im a girl help me, I've only seen a few episodes and need help writing my own episode. This episode is too similar to an existing so I am looking for new ideas. The limited resource route seems to be commonly used. What should the Machi 111 beings look like? I would like Kirk to have a relationship with a Machi woman. Need more conflict, revenge, ACTION ACTION!!!!
Captain's Log, Stardate 2270.42. For the past few days, the crew and I have been exploring an asteroid field near the Klingon Neutral Zone. Commander Spock suggests that a rare mineral called dilithium is abundant within the asteroids, but we have had difficulty extracting it, due to the unusual gravitational pull of the area. I've sent Lieutenant Sulu and Lt. Commander Scott in a shuttle to try to extract the mineral physically, but so far we have had no luck.
Enterprise receives an odd distress signal from planet Machi 111, Uhura quickly warns Captain Kirk that a message is coming in on audio, it is a Machi woman. Captain Kirk tells Scotty to beam her up; Kirk and Spock go to greet her in the transporter room. It is a beautiful blond woman with scale skin that Kirk finds himself attracted to, she says her planet has been attacked by a virus that is slowly eating away at everyone and asks if they have Tripitine, an antibiotic that will cure her civilization. Captain Kirk knows that the enterprise has enough antibiotics to save plant Machi 111 and is willing to beam down with Bones and Commander Spock to investigate the situation. When the crew beams down on planet Machi 111, they are surprised to find that they are all either white females with blonde hair and blue eyes and scale like skin or black males with black hair and brown eyes and scale like skin. No one seemed to be in a state of panic, everyone was slowly moving about minding his or her own business. Men and Women were laying out in floating lanais without a care in the world. The crew is very confused and does not understand how everyone is identical; everyone has the same personality, skills, and characteristics that make someone unique. Commander Spock, on the other hand, is busy with his Tricorder exploring the planet. He tells Captain Kirk that planet Machi 111 is extraordinary; he has found an abundance of Oxyfold1, a very rare natural resource that Star Fleet is desperately in need of right now for its shield generator. The crew agrees that they are very lucky to have encountered Machi 111 and want to bind a contract to trade some Tripitine for Oxyfold1. Captain Kirk is in search for the one in charge so he can discuss the matter but discovers that their planet is run by all of its people by voting, a democracy. He walks up to a woman and tells her his deal, she then presses a few buttons and everyone starts to move to the center of town. The people of Machi then have a meeting to cast their votes. Then as a community, they decide not to trade because the Machi people need Oxyfold for their own shield generators, since they were just attacked by that virus. The woman explains that if they give up the Oxyfold1, then the Machi people are subject to more attacks. Captain Kirk also remembers that the Oxyfold1 will be useful against the Klingons, since they are still in war. The Oxyfold1 would be very useful to Star Fleet’s shield generators that can protect them from the powerful Klingon Warbirds. Captain Kirk and his crew let the people of Machi 11 know they are making a big mistake and tells the Machi woman that they will be back soon to see if they have changed their minds.
Back on board the Enterprise, Captain Kirk contacts Admiral Flo at Star Fleet via subspace communication to inform him of his discovery of Oxyfold1. Admiral Flo congratulates him and orders Kirk to obtain as much Oxyfold1 as possible. Kirk becomes uncomfortable about the situation because he does not want to take Oxyfold1 by force but must obey his command. Commander Spock, who is a Vulcan, a race that uses logic and reasoning to suppress their emotions so that it doesn’t overwhem them, is highly against this command as well.
Captain's Log, Stardate 2270.43. The crew and I have found an abundance of Oxyfold1 on planet Machi111. Admiral Flo was pleased to here this great news and ordered me to obtain as much Oxyfold1 as possible. I am torn because the people of Machi 111 will not come to a negotiation to give us Oxyfold1. I am afraid I will be forced to use aggression in obtaining Oxyfold1 unless I can think of an idea sooner or later.
Captain Kirk and Commander Spock are determined to resolve the matter in a peaceful manner. Commander Spock notices that the Machi people are acting “illogical” since they desperately need tripitine, but won’t trade for Oxyfold1, which they have an abundant supply of, so he does some investigating. He discovers that there are Klingon disruptor traces, and so they found out that Klingons have been in the area. Captain Kirk confronts the Machi people about this, and then the Machi people finally tell the truth. It turns out that the Klingons go to Machi111 every now and then taking the same Oxyfold1 by force and if Machi people didn’t comply, the Klingons threaten to kill the Machi people. Klingon scientists are at the beginning stages of developing a cloaking device for their ships and Oxyfold1 is vital for them to have. (Which explains why the Machi people refused to trade Oxyfold1 for Tripitine at the meeting, they didn’t want to lose any of their supply because they fear for their own lives.)
