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[March challenge]"Our Gentle Persuasion"

Myasishchev

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"Our Gentle Persuasion"

2474, Cardassia Prime (then)


He awoke naked, on his back, in perfect darkness. No way to know how long he was unconscious. No way to know what date it was. It would be months before he would accept this, but he had just begun his own new calendar. By the only reckoning there was, this was Day One.

He reached out with his hands and feet and his mind to feel the limits of his confinement. Less than two meters in every direction they were stopped by smooth, obsidian walls. No doors. Of course no windows.

He searched every surface for an imperfection. He found only one. The arrowhead of his communicator badge. He tapped it. He was not surprised when it replied in an unhappy chirp that it could make contact with no one.

The walls were stone, carved down to the molecular level—smoother than glass, so slick they almost felt wet, the work of a transporter. The rock had been hewn out, not quite large enough for a man, and he had been deposited in its place. Beneath the surface, locked and lost, left to himself he would survive for only moments as his oxygen supply dwindled and disappeared into useless carbon dioxide. Logically, he knew they had not gone to so much trouble only to let him die. But a small emotion whispered cruelly and relentlessly: this was his tomb.

The wound in his chest had been crudely patched; it itched. He resisted the impulse to scratch at the incision. He knew what was beneath it, a small device, somewhat complicated, a low-powered microreplicator and a neural stimulator. It was the source of the chemical that clawed at the margins of his self-control. It could, he surmised, do far worse. It was also, he realized at length, what kept him alive. When he exhaled, it was oxygen again.

Though his body screamed that it had been invaded, with a thought he silenced it.

And for a long time there was nothing but silence, punctuated only by the slow, continuing pumps of his heart and lungs.

Then, the Voice, the only other Voice in the world. The Voice seemed happy. The Voice seemed to smile.

“Good morning,” the Voice suggested unconvincingly. “What is your name?”

“Sylok,” he answered. “My first name is unpronounceable.”

“Yes, of course it is. Your rank?”

“Lieutenant commander.”

“Your unit?”

“U.S.S. Shangri-La, Security Department, Operations Division, United Starfleet.”

“Very complete, good.”

“I believe you knew that already.”

“Yes, I did. But I wanted you to tell me. What is your place of birth?”

“What is the relevance of this question?”

The Voice seemed amused. “When we’ve conquered the Federation, we’d like to know where to return you. Dosage up ten percent; please answer the question.”

“I was born in T’Pella Hospital, in T’Pella, on Kaven Island, planet Mirikal, Khalet system.”

“Yes, yes… very good. And what was your mission in the Chin’toka system?”

“I wish to see a neutral representative.”

“Dosage up ten percent.” He felt dizzy; he felt sick; he felt gravity more keenly than he ever had, and when he looked up into the black above him, it was an effort. “What was your mission in the Chin’toka system?”

“To explore strange new worlds,” he said. “To seek out new life, and new civilizations. To go where no one has gone before.”

The Voice was silent for a moment; then it laughed, laughed for a long time. Its laughter was not vicious, but hearty and amiable, as if they had shared a joke together. Finally, it replied, “Yes, of course. Of course. I suspected the drug might not work on you. You have defeated our chemicals and ignored our probes—resisted our gentle persuasion. The Dominion has other methods, Vulcan—I have other methods. And we have time… time to get you acquainted with your new life. So much time to get you acquainted with our civilization. Yes, my friend!” The Voice chuckled warmly.

Agony exclaimed from inside his chest, from the monster stitched beneath his collarbone. His flesh was replaced with fire that burned but could not consume. The solace of death was distant and theoretical. Only the implausible mercies of life remained, and, for the first time in his existence, he knew despair.

We shall explore together.”
 
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Ewwww, VERY creepy!!! And two of the galaxy's most disciplined types of minds--Vulcan and Cardassian...this should be one hell of a mental match! I sure hope this Vulcan wins, because it seems he's found the very worst of Cardassia... :(
 
Impressive and yes ... positively disturbing. But that's to be expected from a Cardassian/Dominion interrogation.

