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Congratulations, @DarthTimon ! Hoping to get there, myself.
Speaking of which, I'm making some changes to my Sword & Sorcery stories, particularly the character I previously named Uénunna. For those who've read the story, maybe you noticed that she's supposed to be of the people who would become Native Americans, namely the Sioux. Now, remember that I write these stories in German, so I used to think it a good idea to change the spelling of some of the words and names to give German readers a better idea of how to actually pronounce them, so Winúnŋa, the Dakota word for first-born daughter, became Uénunna, and the Nadouessioux became the Naduéssuh.
After I recently rewatched some of the old Karl May movies featuring the fictional character of Apache chief Winnetou, I was inspired to research the phenomenon of German fascination with Native Americans (or "Indianer", as the German language describes them, as opposed to the "Inder", the natives of India) - it's a real thing, people, it even has its own Wikipedia article - and I learned how, while the image of Native Americans in German fiction has been a positive one, it was also romanticizing and, quite often, disrespectful and stereotypical. Also, the Karl May Museum displayed some genuine scalps. After they were contacted by the tribe the scalps were ascribed to, and asked to return them, they took them from the public display to "study their origin". That was years ago, and they still have not been returned.
And I recognized that my character played into this German obsession with the "Indianer", and that I better do some more research in order to make sure that the character was as respectful as possible. I have no illusions, the Native Americans are not a uniform entity, so if two persons of the Dakotas were to read my stories, one might be fine with it while the other might be offended, just as I have seen both reactions from Native Americans over Winnetou. There's no getting around that. I also don't want to change the character's ethnicity, that wouldn't be a solution, either. I choose to go with as respectful a portrayal as is possible to me, over eradication of a Sioux character altogether.
And I recognized that my willy-nilly changing of spelling of these words might come off as disrespectful. Maybe they are. I certainly didn't intend them to be so. And that is why I'm going over what I've already written and changing the spelling back to the proper way. So, the heroine character of Uénunna is now Winúnŋa, and the Naduéssuh are the Nadouessioux. And if German readers start mispronouncing them, I'll just have to correct them.
I would also encourage everybody to learn about the many different cultures of the Native Americans, and I'd also encourage the use of Native American characters in fiction not only in a Wild West setting, but in a modern context, and not just as side characters, as well (seriously, DC Comics, bring back Detective Ohiyesa Smith, just don't use his old nickname).
Speaking of which, I'm making some changes to my Sword & Sorcery stories, particularly the character I previously named Uénunna. For those who've read the story, maybe you noticed that she's supposed to be of the people who would become Native Americans, namely the Sioux. Now, remember that I write these stories in German, so I used to think it a good idea to change the spelling of some of the words and names to give German readers a better idea of how to actually pronounce them, so Winúnŋa, the Dakota word for first-born daughter, became Uénunna, and the Nadouessioux became the Naduéssuh.
After I recently rewatched some of the old Karl May movies featuring the fictional character of Apache chief Winnetou, I was inspired to research the phenomenon of German fascination with Native Americans (or "Indianer", as the German language describes them, as opposed to the "Inder", the natives of India) - it's a real thing, people, it even has its own Wikipedia article - and I learned how, while the image of Native Americans in German fiction has been a positive one, it was also romanticizing and, quite often, disrespectful and stereotypical. Also, the Karl May Museum displayed some genuine scalps. After they were contacted by the tribe the scalps were ascribed to, and asked to return them, they took them from the public display to "study their origin". That was years ago, and they still have not been returned.
And I recognized that my character played into this German obsession with the "Indianer", and that I better do some more research in order to make sure that the character was as respectful as possible. I have no illusions, the Native Americans are not a uniform entity, so if two persons of the Dakotas were to read my stories, one might be fine with it while the other might be offended, just as I have seen both reactions from Native Americans over Winnetou. There's no getting around that. I also don't want to change the character's ethnicity, that wouldn't be a solution, either. I choose to go with as respectful a portrayal as is possible to me, over eradication of a Sioux character altogether.
