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Spoilers Measure of a Man scene I wish had been shot

Dixie Flatline

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Hey. I remember last year (possibly a lot longer ago than that!) talking about how I'd like if there had been a scene in Measure of a Man wherein Data's friends offer to help him escape the trial and get away from the reach of Starfleet. I always thought it was a missed opportunity to have a scene like the one when Worf offers to help Riker rescue Soren in 'The Outcast'. Anyway, I tried my hand at writing it in a shooting script style. Here's hoping it's not offensively bad! Hope you get something out of it.

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FADE IN:

INT. ENTERPRISE CORRIDOR

Crew are returning to their quarters, coming off day shift.

INT. ENTERPRISE, ANOTHER CORRIDOR

The ship is settling down for the night. A blue-uniformed
SENIOR SCIENCE OFFICER steps out of a turbolift and
turns back to a JUNIOR SCIENCE OFFICER inside,
remembering something.

SENIOR SCIENCE OFFICER

Oh, Mesner, remind me to try reversing the polarity on
that new pseudo-matrix tomorrow. That was a good
idea. I think it should yield some interesting results.

The JUNIOR SCIENCE OFFICER is slightly startled but smiles
a moment later.

JUNIOR SCIENCE OFFICER

Oh, I will. Thank you, sir.

As the turbolift doors begin to close, the SENIOR SCIENCE OFFICER
waves goodbye and walks off-camera. At the end of the corridor,
opposite the turbolift, a large dark shape moves across the T-junction
and out of sight.


INT. ENTERPRISE - DATA'S QUARTERS

DATA is seated at his work station, staring at a screen, a look of concentration on his face.

The door chimes.

DATA

Come.

Worf enters, dressed entirely in black. Data tilts his head,
looking puzzled.

DATA

Worf, can I be of assistance?

WORF shakes his head slowly, almost smiling, amazed
that DATA can maintain generosity when his very
right to exist is on trial.

WORF

No, thank you, Mr Data... Perhaps it is
I who can be of some assistance to you.

DATA stands up from his work station, studying WORF. Perhaps
he is just understanding, or perhaps he understood the reason for
WORF's visit as soon as WORF entered in his all-black clothing, but
DATA nods importantly, signalling to WORF that much can go unsaid.

DATA indicates a seat and WORF sits.

DATA

Some firewine?

WORF

Please.

DATA goes to his replicator.

DATA

Firewine... hot?

The firewine materialises and DATA hands WORF a goblet and then
sits down himself.

WORF

Data, there are places a man may go... disappear... if a man were
inclined to. Places even Starfleet may not go.

DATA's head tilts. He grasps that WORF has not detected that he
wished the conversation to be less overt. Nevertheless, DATA
plunges on.

DATA

I will not run.

WORF sips his firewine, nodding approvingly, at the drink and
at DATA's bravery.

WORF

If any man can turn the decision your way, that man
is Picard. But suppose the decision has already
been made. Suppose this is all nothing more than
opera. Humans have honour and courage,
yes, but certain considerations have a way of making people
set those things aside. What will you do if
this proves to be the case? I will never understand
how Riker could agree to...

WORF shrugs, bewildered. DATA looks intently at him, perhaps
realising he has underestimated him.

DATA

I would not see my friends caught up in this, and you
do Commander Riker a disservice. He is doing his duty,
as shall I. If I am to be handed over to Maddox, I will-

The door chimes. DATA stands up, frowning.

DATA

Come.

GEORDI enters. He is in his yellow and black Engineering uniform.
He sees WORF and DATA. He is holding a tricorder, which he taps.

GEORDI

I'm sorry I'm late. Got held up by a hinky power
coupling and couldn't think of a good explanation for just
walking away. Now, Worf, I've got this thing set up so that
the sensors won't be able to get a read on him for just over
an hour. Are you absolutely sure your, uh, friends can get
us out of the system and back by then?

WORF looks at DATA.

WORF

He is refusing to go.

GEORDI is perplexed.

GEORDI

Won't... go? Data, they're going to take you apart like,
like you're just a... piece of hardware. You can't let that
happen. We won't let that happen to you!

DATA crosses the room to stand before GEORDI. He puts a hand on
GEORDI's shoulder. It is completely mannered and completely genuine.

DATA looks at GEORDI for a long moment.

DATA

It is a matter of principle for me, Geordi. I have
always had faith in what we are doing here. It is what drew
me in the first place. Starfleet, the Federation, its ideals.

Worf finishes his firewine, looking contemplative. We sense that he too
feels similarly about the Federation, though perhaps not about its individuals.

GEORDI

I just can't believe you're gonna let them-

A transporter glimmer pulses and sparkles in the middle of the room.
A figure slowly solidifies, a figure dressed like WORF... the bald-headed figure of...
Captain Jean-Luc Picard himself. DATA is at a loss for words, but
GEORDI and WORF merely nod to their captain.

PICARD

All set, gentlemen?

DATA

Captain! I-

PICARD

I'll have no protests, Mr Data. There will be time to remonstrate
when we have you safely aboard the Kukri. Now-

DATA turns away a moment and then turns back to face the three men.

DATA

I will not go, my friends. To go would be to betray myself
fundamentally. Captain, if you choose to take me against my will, whatever your
reasoning, you will be taking the part of Maddox and all who believe as
he does. No, Captain. That is not in your nature. Nor yours, Geordi.
Nor yours, Worf.
Captain, I believe you will state my case and win my freedom.
I believe that even if you do not.

WORF, GEORDI and PICARD look at each other, heeding DATA's words.

CLOSE-UP of Picard's face, deep in thought. It is the expression of a man with a great task before him.
 
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You had me at
Oh, Mesner, remind me to try reversing the polarity on
that new pseudo-matrix tomorrow.

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Haha, good! Did I keep you, though? Was it a bit schmaltzy? I think maybe I overdid Data's dialogue.

I really love the thought @Dixie Flatline.

But I also love the way J-LP defends Data (and, I suspect, his own conscience) against Captain Louvois, Commander Riker and Bruce Maddox (who, at least in this episode) does not even deserve to have an Officer's title, for his high-handedness.

Sentience: I don't know! Do YOU?! Do YOU?! Do you?"

Ahh. I wouldn't change a word of that.

But, to respect your question truly, what if J-LP and Data lost that case?

What would happen next? :)
 
Haha, good! Did I keep you, though? Was it a bit schmaltzy? I think maybe I overdid Data's dialogue.

The reason we write fanfiction is different from the reasons people read it. Most of us enjoy creating original characters, but most of the readers come to see more of their favorite characters and it's really challenging to get their voices right. But if you're really alert you'll remember that some of the plot points depended on Data's inability to use contractions or colloquialisms - while in one of the first 3 episodes he said "I'm afraid not..." (Failure of the continuity editing team.

I think you got the voice just fine. Thanks!! rbs
 
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