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June Challenge: "The Combadge"

Goliath

Vice Admiral
Admiral
“The Combadge”


Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen. I’m Captain Robert Charlebois, Starfleet Security.

Four months ago, Admiral Ross asked me to take command of the south-central district of the city of Sanjal, here on Cardassia Prime. Since the end of the Dominion War and the beginning of the Occupation, South Central has been one of the most violent and dangerous areas of the city. Some reporters have even suggested that the south-central district was a “no-go zone” for Starfleet personnel.

Today, with the release of an independent study of Cardassian security statistics, I am proud to announce a steep decline in the frequency of insurgent attacks in this district over the past six months.

With the continued help of community leaders and ordinary citizens, we will continue to make the south-central district a safer place for all of us…”

***

The predawn darkness was nearly total: the sky was cloudy, and the power had failed again the previous afternoon, blacking out South Central. The air was thick and warm, promising more thunderstorms later in the day. The city streets were deserted, and silent, except for the chirping and clicking of insects.

Quickly, quietly, the SURGE teams moved in, surrounding the house. They wore black Starfleet combat uniforms, and black balaclavas to hide their sweating faces. Their type-3 phasers were optimized for close-quarter battles, with tactical flashlights and forward pistol grips. They gathered at the front and back doors and waited for the signal.

“Knock, knock,” said a voice on the communicator.

Raiders at both doors swung battering rams. The doors crashed open. Weapons at the ready, the team at the back rushed into the kitchen, moving to clear the first floor and basement. The team at the front door charged into the front hall and up the stairs.

A New Order terrorist appeared at the top of the stairs, running out of a bedroom on the left, a disruptor rifle in his hands. The leading raider lit him up and fired twice.

The first shot hit the Cardassian in the chest. The second hit him in the face. He collapsed like a rag doll. His disruptor clunked on the floor, unfired.

Someone was shouting in Cardassian downstairs. There was a burst of disruptor fire, the snap-snap of the tactical phasers, and a dying scream.

The leading raider went left at the top of the stairs, into the dead Cardassian’s room. The man behind him kicked open the door to the second bedroom, on the right. A shrill female scream came from inside.

A third man hit the top of the stairs, turned right, and right again, to face the last bedroom door. “Starfleet!” he shouted, and kicked at the door. The door didn’t open.

Shit! he thought. “Open the door,” he shouted, and kicked again. This time the door crashed open, and he rushed in.

***

Warak had been sleeping, in the nude, on a mattress upstairs, when the house’s doors were breached.

What was that? he thought. Then shouts and screams, gunfire, boots pounding on the stairs. The enemy!

He scrambled to his feet, grabbed a can of liquid fuel off the floor, uncapped it, and started splashing it all over his desk and workstation.

He heard a bang at the door, and a human shout. He had to destroy the files! But where was his lighter?

He turned to look—but someone was behind him, dressed all in black, and the butt end of the phaser rifle hit him in the face.

***

“Wake up, snakehead.”

Warak woke up. For a moment, he was confused. Where was his lighter? Then he remembered.

His head ached. He was tied to a chair, still naked, with his hands bound behind him. The chair was in the middle of a large, empty room, dimly lighted. There were three figures in front of him—human, all dressed in black. The one on the right had a fire extinguisher. The one on the left had a can of liquid fuel. Briefly, Warak wondered if it was the same fuel can.

There—on the floor, under a sheet—was that a body?

“Hey there,” said one of the black-uniformed humans—the one in the centre. “How’s your head?”

“It hurts,” Warak said.

“That’s a shame,” said the human. “Do you know who we are?”

The Cardassian thought for a moment. Then he said: “Federation death squad.”

The human nodded. “That’s right,” he said. “I’m Lieutenant-Commander Mack Vickers. Maybe you’ve heard of me?”

Warak felt a chill. “No,” he lied.

“Yeah,” said the human. “You’ve heard of me.” He gestured to the man on his right—the one with the fuel can. “This is my second-in command, Lieutenant Nash Delvern.”

“Hey,” said the man with the fuel can.

Then Vickers gestured to the man on his left—the one with the fire extinguisher. “And this is Junior Lieutenant Russ McKinley.”

