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March Challenge: Some soldiers don't fade away. They die."

Garm Bel Iblis

Commodore
Chapter:

Thirteen months ago
Kalandra Sector
USS Saratoga, Stardate
52631.4- April 2375.

“Six weeks? I can’t leave for that long. They’ll have my commission.” Brice Kellin sat within the dark confines of his ready room and studied the angelic face of his new bride. Lorissa Manning, First Officer of the USS Lexington.

“You’re being naïve, Brice, you’ve been away from your ship for longer than that.”

Kellin felt a nerve pinch behind his eyes. “Not during war time,” he said. “Regardless,” he said, “Saratoga is due at DS9 next week for a complete refit of the engineering computers. The entire layover should take about five days. I can get away for that long, no longer.”

Lorissa looked pained. “This is our honeymoon, Brice! We’ve been married a year and we’ve only spent a handful of hours together.”

“I’m trying my best, Lorissa,” he replied. “We’re trying to keep the quadrant from falling apart! You knew that when you married me. I can’t give up that command. If you’d taken the offer I gave you we wouldn’t be having this conversation.”

“Oh please,” Lorissa said. “A position as your ship’s science officer? It’d never work. Husbands and wives have no business putting themselves in that place.”

“I’ll be sure and let Mac Calhoun and Elizabeth Shelby know you feel that way.”

“Luck of the draw, you know we’d never be able to work in that sort of capacity. What did you call me? A liberal idealist whose captain has to reign in her bleeding heart?”

Brice actually chuckled. “Sounds about right, dear.” His attention was diverted a moment by a blinking indicator on his desktop. “I’ve got to go. I’ll be in touch. We’ll work this out.”

“I love you,” Lorissa said.

“I know,” Kellin said, terminating the link. He turned to watch the stars stream by at warp as glided through space to her next port of call. Fortunately for him, after this mission he’d be within range of the Lexington’s current position. He’d be with his wife again soon. He shook his head in amazement at her stubbornness. He’d promised her a honeymoon that would satisfy them both. That’d turned out to be a tougher job than he’d thought.

The arguments had continued for the past few weeks. And now Lorissa wanted him to take six weeks and head for Maraina IV. Located five hundred light-years from Deneb IV, it’d take four weeks of travel roundtrip to make the journey. The doors parted as he stepped onto the elliptical-shaped bridge and headed for his command chair.

The designers back at Mars at the Utopia docks had assured Brice Kellin that the new warp dynamic configuration of the Akira-Class ship made them the fastest in the fleet. Running across the desolate void of the Kalandra Sector towards Chin’Toka at the far end of the border regions under battle stations and with each moment a lesson in death, warp nine point eight felt like a snail running a marathon against a freight train.

Gripping the arms of the command chair until his knuckles whitened, Kellin refrained from snapping into the com at chief engineer Piller. He knew Mike was doing everything he could to get them to their destination in time to make a difference.

Twenty hours ago, the Dominion along with their new Breen allies had counterattacked Allied positions holding the Chin’Toka system, the Federation’s only foothold in Cardassian space. Three hundred and twelve ships had set out from DS9 several hours ago. Last reports had them entering the Chin’Toka at 0845 this morning. Then nothing. The thought that the entire fleet had been wiped out was hard to imagine. Even in the most violent encounters a few ships escaped to return to friendly waters.

“Time,” Kellin said through gritted teeth.

Sarah Kaplan, palms slick with sweat looked up from her helm. “Two minutes, forty-one seconds.”

“Mister Gleason?” he asked turning back to his tactical officer.

“Shields at maximum, weapons are standing by.”

Kellin stole a glance at his XO, Kelso Vanick. “Coordinate with tactical. Whatever happened out here I don’t want to be surprised.”

Vanick was on his feet on his way next to Gleason at his console. “Sovar,” Kelso said the Vulcan operations manager. “Route some more bandwidth from the secondary’s to the targeting array. If we get surrounded I want to have the ability to target as many bastards as possible.”

Sovar entered the appropriate commands into his console. “Twelve gigaquads have been routed, that is all that is available without hampering sensor efficiency.”

“You’re the best Sovar,” Kelso said.

The Vulcan smiled. “Logical too.”

Kellin shook his head, still after six months as captain trying to warp his mind around a V'tosh ka'tur of a Vulcan who had embraced his emotions instead of suppressing them.

“We’re as ready as we’re gonna be,” Vanick reported.

“Two more ships coming in at high warp off port and starboard,” Gleason reported. “Venture and Bozeman.”

