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The Chains of Error - Gibraltar/Full Speed Ahead Crossover

(from Ad Astra...) I really would like to see the Maquis get their new state. I'm sure it won't be easy (others will make sure of that), but I think it's a long time coming. I really like not only the action here, but the politics as well. ...and Sandhurst finally made it to the bridge! ;)
 
The Chains of Error - Chapter Nine (pt 1)

I'm having some difficutly getting this story to past over at Ad Astra... so until then, I'll be pasting Chapter Nine of The Chains of Error right here:


Chapter Nine

The two shuttlecraft jinked and feinted, exchanging weapons fire in a dizzying display of aerial acrobatics. Lightner was proving a tenacious pursuer, which the Maquis pilot attempting to evade him found as irritating as she did exhilarating.

Lar’ragos was dividing his time between rendering first aid to his stricken teammates at the back of the shuttle, and occasionally staggering forward into the cockpit to offer advice to the young helmsman. The El Aurian’s attempt at splitting his attention between the tasks meant that he was accomplishing neither with any efficiency.

Clouds flashed past the two shuttles as they dropped through the atmosphere. Lances and pulses of energy were traded as the Maquis vessel sought escape.

Lar’ragos popped his head into the cockpit just long enough to mutter a distracted, “That class of Klingon shuttle has ablative armor, so even if you penetrate its shields you’re going to need to hit it with a sustained phaser beam for several seconds to do any real damage.” He turned to head back to the mass of inert bodies at the rear of the shuttle but found himself anchored by Lightner’s hand.

“I need you up here manning the weapons, Commander.” It wasn’t a request.

Lar’ragos cast a glance back at where Ariel and two others of what remained of his team were rendering medical aid to those still clinging to life. “I need--“

“Respectfully, sir, you need to take over weapons. It’s all I can do to stay with this shuttle right now, and the pilot I’m chasing is too good for me to trust auto-targeting to the computer.” Lightner withdrew his hand and fixed his full attention on keeping with the wildly corkscrewing Maquis ship they were pursuing. “If we’re going to survive this engagement, I need you focused, Commander.”

Lar’ragos cast another yearning glance into the back of the shuttle, then seemed to almost physically tear himself from his mauled special forces team and assumed the copilot’s seat. Lightner could not remember ever before having seen Pava so distracted, and certainly never in a combat situation which was most decidedly the man’s preferred element.

The Maquis shuttle rolled onto its back and dove for the surface, trying to dupe Lightner into overshooting them. He remained firmly fixed on their tail, however, duplicating the maneuver as he peppered the larger craft with a flurry of phaser blasts.

The two vessels screamed into the lower atmosphere, their shields trailing glowing flares of dissipated heat.

Lar’ragos acted on a sudden, inexplicable impulse and overcharged the shuttle’s phaser array, enabling the weapon to fire a beam sixty percent more powerful than its typical maximum yield. He knew the chance of burning out the emitter was high, but Lar'ragos was growing weary of this chase. The discharge flared brightly as the beam punctured the Klingon shuttle’s faltering rear shields and carved into the stabilizer strut housing the craft’s port maneuvering thruster.

The resulting explosion rocked the craft violently and sent it into an uncontrolled, tumbling plunge toward the surface. A trilling alarm announced the demise of the Starfleet shuttle’s phaser array as Lightner set a steep corkscrewing descent path to follow the plummeting Maquis ship.

The Klingon heavy shuttle vanished into the low cloud cover, disappearing from Lar’ragos’ sensors soon after. A dissatisfied grunt from Lar’ragos prompted Lightner to inquire, “Problem, sir?”

“The surface environment is rife with heavy metals and background radiation,” the commando elaborated. “We’re going to have a hell of a time locating them down there.”

Lightner scowled perplexedly as he focused on his controls. “You think there’s anyone left to locate? That looked like a pretty terminal crash to me, Commander.”

“That may just be what they want us to think. That might have been a more controlled descent than it appeared. We have to make certain they’re dead, even if it means we sift through wreckage for scraps of DNA.”