“Just call me Rusty,” said the man with the fire extinguisher.

“The rest of my team is outside,” said Vickers. “Now that we’ve been introduced, I’m going to ask you a few questions.”

“I won’t answer,” said Warak.

“No?” said Vickers.

“No. You can torture me all you want. I’ll never talk.”

“Torture?” said Vickers. “Who said anything about torture?” He looked to his right and gestured at the Cardassian. “This guy thinks we’re going to torture him.” The man with the fuel canister shrugged.

Vickers turned his attention back to Warak. “You’ve got the wrong idea, pal. I don’t torture people. It’s against Federation law. Besides, I’ve got my own way of getting information.”

“What’s that?” said Warak.

“Answer my questions, or we’ll kill you. Like we killed your friend here.” He gestured at the body under the sheet nearby. “You want to see?”

“No,” said Warak.

“Sure you do,” said Vickers. He turned to the man on his left. “Let him see.”

The man with the fire extinguisher—Lieutenant McKinley—bent down, and pulled the sheet back. The sight and smell made Warak gag, but he couldn’t look away. The dead Cardassian’s body was burnt black, but still recognizable. It was a member of his resistance cell—Imskel.

“I’m surprised all that screaming didn’t wake you up,” said Vickers. “Rusty must have hit you pretty hard.”

“Federation murderers!” Warak said.

“Who’s your handler?” said Vickers.

“Ratunka!”

“Give us the name of your handler, and we’ll let you live.”

“Nu ka breyet’U, human scum! For Cardassia!”

The Starfleet commander shrugged. “Suit yourself,” he said. He turned to the man on his right. “Do it.”

The man on his right—Lieutenant Delvern—stepped forward, uncapped the fuel can, and started pouring fuel on Warak’s head. The liquid stung the Cardassian’s eyes, burned in his nostrils, made him cough and retch.

“Oh, I’m sorry,” Delvern said. “Did I get some in your eyes? Here—let me wash them out.” He splashed more fuel in Warak’s face.

Warak spluttered and gasped. “You can’t do this!”

“Why not?” said Vickers

“I am a prisoner of war!” cried Warak. “I have rights!”

“You’re a terrorist piece of shit,” said Vickers. “You’ve got nothing.”

“Done,” said Delvern, his fuel canister empty.

“Okay. Step back,” said Vickers. He took out a flare. Then, to Warak, he said: “Tell us your handler’s name.”

“Ratunka!” cried Warak, struggling against his bonds. “You can’t—”

Vickers lit the flare. Warak froze. His eyes widened in terror.

“Is that your final answer?” said Vickers.

***

Two Type-15 shuttlepods were parked on the abandoned factory’s roof. The two remaining members of the SURGE team stood nearby, their balaclavas rolled up into caps. Ensign Coriander Koenig chewed gum and watched the sun rise, her face expressionless. Ensign Greg Mathers sweated and fidgeted nearby, glancing over at the building’s roof exit.

“Relax,” Koenig said, finally.

“Sorry,” said Mathers. Then: “What if he doesn’t talk?”

“He’ll talk,” said Koenig.

Mathers looked unconvinced. A few seconds later, the door to the roof banged open. Vickers came out first, followed by Delvern and McKinley, dragging their prisoner between them. The Cardassian was still naked, except for a black hood over his head, and the plasticuffs that held his hands behind his back.

Koenig went over to the nearest shuttlepod and opened the cargo hatch. Mathers said: “Did he talk?”

“Of course he talked,” said Vickers, pulling off his balaclava, using it to wipe the sweat from his heavy brow, shaved head, and thick neck.

Delvern and McKinley shoved the Cardassian into the shuttlepod’s cargo space. McKinley chuckled. “You should have seen his face when we showed him the body,” he said. “Or when Mack lit the flare.” He hit the button to close the hatch. “I thought for sure he was going to piss himself.”

The hatch closed. Delvern said: “Later, scumbag.” Then, to Vickers: “When are these buttonheads going to figure out, the guy was dead before we set him on fire?”

Vickers grinned, shrugged, tapped his combadge. “Vickers to Lewis,” he said.

