago, used to be a city of millions, a man sits on a pile of rubble, staring into the slow sunset.
He really should be going like all the others but he has already been walking for miles today. All the way from the prison camp to the city – to the ruins of the city, to be precise. He had never been to Lakarian City before, and most of his knowledge about it came from what was in the Federation databases. Until recently, it had been famous for its amusement park and other worldly pleasures. So, seeing its lights off in the distance from the most miserable place of his life had always seemed exceptionally cruel to him.
For nearly five years he had been in the hands of the Cardassian prison system, the object of abuse by sadistic guards, his fate depending on the whims people deformed into something like monsters by life long indoctrination. The last one, Legate Krelek, had found delight in having him play an elaborate Cardassian card game for the lives of prisoners. Naturally, Krelek often won and had him watch the prisoners whose lives he had lost being put to death.
He thought this was the life he'd lead until he'd die an untimely and probably painful death. And this certainty was almost harder to bear than everything else - this complete hopelessness. Because, after all these years, he had given up hope of ever being rescued like Kira had promised him. How naive he had been, back then. In this state of utter despair the lights of Lakarian City had seemed to personally taunt him. How was it possible that over there, people enjoyed themselves and went about their lives while only a few miles away all these terrible things happened?
Now, the lights of Lakarian City had been put out, probably forever, considering the total destruction around him. Yesterday, the city was levelled by the Jem' Hadar, its inhabitants killed. When the bombing had started the guards at the camp became so scared that most of them ran off. The prisoners used this opportunity to free themselves.
But what is he about to do, now? He is still stranded on Cardassia, in the middle of a devastating war, and a relief effort for the city isn't very likely to start anytime soon. Thinking about this, he starts roaming through the heaps of rubble from which smoke rises, smelling terribly, like burned flesh – a smell he'll never forget.
On one of the large heaps that, not long ago, had probably been a house, a Cardassian woman kneels and digs in the debris with her bare hands. For a while he just stands there, watching, until she notices him and startles. He can read the result of all the propaganda in her eyes. To her, he is a criminal and a terrorist, who has comitted terrible crimes against the Cardassian people. She recovers quickly from the shock, though, and relaxes a little as she realizes that she isn't in any imminent danger.
"I guess, it doesn't make any sense, does it?", she suddenly says, sounding slightly desperate. She adds,"They're all dead, aren't they?"
He searches for an adequate answer but all he can come up with is a rather lame "Well...".
She sits down, about to start crying or worse, so he decides to take a seat beside her, offering her the bottle of Kanar he had looted from the Legate's personal supply. Surprisingly, it cheers her up a little. For a while they continue to just sit there. She's staring in the distance and he's looking at her delicate face.
"What's your name?"
"Ilana."
"Mine's Tom. I'll help you searching."
Even though he doesn't really know why, they both continue digging, under the light of a small lamp Ilana had brought with her. Later that evening, Tom looks up from the rubble and sees many similiar lights shining in the city.
 
Well, maybe this will turn into a larger story. I wated to keep it short for the challenge.
 
Another good one. A human who had been captured by Cardassians and now sees the destruction of cardassia around him? He could help the suffering cardassians that had tortured him, or just as easily get in on his own personal revenge. If you do add to this story, it would be interesting to see which way you end up going.
 
I agree, I'd love to see a follow up. Quick, but gets one in the midst quickly. Almost reminded me of the Band of Brothers episode with the medic going into the city to try and catch a few minutes with the nurse. I mean the first part, where they first met...

Anyway, good story, with potential for the future..
 
This does beg to be continued in a larger work. It's a nice little character piece that captures two people whose lives have been shattered both figuratively and literally.
 
Thank you for the kind comments.
I might turn this into a bigger story someday. The story of the 2 Rikers has always fascinated me, even though the actual problem doesn't play into this story. But it is the stuff of a Greek tragedy, finding out that you exist twice with all the ensuing questions like what identity really is. Aeschylus would have loved "Second Chances", I guess. :)
I regretted DS9 didn't follow up on what happened to Tom later on, but on the other hand, that leaves a lot of possibilities for us...
 
Forgot about Tom Riker. Good lead-in piece. Needs expansion. I want to see more. Please.
 
Mmh. I hear ya, but I need to find inspiration for a good story (that's something of a weak point of mine). I already have something on my mind but it's weird and probably not very exciting. Well, we'll see.
I wrote this in present tense (something not uncommon in my mother tongue). I hoped for it to sound more immediate this way. What did you guys think about that?
 
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