The expression on Lightner’s face spoke volumes about his enthusiasm for that possible course of action. “Taking us down…”


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USS Gibraltar

“Port phasers,” T’Ser ordered calmly, “point seven-five burst to that Peregrine’s starboard wing strut.”

Verik carried out the instruction flawlessly, Gibraltar’s phasers raking across the corsair’s wing and engine mount, blasting both into flotsam as the now powerless ship spun away on inertia alone.

Sandhurst sat quietly at the engineering station, allowing his first officer to finish the battle. He observed as T’Ser carried out her duty with precision, while demonstrating admirable restraint, especially given the recent crimes of this particular Maquis cell against the Border Service.

“That’s all of them, Commander,” Juneau announced from Ops. The space surrounding them was now littered with crippled, drifting Maquis ships of various classes.

“Open a channel to the Maquis, Mister Juneau,” T’Ser said as she stood from the command chair.

“Channel open, sir.”

“This is Commander T—“

Sandhurst coughed loudly into his fist.

“Captain T’Ser,” she corrected herself, “of the Federation starship Gibraltar, and formerly of the Border Service. Your vessels have been disabled, and without our assistance you will die in the plasmoberic currents of the Badlands. I stand ready to accept your surrender.”

The ship was buffeted by multiple explosions as three of the Maquis ships elected to self-destruct rather than face capture by Starfleet.

“Multiple incoming hails from the remaining ships, sir,” Juneau said with a pronounced grin. “They are signaling their surrender.”

“As well they should,” T’Ser murmured with only the slightest hint of satisfaction.

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The Chains of Error - Chapter Nine (pt 2)

The three injured members of SMT-Twenty One who’d survived the explosion of the Bird-of-Prey’s bridge long enough to be medically stabilized were now under the care of the team’s medic. Lieutenant(j.g.) Blasille, though moderately injured herself, would remain behind with the shuttle to continue administering aid to the wounded as Lar’ragos, Lightner, and Ariel proceeded to the crash site on foot to ascertain the fate of the Maquis.

The heavy elements at the asteroid’s core, coupled with the centrifugal force of the body’s faster-than-normal rotation combined to give the planetoid near Earth-like gravity. Portable rebreather masks and injections of Tri-Ox compound would render the party able to breath for the duration of their search without the burden of cumbersome EVA suits.

It was slow going due to the foggy haze that shrouded the uneven, rocky terrain. Lar’ragos assumed the point position as the group picked their way carefully through a broken landscape that concealed a limitless number of hiding spots and potential ambush points.

“I hate to sound like a quitter,” Ariel remarked, her voice sounding muffled through the comms circuit in her rebreather mask. “But we’ve been at this for two hours, and we’ve only covered a few hundred meters of ground. I think we should hop back into orbit, contact Gallant or Gibraltar, and get some backup down here.”

“I’ll second that,” Lightner added uneasily as he eyed the misty outcroppings of rock that surrounded them.

Lar’ragos dropped to a crouch, allowing the emitter of his phaser rifle to dip momentarily as he took a much needed respite. He huffed dismissively at her comment, then after a moment he gave a fractional nod, as if making a difficult admission. “Yeah. I think you’re onto something there.” He stood, rolling his head back and forth to work out a kind in his neck. “I’d hoped this would be a quick recon to find a big smoking crater and then we could get the hell out of here. No such luck.”

A series of disruptor blasts stitched a glowing pattern of smoldering holes in the rock face as Lar’ragos threw himself face first onto the ground. He shouted something unintelligible over the team’s com-net as his rebreather mask tried to bury itself in the unyielding surface of the asteroid.

Ariel performed a shoulder-roll to her right, her phaser rifle firing enthusiastically as she sought cover behind a waist-high rock formation.

Startled by the sudden assault, Lightner swept his hand phaser back and forth, bathing a random arc in a near lethal wide-beam discharge that elicited screams and shouts from their as yet unseen enemies. He stumbled backwards, seeking cover as he lobbed a stun grenade into the concealing mists before tripping over uneven ground and toppling over onto his back with his arms flailing comically.

The surrounding miasma flashed a bright green with the grenade’s detonation, and then silence reigned.