“What if he’d called your bluff?” said Mathers.

Delvern and Mackey were pulling off their own headgear. They paused, looked at each other, then back to Mathers. “What bluff?” said Delvern.

“Lewis here. Go ahead, Mack.”

“Hey, Lew,” said Vickers. “Have I got a TIP for you. Our prisoner gave up his handler. You ready?”

“Go ahead.”

Vickers recited a name and address. The name was Cardassian. The address was in different part of South Central. “Hit that place as fast as you can, and arrest everybody. This intelligence is getting colder by the minute.”

“I’m on it,” said the voice on the combadge. “Anything else?”

“No, that’s it. Thanks, Lew. Vickers out.”

“You think they’ll get him?” said Koenig.

“Maybe,” said Vickers. “The target personality has a day job and a family. If we’re lucky, they’re either still asleep, or just getting up.”

“So what do we do now?” said Mathers.

Vickers went over to the second shuttlepod. “You and Connie take the spoon back to civilization,” he said. Then: “You two with me.”

“Shotgun!” said Delvern.

“Aw,” said McKinley.

“Where are you going?” said Mathers.

Vickers paused at the pilot’s hatch. “You don’t need to know that, new guy.”

Koenig said: “Come on, Mathers, move your ass.” She climbed into the first shuttlepod, took the pilot’s position, and started the impulse engines. After a moment’s hesitation, Mathers joined her. The pod’s gull-wing hatches closed

“Where are you taking me,” the hooded Cardassian whined, from the back.

“Shut up,” said Koenig.

***
 
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Two Starfleet officers watched as the shuttlepods took off.

Captain Charlebois said: “Follow Vickers.”

The picture on the viewscreen zoomed out and panned right, following one of the two pods across the skies over south-central Sanjal.

Captain Brownridge, Starfleet Intelligence, blew on his coffee, sipped, and said: “Tell me more.”

Charlebois shrugged. “There’s not much more to tell,” he said. “Over the past six months, the Phalanx has become the largest, most powerful faction in the city. Forty per cent of the south-central district is under their control.”

“And you suspect Vickers of leaking classified information to the Phalangists?”

“Yes. Along with his racketeering, and other illegal activities.”

“Why would he do that?”

“Because they hate the New Order almost as much as they hate the provisional government. Dozens of known and suspected insurgents have been killed in this district since Vickers and his team arrived. I suspect they’ve been passing Target Information Packages to the Phalanx, and letting its death squads do the rest.”

Brownridge drank more coffee and considered. Finally, he said: “That’s pretty rough justice.”

“It’s cold-blooded murder,” said Charlebois, flatly.

***

The shuttlepod landed in a deserted parking lot, near an improvised armored vehicle and a small group of Cardassians. The pilot’s hatch opened, and Vickers got out. One Cardassian stepped forward to greet him.

“Commander Vickers,” he said.

“Gul Yurat,” said Vickers. He motioned for the Cardassian to follow him. “Come on around back. I’ve got something for you.”

Yurat followed Vickers around to the back of the shuttlepod. Vickers looked around, then banged on the cargo hatch with his fist. The hatch opened, revealing Lieutenant McKinley holding out a Cardassian disruptor rifle.

“Just fell off the truck this morning,” said Vickers.

Yurat accepted the rifle and examined it. “Excellent,” he said. “How many?”

“Six pistols, twelve rifles,” said Vickers. “Compliments of the New Order.”

Yurat looked up, smiled. “I look forward to thanking them for their generosity.” He waved his men over to the shuttlepod.

While Delvern and McKinley distributed weapons, Vickers held out a folded piece of paper. “I need a favor in the meantime,” he said. “A couple of black marketeers who think they don’t have to pay tax.”

Yurat accepted the paper, unfolded it, read it, and nodded. “These men are known to us,” he said. “We will remind them of their civic duty”

“I appreciate that,” said Vickers.

Gul Yurat slung his disruptor rifle and offered Vickers his hand. “Shoulder to shoulder, Commander Vickers.”

The Federation officer shook the Cardassian’s hand. “Shoulder to shoulder,” he said.

***

The shuttlepod on the viewscreen took off again, heading for district headquarters.