Captain Kirk offers to help the Machi people deal with the Klingon situation and give some Tripitine in exchange for some Oxyfold1. The Machi people agree, and then the Enterprise crew set up traps for when the Klingons come. The plan is when the Klingons arrive, the Enterprise will detect the Klingon ship and hide behind one of the moons in the same solar system so that the Klingon ship is unable to detect the Enterprise. The Klingons bring a small Klingon ship with 10 Klingons on board, along with a transport ship to bring back the Oxyfold1. When 6 Klingons beam down to Machi111 to once again take some Oxyfold1, the Enterprise crew are waiting to deploy their trap. The Machi people stick with the trap and tell the Klingons that a recent earthquake has caved in a mine that contains the Oxyfold1 in and they can’t get to it. The Klingons, since they are strong and aggressive, beat the Machi civilian and demand to be taken down the mine. The Klingons split up and only 3 go to the mine while the other 3 stay. Along the way, Kirk and his Enterprise crew ambush the Klingons with their phasers set to stun. At the same time, Sulu brings the ship back closer to the Machi111 and attack the Klingon transport ship, only to disengage their engines so that they can’t escape and warn the other Klingons. Then Kirk and his crew go back to town with their 4 hostages and tell the other 3 Klingons to surrender, go back to their transport ship and to never come back. They leave, but before they do, they threaten that it’s not over and the humans will pay for this. Now everybody is happy, the Machi people love Kirk and the Enterprise crew for saving the day, they offer the crew to stay a while and enjoy some rest and relaxation on their planet. The Machi people keep their word and give plenty of Oxyfold1 to them. When Kirk and his crew have to leave, the Machi people gather to say goodbye and thank them. The episode ends with Kirk saying “Beam me up, Scotty”. This is quite similar to an Enterprise episode, but I will accept it because you have changed some aspects of it.
In my episode Captain Kirk, follows the philosophies of Plato the most. According to Plato, humans are naturally self-absorbed. Those who are strong take advantage of their strength and continue to strive forward, gaining wealth, social power, and influence. Where does Plato say this? Certainly he would recognize that people can act in that manner, but that was not the main point of the Republic. The type of leader, Captain Kirk is he knows how to practice his power because he knows he is strong. But Plato emphasizes wisdom for leaders, not merely strength. A leader to Plato, will follow through on a duty because the fear of failure is too strong. Captain Kirk’s primary concerns are to obey his commander, and carry out what is right for his people. Captain Kirk is faced with some internal struggles when his commander tells him to get as much Oxyfold1 as he can but he knows that the Machi planet will not give him any. To Plato, justice meant doing whatever it takes to accomplish one’s duty. No it doesn’t. Aristotle’s thoughts on justice were very strong. He describes the meaning of justice as complete virtue. Meaning if a person takes something from another person, the action requires a justification. The theme of justification is also apparent in my episode. When Caption Kirk finds out that the Klingons are forcefully taking the Oxyfold1 from the Machi, he is determined to get justice. You have misunderstood Aristotle’s view of justice. Commander Spock’s character does not want to forcefully take the Oxyfold1 from the Machi’s without permission because his morals get in the way. Aristotle also explains how moral conduct is an attribute to living right. Aristotle also had influence on the form of government the Machi practiced. He states that “democracy is a form of government in which all free people have authority.” (source?)All the Machi are identical and equal in every way. Aristotle also argues that “democracy is a form of government with too much equality” and “a degenerate form of government because the poor would rule to their own advantage rather than the common good of the whole city.” This is true for the Machi because since everyone is too equal, people feel obligated to vote the same as their neighbor in this episode.Aristotle’s point was that the many poor would overcome the few rich. No one is able to speak out for the name of justice. Aristotle also talks about the importance of speech because it allows people to seek justice. Yes, this is true. How can you use it in your story? If one Machi would have spoken out and told Captain Kirk that they were being threatened by the Klingstons, everything would have worked out more efficiently. But Aristotle didn’t mean just having conversations, he meant engaging in public speech with fellow citizens. Hobbes states “people are roughly equal in their desires, aversions, and capacities.” Although the Star Fleet and Klingons are in war they both want the same thing, Oxyfold1. People want what is valuable and rare and will go through different means to achieve it. The Enterprise took the peaceful route while the Kinglons took the harmful route.