And I recognized that my willy-nilly changing of spelling of these words might come off as disrespectful. Maybe they are. I certainly didn't intend them to be so. And that is why I'm going over what I've already written and changing the spelling back to the proper way. So, the heroine character of Uénunna is now Winúnŋa, and the Naduéssuh are the Nadouessioux. And if German readers start mispronouncing them, I'll just have to correct them.
I would also encourage everybody to learn about the many different cultures of the Native Americans, and I'd also encourage the use of Native American characters in fiction not only in a Wild West setting, but in a modern context, and not just as side characters, as well (seriously, DC Comics, bring back Detective Ohiyesa Smith, just don't use his old nickname).
You're absolutely right - it is important to be accurate with history. Thankfully we live in an era where access to historic data is easy. Good luck!
Well, considering my stories are Sword & Sorcery fantasy set in a fictional, pre-historic proto-European era, it's less about historical accuracy, but rather cultural accuracy, as well as a general respect.
For example, during my research, I came across a phrase that is used in prayers by the Lakota people about their philosophy of everything and everyone being related, which I immediately made a mental note to have my character Winúnŋa say at some point, only to come across the fact that it seems offensive for non-Lakota to use that particular phrase. So, no, I won't use the phrase.
On the other hand, having one tribe of proto-Sioux spend a few decades in my proto-European setting before leaving for the Beringia landbridge to the North American continent, while being historical bullshit, is in my estimation fair game, as long as the culture is presented accurately.
posting again but yeah I do so much really
multilevel development over several days if not weeks --- layer after layer in the way of mostly color addings -- lastly was the new oil pastels from china at the dollar store I am liking using them-- I also got ten brushes for like 2 dollars and the pastels were 1.25$ for like 12 of them, the fact that the pastels are oil based lets it blend more with the lower layer of oil paint on the watercolor paper that is think like that but still the oil paint oil goes thru it-- and it was not on top of any other paper so that was fine.-- about a week ago when I did the above painting clean up I used this to wipe my brushes off and get the oil out of them--- plus first was the brush and ink then watercolors followed by oil paint till today the oil pastels most excellent goings on
multilevel development over several days if not weeks --- layer after layer in the way of mostly color addings -- lastly was the new oil pastels from china at the dollar store I am liking using them-- I also got ten brushes for like 2 dollars and the pastels were 1.25$ for like 12 of them, the fact that the pastels are oil based lets it blend more with the lower layer of oil paint on the watercolor paper that is think like that but still the oil paint oil goes thru it-- and it was not on top of any other paper so that was fine.-- about a week ago when I did the above painting clean up I used this to wipe my brushes off and get the oil out of them--- plus first was the brush and ink then watercolors followed by oil paint till today the oil pastels most excellent goings on
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https://photos.app.goo.gl/zwx7MvnfPdwEAaFp9
set of art works I photoed and uploaded to google had a difficult time getting them to work on fb
they were not uploaded there but linked to like here from google-- I should put more photo's out to google I think
just one of the images from the set at that link above --- of 436 art works -- lots of works it took 2+ hours to photo them and most are from the 2007 area of art I made- back then-
set of art works I photoed and uploaded to google had a difficult time getting them to work on fb
they were not uploaded there but linked to like here from google-- I should put more photo's out to google I think just one of the images from the set at that link above --- of 436 art works -- lots of works it took 2+ hours to photo them and most are from the 2007 area of art I made- back then-
I've mentioned in a few other threads that I've been working on an urban fantasy story off and on for a few years now, and I've finally gone back it. I haven't really been working on it regularly, I've gone months, I think possibly even as much as a year, without touching it, but I'm trying to start working on it more regularly. I went back to it for the first time since last year a couple weeks ago, and I'm hoping to keep up with it more regularly now.