Kellin looked up at the sensor display as the Galaxy and Soyuz class ships respectively came in and formed up with Saratoga.

“This is it,” Kellin said, checking the chrono. They were fifty seconds from the rendezvous. “Stay sharp.” The counter ran down to 00:00:00 and the warp drive shut down and the impulse generators kicked in.

The three ships emerged into a vast graveyard.

Kellin’s stomach lurched. “Scan for survivors,” he said.

“Thousands of escape pods,” Vanick said, moving away from tactical and standing next to Lieutenant Thara, the Andorian chief science officer. “Every ship has been destroyed,” he said in amazement. “No sign of Dominion activity.”

“Begin rescue operations,” Kellin said. “Contact Starfleet Command and request reinforcements.”

<><><>



“’The next thing we knew all power systems had been drained and we were adrift. Every other ship out there was in the same shape. We abandoned ship and the Dominion fleet landed troops on the two planets and withdrew.”

Kellin sat at his desk in his ready room listening to Ben Sisko recount the short-lived battle against the Dominion and the Breen. “This is a hell of a turn,” Kellin said. ”No one thought the Breen would every ally themselves with anyone. We had the Dominion on the ropes. First San Francisco and now this.” He picked up a data padd, entered a few commands and handed it off to Sisko. “One ship did survive, a Klingon bird of prey. I’ve got my chief engineer trying to figure out how it was spared.”

“That could be useful,” Sisko said, reviewing the data.

“I’m sorry about the Defiant, Ben,” Kellin said. “She was a good ship.”

“The best,” Sisko said with a grin.

“Recovery efforts are almost done. Two Federation transports have arrived and will take you back DS9.”

“Starfleet has new orders for you then?” Sisko asked.

Nodding his head, Kellin dropped into his chair. “Fall back to the Umani sector and evacuate the Starfleet forces from Starbase 832. Intelligence is pretty sure that’s where the next attack is coming.”

“I don’t envy you that task, especially with this new Breen weapon.”

“We’ll get them out of there,” Kellin said.

“Good luck,” Sisko said, standing up, adjusting his tunic. He extended his hand and Kellin shook it firmly.

“Get yourself a new ship,” Kellin said. “We need you back in the fight.”

“I’ll be back,” Sisko said with a nod.

After the captain left Kellin ordered the helm to head for Umani at maximum warp. He knew they only had a handful of hours to reach the Starbase before the Dominion arrived. One way or another they were in store for a hell of a fight.


Chapter:


It had taken eight hours to reach the Umani sector and when the Saratoga fell into orbit around Tykon Two, their sensors told them everything they needed to know about the status of the Starbase on the planet’s surface.

“At least ten thousand life-signs on the base,” Gleason said from tactical. “Jem’Hadar, Breen, Cardassia and Vorta.”

Kellin watched as the planet rolled across the lower half of the main viewscreen. Starbase 832 was a surface-based installation that used to provide colonial support for ships and people headed out beyond the frontier. When the war had broken out two years ago the planet had turned into an advanced scientific laboratory. The station had a complement of nearly two thousand people, and with the sheer number of Jem’Hadar, Cardassian and Breen closing in on them, they were hopelessly outmatched.

“The fact that the base wasn’t obliterated from orbit doesn’t bode well,” Vanick said. “If the Dominion knows what we have down there…”

“Then we’re too late,” Kellin said. “Are there any Federation life-sgins down there?”

Gleason nodded. “At least nine hundred all localized in the cargo bays.”

“Sarah,” he said to the conn officer. “Move us into lower orbit. Kevin,” he said turning to Gleason, “arm quantum torpedoes.”

“What the hell are you doing?” Vanick asked. “There are people alive down there.”

“Orders,” Kellin said. “Torpedo status?”

Gleason’s face had gone ashen. He stared blankly t the captain then shook his head. He turned back to his board. “Weapons locked.”

Kellin turned back to the screen. “Fire.”

<><><>

The mushroom cloud ascended three kilometers into the air, visible from orbit it expanded higher and wider. Brice Kellin stood in the forward observation lounge and watched the fires rage. He sipped his drink, a rare bourbon, the real alcoholic stuff that he kept in his quarters.

“Captain?”

He spun at the sound of the voice of his XO. “Kelso,” he said, with a nod.

“We’re cleared for departure,” Vanick said. “I’ve plotted a course for DS9. Rest of the fleet’s falling back to Bajor until Starfleet Engineering comes up with a countermeasure to the Breen weapon.”