Captain's Log, Stardate 2270.42. For the past few days, the crew and I have been exploring an asteroid field near the Klingon Neutral Zone. Commander Spock suggests that a rare mineral called dilithium is abundant within the asteroids, but we have had difficulty extracting it, due to the unusual gravitational pull of the area. I've sent Lieutenant Sulu and Lt. Commander Scott in a shuttle to try to extract the mineral physically, but so far we have had no luck.
Enterprise receives an odd distress signal from planet Machi 111, Uhura quickly warns Captain Kirk that a message is coming in on audio, it is a Machi woman. Captain Kirk tells Scotty to beam her up; Kirk and Spock go to greet her in the transporter room. It is a beautiful blond woman with scale skin that Kirk finds himself attracted to, she says her planet has been attacked by a virus that is slowly eating away at everyone and asks if they have Tripitine, an antibiotic that will cure her civilization. Captain Kirk knows that the enterprise has enough antibiotics to save plant Machi 111 and is willing to beam down with Bones and Commander Spock to investigate the situation. When the crew beams down on planet Machi 111, they are surprised to find that they are all either white females with blonde hair and blue eyes and scale like skin or black males with black hair and brown eyes and scale like skin. No one seemed to be in a state of panic, everyone was slowly moving about minding his or her own business. Men and Women were laying out in floating lanais without a care in the world. The crew is very confused and does not understand how everyone is identical; everyone has the same personality, skills, and characteristics that make someone unique. Commander Spock, on the other hand, is busy with his Tricorder exploring the planet. He tells Captain Kirk that planet Machi 111 is extraordinary; he has found an abundance of Oxyfold1, a very rare natural resource that Star Fleet is desperately in need of right now for its shield generator. The crew agrees that they are very lucky to have encountered Machi 111 and want to bind a contract to trade some Tripitine for Oxyfold1. Captain Kirk is in search for the one in charge so he can discuss the matter but discovers that their planet is run by all of its people by voting, a democracy. He walks up to a woman and tells her his deal, she then presses a few buttons and everyone starts to move to the center of town. The people of Machi then have a meeting to cast their votes. Then as a community, they decide not to trade because the Machi people need Oxyfold for their own shield generators, since they were just attacked by that virus. The woman explains that if they give up the Oxyfold1, then the Machi people are subject to more attacks. Captain Kirk also remembers that the Oxyfold1 will be useful against the Klingons, since they are still in war. The Oxyfold1 would be very useful to Star Fleet’s shield generators that can protect them from the powerful Klingon Warbirds. Captain Kirk and his crew let the people of Machi 11 know they are making a big mistake and tells the Machi woman that they will be back soon to see if they have changed their minds.
Back on board the Enterprise, Captain Kirk contacts Admiral Flo at Star Fleet via subspace communication to inform him of his discovery of Oxyfold1. Admiral Flo congratulates him and orders Kirk to obtain as much Oxyfold1 as possible. Kirk becomes uncomfortable about the situation because he does not want to take Oxyfold1 by force but must obey his command. Commander Spock, who is a Vulcan, a race that uses logic and reasoning to suppress their emotions so that it doesn’t overwhem them, is highly against this command as well.
Captain's Log, Stardate 2270.43. The crew and I have found an abundance of Oxyfold1 on planet Machi111. Admiral Flo was pleased to here this great news and ordered me to obtain as much Oxyfold1 as possible. I am torn because the people of Machi 111 will not come to a negotiation to give us Oxyfold1. I am afraid I will be forced to use aggression in obtaining Oxyfold1 unless I can think of an idea sooner or later.
Captain Kirk and Commander Spock are determined to resolve the matter in a peaceful manner. Commander Spock notices that the Machi people are acting “illogical” since they desperately need tripitine, but won’t trade for Oxyfold1, which they have an abundant supply of, so he does some investigating. He discovers that there are Klingon disruptor traces, and so they found out that Klingons have been in the area. Captain Kirk confronts the Machi people about this, and then the Machi people finally tell the truth. It turns out that the Klingons go to Machi111 every now and then taking the same Oxyfold1 by force and if Machi people didn’t comply, the Klingons threaten to kill the Machi people. Klingon scientists are at the beginning stages of developing a cloaking device for their ships and Oxyfold1 is vital for them to have. (Which explains why the Machi people refused to trade Oxyfold1 for Tripitine at the meeting, they didn’t want to lose any of their supply because they fear for their own lives.)