Lar’ragos clambered gingerly to a crouching position as he scanned his surroundings through his rifle’s thermal sight aperture. “Everyone okay?” he whispered across their comms channel.

“Fine,” Ariel offered succinctly. “I spotted three targets to the north/north-east at about my eight o’clock position. Not sure I hit any of them, though.”

“I’m good,” Lightner replied, his voice shaky thanks to his surging adrenaline. “I think I hit someone, but I can’t say how badly.”

Lar’ragos withdrew a photon grenade from his tactical vest and thumbed the yield intensity to maximum. “Okay, after my grenade detonates, wait five seconds and then move in on that position.” He pressed the actuator and then stood to throw the device in the direction Ariel had seen the enemy.

A thunderous explosion and accompanying white flash heralded a fount of rocky debris that clattered down around the Starfleet members. The three were up and charging forward before the last of the stones had finished raining to the ground.

Lar’ragos vaulted over a thigh-high boulder to find a badly burned Klingon laying on the ground groping frantically for his disruptor pistol. The El Aurian shot the warrior in the face as he ran past, only to be clotheslined by a bat’leth that seemingly materialized from the mist to catch him in the chest with staggering force. Despite his armor, the impact drove the air from his lungs as his legs flew out from beneath him, and the jolting collision with the ground caused his head to spin as he gasped frantically for air.

The figure of Galmesh appeared over him, his bat’leth raised high over his head, poised for the killing blow Through his greying vision, Lar’ragos could see the gleam of exaltation in the Maquis commander’s eyes. For the first time in recent memory, Pava was unable to muster the strength to strike preemptively, or to roll out of the way of the forthcoming attack.

He sought some last, clever insult or witticism on the brink of death, but nothing came to him.

Ariel barreled into Galmesh as he began the downward arc of his blade, collapsing with him in a confused mass of thrashing limbs. The two crashed to the ground, grappling furiously as Lar’ragos clawed desperately at the surrounding rocks, trying to pull himself to his feet. He saw phaser fire flashing somewhere to his right, orange beams lancing through the fog that he attributed to Lightner.

Galmesh used his superior strength to roll atop Ariel. He clutched the bat’leth tightly and drove it blade first towards the Orion’s neck. Ariel parried the strike with the battered rifle she still clung to, gasping in exertion as her trembling arms sought to keep the razor-keen sword from decapitating her.

She bucked upwards with her hips, throwing the larger Klingon off balance and sending him toppling forward as he struggled to maintain a grip on the bat’leth.

Lar’ragos finally managed to stand atop wobbling knees and started towards the two intertwined figures. An energy blast slammed into him from behind, hammering between his shoulder blades to fracture his armor’s ablative ceramics. Lar’ragos collapsed yet again, smoke wafting from the scorched impact point on his back.

He rolled over just in time to witness the approach of a younger, human Maquis armed with an Angosian pulser. The youth was inexperienced, and sought the intimacy of a close-quarters kill with her weapon. Lar’ragos rewarded her enthusiasm by pulling his combat knife from its scabbard and driving it into the top of her boot in a lightening-quick move. His counterattack was so sudden and unexpected that she fumbled the pulse pistol and bent at the waist to claw at the stabbing implement that he’d driven completely through her foot.

Lar’ragos grasped a fist-sized rock from beside him with one hand as he pulled the woman to the ground by her long hair with the other. He bludgeoned her to death while roaring with frustration at his inability to reach Ariel.

Ariel meanwhile had scrambled out from under Galmesh to drive a knee into his side as the burly Klingon tried to regain his feet. In response he threw an elbow that caught her in the side of the head and caused her to stumble backwards. That gave Galmesh just enough breathing room to collect his sword and scrabble up into a crouch.

With a feral grin Ariel raised her phaser rifle and pulled the trigger, only to have the abused weapon malfunction. Galmesh brought his blade cleaving in from the side, and Ariel just managed to parry the blow with the inoperative rifle, but the force of the strike tore the weapon from her hands. She stepped back as Galmesh advanced, moving to draw her phaser sidearm from its holster at her waist.