“What do you think?” said Captain Charlebois.

Captain Brownridge finished his coffee. “I think it’ll take a lot more than this to prove that Vickers has been colluding with Phalangist death squads.”

“I’ll get more,” said Charlebois. “I’ve got an informant, on the team.”

Brownridge’s eyes widened in surprise. “Are you serious?” he said. “Who?”

***

“Lewis to Vickers.”

“Vickers here.”

“The cat is in the bag.”

“Nice work, Lew. We’re on our way back to civilization right now.”

“No problem. One thing: the target personality has a wife and young son. I brought them all in, like you said.”

“Good to hear it. I owe you one, buddy. Vickers out.”

***

The occupation authority’s district headquarters was a step pyramid of grey stone. Starfleet personnel called it “civilization.” They were discouraged from calling it that in official correspondence, for obvious reasons.

The interior lighting was low, the walls close and oppressive. The interrogation rooms were converted offices on the first floor. The detainees were in room 101. Vickers opened the door and walked in, followed by Delvern and McKinley.

There were three Cardassian civilians inside. The target personality was a mature male, sitting handcuffed to a metal table. A mature female and a very young male—the target personality’s wife and son—were sitting at the table as well. All three looked at the door when it opened. They looked scared, confused, and a little angry.

Vickers gave them a cold smile. “Mr. Atwar?” he said

The target personality said: “Yes—I’m Atwar.”

Vickers nodded. “This is your wife Rayal and your son Rishkat?” he said.

Warily, the handcuffed Cardassian said: “Yes.”

“I’m Lieutenant Commander Mack Vickers of Starfleet Security. We just need to ask you a few routine questions.” Vickers looked back at McKinley and Delvern. “Why don’t you guys take Mr. Atwar’s family next door?”

“Sure thing,” Delvern said. He opened the door, looked at the wife. “Ma’am?”

The female looked at the target personality. When he nodded, she took the child by the hand, and led him out of the room. Delvern and McKinley followed them out. The door closed behind them.

Vickers took a seat across from the target personality.

“I want to speak to a nestor,” the Cardassian said.

“In a moment,” said Vickers. “First, I want you to tell me the names and addresses of all your associates in the New Order.”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about,” said the Cardassian.

Vickers sighed, lowered his head, rubbed his scalp. Then he raised his head and looked the prisoner in the eye. “Why do you do make me do this?”

The Cardassian looked back. “Do what?” he said.

“You’ll talk,” said Vickers. “You know you’re going to talk. I’m going to make you talk. I always make you snakes talk. So why do you do this? Why?”

“I want a nestor,” said the Cardassian.

Vickers shook his head, then tapped his combadge. “Vickers to Delvern,” he said.

“Delvern here.”

“Go to work on the wife,” said Vickers.

“Acknowledged.”

The Cardassian’s eyes widened. “What are you doing?” he said, uncertainly.

There was a moment of silence. Then, in the next room, a woman screamed.

“Rayal?” said the Cardassian. There was another scream next door. “Rayal!”

“Names and addresses, Mr. Atwar,” said Vickers.

The Cardassian shouted, swore, jumped to his feet, fought against the handcuff.

“Names and addresses.”

The screaming continued. Cardassian started to weep. “Stop it!” he cried, still struggling to pull his hand loose. “Stop it! Rayal! Rayal!

“Give me some names, and the pain will stop,” said Vickers.

“Bastard!” the Cardassian shouted. “Federation bastard! Rayal!

Then, suddenly, the screaming stopped.

After a moment, Vickers’ combadge chirped. “Delvern to Vickers.”

“Vickers here.”

“Mack…Mack, I’m sorry man…the guy’s wife…”

Vickers frowned. “What happened?”

“She’s dead.”

The Cardassian looked stricken. Vickers jumped to his feet. “Dead?” he shouted. “You idiot—you weren’t supposed to kill her! What the hell did you do?

“I didn’t do anything, I swear! I was giving her electroshock, and she just…she just died!

“Ah…shit!”

“She must have had a weak heart, or something. I’m sorry, sir.”