Captain Kirk offers to help the Machi people deal with the Klingon situation and give some Tripitine in exchange for some Oxyfold1. The Machi people agree, and then the Enterprise crew set up traps for when the Klingons come. The plan is when the Klingons arrive, the Enterprise will detect the Klingon ship and hide behind one of the moons in the same solar system so that the Klingon ship is unable to detect the Enterprise. The Klingons bring a small Klingon ship with 10 Klingons on board, along with a transport ship to bring back the Oxyfold1. When 6 Klingons beam down to Machi111 to once again take some Oxyfold1, the Enterprise crew are waiting to deploy their trap. The Machi people stick with the trap and tell the Klingons that a recent earthquake has caved in a mine that contains the Oxyfold1 in and they can’t get to it. The Klingons, since they are strong and aggressive, beat the Machi civilian and demand to be taken down the mine. The Klingons split up and only 3 go to the mine while the other 3 stay. Along the way, Kirk and his Enterprise crew ambush the Klingons with their phasers set to stun. At the same time, Sulu brings the ship back closer to the Machi111 and attack the Klingon transport ship, only to disengage their engines so that they can’t escape and warn the other Klingons. Then Kirk and his crew go back to town with their 4 hostages and tell the other 3 Klingons to surrender, go back to their transport ship and to never come back. They leave, but before they do, they threaten that it’s not over and the humans will pay for this. Now everybody is happy, the Machi people love Kirk and the Enterprise crew for saving the day, they offer the crew to stay a while and enjoy some rest and relaxation on their planet. The Machi people keep their word and give plenty of Oxyfold1 to them. When Kirk and his crew have to leave, the Machi people gather to say goodbye and thank them. The episode ends with Kirk saying “Beam me up, Scotty”. This is quite similar to an Enterprise episode, but I will accept it because you have changed some aspects of it.
In my episode Captain Kirk, follows the philosophies of Plato the most. According to Plato, humans are naturally self-absorbed. Those who are strong take advantage of their strength and continue to strive forward, gaining wealth, social power, and influence. Where does Plato say this? Certainly he would recognize that people can act in that manner, but that was not the main point of the Republic. The type of leader, Captain Kirk is he knows how to practice his power because he knows he is strong. But Plato emphasizes wisdom for leaders, not merely strength. A leader to Plato, will follow through on a duty because the fear of failure is too strong. Captain Kirk’s primary concerns are to obey his commander, and carry out what is right for his people. Captain Kirk is faced with some internal struggles when his commander tells him to get as much Oxyfold1 as he can but he knows that the Machi planet will not give him any. To Plato, justice meant doing whatever it takes to accomplish one’s duty. No it doesn’t. Aristotle’s thoughts on justice were very strong. He describes the meaning of justice as complete virtue. Meaning if a person takes something from another person, the action requires a justification. The theme of justification is also apparent in my episode. When Caption Kirk finds out that the Klingons are forcefully taking the Oxyfold1 from the Machi, he is determined to get justice. You have misunderstood Aristotle’s view of justice. Commander Spock’s character does not want to forcefully take the Oxyfold1 from the Machi’s without permission because his morals get in the way. Aristotle also explains how moral conduct is an attribute to living right. Aristotle also had influence on the form of government the Machi practiced. He states that “democracy is a form of government in which all free people have authority.” (source?)All the Machi are identical and equal in every way. Aristotle also argues that “democracy is a form of government with too much equality” and “a degenerate form of government because the poor would rule to their own advantage rather than the common good of the whole city.” This is true for the Machi because since everyone is too equal, people feel obligated to vote the same as their neighbor in this episode.Aristotle’s point was that the many poor would overcome the few rich. No one is able to speak out for the name of justice. Aristotle also talks about the importance of speech because it allows people to seek justice. Yes, this is true. How can you use it in your story? If one Machi would have spoken out and told Captain Kirk that they were being threatened by the Klingstons, everything would have worked out more efficiently. But Aristotle didn’t mean just having conversations, he meant engaging in public speech with fellow citizens. Hobbes states “people are roughly equal in their desires, aversions, and capacities.” Although the Star Fleet and Klingons are in war they both want the same thing, Oxyfold1. People want what is valuable and rare and will go through different means to achieve it. The Enterprise took the peaceful route while the Kinglons took the harmful route.
