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My stories won't give you a "Warlord" Kes but a brave, determined Kes-just like she was most of the time in the series when facing a difficult situation.
I'll check them out...
For Curiousity's Sake: Any Kes-centric books?
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I'll check them out...
Good luck.
The first paragraph of one of them reads (I swear I didn't edit this at all):
"Kathryn Janeway enjoyed the trip. She was standing on the bridge at the Federation Starship USS Budapest on the way to Bajor where an important conference was to be hold. The conference would deal with such important things as the rebuilding of Bajor after the Dominion War, how Starfleet defence forces would be stationed in the sector and how the co-operation with the Bajorans should work out. Even if the Dominion War has ended some years ago and the wormhole to the Gamma Quadrant was closed, there were still a lot of work to be done and there were always the problem with the Cardassians. Even if they were rather peaceful these days, having learned a lesson during the Dominion War, there were always the risk that revisionists of some sort who were dreaming about glorious days of the past could seize power again. The Bajorans didn’t trust the Cardassians. And they have all the reasons for not doing so, Janeway thought."
The first paragraph of one of them reads (I swear I didn't edit this at all):
"Kathryn Janeway enjoyed the trip. She was standing on the bridge at the Federation Starship USS Budapest on the way to Bajor where an important conference was to be hold. The conference would deal with such important things as the rebuilding of Bajor after the Dominion War, how Starfleet defence forces would be stationed in the sector and how the co-operation with the Bajorans should work out. Even if the Dominion War has ended some years ago and the wormhole to the Gamma Quadrant was closed, there were still a lot of work to be done and there were always the problem with the Cardassians. Even if they were rather peaceful these days, having learned a lesson during the Dominion War, there were always the risk that revisionists of some sort who were dreaming about glorious days of the past could seize power again. The Bajorans didn’t trust the Cardassians. And they have all the reasons for not doing so, Janeway thought."
Poor grammer. That kills a story for me.
It's grammar, not grammer, but the point is accurate. There are problems with subject-verb agreement and tense changes, and some sentences are phrased awkwardly. "Even if" should be "Even though."
Other issues: the wormhole was reopened, and it was made pretty clear in the DS9 series finale that Cardassia was in no position to be a threat to anyone.
Also, as an opening paragraph of a story, it's pretty awkward. Too much infodump, and the opening sentence has no connection to anything else in the paragraph and contradicts it tonally. And "revisionists" doesn't mean what it's apparently being used to mean here. Reactionaries? Revanchists?
On the plus side, every word is at least spelled correctly, assuming the author is British.
On the plus side, every word is at least spelled correctly, assuming the author is British.
Yes, that would explain some of it. Your posts don't have some of the usual English-as-a-second-language tells that some people's do. But then, we don't know anything about you at all, other than that you like Kes and classic rock. We didn't even know that you're a guy until fairly recently. If we all knew more about you as a person, and if you posted in TrekLit about other things than Kes and Janeway, the tone of some conversations might improve.
I can agree on that. As for TrekLit comments, I have written some posts about "favorite books" and so but I must admit that I haven't read that many of the recent books so it's a bit difficult to comment on them.
OK, I could always come up with some nice reviews for the season 1-3 Voyager books, which were simply great and some TNG books as well.
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