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Taking Leave

Gibraltar

Rear Admiral
Rear Admiral
The tech established a comfortable pace, his hands moving as if of their own accord as he carefully manipulated the transfer couplings affixed to the harvester’s power cells back into place. It was the third time he had repeated this process in the past two hours, and a part of him found the irony of being bested by a piece of aging Cardassian farm equipment to be pretty damn amusing.

He grabbed the edge of the maintenance hatch and pulled his upper torso out far enough for him to call up to the Cardassian mechanic assisting him. “Okay, I’m done. Hopefully that should do it.”

Taflim poked his own head out of the cab, a wry grin creasing his features. “That’s what you said last time, Michael.”

The tech stifled a laugh that the ever-present dust turned into a bout of coughing. He wiped at his watering eyes as he replied, “Yes, well, I thought I had it last time. This thing was over-built, and I didn’t take into account the triple redundancy of your power transfer system.” He scratched at his nose before adding, “…until it almost electrocuted me.”

“Did I just hear a Federation technician compliment a Cardassian design?” Taflim pressed a hand to the scales at his neck, as if checking for fever. “Can’t be. I must have caught the Lakarian plague.”

The tech screwed up his face into an exaggerated frown. “Ha,” he deadpanned. “I say again for emphasis… ha. Now, if you don’t mind, could you please press the initiator?”

“Certainly.” Taflim disappeared back inside the harvester’s cab and pushed the button that brought the cranky old piece of farm machinery to life. It rattled and groaned for the first twenty seconds as it integrated its newly replaced parts and power couplings before settling into a comfortable rumbling rhythm.

The tech pulled himself fully out of the hatch and stifled a groan as his joints protested his resumption of vertical posture. He walked over and hauled himself up to the cab as he took a look at the machine’s diagnostic panel for himself. “Everything’s in the yellow.”

Taflim frowned, clearly perplexed by the statement. “In the… what?”

“It’s a human expression, ‘in the green.’ It means everything’s in working order. However, your people use yellow to denote systems nominal status.”

The Cardassian mechanic shook his head and chuckled, “You humans are very strange. Handy, though, that’s a plus.” After the briefest moment, Taflim’s eyes widened as he suddenly realized his gaff. He turned abruptly to the tech as the color drained from his face. “I’m so very sorry,” he said in a soft voice tinged with tremulous conviction. ”I… I wasn’t thinking. That was very rude, the kind of humor my people only tend to share with close friends and family. And after all you’ve done to help me…”

The tech smiled in return. “I wasn’t offended, Taflim. Really.” He kept his gaze fixed on the mechanic until the younger man finally raised his eyes. “You should relax a little. If we can’t joke around out here where it’s just the two of us, then when could you?”

Taflim had been working with this particular human for nearly a week and a half as the two of them struggled to resurrect a veritable fleet of agricultural harvesters that had been left to rust since before the end of the war. Nearly three years of exposure to the harsh elements and a total lack of maintenance had rendered the great majority of them inoperative. It was a task that should have warranted the services of a dozen or more technicians, yet only Taflim had been made available, so depleted were the Agricultural Ministry’s staffing levels.

Taflim had succeeded in bringing only three of the machines back online in as many months, working with no help and a paltry supply of replacement parts. His repeated requests for more help and his multiple supply requisitions had been met with patent indifference from his supervisor, who was herself trying to oversee nearly two dozen land reclamation projects and ancillary assignments in the vicinity of Lakarian City.

Then the tech had arrived. Taflim knew little about him, only that his name was Michael, that he was a civilian from a Federation aid agency, and that somehow he had been tasked to assist in recovering the precious harvesters before the end of the growing season, a deadline that was approaching quickly.

Every morning when Taflim trundled up in a cloud of dust atop on his tri-wheeled ground-crawler the tech would already be hard at work. Without fail he was accompanied by a dozen or so crates of newly replicated parts, a veritable treasure trove of repair kit that made it possible to now refurbish all the harvesters, rather than part out two-thirds of them in order to resurrect the final third.

