The Vulcan, A serial high-space adventure

[Will The Serious]

I have episode 3 written and have started on episode 4, but my writing is all done on my phone in the short times I have between regular life. It is slow and irregular. I may not get as far as I want. Episode 3 is still sort of setting the stage, the introduction. Their last planned crewmember is acquired in ep 3. That is the episode where I really fell in love with Dr. Gödel. She is a distant relative of the famous mathematician Kurt Gödel. She has anthrophobia, which comes out with stuttering around people, but she is every bit as brilliant as the Professor.

I like the use of flash backs to fill out the context of a character's thinking. I plan on doing that a lot. I think it works better for a story I imagine as a TV series, than having a narration to fill in history. Don't tell, show.

After I post Episode 3, I thought I'd post the series outline and character's notes to get feedback on everything.

-Will

 

[Will The Serious]

Particularly liking the odd couple in the developing the science experiment in the converted storage room.

The V5-Beta was designed to have the ability to steal technology, as well as recon data and other information. As such, the ship is mostly filled with large storage holds. The Professor's lab is quite large. Gödel and Kazzak's experiment has major side effects in episode 3.

-Will

 

[Will The Serious]

The Morality of Hybridizing Sentient Species and The Impact of Humanity on Pon Farr, The Vulcan Mating Cycle .

Members of species from different evolutionary processes don't hybridize by accident. It would be easier for a human to accidentally impregnate a tuna. Or a petunia. For a human to produce viable offspring with an extraterrestrial takes a significant genetic lift.

I'm concerned with this statement. The mixing of Human genetics with Vulcan genetics has a large role in my story. The event I've planned needs to be a natural one, no technological help. It's not critical to the main plot, but I am so happy with my idea, that I don't want to give it up.

There was an episode of TOS in which Spock expressed the mystery of the broad ranging existence of so many parallel humanoid species across the galaxy. Kirk believed that Earth's dominant species evolved independently, but perhaps Spock's observation was closer to the truth.

-Will

 

[Elias Vaughn]

There's also an episode of TNG where we learn that a species seeded its genetic code all over the galaxy (quadrant?) so really all the alien races are kind of related anyway.

 

[Robert Bruce Scott]

...The event I've planned needs to be a natural one, no technological help. It's not critical to the main plot, but I am so happy with my idea, that I don't want to give it up....

Each writer's Trek-Verse operates according to its own rules, so there's no need for concern about one writer's Trek-Verse not agreeing with another's. There are many ways to interpret the material the franchise gives us (and the franchise is not always internally consistent, so there's some degree of picking and choosing.)

The United Trek (UT) writers (CeeJay, Galen4, Gibralter and a few others) created a unified Trek-Verse that allows them to write each other's characters and plot lines into their own stories. Link to United Trek

I took many cues for STH from ST Enterprise. Trip and T'Pol were able to conceive without genetic intervention, but the baby was allergic to herself and could not (and ultimately did not) survive without genetic intervention to resolve the incompatibilities between her genetic heritages.

Speaking strictly biologically, even with the Progenitors creating a DNA web within the Milky Way, the differences between species that develop independently in separate biospheres, even starting with our double-helix, would be greater than that between a man and a petunia. But that's really only the least of the scientific problems with Trek - the speed of causality being the show-stopper. Trek is more space-fantasy than science-fiction.

Thanks!! rbs

 

[Will The Serious]

Just trying not to break too many established standards. Besides TOS, I have watched the TNG, a few STE, Voyager, and one or two DS9, plus the movies. I don't know what has been aired in the latest new set of series.

Thanks for easing my mind about the liberties I am taking with the franchise. My story doesn't even include a doctor, although Skyvik is a trained field medic.

-Will

 

[Robert Bruce Scott]

... Besides TOS, I have watched the TNG, a few STE, Voyager, and one or two DS9, plus the movies. I don't know what has been aired in the latest new set of series.

Thanks for easing my mind about the liberties I am taking with the franchise...

Trek BBS is a very egalitarian community. I'm a relative newcomer here and STH breaks a lot of rules that most other writers here live by.

I'm conversant with all the old series, but I haven't warmed to the recent series (Picard, Discovery, New Worlds and the cartoons.) Not a fan of Lower Decks, but we do have a writer here who writes excellent Lower Decks stories that I am a fan of.