Kellin downed the rest of his drink. “Go ahead.”

“Brice. What the hell did you do? We didn’t have orders to shell the base.”

Kellin didn’t meet his first officer’s eyes. “We had orders to keep our base out of Dominion hands.”

“That doesn’t include murdering Federation citizens,” Vanick snapped back.

“Your objection’s noted, Commander. Dismissed.”

Vanick turned for the door then turned back to face Kellin. “Brice, we’ve served together a long time; been friends for twenty years. You crossed over a line today. I wont’ let you do that again.”

Kellin turned his back on him and refilled his glass.


TEN MONTHS AGO:

“Sorry sir, we’ve been at it for twenty hours straight. Piller’s running his crew ragged, but there’s no way we’re going to make the launch window.”

Brice Kellin grabbed the arms of the chair in his ready room and raged in silence at his XO’s report. Saratoga had seen her share of action over the last eight weeks. Running convoy protection to Argolis had cost them the entire engine assembly of the starboard warp nacelle. The entire engine had been shattered to hell and crews from DS9 where they were currently docked were working around the clock to make the ship warp-ready again.

He spun his chair around and looked out the long narrow port at the vast fleet arrayed around DS9. The Federation Alliance would be launching at oh four hundred tomorrow morning for the endgame against Dominion forces at Cardassia Prime. And he’d be stuck her with a damaged warp drive. “Fine. Re-staff the engineering crews and put everyone back to their normal shifts. We’ll be staying here with rearguard duty in case things go badly at Cardassia.”

Vanick nodded, entering some notes into a padd. “Not a fun idea, is it?”

“What? Losing the war or being stuck back here?”

“Both,” Vanick said with a small grin. “How are you holding up, Brice? Since Tykon Two you’ve been pretty isolated.”

“I killed ten thousand Dominion troops and nearly a thousand Federation citizens in cold blood back there,” Kellin said. “And the thing is, I don’t regret it, and would do it again.”

Vanick looked taken aback. “That’s quite an admission, sir.”

“Not too pretty either,” Kellin said. “I’ve spent two decades in the service. This entire war has changed everything and everyone. I don’t see people any more, I just see targets to eliminate.”

Taking one of the empty seats across the captain’s desk, Vanick put the padd down and leaned forward. “Brice, you can’t think that way. That’s exactly what the enemy tries to do in war. Make the victims a faceless shadow; to give up your soul. Don’t let them beat you.”

“I’ll leave the soul searching and the moralizing to you, Commander.” Kellin picked up the padd Vanick had been using and handed it back to his first officer. “Take the bridge. Maintain yellow alert until further notice. Dismissed.”

“Brice-“

“Get out.”
 
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<><><>

The captain’s quarters aboard an Akira-Class ship were something that Kellin truly appreciated. Much more so because the viewports were on the far side of the room far away from the view outside.

Victory had come to the Federation after two long years of hardship. The Founders had surrendered and Federation allied forces had occupied the Cardassian Union. And he and his ship had stayed back here behind the lines guarding Bajor.

Three hours after the Allied fleet returned, Piller and his crew made their final repairs to the warp drive. Too little too late. Kellin was startled as the door chime sounded.

“Come,” he said.

The doors hissed into the bulkhead and Kelso stood outside; Benjamin Sisko at his side. “Captain, may we come in?”

Kellin got off of the sofa and crossed the room. “What is it?”

“Brice,” Vanick said, then stopped. “Brice, the Lexington’s been attacked. They were searching for rogue Dominion elements. A squadron of Cardassian’s found them near Uneffra. There were no survivors.”

Kellin felt the world fall away from. It was as if the deck plating had vanished and he was now in freefall. His eyes fell to the floor and he spoke. “Thank you telling me. Please leave.”

“Brice,” said Vanick. “You can’t just ignore this.”

“Get out!” shouted Kellin.

The two officers held their ground. Sisko turned his gaze to him. “Captain, as a man who lost a wife, I know the sorrow you’re feeling now. It’s going to hurt like hell for a long time. Don’t let that anger define you.”

Kellin calmed for a moment then lowered his voice. “Thank you. Now get out.”

The doors had just hissed closed when the com line chirped.

“Ops to Kellin.”

Closing his eyes, Kellin ignored the call. “Go ahead Sovar.”

“You’ve got an incoming message from Starfleet Command. It’s Admiral Efobi.”

His direct superior. Wonderful. “Put the call through to my quarters.”