Relieved by the technician’s good-spirited acceptance of his friendly jibe, Taflim inquired, “So, Michael, can you tell me where you manage to get your hands on all these parts? With all you’ve brought these past few days, we could almost build a harvester from scratch.”

The Federation tech merely smiled enigmatically. “Let’s just say that I have some resources available to me that allow me to go around the usual supply channels.”

Taflim gave a reluctant nod, accepting that the man wanted to maintain the anonymity of his supply chain. “Wherever they come from, and wherever you’ve come from, you have my gratitude.”

“You’re welcome, but no thanks are needed. I’m here just doing what little I can to help. My time here is… limited.”

“I’m sure your agency has many other more important projects for you to attend to,” Taflim observed.

The man bobbed his head in response. “Yes, but rarely are they as satisfying as this,” he said as he gestured to the now purring harvester.

Taflim snorted in spite of himself. “This is a high point for you?”

“Once upon a time I had the privilege of working with my hands. Now… not so much. I miss it. Sometimes more than I’d like to admit.”

It appeared Taflim was on the cusp of responding when something caught his attention. He stood and craned his neck, eyeing the horizon.

The human stood as well, blinking in the harsh light as he squinted into the distance. “What is it?”

The Cardassian emitted a resigned sigh. “Trouble,” he said. “And right on schedule, too.”

The tech gave him a curious look but reserved comment.

Taflim jumped down of the big vehicle’s front fender and trudged reluctantly over to his three-wheeled transport. The young man began to paw through the contents of one of the transport’s carryall boxes until he produced a small case.

“What’s in there?” the technician inquired innocently.

“Tribute,” the young man replied.

“You’re kidding?” The tech looked dumbfounded, almost as if he couldn’t fathom such a concept. He scanned the horizon yet again, and this time spotted a small dark spot growing with the accompanying hum of a flitter. “Who are they? Crime syndicate mobsters or some local warlord’s enforcers?”

“No, but it’s no problem. I doubt they’ll bother you,” Taflim offered hopefully. “Besides, it’s nothing, really. Just a few dozen leks that I’ve saved up to keep them happy. They’re ever so much more reasonable than the Klingons were when they were running things here.”

The tech turned to look at Taflim again, his expression hardening. “Please,” he prompted. “Who are they?”

“Why Starfleet… of course.”

***

As his flitter arced across the brown-hued foreign landscape, Lt. Commander Torson Chabs-Wret of Starfleet security had plenty of time to reflect on how much he hated Cardassia. No, that wasn’t quite accurate. To be more precise, he loathed the planet. He was subjected daily to its arid climate, its burned, crumbling cities, and its malnourished, vacant-eyed masses of disenfranchised refugees who had fled here from the Union’s far-flung colonies, where if it could be believed, conditions were even worse.

Chabs-Wret had no qualms about what the Dominion had attempted to do here. His argument was with the unaccustomed lack of efficiency demonstrated by Dominion forces. No doubt, the Jem’Hadar had been in possession of a multitude of weapons that could have completed the task, from biogenic viral agents to lethal swarms of nanites to a storm of hard radiation projected from orbital satellites. If only they could have laid waste the entire surface of this world, perhaps then Chabs-Wret could have been assigned a mission more in keeping with his status.

The war had been good for him, which only made his assignment to this desolate hell hole all the more galling. His ingenuity and valor in combat had earned him multiple commendations and a medal, but for reasons beyond logic some blighted soul up the chain-of-command had decided that time spent on Cardassia Prime helping to keep the peace would be of benefit to Chabs-Wret’s career.

So now he was defacto master of some two thousand square kilometers of sun-baked, wilted desolation on the northernmost flank of the Destrala mountains. It was an area that the Cardassians claimed they did not have personnel available to patrol. That meant that Chabs-Wret and his squad of Starfleet Marines had the pleasure of spending their days baking in the scorching sun while performing spot-checks on a handful of farming communities and commercial outposts as they tried to ferret out any insurgent operatives in the area. The joke of it was that there had been no signs of insurgent activity here in nearly a year.