The Cardassian collapsed back into his chair. “Yeah, okay,” said Vickers, disgustedly. “It’s not your fault. Go to work on the kid. But be careful this time.”

“What?” said Atwar.

“Acknowledged.”

“No!”

“Vickers out.” The Starfleet officer sat back down and eyed his prisoner.

“Does your son have any medical conditions we should know about?” he said.

***

Vickers and his teammates walked out of the detention area, laughing and joking. At the security station, Lieutenant Barbara Hardcastle scowled and lowered the force-field gate. “Vickers,” she said, “what the hell were you doing in there?”

Vickers grinned and waved his hand dismissively. “Relax, Hardcastle,” he said. “No animals were harmed in the making of this film.”

“Are you kidding?” said Hardcastle. “I could hear the screams from here! You guys are going to get me court-martialled!”

“Nah,” said Vickers. He held up an optolythic data rod. “What you heard was a recording of an old Obsidian-Order interrogation. We put the prisoner in one room, and played this in the next. Made him think we were torturing his wife and kid.”

Hardcastle stared, open-mouthed. Finally, she shook her head and held up her hands. “You guys are sick,” she said.

The three SURGE officers laughed. “Let’s go, sickos,” said Vickers, pocketing the data rod. “We’ve got work to do.”

The group started to walk away when Hardcastle called after them. “Vickers!” They stopped, and Vickers looked back.

“Yeah?”

“I almost forgot. I have a message here for you. Your eyes only.”

Vickers looked back at his teammates, shrugged, and said: “Go on ahead, I’ll catch up.”

Delvern and McKinley left the detention area. Vickers went over to the security station, where Hardcastle was raising the force-field gate once again. “Who’s it from?” he said.

Hardcastle held out a padd. “Captain Brownridge, Starfleet Intelligence,” she said.

“Brownridge?” said Vickers. He took the padd, tapped a button on the screen, and read the message that came up. Then, for a moment, he just stood there.

“What does Intelligence want?” said Hardcastle.

Vickers glanced up, smiled. “Nothing,” he said. He blanked the screen, and handed the padd back. “Just a TIP. See you later, Lieutenant.”

***

It was another hot, humid night in the south-central district of Sanjal. Sheet lightning flashed and thunder rumbled in the distance. The power had not yet been fully restored, so the streets were dark, deserted.

Swiftly, silently, the SURGE team closed in on their objective—another nondescript house in one of the district’s poorest neighborhoods. Koenig and McKinley set up a ladder in the back yard, beneath a second-floor window. As they began to climb, Vickers, Delvern and Mathers crept around to the front of the house and stacked up next to the front door.

Vickers held up his left fist. Delvern hefted the battering ram. Mathers readied his weapon. Behind their balaclavas, their faces were tense with excitement.

They heard the sound of glass breaking in the rear of the house. Vickers pumped his fist. Delvern shouted “Starfleet!” and swung the ram. As the door splintered inward, Mathers charged in and moved left.

Vickers went in, moving right, Delvern close behind him. As they rounded a corner, a Cardassian opened fire with a disruptor pistol.

Vickers ducked back, under cover. Then both Delvern and Vickers leaned around the corner and returned fire. The Cardassian was hit and fell.

The Starfleet officers advanced into the room, covering the Cardassian on the floor. Vickers reached down and carefully removed the disruptor from the dead alien’s hand. Behind them, they heard Mathers say “Clear!”

Delvern and Vickers exchanged a look. Mathers entered the room. He lowered his weapon.

Then Vickers raised the disruptor, took aim, and shot Mathers in the face.


(Adapted from The Shield, Episode One: “Pilot”)
 
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I have never seen the Shield so I had no idea where this was headed. But I'll tell you this. You are a very good writer. That opening scene with Warak and the dialog was so well done. Was this taken from what the actors said on the show, which I doubt since it was Trek centric in some cases. In any event, I was very entertained. A bit 'dark' and I think it came through very well!!

Rob
Scorpio
 
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I got the adaptation straight away, nicely done.

Thanks!

I have never seen the Shield so I had no idea where this was headed. But I'll tell you this. You are a very good writer.

Thanks again!