Without sufficient time to handle the tragedy that had befallen him, he slapped the computer interface which lit up with the dark-skinned face of Nigerian-born Admiral Ikencu Efobi.

“Captain Kellin,” he said by way of greeting.

“Admiral, what can I do for you?”

“I’ve been going over you recent after-action reports, Captain. I’m quite troubled by the incident at Tykon Two. Is there anything you’d like to add to the official reports.”

“Nothing,” Kellin said defiantly. “Enemy troops had overrun a secret Federation eugenics lab. An ILLEGAL eugenics lab that was trying to grow our own version of the Jem’Hadar. I’m sorry if you feel that by destroying that research I’ve endangered your cozy position with Section 31.”

Efobi’s face remained as blank as always. “Captain, I have no idea what you are talking about. You messed up at Tykon. I’m ordering Saratoga to return home ASAP. You will be evaluated by Starfleet and your command abilities will be tested. Do I make myself clear?”

“As tanabian glass,” Kellin said.

“I expect you home within ten days. Efobi out.”

<><><>

The tension on the bridge was thick enough to slice with a phaser beam. Kellin sat stone quiet in his command chair. He’d said nothing but the most superficial orders in the past twenty-four hours. He’d ordered a course for home and left his crew to work in his absence. Twenty minutes ago Gleason had picked up an energy emission fourteen light-years away. Ordinarily he’d order it logged and resume course for home, but the signal had a Cardassian signature.

“Coming into range,” Kaplan said from the conn. “It’s an asteroid, bearing oh forty mark nine.”

“Take us into orbit, full scan,” Kellin said. He turned to his science officer. “How the hell could the Cardassians put abase so deep in Federation space?”

Thara, the Andorian science chief shook her head. “No idea, sir. It’s giving off huge amounts of electrostatic waves. I’m also reading faint life signs. They appear to be human.”

“Damn,” Kellin whispered. “Take us into transporter range. Sovar, Gleason, Piller, your with me. Doctor Collins, report to the transporter room.” He rose from his chair and was stopped by Vanick.

“Sir, let me go.”

Kellin brushed passed him. “The ship is yours, Commander, keep a lock on us.”

<><><>

Five columns of light filled the tunnel entrance to the Cardassian facility deep within the rock of the asteroid. Fanned out with hand phasers and palm beacons, the Saratoga away team swept the area.

“No signs of any life in this section,” Sovar said. “There are faint readings from a bout three hundred meters down this corridor.”

Kellin gestured them forward. They came to an intersection and a large explosion filled the entire area.

“What the hell was that!” snapped Gleason.

Piller had his tricorder in hand. “Readings are being scattered, something’s happening…”

From the upper support sections a large disruptor cannon descended from ceiling and charged up. “Look out!” shouted Kellin, aiminghis phaser and firing. The beam was absorbed by the kinetic forcefield. The cannon came to life, energy pulses ripping through Piller, Gleason and Collins before they could reach cover. They fell to the deck, smoking wounds burning across their torsos.

Sovar shoved Kellin out of the way the instant a bolt struck him in the head. Green blood and brain matter splattered across Kellin’s face. He jumped back out of range, madly reaching for his combadge. “Kellin to Saratoga, emergency transport!”

“Sorry, sir, we’re under attack!” shouted Kelso through the com line. “The station’s defense grid just came online.”

Booby traps, Kellin surmised. Cardassians were notorious for mining their abandoned facilities and he’d fallen right into it. He took aim with his phaser and fired against the power conduit son the wall. The beams vaporized the connections and the disruptor cannon powered down.

“Report,” Kellin said.

“Heavy damage,” Vanick replied. “Shields are down.”

“Beam me to the bridge!” Kellin demanded.

<><><>

He materialized in a swirl of energy surrounded by the smell of fire and death. Sarah Kaplan lie on the deck, her face crushed beyond recognition by a fallen support beam. Thara was slumped over her console her entire body engulfed in plasma fire that the automated suppression systems were struggling to snuff. Vanick manned the tactical station, madly trying to keep the ship in one piece.

Kellin moved to the helm. All engines were dead.

Deep within him, something snapped. Something primal, something that human beings overcame centuries ago. Brice Kellin twitched and as his ship was torn apart around him, he lashed out. He ripped the seat from the deck plate and hurled it across the bridge. “Abandon ship!” he thundered.

“Brice, wait I think…”

Vanick never finished. An explosion ripped across the upper hull surrounding the bridge. Kellin grabbed the conn as the blast of vacuum engulfed the bridge. Vanick’s grip slipped, and he was blown into the unforgiving depths of space just as the emergency forcefield snapped into place.