The graft had not started out as outright greed, but a way in which they might make the surviving Cardassians pay for the misery Chabs-Wret and his compatriots now had to endure on their behalf. As Federation citizens, he and his men wanted for nothing, with the exception of getting off this damnable rock. The act of squeezing a little something out of people who had so little left had begun innocently enough, but soon their anger and the perverse pleasure they received from shaking down the locals conspired to turn it into a full-fledged enterprise.

Chabs-Wret carried a small, handwritten notebook that contained the identities of all those persons he and his men collected tribute from. It made him feel better to hold it, to flip through its pages as he savored both the effort that the Cardassians put into meeting his demands, and the fear that haunted them at the idea of failing to meet those burdens. He could easily accuse any of them of insurgent ties, which would result in their incarceration in any number of unpleasant facilities, some completely outside the supervision of Starfleet. Some were run by the Klingons. The very threat of that alone caused grown men to weep and clutch at Chabs-Wret’s legs, begging him for mercy, pleading for his understanding and patience. Experiences like that were, in his opinion, the only thing that made life on this burned-out wreck of a planet even marginally tolerable.

“Okay, who’s next?” Sau’Drissk, the Saurian Marine corporal asked.

Chabs-Wret wet his finger and sifted through the pages of the worn notebook. “Ah, here we go… Taflim Kosk, a maintenance technician with the Agricultural Ministry. The poor bastard’s been stuck out on the high desert for the last three months trying to fix that boneyard of old farm equipment the Central Command left behind when their Peasant Lands Project fell apart.”

“And what does he owe us today?” inquired Mostrova, a grizzled Marine private and a former sergeant whose compulsive gambling and drinking had cost him his stripes three times now.

“Twenty-five leks,” Chabs-Wret replied with a lilting chortle.

“That’s all? Even a Ferengi wouldn’t bother with such a paltry sum.”

“That’s not the point and you know it,” Chabs-Wret admonished. “It’s nearly three-quarters of what he makes in a month, dedicated public servant that he is.”

Sau’Drissk scanned the sensor window in the flitter’s flight console. “You said this is the guy working out at the flats, right? Works alone?”

“Every time we’ve been by, yeah. Why?”

“Looks like he’s got company. Human male by the looks of it.” The Saurian shot his superior a glance, but Chabs-Wret was unable to ready worry in the reptilian features.

The lieutenant commander quickly accessed all Starfleet and civilian work assignments for the district, then the surrounding districts and came away with nothing. “Whoever he is, he’s not authorized to be out here,” Chabs-Wret smirked. “This is my territory, and nobody comes into my territory without my personal go-ahead. Nobody.”

“Terrorist sympathizer?” Mostrova offered.

“Insurgent scout,” Sau’Drissk replied with a flick of his long tongue.

Chabs-Wret began to hum softly to himself as the flitter descended towards the desert floor.

***

The technician had never realized how intimidating Starfleet security and Marine personnel could be when arrayed in full ‘battle-rattle.’ The three men facing Taflim and himself wore bulky armored vests, helmets, and leggings, while carrying Marine-issue pulse-phaser rifles with an air of casual lethality.

“Good afternoon,” he called out from where he squat, replacing tools into a carrying case. “To what do we owe the pleasure?” He stood and brushed the dirt from his knees.

Taflim shot him a look of warning as he clutched the case of leks in his hands. The expression on his face was one of acceptance, as though this were the natural order of things. Perhaps for him it was. The Obsidian Order, the Central Command, then the Klingon occupation forces, all these powers were known to wield their authority with disdain for the governed, treating the population as nothing more than chattel.

But he had been born and raised in the Federation. Starfleet was supposed to stand for something. Starfleet personnel were not supposed to prey on the weak like callous street thugs. He refused to believe what he was witnessing.

“Who the hell are you?” was the challenge from their leader, issued in a manner that brooked no dispute and promised no quarter.

“I’m Michael,” he replied evenly.

“And what brings you all the way out here, Michael?”

“I’m assisting Taflim here in refurbishing these harvesters. I’m sure you’ll agree that with the harvest season so close it’s important work.”

The man in the center, a lieutenant commander by the pips displayed on his dusty collar, stepped forward and into the tech’s personal space. “This region is a restricted security zone. Hell, this whole planet is accessible to humans by special authorization only… so where did you come from?”