Even so this seems more sadistic than their usual fair which begs the question: What is it they want from Sylok? or What is it he knows?

I thought it was odd that they left him naked but with his combadge.

Excellent entry though.
 
Impressive and yes ... positively disturbing. But that's to be expected from a Cardassian/Dominion interrogation.

Even so this seems more sadistic than their usual fair which begs the question: What is it they want from Sylok? or What is it he knows?

I thought it was odd that they left him naked but with his combadge.

Excellent entry though.

The Com badge might give him a glimmer of usefully crushable hope. And he's Fleet security-he probably knows all kinds of good things...
 
^The comm badge represents the Federation's impotence to help him, true.

(And on a more practical level, the comm badge is to talk to him.:p )

Mistral said:
Dunno if that was a cliffhanger but it was a helluva good bit.

Thank you. :)

I'm still not sure either. Cliffhanger wasn't well-defined. One definition is more broad, encompassing all endings in media res; the other definition is far more restrictive, meaning only endings calculated to bridge two separate parts of the same story.

I chose the former because I don't have a latter. Actually, now that I think about it, I do, but out of context it probably makes little sense.
 
A kewl interrogation method - well cool is not the right word - but you get what you mean. Either way it would be interesting to see what direction the interrogation takes as Nerys says pitching the Vulcan mind against the machinations of a Cardassian.
 
Well since being buried alive is one of the things that terrifies me the most I found this quite creepy to say the least! Kinda a shame its a Vulcan in there are I imagine it would affect someone with a less logical outlook more...

But I digress. Short but good, and I think it definitely counts as a cliffhanger, although it could just as easily end there!
 
Well since being buried alive is one of the things that terrifies me the most I found this quite creepy to say the least! Kinda a shame its a Vulcan in there are I imagine it would affect someone with a less logical outlook more...


It affects him. He's in that hole in the ground for a good sixteen months...

Oh, for what it's worth, it was supposed to be 2374, not 2474, and even that's an error, because it's supposed to be somewhat prior to the Dominion attack on DS9 that opened formal hostilities in late 2373.

I attribute these mistakes to the head wound I got during the Eugenics War. -_-
 
Well since being buried alive is one of the things that terrifies me the most I found this quite creepy to say the least! Kinda a shame its a Vulcan in there are I imagine it would affect someone with a less logical outlook more...


It affects him. He's in that hole in the ground for a good sixteen months...

Oh, for what it's worth, it was supposed to be 2374, not 2474, and even that's an error, because it's supposed to be somewhat prior to the Dominion attack on DS9 that opened formal hostilities in late 2373.

I attribute these mistakes to the head wound I got during the Eugenics War. -_-

I want to read MORE.

Please.:vulcan:
 
An excellent teaser, with tension, foreboding, and drama... all in one tidy little package. The fact that you've merely hinted at the horrors Sylok has in store for him makes the reader's fertile imagination fill in those unpleasant little gaps with ever so much mayhem. :devil:

Great stuff that practically begs for a longer story.
 
Well since being buried alive is one of the things that terrifies me the most I found this quite creepy to say the least! Kinda a shame its a Vulcan in there are I imagine it would affect someone with a less logical outlook more...


It affects him. He's in that hole in the ground for a good sixteen months...

Oh, for what it's worth, it was supposed to be 2374, not 2474, and even that's an error, because it's supposed to be somewhat prior to the Dominion attack on DS9 that opened formal hostilities in late 2373.

I attribute these mistakes to the head wound I got during the Eugenics War. -_-

I want to read MORE.

Please.:vulcan:
:) Thank you.

I'll be done with it eventually. I tend to do it in stops and stops. I mean starts.:shifty:

Gibraltar said:
An excellent teaser, with tension, foreboding, and drama... all in one tidy little package. The fact that you've merely hinted at the horrors Sylok has in store for him makes the reader's fertile imagination fill in those unpleasant little gaps with ever so much mayhem. :devil:

Great stuff that practically begs for a longer story.

:D Killer.

Er... is anyone going to be super-disappointed that it skips in time ahead three decades immediately after this scene? :p
 
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