A story I am writing. Not finished yet, but most of it is, and hopefully posting it here will help to motivate me to finish it.
I'll post the prologue and the first chapter now. The prologue is a scene (two, actually) from one of the Voyager episodes (as is the epilogue), and I hope that once the entire story is up you'll understand why I've included two scenes from the TV show in the story.
Also, many of the chapters are quite long, longer than the 20,000 character limit for posts, so I'll have to break the chapters into several posts. Sorry about that.
One thing I'd really like is constructive criticism. I've posted a part of this at another forum, but it's quite small and I wasn't getting much of a response. Hopefully here where there are more members I can get more responses.
Please note that this work is copyrighted to me (except for the bits that are adapted from the episodes). Please don't copy this or download it.
Finally, this is LONG. At the moment (four-fifths finished), it's over 121,000 words. That's longer than a 400 page novel. So be prepared for a long trip.
Anyway, here it is.
The voice of the Collective, the constant murmuring of the other drones, was gone.
She had been snatched out of her perfect existence by a group of interfering Humans who knew no better.
They had thought that their actions would help her. But in fact they had done the opposite. They had removed her from perfection. They had exposed her to a life she never had, a life that she should not be living now.
And now they had changed her. Removed those things that had been her life. They had made her as weak and as helpless as the rest of them.
And they had done it all under the misguided notion that they were helping her.
The door to the brig opened with the sound of working machinery. Her sensitive ears could hear footsteps as someone approached. The doors closed and she slowly turned to face her visitor. As she had expected, it was Captain Janeway.
“So this is Human freedom.” Seven of Nine spoke in an icy tone.
Janeway ignored the coldness of the drone’s voice. “I’ve decided to keep you in the brig until I’m certain you won’t try to harm us again,” she said. “If necessary, the Doctor can treat you in here.” She gave Seven of Nine a disappointed look. “I honestly believed you were going to help us.”
“You were not deceived, Captain Janeway,” Seven of Nine said. “It was my intention to help you.”
“What happened?” Janeway asked simply.
“There was a chance to contact the Collective,” Seven of Nine said. “We took advantage of it.” She moved towards the force field. “Your attempts to assimilate this drone will fail. You can alter our physiology, but you cannot change our nature. We will betray you. We are Borg.”
“I’ve met Borg who were freed from the Collective,” Janeway told her. “It wasn’t easy for them to accept their individuality, but in time, they did. You’re no different.”
Seven of Nine turned away from the force field. This Human standing before her didn’t understand what she was talking about, and Seven of Nine wanted nothing more to do with her.
“Granted,” Janeway continued, “you were assimilated at a very young age, and your transition may be more difficult, but… it will happen.”
Seven of Nine was silent for a moment, thinking. “If it does happen,” she said, almost thoughtfully, “we will become fully Human?”
“Yes, I hope so,” said Janeway.
“We will be autonomous?” asked Seven of Nine. “Independent?”
Janeway almost smiled. “That’s what individuality is all about.”
Seven of Nine turned back to face Janeway, defiantly this time. “If, at that time, we choose to return to the Collective, will you permit it?”
“I don’t think you’ll want to do that,” said Janeway.
Seven of Nine approached Janeway. “You would deny us the choice, as you deny us now?” she said accusingly. “You have imprisoned us in the name of Humanity, yet you will not grant us your most cherished Human right? To choose our own fate? You are hypocritical. Manipulative. We do not want to be what you are. Return us to the Collective!”
“You lost the capacity to make a reasonable choice the moment you were assimilated,” Janeway said assertively. “They took that from you. And until I’m convinced that you’ve gotten it back, I’m making the choice for you. You’re staying here.”
“Then you are no different than the Borg,” hissed Seven of Nine. She turned and walked away from the forcefield.
Janeway, sensing that she wouldn’t get through to the drone now, left. Perhaps in time, the drone would be more cooperative, but for the moment, it would be useless to talk to her.