As she brought the phaser up, however, Galmesh used the momentum of his last lunge to spin completely around and drive another strike at Ariel. She pressed the firing toggle and expected to see the beam incinerate the Klingon where he stood… only nothing happened. Ariel looked down with disbelief at the sight of her severed arm lying at her feet, the phaser still clutched in her hand. She glanced up at Galmesh just in time to see the powerful blow that struck her at the base of her neck and drove all the way down through her torso to lodge firmly in her midsection.

Ariel collapsed soundlessly and Galmesh wrestled with his blade, kicking at his deceased opponent as he tried to pry the bat’leth free from her body.

A bloodied rock caromed off his skull, sending the Maquis reeling as Lar’ragos plowed into him bodily. Galmesh lost his footing and fell back, anticipating his enemy’s continued advance. None was forthcoming, however, and the Klingon climbed back to his feet to find Lar’ragos circling him slowly, the man’s hands devoid of weapons.

Lar’ragos stripped off his armor a piece at a time, walking a slow circuit around Galmesh as he did so. Tears coursed down his cheeks as he clawed at the fasteners, straps, and buckles that held the protective garment in place. “Do you have any idea how many times I’ve tried to die, Galmesh? How many occasions I’ve thrown myself into the fray, hoping, even praying that I’d be killed? It just won’t happen. Centuries pass, wars happen, worlds collide… and they still can’t kill me!”

“The woman who just died saving me… that should have been me. Me! Should have been… but it never is.” He stopped to inspect the phaser grasped in Ariel’s detached hand on the ground. Lar’ragos sneered with contempt as he stooped to pull his combat knife free from the boot of the female Maquis. “Do you think you can get the job done, Klingon? Are you up to the challenge, or are you simply a petaQ’ that hides in the shadows of greater men like Kincaid, feeding off the scraps from his table?”

Galmesh roared in challenge, pulling his disruptor from its holster and flinging it away. He drew his d’k tagh, dropped into a crouch, and began to match Lar’ragos’ movements. “Killing you would be a deed worthy of song, Commander. I know of one Great House in particular that would thank me for washing clean the blight you’ve left upon their honor!”

Lar’ragos paused to roll his eyes theatrically. “Sully the reputation of one Klingon princess and will they ever forgive a guy?” He then began to circle back the way he’d come, his eyes darting to various points on Galmesh’s body as he sized up his opponent. “Still… I have to admit… she was so worth it.”

The barb had the intended effect, spurring Galmesh to action as the warrior charged forward, his blade poised for a lethal strike. Lar’ragos ducked under Galmesh’s stabbing thrust, rolled, and came up with Ariel’s phaser in his hand. He pivoted sharply as he re-tuned the phaser, before sending a sustained burst of stun energy into the center of the Klingon’s back. Galmesh staggered, fumbled his knife, and wobbled around almost comically to face Lar’ragos with an expression equal parts dismay and outrage.

“You Klingons and your fucking honor,” Lar’ragos spat as he sent Galmesh crashing to the ground with another stun blast from his phaser. “Game, set, match,” he said with a disconsolate sigh as he collapsed heavily against a nearby rock.

He looked past Galmesh’s slumbering form to where Ariel’s remains lay splayed open upon the unforgiving soil of the lifeless moon. “I’m sorry. He couldn’t do it, either.” Lar’ragos rubbed his face with one hand, the mental and physical exhaustion from the battle settling upon him suddenly. “I’ll join you someday… but not today.” He wiped away the last of his tears with the sleeve of his body-suit, whispering quietly, “Say hello to my parents from me.”

After a time, Lightner appeared from out of the swirling mists looking worn and disheveled, but otherwise uninjured. The status telltales on his phaser were winking an ominous red, indicating that he’d nearly exhausted the weapon’s power pack. He stumbled wearily over to where Lar’ragos knelt beside Ariel’s body.

“I’m so sorry, Commander,” Lightner murmured.

“That makes two of us,” Lar’ragos replied heavily.

