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Tales of the Border Service: "Dragon's Slayd"

hee hee - the doc can't hold his drink! Quite a funny scene and a little slip of the heart too. Aw.

Great touches and details to the whole away mission. A doc with some hidden maybe painful past seeking peace and solace on the planet. A different mindset among the settlers and war orphans to boot.

Only thing is I'm getting troubling visions that this planet could be quite vulnerable. But then I'm getting suspicious about a lot of things.
 
I must say, Redshirt, that I am jealous of your skill and energy. To write this well is remarkable in itself, but when coupled with the speed and regularity of your new chapters, it's breath taking!
 
I really like the colony. It's so idyllic, perfect set up for horrendous despoiling by ruthless aliens who...er, maybe that's a different story. :vulcan:
 
Curious as to where the story is going to turn with the arrival at the colony. Can't wait to see what you've got up your sleeves.
 
These may be simple folk, but I have a feeling they have a dark side too. And since Slayd has known these people for some time, I have a feeling that he would get downright mean if anything untoward were to happen to them.

After all, the gloves are coming off against the Tzenkethi, and he doesn't know the Caitians a millionth as well as he knows the Lancastrians.

West and Kwan are looking good together...long may it continue, as long as the good doctor doesn't let anything slip.
 
The colony is a nice respite for readers and crew members alike, prior to whatever is fated to happen between the Dragonfire and the Tzenkethi. It's nice to know there are still those living by their own rules in the 24th century. Cardassian and Bajoran children living on a largely human colony far from Cardassian space... more and more interesting. :)
 
Okay, TLR. I've been letting this one slide because I generally like your work, but now I'm going to have to pick this particular nit because I see you're going to make the same constant mistake with another character in a completely different series and it's gonna make me pop a vein if I have to keep reading it.

Paula Burke is a Senior Chief. For that matter, Solly Brin is a Senior Chief. As such, neither one of them can be a "Chief of the Boat" because neither one of them is just a Chief, which is what the phrase is meant to refer to. It is not ceremonial or honorary. It has a specific definition, part of which requires the person being defined to be a Chief. A Senior Chief is a higher rating, and you disrespect that Senior Chief every time you refer to him or her in such a way, because you essentially demote them in status with the words, even if not in actuality. It's like when I've seen other Trek fic writers refer to Chief Engineers as "Chief" when they're mainly officers! (Truly a favorite vein-popper of mine.)

I know I'll probably never get you to stop using the phrase "Chief of The Boat" altogether, so could I at least ask you to add one word? Senior. "Senior Chief of the Boat" is more accurate and restores status and respect to the characters in question. Please!

Okay, rant over.

As for the story, I like it so far. I'm not as sold on either the captain or the doctor as most others here seem to be, but I do like the way the other crew members seem to have adjusted themselves to the captain's quirkiness and how they're dealing with West's "noob"ness.
 
Odd. As far as I understood it, the Chief of the Boat was usually the most-senior enlisted man, no matter what their rank was. In fact, I've found one reference to the Chief of the Boat being a Senior Chief in ten minutes of searching.
 
Okay, TLR. I've been letting this one slide because I generally like your work, but now I'm going to have to pick this particular nit because I see you're going to make the same constant mistake with another character in a completely different series and it's gonna make me pop a vein if I have to keep reading it.

Paula Burke is a Senior Chief. For that matter, Solly Brin is a Senior Chief. As such, neither one of them can be a "Chief of the Boat" because neither one of them is just a Chief, which is what the phrase is meant to refer to. It is not ceremonial or honorary. It has a specific definition, part of which requires the person being defined to be a Chief. A Senior Chief is a higher rating, and you disrespect that Senior Chief every time you refer to him or her in such a way, because you essentially demote them in status with the words, even if not in actuality. It's like when I've seen other Trek fic writers refer to Chief Engineers as "Chief" when they're mainly officers! (Truly a favorite vein-popper of mine.)