For Seven of Nine, the hours passed slowly. The only other person in the brig was the guard, a male named Ayala, and unlike the Collective, he was silent. The difference between the Collective and this quiet place was too great for her. The quiet, the stillness, the cool dry air, the lack of drones, it was all wrong, terribly wrong, and the stress building up inside her broke free. She threw herself wildly at the force field, screaming.
Ayala looked up from the console. “Ensign Ayala to the bridge.”
Janeway’s voice came over the communication system. “Go ahead, Ensign.”
“You’d better get down to the brig, ma’am.”
Seven of Nine noticed his hand moving towards his phaser.
It was only a few minutes before Janeway arrived, but by that time, Seven of Nine had given up her attack on the force field and was pacing in the back of the small cell. She did not look up as Janeway entered.
“One,” Seven of Nine said. “My designation is Seven of Nine, but the others are gone. Designations are no longer relevant. I am… one…”
Janeway spoke quietly, barely above a whisper. “Yes, you are.”
“But I cannot function this way!” said Seven of Nine. “Alone…”
“You’re not alone,” said Janeway. “I’m willing to help you.”
Seven of Nine turned to her. “If that’s true, you won’t do this to me,” she said. She was distressed, and could feel fear rising up from within her.
“Take me back to my own kind.”
“You are with your own kind,” said Janeway. “Humans.”
“I don’t remember being Human,” said Seven of Nine. “I don’t know what it is to be Human.” The fear she felt growing inside her began to emerge, and she could feel her body shaking as she tried to hold back tears.
Janeway picked up a padd from the console and approached the force field. She tapped the controls at the side of the entry to the cell.
“What are you doing?” said Seven of Nine.
“I’m coming in,” Janeway said matter-of-factly.
“I’ll kill you.”
Janeway looked up. “I don’t think you will,” she said.
The force field flicked off. Ayala stepped forward, his hand going to his phaser, ready to defend his captain if the drone tried to carry out her threat. Janeway held up a hand to stop him. She stepped into the cell and held the padd out to Seven of Nine. On the padd’s screen was a picture of a little girl, smiling at the holo-imager. Blonde hair framed the bright eyes that highlighted a mischievous young face.
Seven of Nine felt something inside her stirring, grief at a life lost to something dark. A half-lost memory of seeing that same face in the mirror…
“Do you remember her?” asked Janeway. “Her name was Annika Hansen. She was born on Stardate 25479 at the Tendara Colony. There’s still a lot we don’t know about her. Did she have any siblings? Who were her friends? Where did she go to school? What was her favourite colour?”
Seven of Nine lashed out, her hand smacking against the padd, flinging it out of Janeway’s hand. It spun across the cell and clattered against the wall before falling to the floor. “Irrelevant! Take me back to the Borg!”
“I can’t do that,” Janeway said calmly.
Seven of Nine doubled over in a frustration that was approaching a terrible agony. The silence in her head was mercilessly eating away at her from the inside out, like a foul disease that was rotting her organs and turning her insides to thick slimy mucus. “Quiet… One voice…” She staggered away from Janeway towards the corner of the cell, her legs unstable, as if her bones were dissolving.
“One voice can be stronger than a thousand voices.” Janeway said firmly. “Your mind is independent now, with its own unique identity.”
“You are forcing that identity upon me!” Seven of Nine spat at the Captain.
“It’s not mine!”
“Oh, yes it is,” Janeway said, moving towards the drone. “I’m just giving you back what was stolen from you. The existence you were denied. The child who never had a chance. That life is yours now.”
“I don’t want that life!”
“It’s what you are!” Janeway insisted. “Don’t resist it!”
Seven of Nine hurled herself at Janeway. “No!” she screamed, but she was weak and her attack failed. She stumbled and fell, and Janeway reached out and grabbed her, staggering back to the bed. They both collapsed onto the bunk, and in the silence, Janeway could hear the drone sobbing.