The tech smiled grimly as he committed himself to the task ahead. He was stepping onto a path that he was sure led to trouble, or worse. “Let me answer your question with a question of my own.” He pointed to Taflim. “Are you people exacting tribute from Cardassian citizens? I’m no expert, but I’m sure there’s got to be rules against that sort of thing.”

Private Mostrova stepped forward and began to raise his rifle, “That’s a damned lie!” he shouted. Chabs-Wret stopped him in his tracks with a raised hand.

“I don’t know who you are or how you got here, but you’re coming with us, is that clear?” The security officer uttered the statement in a dangerous growl.

“Oh, it’s perfectly clear,” the tech replied. “But you didn’t answer my question. Are you people shaking down Cardassian civilians to line your own pockets?”

“I think he’s becoming aggressive, wouldn’t you agree, Commander?” This from Sau’Drissk who had remained silent until now.

“Oh, I do believe you’re right,” Chabs-Wret concurred as his face broke into a feral grin.

The tech merely stood there. “I’m not making any aggressive movements, as Taflim can attest. I’m not even raising my voice.”

Chabs-Wret bolted forward and slammed the leading edge of his helmet into the bridge of the tech’s nose. The older man crashed to the ground, blood trickling down both sides of his face from a gash along the ridge of his nose. He coughed at the cloud of dust he had raised when striking the ground as he wiped his own blood away from his mouth. However, the act only served to smear a mix of dirt and coagulating plasma across his lower face. “That was a bit uncalled for, don’t you think?”

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The security officer raised his rifle and was surprised when Taflim threw himself at him, shouting, “Michael, look out!”

Mostrova interceded with practiced ease, clubbing the Cardassian to the ground with his rifle in a single fluid stroke. Taflim lay face down, groaning into the dirt as his hands clutched the back of his head.

“Now, you see, what we have here is breakdown of subspace communications,” Chabs-Wret noted laconically as his men chuckled. “I’m supposed to be asking the questions, and you’re supposed to be answering them. If you don’t, I’ll have no choice but to interpret your stubbornness as an act of violence and respond accordingly.”

“Big, tough guys, you,” the technician huffed as he staggered back to his feet.

“Michael, stay down,” Taflim croaked from where he lay.

“You’re supposed to be helping these people!” the tech roared. “Have you taken leave of your senses?” He raised his hand and reached to toggle a wrist-communicator affixed to his other arm. “We’ll see about how ‘authorized’ your activities are—“

He was unprepared for the speed of the security officer’s blow as the larger man drove the butt of his rifle into the tech’s midsection. He toppled over onto the ground once again, gasping for breath and fighting the urge to vomit up the contents of his abused stomach.

“The learning curve here is decidedly steeper than it needs to be,” Chabs-Wret sighed.

“Enough,” the technician wheezed. “That’s enough.”

“Well, that’s entirely up to you—“ Chabs-Wret began, only to have his words caught in the very same transporter beam that enveloped he, his men, and the two bloodied mechanics.

The lieutenant commander looked around in near shock, and it took him a prolonged moment to grasp that he and the others were now standing atop the transporter pad of what appeared to be a Federation starship.

A Vulcan junior lieutenant with phaser drawn stood in front of the transporter console, flanked by two more security officers. Two medical technicians stood by near the door.

Chabs-Wret smiled disarmingly. “I sure can’t fault your timing, Lieutenant.” He gestured to the Cardassian and the human who were presently lying prone atop the transport dais. “These two insurgents nearly got the jump on us. They had the perfect cover, too, working as technical support staff for the Agricultural Ministry.”

The Vulcan appeared to briefly consider his words, and then turned his gaze on the human who was pulling himself shakily into a sitting position. “Are you badly injured Captain?”

“No,” replied Captain Donald Sandhurst. “I’ve suffered worse at the hands of better,” he elaborated as he pinched the bridge of his nose to staunch the bleeding. He stood slowly as he eyed the weapons still clutched in his former captors’ hands.

“I’ve taken the liberty of having Chief Towsend deactivate their weapons in transit,” Lieutenant(j.g.) Verrik noted helpfully.