Kellin eyed the short-range scanners. The Cardassian outpost’s weapons had been neutralized. Vanick had saved them. Tears stung Kellin’s eyes. Everyone around him was dying! “Computer, site to site transport beam me to shuttle bay one.”

<><><>

He materialized in the darkened bay and ran for the Runabout Tigress. Sealing the hatch, Kellin fell into the pilot’s seat. “Computer, initiate cold-launch sequence.”

Bypassing the pre-flight checklists, the impulse and warp engines were brought online and the Tigress powered up.

Sighing heavily the captain engaged the thrusters. Tigress rose from the deck and angled towards the hangar doors.

“Warning,” announced the computer, “remote sensors off-line. Shuttlebay doors are sealed.”

Kellin slapped a hand on the controls. “Perfect! Just perfect.” He slapped a few more commands into the panel. Twin phaser beams erupted from the forward emitters, and vaporized the shuttlebay doors.

Taking the ship to full impulse, the Tigress cleared the Saratoga and came about. Kellin activated the tiny vessel’s tractor emitters and locked onto Akira-Class ship.

“Saratoga to runabout!” a scared voice sounded over the com. “This is Ensign Wynn. We’re twenty-five seconds from a core breach! Please help us.”

Kellin adjusted the emitter fields and sent the Saratoga spiraling towards the asteroid base. The instant the outer hull made contact with the rocky surface, he fired a full brace of photon torpedoes and let loose with all phasers.

“BLOODY CARDASSIANS!”

The antimatter shockwave, coupled with the explosion of the Cardassian station erupted against the shields of the Tigress. Kellin was thrown from his seat, his head impacting on the corner of the helm. The last thing he saw before he blacked out was the face of a laughing Cardassian.

<><><>

Two months ago

“Disobeying direct orders. Destruction of Federation property. Murder of 471 crew of the Starship Saratoga.”

“Brice Kellin, it is the judgment of this tribunal that you have been found guilty of the above charges.”

Brice Kellin bolted to his feet. “You’re a bunch of murdering pigs! You sent my wife to die! I’ll kill the rest of you!”

Judge Aaron Quinn continued over the tirade. It had been like this through the entire trial. Most of it, Kellin had been bound and gagged. Quinn had granted him the freedom during the verdict and sentencing portion as an act of kindness. It was an act he was regretting. “However, the best minds in Starfleet Medical have diagnosed you with an incurable emotional instability. You are remanded to the Elba Two rehabilitation facilities for a period of no less than forty years.” He slammed his gavel on the bench and stood, the rest of the court doing the same.

Kellin grabbed the edge of the large oak table and looked up at his legal counsel, a Tellarite lieutenant commander named Hogz. In one swift stroke, Kellin grabbed him by the throat and held him in a choke hold. The security officers on duty pulled their phasers at once.

“Put down your weapons!” Kellin shrieked. “I’ll tear off his head!”

“Stand down, Captain,” Admiral Quinn said, taking a step towards him. “You are only making things worse.”

Kellin giggled madly. “Worse? How can they get worse?! My wife is dead, my crew is dead, my career is down a black hole and your sending me to an asylum! They can’t get much worse!” He laughed, harder and harder, tears streaming his face. His mad giggles were the only thing heard. He watched as one of the security officers inched towards him, trying to get a clear shot. Kellin charged, hurling the Tellarite into the two security officers. They both crumbled to the deck. Kellin didn’t let up, he snatched a phaser that had fallen out of one of their grips and squeezed off half a dozen pulses, killing them instantly.

The spectators in the courtroom screamed and ran for the exit.

Kellin shot them all. Men and women were vaporized out of existence at the touch of a button. Kellin fired the weapon over and over, turning it on Admiral Quinn, blowing the man into his base molecules. He fired over and over at the escaping throng until the power cells drained and the weapon died.

He dropped to the floor, pounding the ground with his fists and shrieking and giggling. “BLOODY CARDASSIANS.”

<><><>

Today:

With the lights dimmed and floating at the edge of consciousness, Brice Kellin felt like he was drifting in the endless void of stars. He lie on the hard bunk in the brig of the USS Wyoming, his last trip aboard a Federation ship for the rest of his life.

He held a data padd in both hands.

The screen displayed the names and faces of the crew roster of the USS Saratoga. Gleason, Kaplan, Piller, Sovar, Thara. He read the names and met the faces of each of the deceased crew.