I know I'll probably never get you to stop using the phrase "Chief of The Boat" altogether, so could I at least ask you to add one word? Senior. "Senior Chief of the Boat" is more accurate and restores status and respect to the characters in question. Please!

Okay, rant over.

As for the story, I like it so far. I'm not as sold on either the captain or the doctor as most others here seem to be, but I do like the way the other crew members seem to have adjusted themselves to the captain's quirkiness and how they're dealing with West's "noob"ness.

Thanks for the rant, Admiral2 - I take it as good constructive criticism. I agree - "Senior Chief" is a level of rank between Chief Petty Officer and Master Chief Petty Officer. However, "Chief of the Boat" is a position, not a rank. The C.O.B. is the designation for the most senior non-com of a vessel, whether they be CPO, SCPO or MCPO, in the same way a C.O. might hold the rank of Captain, Commander or Lt. Commander - depending on the size of the vessel.

I would totally agree with your rant if someone referred to a SCPO as simply "Chief." They should always be called Senior Chief or Senior.

And if you still disagree, you have to admit - at least I'm consistent. ;)

Thanks for reading - I know not all of my characters are for everyone but glad you like the story and I always welcome your comments. :)
 
"Chief of The Boat" originated as a phrase that described the senior enlisted man - strictly a Chief Petty Officer, because that was the highest rate required - of the crew of a submarine, the only ship ever referred to in any Navy as a "boat". You will not see a Senior Chief referred to as such in any other official unit, including the Coast Guard units on which TLR's Border Service is based. The more likely term would be "Command Senior Chief."
 
"Chief of The Boat" originated as a phrase that described the senior enlisted man - strictly a Chief Petty Officer, because that was the highest rate required - of the crew of a submarine, the only ship ever referred to in any Navy as a "boat". You will not see a Senior Chief referred to as such in any other official unit, including the Coast Guard units on which TLR's Border Service is based. The more likely term would be "Command Senior Chief."

I will grant your point - especially regarding the submarine service. No argument there. However, keep in mind that my tales are works of fiction set in the distant future, so allow me a bit of leeway. My father served in the U.S. Navy during WWII as a 1st class petty officer and pharmacist's mate, so I would never intentionally write anything to denigrate an NCO, even in a fictional account. As I've been using the term C.O.B. for Solly and now for Paula Burke, I will continue to do so for consistency's sake. Just consider it a quirk of the Border Service.

Hey, at least I don't have any commodores! :lol:
 
Chapter Ten

Stardate 54359.8 (16 May 2377)
New Providence Settlement
Lancaster IV

West watched with fascination as Dr. Delacroix moved among the Cardassian and Bajoran children, much like a protective mother hen with a brood of chicks. The children ranged in age from toddler to pre-adolescent. They all appeared healthy and well-fed and seemed to delight in the appearance of Delacroix. She lavished affection on the children, making sure none missed a hug or kiss.

A woman in a long, gray dress stepped out of the house, a patient smile on her face.

“Alright children, it’s time to wash up and prepare for our afternoon lessons,” said the woman.


As was typical of children from most cultures, there were cries of protest. “Can’t we stay outside a little longer? Doc Claire just got here.”

“Doc Claire will see to you one by one. In the house now, scoot!” The woman’s voice was gentle but firm, and the children reluctantly trudged inside to attend to their studies.

“Olivia, I’d like you to meet Dr. Brian West – the new Chief Medical Officer on the Dragonfire.

The woman came down the steps of the house to greet West.


“Olivia Compton, pleased to meet you Dr. West,” the woman replied. She gave Brian a brief, firm handshake. She was an attractive woman, though she wore no makeup or adornment. Her clear blue eyes expressed warmth and compassion.

“Compton . . . are you related to Joshua Compton?” West asked.

She smiled. “My husband – I take it you’ve met him?”

“He was kind enough to give us a ride into town.” West looked around and gestured at the house. “Do you care for all these children?”

“Yes – they’re my joy. We love them dearly.”