“Thank you, Mister Verrik.” The captain gestured for the medical technicians to move forward and begin attending to Taflim’s injuries.

Sandhurst then stepped up to the Chabs-Wret, his eyes blazing as he regarded the officer with undisguised contempt. “Welcome aboard the starship Gibraltar. My ship.” He reached out a hand, but Chabs-Wret was too shocked to react to the gesture. Sandhurst grasped the man’s Starfleet combadge from where it was partly visible behind his tactical vest and tore the device from his uniform. “You don’t deserve to wear that, Commander,” he practically snarled.

He took a wobbly step down off the dais and indicated that Verrik and his men should take the others into custody. As Chabs-Wret and his conspirators were being clapped in manacles, the doors hissed open to admit another Vulcan, this one decidedly female and who appeared more than a bit irritated.

“Captain?” She regarded him with equal amounts shock and anger. “So, the rumors were true,” T’Ser confirmed. “You can’t even go on leave without getting into trouble, sir.”

Sandhurst winced as another medical technician scanned a protoplaser back and forth across the gash on his undoubtedly broken nose. “So it would appear, Exec.”

“Michael?” Taflim called out from behind him where the Cardassian was now sitting up on the transporter pad as the other med-tech examined the back of his head. “I don’t understand.”

“I’m sorry, Taflim,” Sandhurst spoke with a pinched expression that was as much from guilt as physical pain. “It’s Donald, actually. Michael is my middle name. I was… I suppose I was going incognito down on the surface.”

Taflim nodded gingerly. “Ah, a covert mission to capture those three?” The Cardassian eyed the three men coolly as they were marched out of the transporter bay at phaser point.

“No, actually,” Sandhurst confessed. “I was on leave. Running across those men was just pure happenstance.”

“Shore leave, sir? On Cardassia Prime?” T’Ser asked, a tone of exasperation creeping into her voice. “You beam down in the early morning and come back late at night every day for a week and a half. And in the meantime you’ve been running the ship’s industrial replicator almost non-stop.” She shook her head. “I’d thought you were going to catch a transport to Risa for the duration of our layover here.”

“I changed my mind,” he answered simply. “I just couldn’t sit on some beach on Risa doing nothing productive when I could be here, helping.”

T’Ser regarded him with a curious expression. “If I may, sir, helping with what?”

He replied with a crooked smile. “Something that needed doing. Something that I could do with my hands.” He held them up for her benefit, showing off the cuts and abrasions garnered from working in close confines for the past ten days.

Sandhurst then turned back to Taflim. “Come, my friend. Let’s get you looked at in our sickbay, and then I’ll show you to some quarters. It appears I’ve got some apologizing to do for the deception. We’ll need to be up bright and early tomorrow if we’re going to get that trans-axle swapped out.”

Taflim, looking confused but vaguely relieved, stood and allowed himself to be assisted out the doors. Sandhurst nodded towards the young Cardassian as he exited the transporter room. “Commander, please see that he’s well taken care of. I’ll join him shortly. In the meantime, however, I’m going to have a rather lengthy conversation with the local Judge Advocate General’s office.”

T’Ser inclined her head, “Aye, sir.” As her captain walked slowly out of the compartment, she mused that here again was yet another layer of the enigma that continued to be her commanding officer.

***
 
Ha! I wanted to stand up and cheer when it turned out to be Sandhurst! Well done! :D
 
Repost of the review I wrote over at Ad Astra (and yes, I had a bit of a Cardassian monologue here! ;) ):

Awwwwwwwwww, you just made me like Sandhurst even more than I already do, if that were even possible! :-D I imagine that after Lakesh, something like this felt really good--as did the chance to be in engineering/technician mode. But I think it's more than just that...this just seems like a decent person's act, in general. Further confirmation of why I like him: yes, he's undoubtedly had his bad run-ins with certain Cardassians, but he takes people on an individual basis.

You know, too, seeing the way he missed being an engineer and technician--it also reminded me of someone else in my own work, who won't get this chance to go back down memory lane the way Sandhurst did.