That opening scene with Warak and the dialog was so well done. Was this taken from what the actors said on the show, which I doubt since it was Trek centric in some cases.

Some of the opening monologue was taken directly from the show. The rest of it is original.

I had in fact hoped to use more dialogue from the show itself, but the need to compress that first episode into just 3500 words made it impossible. The hardest part about writing this adaptation was choosing what to leave out.

If you ever watch that episode--and I strongly encourage you to do so, it's a great show--you'll find that it's much richer and more complex than what I've presented here. This really is just the bare bones of the story.

In any event, I was very entertained. A bit 'dark' and I think it came through very well!!

And again--thanks!
 
Jesus! I enjoy the fan fics but it is a rare experience to find myself (literally) on the edge of my seat. I thought it was an adaptation of an episode of Over There at first but I can see the Shield by the end. Y'know, I hate you. I put up a fairly strong entry this month and you just blew everyone out of the water. Any late-comers are going to be hard-pressed to compete with this effort. Great Job-mark me down for a vote!
 
Jesus! I enjoy the fan fics but it is a rare experience to find myself (literally) on the edge of my seat.

I consider that very high praise. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.

I thought it was an adaptation of an episode of Over There at first but I can see the Shield by the end.

That's interesting. I've never actually seen Over There, but it seems to me that the challenges facing police anti-gang task forces are similar in many ways to the challenges that soldiers face when engaged in counterinsurgency operations.

Y'know, I hate you.

:( Sorry.

I put up a fairly strong entry this month and you just blew everyone out of the water. Any late-comers are going to be hard-pressed to compete with this effort. Great Job-mark me down for a vote!

Well, thanks--but don't speak too soon! The month is only half over.
 
You should check out Over There-just chilling at times, like your story. The fireteam goes after some insurgents that killed a friend of theirs' in one episode-that's what I thought you were adapting at first. If you like the Shield you'll like Over There-similar intensity levels.
 
good one. i think it's going to be between you and me at this point...

i second the recommendation for 'Over There' it was a good show cut down in its prime...great cast too...
 
"... Huh?"

To be honest that was my first reaction to the abrubt ending of this story. I've never watched The Shield (I hear it's great) so I didn't recognize the source.

An excellent entry however. Great story, impeccably written with great pace, cruel humor and awesome dialogue.

Now just so I get this. Mathers was the Intelligence mole and Vickers found out about it from the message from Brownridge. Does this mean Brownridge wanted his own mole eliminated?

I do a agree that this was a bit dark for Trek (hardly suprising from you) but nevertheless a fantastic entry with fascinating real-life references ... 'SURGE' team? Interesting.
 
To begin, I thought this was some sort of play on a Defence Ministry statement then it led into the story. Felt familiar but I couldn't place it and throughout I was wondering where does the Combadge fit into it all? :confused: D'oh! How very stupid of me - funny play on it too. The rest of the story was not so funny but very dark but also very tightly written. Excellent.
 
^Thanks for all the kind words, you guys. I'm glad you all enjoyed this--it sounds like you had as much fun reading it as I did writing it.

"... Huh?"

To be honest that was my first reaction to the abrubt ending of this story.

Hmm. That's not good. Your reaction should have been more like, "OMG!"

Now just so I get this. Mathers was the Intelligence mole and Vickers found out about it from the message from Brownridge. Does this mean Brownridge wanted his own mole eliminated?

You're half right. The key scene here is the discussion between Charlebois and Brownridge.

We know (from the opening monologue) that Charlebois is in command of south-central sector. He is happy to take credit for the drop in terrorist activity, but unhappy with the way Vickers has worked to achieve this drop. ("It's cold-blooded murder," etc.)

Charlebois discusses his suspicions with Brownridge as the two watch Vickers meeting with the Phalangists. During this discussion, Charlebois lets slip to Brownridge that he has planted a mole in the SURGE team.

(I don't say who this is, but I hint that it's Mathers, who we have seen is not entirely comfortable with Vickers' methods, and who Vickers has called "new guy")

Brownridge is surprised to hear this, and after his meeting with Charlebois, he sends Vickers a secret message. The content of this message is not revealed: Vickers says it's a TIP--a Target Information Package--which is true. But the target is the mole in his own team--Mathers. Brownridge has "tipped" him off.