“How do you manage? There must be twenty of them.”

“Twenty seven. Five of the oldest children are in town helping Joshua with some deliveries.”

West shook his head in astonishment. “But that’s incredible. How did you come to care for them?”

Olivia gestured at Dr. Delacroix. “Claire had a lot to do with it. She heard of the plight of these children and hundreds more like them.” She glanced away. “Joshua and I were unable to have children of our own – this opportunity was a Godsend.”

West couldn’t fathom 27 children as a sign of any deity’s favor, but he could not argue with what he was seeing.

“Simply amazing,” he muttered.

The afternoon passed quickly as West observed Dr. Delacroix interact with the children and conduct brief physical exams. He was fascinated by the manner in which she used physical touch and a simple stethoscope to evaluate the children, along with an ancient otoscope to examine ears, eyes and throats. In each case, she handed the child a treat secreted in the pocket of her lab coat.

“Is it wise to give the children candy, Doctor?” asked West, a note of disapproval in his voice.

Delacroix smirked. “Let me guess – your parents didn’t let you have processed sugar, am I right?”

He flushed. “Well, no – of course not!” he replied, defensively.

“Too bad – a little sugar in your diet can make life more fun. What other vices do you avoid, Brian? Alcohol? Gambling? Sex?”

West’s face was completely red. “Um, I really don’t think . . .”

The veteran physician threw back her head in laughter.

“Lighten up, son!” She tapped her head. “99% of medicine is what we accomplish up here in the minds of our patients. If I can put a patient at ease, they heal faster. If I allow them a little fat in their diets and an occasional pipe of tobacco, they are less apt to stress out or go on a binge. I won’t deprive people of their little joys if I can help them live in moderation. You might not hear that at Starfleet Medical, but it’s the way medicine works out here in the sticks.”

Chagrined, West considered her words. “I never really thought about it that way.”

She placed an arm around him and gave him a sideward squeeze. “’Course you haven’t! You weren’t taught to think that way. Here, I have to take the holistic approach. I can’t send someone to a counselor or run a battery of tests at the sub-molecular level. I have to trust my five senses and I have to know my patients – get in their heads and figure out what makes them happy, what ticks ‘em off, what they’re afraid of – it makes me a better doctor, but more important, it makes me a friend they can trust.” She fixed her gaze on West.

“You know Brian, as a physician your most important knowledge isn’t always up here,” she said, pointing to his head, “but what’s in here.” She tapped him on the chest.

West looked at the house where 27 war orphans were getting a second chance at life. “Maybe you’re right,” he said.

* * *

That evening, the crew of the Dragonfire enjoyed a feast of locally grown food and fresh cider. Commander Nor Huren worked out a rotation that allowed all 200 plus Border Dogs the opportunity to sample the local fare and listen to lively music played on home-made instruments.

Captain Slayd stood with a glass of cider by Elder Carl Johansson. The bearded patriarch bobbed his head in time with the music as he nursed a smoldering corn-cob pipe.

“Carl, thank you for your fine hospitality. The crew always looks forward to our stops here.”

Johansson smiled and drew on his pipe, blowing out a fragrant plume of smoke. “It does my heart good seeing these young folks having fun. By the way - thank you for the replacement gears for our broadloom. It’s hard to fabricate them the way you folks can.”

“A small price to pay for your fine cider,” replied Slayd. His tone grew more serious.

“Carl, we’ve been having some serious trouble in the sector recently. The Tzenkethi have become bolder in their cross-border raids. I must say, I’m concerned for you and your people.”

Carl shrugged slightly. “God’s taken care of us, Artemus. He will provide.”

“I appreciate the sentiment,” replied Slayd, “and I respect your deeply held beliefs. But I’m telling you this as a friend – the Tzenkethi are brutal. I’ve seen what they have done to Caitian civilians, even to their children. All I’m saying is that you should consider a contingency plan – a place where you could hide out, just in case . . .”

