August writing challenge- Mirrored Division

[KobayashiMaru13]

That's a good change - a much better ending. I like Surroth's response of "Well father was always rather brief" - a very Vulcan attempt to put a calming surface on what must be utter turmoil for both of them.

Nicely done

Thank you!

 

[PSGarak]

I liked the edit. It tied the story up very nicely, and it fit with the flow of the rest of the dialogue that came before it.

 

[Mistral]

I agree with PSGARAK.