*****

Three hours later…

A combined security detail from Gibraltar and Gallant had arrived to collect the dead and captured Maquis, as well as hunt for any stragglers from the shuttle crash that might still be hiding among the asteroid’s craggy escarpments. The scene of Ariel and Galmesh’s final struggle fairly buzzed with activity now, the movement of others swirling around Lar’ragos, who sat against a rock in the same position he’d assumed moments after Commander Elannis’ death.

A Vulcan civilian robed in traditional vestments knelt beside Galmesh,who had been medically sedated some hours earlier and not allowed to wake from the unconscious state Lar’ragos had left him in. The Vulcan had been here for the better part of an hour, hunkered down over the Klingon, his long fingers pressed to Galmesh’s face. He finally stood and made his way over to where Captain Sandhurst leaned casually against a rock, clad in a thick field jacket with a rebreather mask affixed to his face.

“I regret to report that I have been unable to breach Colonel Galmesh’s mental defenses, Captain,” the man intoned soberly. “He is atypically disciplined,” the Vulcan continued, “for a Klingon.”

Sandhurst nodded as if expecting such an outcome. “I understand. We appreciate your efforts, nonetheless.”

The man inclined his head, then touched a Vulcan runic symbol on the front of his robe before vanishing in a decidedly non-Starfleet transporter effect.

Lar’ragos had followed the conversation purely out of habit, the Listener’s compulsion was ingrained on a genetic level. He closed his eyes for a long moment, only to find Sandhurst standing in front of him when he opened them again. The captain was looking down at him with an appraising expression.

He suddenly turned and sat down next to Lar’ragos. “I’m sorry about Elannis,” he said, his voice slightly distorted by the mask’s speaker.

Lar’ragos cocked his head thoughtfully. “She had a long and eventful career in the service,” he noted. “She survived all manner of dangers, battles, and adventures over the past thirty years, and ultimately all it took to kill her was signing on with us.” Pava smirked at his own dark humor.

“I seem to remember someone telling me once that soldiers die, even the very good ones,” Sandhurst replied gently.

Lar’ragos snorted derisively. “I know that guy. You shouldn’t listen to him. He doesn’t know his ass from a hole in the ground.”

“I disagree,” Sandhurst countered. “He may be obstinate, disobedient, occasionally petulant, and ridiculously dangerous, but he knows his way around soldiering.”

A heavy sigh escaped Lar’ragos. “Go ahead and ask whatever it is you have to ask me.”

Thus prompted, Sandhurst forged ahead. “I have a dilemma, Pava. I have the Maquis and the Cardassians sitting at a conference table in orbit, and they’re having a civilized conversation about the future of the Maquis movement. They’re not yelling, they’re not making threats, they’re actually negotiating.”

“And?”

“And the sticking point in this whole delicate dance is the disposition of Galmesh and his entire cell. The Federation and the Cardassians won’t accept a proposed Maquis state unless all of Galmesh’s people have been captured or killed. From what we can tell,
those we’ve neutralized so far here in the Badlands account for approximately half of his cell’s overall numbers.” Sandhurst fixed his gaze on Lar’ragos, and for an instant the older man actually felt a flutter of intimidation at the look in his former captain’s eyes.

“What do you need from me?” Lar’ragos asked heavily.

“I need Galmesh to talk, willingly.”

“You want me to torture him for information?” Lar’ragos sneered at Sandhurst’s unbridled gall. “Well, Donald, you were dead on about not being able to trust yourself around me. All I am to you is a weapon, aren’t I? No different than a knife or a phaser array.”

“I said willingly, Pava. You’re not listening.” Sandhurst’s tone was a calm, patient counterpoint to Lar’ragos’ emotional tirade.

“How the hell am I supposed to convince him to talk?”

Sandhurst shrugged. “You’ve read Galmesh’s psyche profile, you tell me.”

Lar’ragos rolled his eyes. “I know he fancies himself the honorable warrior, despite all the horrors he’s committed.”

“And what might theoretically get an ‘honorable warrior’ to spill his guts?”

The two men sat in silence for a long moment before Lar’ragos spoke. “A duel.”