But Chabs-Wret, though--vindictive bastard. I hope he gets a serious punishment for what he's been up to (and having the nerve to do the Cool Hand Luke routine while he's at it--shows how uncreative he is if he can't come up with his own taglines and has to steal others'. ;-) Good writing decision, though, to show what a thuggish brute he is.). Terrorizing and assaulting Cardassian civilians, abusing his position and power, assaulting a Starfleet officer, and God knows what else he's been doing since he got to Prime...I can't tell you how gratifying it was to see Sandhurst get the upper hand on him.

(BTW, the fact that Chabs-Wret thought he could paint Sandhurst as an insurgent...does that mean there were humans helping the Crimson Order, that he thought that would be believable?)

And Taflim--oooooh, I like this guy!!! :-D That dry sense of humor of his just rules. And I think you nailed the polite way we've seen from Cardassian civilians like the two scientists in "Destiny." (Remember how nervous they got about the prospect of having to introduce themselves to Sisko? ;-) And how upset Gilora was with herself after realizing she had totally misinterpreted O'Brien?) I also thought it was a good choice that he was so accepting of the tribute, and then also of the possibility that Sandhurst had been a covert operative--and the way he regards the bad guys being taken away. Very true assessment of Cardassian society.

But I also appreciate that you didn't have him turn into a wreck before Chabs-Wret--that instead, thinking Sandhurst is the one who's unfamiliar with this kind of life and the hardships that go with it, he acts to try and take charge of the situation and protect this human who seems so naive he doesn't know to come in when it rains, so to speak.

As one side note for Taflim, I'm sure he enjoyed the men-and-machines male bonding time. That's not as common in Cardassian society since as we found out in "Destiny," engineering and technical fields tend to have more women than men. It had to be quite the relief when he found that Sandhurst wanted to go back and finish the job he started. :-)

And T'Ser--I enjoy seeing her with the Gibraltar crew! :-)
 
Dude, that was a very cool story. It was a wonderful bit of fun and I didn't know what was up until you revealed it. Masterfully done.
 
I'm glad we got to see Sandhurst enjoy some down-time, even if it did cost him a broken nose. You did a nice job of portraying the Starfleet shakedown thugs - an all too believable scenario following such a brutal war. Still, their behavior was inexcusable and I'm glad they got their comeuppance.

Yes, I would say Sandhurst and T'Ser have a lot to learn about each other.

Excellent story! :)
 
Seeing that this was a Gibraltar story, I had an inkling early on that Michael was actually Donald Sandhurst. You did give us plenty of hints, most of all the fact that he is an engineer and likes to work with his hands.

You also created an absolutely despicable group of characters with Chabs-Wret and his Marines. And as suprised as I was to find this level of corruption among Starfleet officers, maybe I shouldn't have been. It might merely be another sign of the immense strain the Dominion War has put on a lot of personnel and continued proof that power can corrupt even the best men.

What I found almost even more concerning however is the way in which Sandhurst spends his leave. I got nothing against him trying to do good on Cardassia but I wonder if a proud people like the Cardassians would appreciate the sneaky and deceptive way he's been helping them. It didn't seem to be the case here but one could read a lot into the rather dishonest methods he has chosen.

A very entertaining, smoothly written and fun story nevertheless.
 
Oh, I dunno...I think the Cardassians might understand that he was trying not to attract attention. I'm sure they themselves know enough about having to operate under the radar to get things that would be perfectly legitimate anywhere else done! Plus, given the way status is treated in their society (with a lot of trappings and formalities), I kinda think they'd understand why a decent person might want to get away from that and NOT be seen that way.

But that's just me. ;)
 
Oh, I dunno...I think the Cardassians might understand that he was trying not to attract attention. I'm sure they themselves know enough about having to operate under the radar to get things that would be perfectly legitimate anywhere else done! Plus, given the way status is treated in their society (with a lot of trappings and formalities), I kinda think they'd understand why a decent person might want to get away from that and NOT be seen that way.

But that's just me. ;)
This is what I was aiming for.

CeJay, in answer to your concerns, Sandhurst wasn't trying to sneak anything by anyone, but he wanted to spend his off time helping people. The fact that his name has become synonamous in Cardassian circles with his retreat from Lakesh, leaving the people there to the tender mercies of General K'Vada's Klingon forces, going under another guise seemed to be advisable.