The war was over, and it had been for nearly a year. Kellin had fought for his captaincy, been put through the trials and tribulations of reverting to peacetime. Time and gain he’d failed to do that.

A year go he’d bottled up that rage and turned it inward. From his time in the Federation mental health hospitals to the countless meetings with psychiatrists from across Starfleet, Kellin had struggled to regain his humanity.

And he failed.

“I’m sorry,” he said mumbled, his voice hoarse from the rage he’d been expressing to this room for the past several hours.

His life had been ripped from him .His ship, his crew and his wife, all casualties in a war that never should have happened.

And now he was being shipped off to Elba II to live out his days with the criminally insane.

He was done with it.

He screamed and doubled over in pain.

Howling with agony he writhed on the floor.

“Riley to Sickbay!” the guard shouted into his combadge. “Medical emergency in the brig!”

Kellin screamed louder.

Riley moved to deactivate the forcefield, drawing his phaser, he slapped the pane, shutting down the electrostatic barrier. “Just hold on,” Riley said. “The doctor’s coming.”

Kellin rolled onto his hands and knees, coughing violently, he bit the inside of his cheek hard enough to draw blood and spit it on the deck. He kicked his legs and collapsed, holding his breath.

Riley knelt down, felt for a pulse on Kellin’s neck.

Found one.

Before he could react Kellin was moving, spinning, grabbing Riley’s phaser and driving it into his skull with a wet crunch before the man before he could move.

Kellin didn’t even feel for the man. He’d killed so many times that it no longer registered, they were just targets in his way. Now was the time for one final act that would release him.

Knowing he didn’t’ have much time left, he released the weapon’s safety, tapped the setting stud sixteen times until the grid turned red and the device went warm to the touch. He felt fresh tears sting his eyes as he stuck the end of the weapon in his mouth and clamped down on the emitter node. Taking one last deep breath, he pinched the firing trigger.

- - -
The explosion tore across all of deck nine exposing dozens of meters of the ship to the cold unforgiving vacuum of space. Several crewmen were blown out of their quarters, two of them colliding with the end of the ship’s warp nacelles, incinerating and causing the warp field to collapse as the engine erupted in a phase misalignment and exploded.

The starship Wyoming tumbled out of warp, disabled and with dozens dead.

Hundreds were dead.

Some shot like animals, dying at the hands of a man who lost a wife, a ship, a crew and his mind.
 
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I've begun the story, and I find it engrossing, but I have to be honest... having the entire story appear in bold is making my eyes hurt and is throwing me out of the narrative.

Is there any reason in particular you formatted the story in this way?
 
I've begun the story, and I find it engrossing, but I have to be honest... having the entire story appear in bold is making my eyes hurt and is throwing me out of the narrative.

Is there any reason in particular you formatted the story in this way?

no idea how that happned. took care of it. ;)
 
Ugh...that's just nasty.

Thanks Nerys, my recent foray into the mirror universe has taken me to a dark place. Maybe I need to return to happy happy times. I just tried to become the character and find out where i would go if my wife were killed and everyone started dying around me. I don't htink i'd become a murderer but i do think i would snap.
 
Very dark. I liked it!

Doh, just realized your link from the contest thread starts you at the last half of the story! I missed the first half!

Also, I don't understand this line:
Much more so because the viewports were on the far side of the room far away from the view outside.

How can a viewport be far away from the view it's showing?
 
Very dark. I liked it!

Doh, just realized your link from the contest thread starts you at the last half of the story! I missed the first half!

Also, I don't understand this line:
Much more so because the viewports were on the far side of the room far away from the view outside.

How can a viewport be far away from the view it's showing?

they were stuck at ds9 during the battle of cardassia, the view of thestation was a reminder that he was stuck behind the lines with a damaged engine while so many were dying.
 
Ah! so it's a grammar problem. It should read something like "Much more so because the viewports were on the far side of the room leaving him far away from the view outside".

Without the "leaving him", the phrase "far way from the view outside" is describing the only subject in the sentence, the viewport.
 
I agree with the other reviews, this is a dark, troubled, and tragic tale of woe. Captain Kellin clearly took leave of his senses, undoubtedly both from the guilt of his actions at the vaporized Federation outpost as well as at the death of his wife.

Yeah. :eek: Talk about the worst case scenario.

Grim but good.
 
Dark and spiraling darker until the entire tale ends in the Pit. An engrossing if somewhat disturbing read.
 
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