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Big Finish short trips contest?

That was great, lots of fun dialogue in there! :bolian:

You've managed to capture the Doctor/Tegan/Nyssa dynamic well. I think the Genus picked the wrong human to abduct. :lol:

By the way, what's the title?


One thing that concerned me about the contest was that if the stories were to be read aloud by a single actor, then too much dialogue might be a little cumbersome. I tried to keep it to a minimum in mine.

Glad you liked it Starscape, I felt I'd got thebanter right between the three of them, but I see what you mean about the story being read aloud by a single actor. I should have considered that.

As for the title, it actually didn't have one until I sent it off, at which time I christended it "Where the planets burn." Only realising too late that there are no burning planets in it only moons :brickwall:

I must say I like yours, lovely Edwardian feel to it and the fact that the narrator wasn't human was a good twist. I did get consused by the sarchophagus as I imagined it person sized, then quickly realised it was meant to be much smaller :)
 
Thanks, Starkers! :)

Ah, the carcophagus is described a "hand-sized" early on. I probably should have added some more size references, but by the end I was culling adjectives to get the story down to size. :lol: There's too much plot for a 2500-worder, really.


Nice title... planets/moons: well, there's not much difference between them anyway. ;)



The winner for the 5th Doc + Nyssa story has been announced too:
http://www.bigfinish.com/news/Fifth-Doctor-Opportunity-Winner
 
That's the trouble isn't it, culling words to get down to the 2500 limit, whilst I often like what that does to a story, sometimes its hard to cut some of the fat away.
 
Bugger!

Just found out there was only one winner for the BF FifthDoctor/Nyssa one-off audio drama, and it wasn't me.

I was going to reopen the old thread on this, where we discussed posting our synopses, but I can't find it. So I'll chuck mine in here, and anyopne can follow if they want. :)

Doctor Who: How Empires Die
by Australis

The Doctor and Nyssa arrive at an orbital observatory, an array of telescopes wirelessly hooked together over a huge area of space and focused on a planet 20 light years away. The Doctor and Nyssa seem sad. They tell the observatory chief why.

They had been passing that planet twenty years ago, when they detected another time machine. They land in the Palace of the City of Storms – the wind can be constantly heard in the background. Captured, they’re brought before Malvas himself, who is soon to be the leader of the Malvasian Empire, the Doctor tells Nyssa. Malvas is arrogant, very sure of himself, but quite smart. At the same time, another man is captured, Dalon, the other time traveller. He tells Malvas he’s come from the future to plead with him to change the course the Empire will take. If he doesn’t, the Empire will be remembered as a byword for blood and greed and death. Malvas, on the contrary, is pleased, and looks forward to his Empire dominating the region long after he’s gone.

At this point, Dalon pulls out a concealed weapon and tries to assassinate Malvas, but fails, though the Emperor is wounded. He promises he shall extend Dalon’s life as long as he can so that he can see the results of the Empire.

The three are imprisoned. Dalon reveals he’s actually a direct descendant of Malvas and ashamed of his ancestor, and what was done by his people. “They all believed him, backed him. None are innocent.” Doctor: “Surely some-?” Dalon: “None. Ever”

They escape. Dalon thanks the Doctor for his help and advises he and Nyssa get back to the TARDIS as he’s “going to bring the Palace down”. Doctor: “If Malvas dies, you won’t exist!” Dalon: “Do you think that matters, after all I’ve seen?” The Doctor and Nyssa hurry to the TARDIS and are no sooner on board when the doors slam shut and it performs an emergency takeoff.

At the observatory, the Doctor tells the chief he’s come to see what happened, that this would be a good place to observe it. On these words, they see the planet ripped by fire. Dalon had one of the most feared weapons of the Empire, a Scarifyer, that strips life from the planet’s surface, though people can return in ten years. He used the Empire’s future to destroy it before it begins. The Doctor: “I feel the history of the Empire evaporating like dew, other histories taking its place. He changed it all.” He also says that both men were absolutely determined to have their way, no matter what he tried to do to divert their courses. They were always doomed, no matter what.

The chief says what a waste. The Doctor says not for him – the Empire would have overrun his world in eight years and used that same weapon. Now, he and his people will have some kind of future.
 
And the BF site is back up again, I was 99% sure I hadn't won...now 100% sure :p


Where is the site? I can't seem to find it.

I think I'm going to rewrite my entry; change the Doctor to a totally different character and submit it elsewhere.
 
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