I started off with a 19 page (so far) outline, and the other day I went back over it, just to clean it up, and to make sure it's all consistent. I've made some pretty major changes as I got new ideas, and there were a few things where I missed left over ideas from an earlier version, so character descriptions and things like that were inconsistent. I fixed that stuff in the first few pages, and cleaned up the grammar.
I also changed my mind about the opening scene, and ended up rewriting the whole thing. The characters own and ride horses, and I opened with a big horse chase and then a few scenes later the main character and his love interest, who were involved in the chase, are having a conversation during a casual trail ride, and it felt kind of repetitive. I had originally written the scenes months apart and hadn't realized how repetitive it felt until I was looking over it the other day. And..... I just this moment had a new idea, and I think I'm going to change it again, to a fight scene rather than a chase scene, since my prologue is a character being chased on foot. It's kind of ironic, because my very first version of it started with a fight scene, rather than a chase, so I guess maybe I probably shouldn't have changed that in the first place. Although this is going to be a different fight scene, in a different location.
Like I said before, I've been writing a few scenes at a time, months apart, so there's a lot of this kind of stuff that I'm not noticing until I'm looking at it as more of a whole.
Either way, the trail riding scene is not changing, because that scene and the scene leading up to it have a couple points that involve the horses that I don't want to lose.
I started off with a 19 page (so far) outline, and the other day I went back over it, just to clean it up, and to make sure it's all consistent. I've made some pretty major changes as I got new ideas, and there were a few things where I missed left over ideas from an earlier version, so character descriptions and things like that were inconsistent. I fixed that stuff in the first few pages, and cleaned up the grammar.
I also changed my mind about the opening scene, and ended up rewriting the whole thing. The characters own and ride horses, and I opened with a big horse chase and then a few scenes later the main character and his love interest, who were involved in the chase, are having a conversation during a casual trail ride, and it felt kind of repetitive. I had originally written the scenes months apart and hadn't realized how repetitive it felt until I was looking over it the other day. And..... I just this moment had a new idea, and I think I'm going to change it again, to a fight scene rather than a chase scene, since my prologue is a character being chased on foot. It's kind of ironic, because my very first version of it started with a fight scene, rather than a chase, so I guess maybe I probably shouldn't have changed that in the first place. Although this is going to be a different fight scene, in a different location.
Like I said before, I've been writing a few scenes at a time, months apart, so there's a lot of this kind of stuff that I'm not noticing until I'm looking at it as more of a whole.
Either way, the trail riding scene is not changing, because that scene and the scene leading up to it have a couple points that involve the horses that I don't want to lose.
new art with the surface going on and a zoom into that surface section-
another one --- made yesterday morning taking a 3 day work first day to cover the original work on the canvas by previous owner covered in white acrylic's and then painted with acrylic too then added that square foam sheet bottom right. and putting scented wax layer random spread- and yesterday went the oil atop everything.
and a https://deepdreamgenerator.com/u/m8w image mix from a brush and ink work to this.
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I've only done a tiny bit of writing since my last post. The story has two different parts, with a bit of a time jump, and I decided to jump ahead to the beginning of Part 2, since the opening scene is one I've been wanting to get out of my head for a while now. I'm hoping to back it in the next couple days, when I do I'll probably keep going with Part 2. The next scene is going to be my first attempt at humor, so it'll be interesting to see how it goes.
something about two people in love...just any two people that can love one another--- <3
I also made a song "I love you" title with new types of instrument I designed just for the song like the "I love you" instrument where I recorded me saying that to be pitch altered by playing a type of keyboard thing.. --- with other sound samples that became instruments
I made this song for my gf and she loves it-
https://soundcloud.com/h92o/i-love-you-at-here-are-the-new
A comic book superhero I made up today. LUNARMAN! 
I'm working on a backstory for now, so stay tuned for updates!
I'm working on a backstory for now, so stay tuned for updates!
First foggy morning
calls for one or two haiku.
Let's have a contest !
calls for one or two haiku.
Let's have a contest !
I forgot the haiku pattern... 5-7-5?