Thanks!! rbs

 

[Will The Serious]

The United Trek (UT) writers (CeeJay, Galen4, Gibralter and a few others) created a unified Trek-Verse that allows them to write each other's characters and plot lines into their own stories. Link to United Trek

That's a very nicely designed sight.

Thanks
-Will

 

[Will The Serious]

I would like to include a drawing of the V5-Beta. It is on my phone, so I can't link to it. Is there any way to paste it as a text element?

 

[Robert Bruce Scott]

Not that I know of.

Only way I've been able to do that is to to put the image on a website somewhere, then link it in via the image button (next to the smiley face.)

 

[Will The Serious]

Thanks RBS,
The two of the other three forums I participate in allow paste in images. All three have a user's gallery that can be uploaded to and linked to from within the site. I was hoping there was something like that here, especially for the Trek Art Forum, but it's no problem, I'll just have to figure out where to upload my drawing to, then link it in. I was thinking of providing each episode with a cover or poster. I make part of my living as a visual artist, so it's a natural fit. Sci-fi isn't my usual subject matter, though.

-Will

 

[Bynar0110]

I been enjoying reading your fanfics Will

 

[Will The Serious]

Thank you Bynar0110,
I thought the inclusion of a Bynar pair could make for an interesting perspective for some of the episodes. The marriage of biology and machinery and computers offers some excellent Sci-fi material to play around with.

I hope to get my next installment out, but my wife and I are wrapping up our business season and making plans for a trip to Turkey soon, so not a lot of time. I do have a number of scenes already written but I need to fit them together with the overall meta-plot. It isn't as complex as Star Trek Hunter, but it is suppose to have layers upon layers.

-Will

 

[Will The Serious]

Trying this out. I'll see if I can post this at the beginning of the story, if this works.

S'Talla stuns two guards before boarding the V5-Beta.

-Will

 

[Bynar0110]

Did you draw that?

 

[Will The Serious]

Yes.
That's my take on a fifth generation Vahklas class Vulcan star cruiser. I believe the traditional "official" version was seen first on STE. A very cool looking ship. I gave the Vulcan a full circle warp girdle or ring, moved the pilot dome forward and put two large, warp capable shuttle craft at the end of the forward arms and two, side by side at the aft end.

There is one more secret she is still hiding from the crew, including S'Talla and Skyvik. They will likely be quite delighted when they discover it. Randool Harrix and Charlie certainly will be. I haven't gotten to that point yet, but Randool is a bit of a 23rd century gear head. That's my clue.

-Will

 

[Bynar0110]

Yes.
That's my take on a fifth generation Vahklas class Vulcan star cruiser. I believe the traditional "official" version was seen first on STE. A very cool looking ship. I gave the Vulcan a full circle warp girdle or ring, moved the pilot dome forward and put two large, warp capable shuttle craft at the end of the forward arms and two, side by side at the aft end.

There is one more secret she is still hiding from the crew, including S'Talla and Skyvik. They will likely be quite delighted when they discover it. Randool Harrix and Charlie certainly will be. I haven't gotten to that point yet, but Randool is a bit of a 23rd century gear head. That's my clue.

-Will

It's a really good drawing Will.

 

[Will The Serious]

Thanks 0110,
It's not exactly perfect, but I am happy with it. Maybe some day I'll ink it and add color. Lately, I've been doing most of my work in pyrography.

-Will

 

[Will The Serious]

I think my series needs a short prologue. I've plasted it in to the top of the first episode's first post on this thread.

SERIES PROLOGUE:
We see across vast expanses to impossibly distant worlds. We look out into Space and witness the beginning of the Universe, the birth of planets, and the death of stars. Civilization turns to Space for knowledge, adventure, and hope. Space is also deadly, a wall to growth and progress. It is our past and our future. This is where Vulcan and her crew live, work and explore. Join the lives of these twenty beings from different and distant worlds, who have been brought together to find refuge, wonder, and friendship in the greatest frontier.

Let me know what you think.

-Will

 

[Robert Bruce Scott]

I've been wondering when you would pick up this story again. I'd recommend you break your prologue into two paragraphs, the second starting with the word "Space."

For that sentence (beginning with "Space") you might consider instead quoting part of William Shatner's statement after his trip to space - how lonely and dark it was.

Thanks!! rbs