I'll post the prologue and the first chapter now. The prologue is a scene (two, actually) from one of the Voyager episodes (as is the epilogue), and I hope that once the entire story is up you'll understand why I've included two scenes from the TV show in the story.
Also, many of the chapters are quite long, longer than the 20,000 character limit for posts, so I'll have to break the chapters into several posts. Sorry about that.
One thing I'd really like is constructive criticism. I've posted a part of this at another forum, but it's quite small and I wasn't getting much of a response. Hopefully here where there are more members I can get more responses.
Please note that this work is copyrighted to me (except for the bits that are adapted from the episodes). Please don't copy this or download it.
Finally, this is LONG. At the moment (four-fifths finished), it's over 121,000 words. That's longer than a 400 page novel. So be prepared for a long trip.
Anyway, here it is.
THE HANSEN DIARIES
Prologue
Prologue
The voice of the Collective, the constant murmuring of the other drones, was gone.
She had been snatched out of her perfect existence by a group of interfering Humans who knew no better.
They had thought that their actions would help her. But in fact they had done the opposite. They had removed her from perfection. They had exposed her to a life she never had, a life that she should not be living now.
And now they had changed her. Removed those things that had been her life. They had made her as weak and as helpless as the rest of them.
And they had done it all under the misguided notion that they were helping her.
The door to the brig opened with the sound of working machinery. Her sensitive ears could hear footsteps as someone approached. The doors closed and she slowly turned to face her visitor. As she had expected, it was Captain Janeway.
“So this is Human freedom.” Seven of Nine spoke in an icy tone.
Janeway ignored the coldness of the drone’s voice. “I’ve decided to keep you in the brig until I’m certain you won’t try to harm us again,” she said. “If necessary, the Doctor can treat you in here.” She gave Seven of Nine a disappointed look. “I honestly believed you were going to help us.”
“You were not deceived, Captain Janeway,” Seven of Nine said. “It was my intention to help you.”
“What happened?” Janeway asked simply.
“There was a chance to contact the Collective,” Seven of Nine said. “We took advantage of it.” She moved towards the force field. “Your attempts to assimilate this drone will fail. You can alter our physiology, but you cannot change our nature. We will betray you. We are Borg.”
“I’ve met Borg who were freed from the Collective,” Janeway told her. “It wasn’t easy for them to accept their individuality, but in time, they did. You’re no different.”
Seven of Nine turned away from the force field. This Human standing before her didn’t understand what she was talking about, and Seven of Nine wanted nothing more to do with her.
“Granted,” Janeway continued, “you were assimilated at a very young age, and your transition may be more difficult, but… it will happen.”
Seven of Nine was silent for a moment, thinking. “If it does happen,” she said, almost thoughtfully, “we will become fully Human?”
“Yes, I hope so,” said Janeway.
“We will be autonomous?” asked Seven of Nine. “Independent?”
Janeway almost smiled. “That’s what individuality is all about.”
Seven of Nine turned back to face Janeway, defiantly this time. “If, at that time, we choose to return to the Collective, will you permit it?”
“I don’t think you’ll want to do that,” said Janeway.
Seven of Nine approached Janeway. “You would deny us the choice, as you deny us now?” she said accusingly. “You have imprisoned us in the name of Humanity, yet you will not grant us your most cherished Human right? To choose our own fate? You are hypocritical. Manipulative. We do not want to be what you are. Return us to the Collective!”
“You lost the capacity to make a reasonable choice the moment you were assimilated,” Janeway said assertively. “They took that from you. And until I’m convinced that you’ve gotten it back, I’m making the choice for you. You’re staying here.”
“Then you are no different than the Borg,” hissed Seven of Nine. She turned and walked away from the forcefield.
Janeway, sensing that she wouldn’t get through to the drone now, left. Perhaps in time, the drone would be more cooperative, but for the moment, it would be useless to talk to her.