Johansson turned his weathered face to Slayd, his expression serene. “I’m grateful for your concern, Artemus, but don’t fret about us – we’ve managed quite well for two centuries. Besides, we’ve never had any trouble from the Caitians. The occasional group of tourists visits, out of curiosity I suppose. They’re nice enough, though they tend to spook the horses.”

“Carl, the Tzenkethi are not like the Caitians, despite any similarities in appearance. If they come here, it won’t be for a family picnic or to trade for cider. They will come to destroy.”

“We’re peaceful folk, Captain. We are no threat to anyone.”

Slayd sighed. He knew the locals were pacifists at heart. They simply couldn’t comprehend the sheer violence of which the Tzenkethi were capable. “My friend, I simply desire for this colony to be around for two more centuries. Please give careful consideration to what I’ve said.”

The Elder drew more smoke from his pipe. “As your friend, I will consider it.”

* * *

Dr. West and Ensign Kwan strolled down the dirt lane toward the lake. Twin moons provided an ethereal glow to the night while stars sparkled in the great beyond. The music from the banquet was still barely audible, punctuated with the occasional outburst of laughter.

They stopped by the water’s edge as a night bird began to sing. West’s hand brushed against Cyndi’s and their fingers intertwined.

“You know – it’s quite amazing,” said West as he stared into the heavens.

“What’s that?”

“We live and work in space, yet I’ve never seen the stars like this before.”

“You and I both grew up in cities,” pointed out Kwan. “Light pollution – it fades out the night sky. And on the ship we either see computer-generated images or our vantage is limited to viewports.”

A fish jumped in the lake, sending out ripples across the surface. The reflection of the twin moons danced and shimmered across the water as a cool breeze sprang up. Another bird called out, its cry both beautiful and haunting.

“Brrr! It’s starting to get chilly,” noted Cyndi. West slipped his arm around her shoulder and drew her closer. They both continued to stare into the night sky as the wind sang through the tall grass.

“I wonder if we can spot the ship from here?” asked West.

“Hmmm. Maybe,” responded Kwan. West continued to stare into the sky with an awestruck look. Cyndi looked expectantly at West.

“Brian?”

“Yes?”

“If you don’t kiss me right now, I’m going to hurt you.”

“Okay.”

* * *
 
Some nice interaction between Doc Compton and Brian as well as Brian and Kwan. Hopefully their relationship isn't going to turn tragic anytime soon.
 
Re: West and Kwan: Awwww. ;)

Re: Slayd -- I like him more and more. He treated the elder with respect, but pressed his case out of genuine concern for the colony's well being.

The Comptons are like the 24th century version of the Duggar family from TLC. :lol:

I agree with the sentiment others have posted -- this place is so idyllic I fear it's either hiding a horrible secret, or about to get obliterated. Does that make me a cynic? :shifty:
 
Just a fan of United Trek, we never leave anything peaceful for long.

West/Kwan = Finally!!

If the Tzenkethi show up, Slayd's gonna go all Anakin on them :devil:
 
Great to see more of the planet and the people. Nice to see, especially the doc explaining the realities of her job to West. And West and Kwan, nice simple scene and funny too.

Left with a dark tone as the captain tries to warn the leaders of the planet that trouble may be heading their way.
 
I love this story and I am absolutely head over heels for all these characters you've once again teased from your always fertile mind.

What a great character development piece for Brian West, in particular, from beginning to end. And it gave even more insight and solid impressions of these intrepid souls who have settled on this planet. I fear, though, that you may be giving us some foreshadowing of an ill wind blowing their way. Let's just hope the Elder heeds our dear captain's advice.

And that last bit with West and Kwan, especially the last 2 lines: brilliant! Perfect! Made me smile this big :biggrin:
 
I am a cynic. I hear an ill wind blowing. I hope I'm wrong, but I'm not counting on it. I enjoyed this "slice of life" chapter, though. Reminds me a lot of how I grew up.
 
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