That evening, during a raid based on information obtained from Atwar, Vickers takes the opportunity to eliminate this threat by shooting Mathers.

If I'd had a few more words to work with, I might have revealed the contents of Brownridge's message, or something. But as it stands, this story is something like 3499 words long, after I'd already cut several hundred words. So I decided to go for maximum surprise and shock value, hoping that the reader would be able to piece everything together once the story had ended.

I do a agree that this was a bit dark for Trek (hardly suprising from you) but nevertheless a fantastic entry with fascinating real-life references ... 'SURGE' team? Interesting.

:) I was wondering if anybody caught that.
 
I thought I would post a couple of historical (and pseudo-historical) notes that people might find interesting.

The Cardassian Phalanx (and its members, the Phalangists) were inspired by some real political movements from Earth history. The Phalangists were a fascist movement in Spain that supported Franco in the Civil War of 1936-39. The Lebanese Kataeb party (supported by Lebanon's Maronite Christian community) are also called "Phalangists": Kataeb is the plural of katiba, which means "phalanx" in Arabic. And "Phalangists" could also serve as a rough translation for the name of the genocidal Hutu militia in Rwanda, the Interahamwe, which literally means "those who fight together."

The city of Sanjal was inspired by the real-life setting for The Shield, namely, LoS ANGELes.

Many of the names in this story were loose anagrams of the names of Shield characters. "Mack Vickers," for example, was obviously inspired by "Vic Mackey". But I used an actual online anagram generator to obtain others.

The most fortuitous result was "Coriander Koenig," which is an almost perfect anagram of "Ronnie Gardocki." (I was suprised to discover that "Coriander" is an actual woman's name) Her last name allowed me to nickname her "Connie": besides sounding like "Ronnie," that's the name of a hooker that Mackey uses as an informant on the show.

If you're ever stuck for a character name, you might try using that anagram generator. It's fun. :)
 
This was just a fantastic piece of writing. It’d been so long since I’d seen the pilot episode of the series, I never made the connection until you brought it to my attention. This is precisely the type of thing I imagined going on at Cardassia and throughout occupied Cardassian territory.

Exactly how would Starfleet’s rules, regulations, and morality fare during a hotly contested occupation? Not as well as the Federation might hope, I think…

Anyway, terrific stuff, and very viscerally rendered. :bolian:
 
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In the face of fear the beliefs of men are often forced aside.

Have you seen the latest reports coming out of Gitmo? Documented doctors' examinations of physical abuse, whiplash effects of US prisoner treatment changing ordinary prison occupants into militants, etc. The Federation may have en lightened morality but how much can it stand up to in the face of terror bombings and fanatic militant activity?
 
Oh, in this case, you're preaching to the choir. The topic of my PhD dissertation was British police and paramilitaries in the Irish War of Independence (1920-21).

I spent about a third of it describing and explaining how police discipline cracked and crumbled under the strain of counter-insurgency, leading to 'reprisals'--police riots, torture of prisoners, and death-squad killings.

And of course, what became Northern Ireland had its own equivalent of my fictional Phalanx--the notorious Ulster Special Constabulary.

So I've been watching the War on Terror, and the conflict in Iraq, and thinking to myself that Mark Twain was right: history never repeats itself--but sometimes it rhymes.

(In fact, the initial inspiration for my most recent Supermax story--"Hard Site"--came from reading Philip Zimbardo's book The Lucifer Effect, about the Stanford Prison Experiment, and his work with the defendants at the Abu Ghraib trials.)

I'm not sure I believe any more in Gene Roddenberry's utopian vision--hence, the comparative "darkness" of my fanfic. But I still hold out some hope that we can become better than we are, and that, some day, we can fight monsters without ever becoming monsters ourselves.
 
I'm not sure I believe any more in Gene Roddenberry's utopian vision--hence, the comparative "darkness" of my fanfic. But I still hold out some hope that we can become better than we are, and that, some day, we can fight monsters without ever becoming monsters ourselves.
Or, in the case of some of my stories, we step back and let the Klingons be monsters for us. :devil:
 
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