But I did a poem on my new poetry site
https://www.poeticous.com/bill-newbold/how-to-gather-the-attention-of-people
I don't know all the policies about this site or links for this site... This link takes us to where my new poem is..
So I can post the poem here too...
How to gather the attention of people.(with poetry)
Put your best words first.
then follow that with less important nouns and adjectives,..
Remember to not use proper names or places,
leave openings for improvement if possible
do some four stanza work first to bring the audience in
never forget that IN is a complete sentence like ON.
Rewrite the words again but differently
put the best ideas in the title
don’t make it seem like you are going to end
don’t use full sentences unless you have reasonable doubt
remain calm with the verbs, we are not going anywhere
just substitute the real words for the fake words now and then
can you see that this is working?
don’t ever use appropriate punctuation maybe,,
create a sense of new tension that is pervasive like fog on the beach...
Never end the new sentences with the same word you start with Never.
But I did a poem on my new poetry site
https://www.poeticous.com/bill-newbold/how-to-gather-the-attention-of-people
I don't know all the policies about this site or links for this site... This link takes us to where my new poem is..
So I can post the poem here too...
How to gather the attention of people.(with poetry)
Put your best words first.
then follow that with less important nouns and adjectives,..
Remember to not use proper names or places,
leave openings for improvement if possible
do some four stanza work first to bring the audience in
never forget that IN is a complete sentence like ON.
Rewrite the words again but differently
put the best ideas in the title
don’t make it seem like you are going to end
don’t use full sentences unless you have reasonable doubt
remain calm with the verbs, we are not going anywhere
just substitute the real words for the fake words now and then
can you see that this is working?
don’t ever use appropriate punctuation maybe,,
create a sense of new tension that is pervasive like fog on the beach...
Never end the new sentences with the same word you start with Never.
I've just finished the second short story featuring my Sword-and-Sorcery characters of Taron & Winúnŋa. It's a lot bigger than the first one, with lots of more characters and action, and is appropriately twice as long.
Now, I'll go back to the first story, do some rewriting, partially to change the name Uénunna to Winúnŋa and such details (already talked about that back in July), and read it with fresh eyes to see if there is more that I want to change. Then, I'll go over the second story, as well, to see if I have to do some rewriting there, as well.
Still, feeling pretty good and proud right now.
Now, I'll go back to the first story, do some rewriting, partially to change the name Uénunna to Winúnŋa and such details (already talked about that back in July), and read it with fresh eyes to see if there is more that I want to change. Then, I'll go over the second story, as well, to see if I have to do some rewriting there, as well.
Still, feeling pretty good and proud right now.
Hey all! This is my new comic book superhero, LUNAR MAN!!!
Here is his basic design in color:
And here are scans from the very first black-and-white issue, released October 2020. I did all the artwork myself!
Cover Art:
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Can't wait to hear what everyone has to say about this! Hope you guys enjoy it!
Here is his basic design in color:
And here are scans from the very first black-and-white issue, released October 2020. I did all the artwork myself!
Cover Art:
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Can't wait to hear what everyone has to say about this! Hope you guys enjoy it!
Hey @Admiral Archer ... I hope you don't mind, but we try to keep all the creative endeavours in a single thread, which is pinned at the top of the forum. So I am going to move your thread there.
Congratulations on your comic!
Congratulations on your comic!
I know that game and loved using those thngs, just a shame there wasn't more diversity with the travel system.
I LOVE old electronics and taking things apart so my next project is a busy box. I purchased a portable VCR with matching tuner and plan to make them into a busy box by opening them and removing all the wiring then putting them back together in a clean form to create a busy box for when I'm a little itchy to do something like this I can take them apart and reassemble them over and over without the hassle of wiring.
Items were listed as untested so I'm not even going to see if they work and don't have any tapes lying around anyway to see if they work and ananlog broadcast TV is dead.
I also did some art of my own too with acrylics on canvas and paint pens.
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