In addition, he wished to avoid being seen as an 'occupier' as well. And, seeing what rogue elements of Starfleet had been doing to Taflim, revealing his own Starfleet status would have given that working relationship a very different flavor.

And no, this wasn't the Great Human Hope coming to help the poor hapless Cardassians... this was just a man with applicable skills who wanted to assist with something on his own time while his crew were engaged in other vital recovery missions on Cardassia.
 
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Don't worry, I never got that feeling from it. Like I mentioned in my review, Taflim felt VERY capable in his own right--the fact that he tried to take charge of the situation when he thought "Michael" wouldn't understand how to handle it showed his strength very well and very much avoided the "Great Human Hope" feeling. :)
 
Just masterful, as always. A wonderfully crafted story. Once again, in the span of a very few paragraphs, you were able to introduce us to and make us care about another being, a brand new character in your universe. Well, make that two but, as others said, I suspected from very early on that I knew who "Michael" was going to turn out to be. But, I actually think that was a good thing. I don't know if you were intending for us to be kept in the dark longer but, I think the way you crafted the story sort of assumed that we, the reader, would have an inkling who he was and that was a great way to bring us right into the "world" of this piece, letting us be "in on" Sandhurst's little subterfuge. And, knowing you and your careful writing style, I have a feeling that's exactly as you intended it.

I also thought you did a great job of giving us a wonderful insight into the way in which people who might otherwise, in other circumstances, have been fine, upright citizens, can turn and be consumed with loathing and how a "mob mentality" can quickly exacerbate that. You gave us just enough information about Chabs-Wret and how the whole extortion racket started to know that, once upon a time, he was likely a decent and even honorable man -- and all of them, by extrapolation. It made it all the more chilling to see what they had become.

Then, of course, there was just the unadulterated pleasure of seeing them "get theirs" in the end. LOL! The only think I didn't expect was for Donald NOT to take a swing at Chabs-Wret in the end. But, I guess that wouldn't really be Donald these days, would it? ;)

Thanks for another great tale. :bolian:

p.s. -- I just looked back at what I just wrote and thought ... am I overanalyzing a bit? Maybe I should've just said frakin' A! :lol:
 
p.s. -- I just looked back at what I just wrote and thought ... am I overanalyzing a bit? Maybe I should've just said frakin' A! :lol:
I'd never criticize one of your very thoughtful reviews my friend. :) I think you nailed it.

And if I'd wanted someone to take a swing at Chabs-Wret, it wouldn't have been Donald doing it. :evil:
 
p.s. -- I just looked back at what I just wrote and thought ... am I overanalyzing a bit? Maybe I should've just said frakin' A! :lol:
I'd never criticize one of your very thoughtful reviews my friend. :) I think you nailed it.

And if I'd wanted someone to take a swing at Chabs-Wret, it wouldn't have been Donald doing it. :evil:

LOL! Yeah, I know, but he HAS sort of "channeled" his friend on a couple of occasions. :evil:
 
Very good. Sandhurst is a strange one wanting to spend his leave like that. But then he has different view about what he is doing - he want to help the colonists because he knows what his own part in the fate that befell them at the hands of the Klingons. But he also finds it therapeutic to work with his hands on something real and tangible and worthwhile. Very good insight into Sandhurst and his being. I also enjoyed seeing T'Ser trying to gauge her new CO. Quite an impression he'll make.
 
I've just got back from a weekend away and I gotta say this was a treat to come back to.

Great stuff.
 
Good story. I found it perfectly in character for Sandhurst to spend his time helping others, and doing some engineering/grunt work on the side. I liked the brief glimpse of post-Dominion War Cardassia as well and it was a nice coda (?) to Embers of the Fire, while opening up new possibilities. The idea of Starfleet marines treating the locals like that was despicable,but at the same time understandable. I like how Chabs-Wret actually saw the DW as a good thing, career wise. That's a perspective that we haven't really seen before. Very neat.

I like Nerys question/idea about humans helping the Crimson Order. I never thought that possible.
 
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