For Seven of Nine, the hours passed slowly. The only other person in the brig was the guard, a male named Ayala, and unlike the Collective, he was silent. The difference between the Collective and this quiet place was too great for her. The quiet, the stillness, the cool dry air, the lack of drones, it was all wrong, terribly wrong, and the stress building up inside her broke free. She threw herself wildly at the force field, screaming.
Ayala looked up from the console. “Ensign Ayala to the bridge.”
Janeway’s voice came over the communication system. “Go ahead, Ensign.”
“You’d better get down to the brig, ma’am.”
Seven of Nine noticed his hand moving towards his phaser.
It was only a few minutes before Janeway arrived, but by that time, Seven of Nine had given up her attack on the force field and was pacing in the back of the small cell. She did not look up as Janeway entered.
“One,” Seven of Nine said. “My designation is Seven of Nine, but the others are gone. Designations are no longer relevant. I am… one…”
Janeway spoke quietly, barely above a whisper. “Yes, you are.”
“But I cannot function this way!” said Seven of Nine. “Alone…”
“You’re not alone,” said Janeway. “I’m willing to help you.”
Seven of Nine turned to her. “If that’s true, you won’t do this to me,” she said. She was distressed, and could feel fear rising up from within her.
“Take me back to my own kind.”
“You are with your own kind,” said Janeway. “Humans.”
“I don’t remember being Human,” said Seven of Nine. “I don’t know what it is to be Human.” The fear she felt growing inside her began to emerge, and she could feel her body shaking as she tried to hold back tears.
Janeway picked up a padd from the console and approached the force field. She tapped the controls at the side of the entry to the cell.
“What are you doing?” said Seven of Nine.
“I’m coming in,” Janeway said matter-of-factly.
“I’ll kill you.”
Janeway looked up. “I don’t think you will,” she said.
The force field flicked off. Ayala stepped forward, his hand going to his phaser, ready to defend his captain if the drone tried to carry out her threat. Janeway held up a hand to stop him. She stepped into the cell and held the padd out to Seven of Nine. On the padd’s screen was a picture of a little girl, smiling at the holo-imager. Blonde hair framed the bright eyes that highlighted a mischievous young face.
Seven of Nine felt something inside her stirring, grief at a life lost to something dark. A half-lost memory of seeing that same face in the mirror…
“Do you remember her?” asked Janeway. “Her name was Annika Hansen. She was born on Stardate 25479 at the Tendara Colony. There’s still a lot we don’t know about her. Did she have any siblings? Who were her friends? Where did she go to school? What was her favourite colour?”
Seven of Nine lashed out, her hand smacking against the padd, flinging it out of Janeway’s hand. It spun across the cell and clattered against the wall before falling to the floor. “Irrelevant! Take me back to the Borg!”
“I can’t do that,” Janeway said calmly.
Seven of Nine doubled over in a frustration that was approaching a terrible agony. The silence in her head was mercilessly eating away at her from the inside out, like a foul disease that was rotting her organs and turning her insides to thick slimy mucus. “Quiet… One voice…” She staggered away from Janeway towards the corner of the cell, her legs unstable, as if her bones were dissolving.
“One voice can be stronger than a thousand voices.” Janeway said firmly. “Your mind is independent now, with its own unique identity.”
“You are forcing that identity upon me!” Seven of Nine spat at the Captain.
“It’s not mine!”
“Oh, yes it is,” Janeway said, moving towards the drone. “I’m just giving you back what was stolen from you. The existence you were denied. The child who never had a chance. That life is yours now.”
“I don’t want that life!”
“It’s what you are!” Janeway insisted. “Don’t resist it!”
Seven of Nine hurled herself at Janeway. “No!” she screamed, but she was weak and her attack failed. She stumbled and fell, and Janeway reached out and grabbed her, staggering back to the bed. They both collapsed onto the bunk, and in the silence, Janeway could hear the drone sobbing.
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