Sandhurst smiled behind his mask as if Lar’ragos had just reached a conclusion he’d been standing alongside for some time now. He patted the El Aurian on the arm as he clambered to his feet. “If you win, he tells us everything we want to know. If he wins, he walks.”

“You’d just let him go?” Lar’ragos asked incredulously.

“Yes,” Sandhurst confirmed. “It’s the only way to see this through.” He paused on the cusp of turning away. “Oh, and Pava, the only proviso is that he has to live.”

Lar’ragos raised a skeptical eyebrow. “And what if he wins, Captain? You know that he’ll kill me if he can.”

“I do,” Sandhurst agreed succinctly.

“And you don’t have a problem with that, sir?”

“No,” was Sandhurst’s icy response. “Do you?” He gave Lar’ragos an inscrutable look before turning away to confer with Lieutenant Verik.


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Taiee reluctantly handed Lar’ragos a hypospray loaded with a stimulant that would bring Galmesh to near-instant consciousness. She frowned, muttering, “This is not the captain’s best idea ever.”

Lar’ragos responded with a wistful smirk. “If nothing else, it demonstrates a certain level of trust he has in me.”

The nurse shook her head. “For all the wrong reasons, and you know it.”

He placed a hand on her shoulder. “You’re a good friend, Issara. I don’t think I’ve ever thanked you for that.”

Taiee gave him a brief hug that elicited a raised eyebrow from the nearby Lieutenant(j.g.) Verik. Then she withdrew to join the security detachment that was preparing to beam back to the ship, leaving Lar’ragos and Galmesh alone on the surface.

Two of Verik’s security specialists recovered Galmesh’s discarded disruptor pistol and moved to confiscate his bat’leth, d'k tagh, and a host of other knives and daggers he had secreted on his person.

“No,” Lar’ragos announced. The men paused to glance up at the weary looking and unarmed El Aurian. Pava offered a wicked grin that everyone present found equally troubling. “Leave him his knives.”
 
Wow, what an intense chapter. Cannot believe you killed off our favorite, outrageous Orion gal. And in such a seemingly senseless 'Tasha-Yar-esque' kinda way, too. Sure, everybody dies, but man, didn't see it coming. RIP.

Pava is surprisingly sanguine about all this considering it's all his fault. Well, maybe not entirely but I knew nothing good could come out of a search party of three looking for a crashed shuttle in a hellish place like that. Besides he seemed surprisingly unfocused and off balance here and I'm not sure why. Clearly his mental stats is not particularly stable either. I found it odd for example how he went from dead serious when facing Galmesh ("try to kill me, please") to outright childish not a moment later.

And now this guy is going to duel with the big, scary Klingon? Ordinarily my money would be riding on Pava to pull off the repeat victory but now I'm not so sure anymore.

Depressing chapter but definitely worth the wait.
 
Wow, what an intense chapter. Cannot believe you killed off our favorite, outrageous Orion gal. And in such a seemingly senseless 'Tasha-Yar-esque' kinda way, too. Sure, everybody dies, but man, didn't see it coming. RIP.

Pava is surprisingly sanguine about all this considering it's all his fault. Well, maybe not entirely but I knew nothing good could come out of a search party of three looking for a crashed shuttle in a hellish place like that. Besides he seemed surprisingly unfocused and off balance here and I'm not sure why. Clearly his mental stats is not particularly stable either. I found it odd for example how he went from dead serious when facing Galmesh ("try to kill me, please") to outright childish not a moment later.

And now this guy is going to duel with the big, scary Klingon? Ordinarily my money would be riding on Pava to pull off the repeat victory but now I'm not so sure anymore.

Depressing chapter but definitely worth the wait.
Well, let's see... in the past week, Pava's been thrust back aboard Gibraltar (the ship he was exiled from), he just lost his commando team in an ambush on Galmesh's ship, and now the only woman he's felt an emotional attachment to in the past two decades gets cut in half while he watches.

Yeah, I'd say Lar'ragos is just a hair shy of being fully off kilter. ;)

Thanks as always for the thoughtful commentary! :)
 
Awesome chapter! Pava La'aragos was at his self-tormenting finest!

Gotta pick a nit, though:

The heavy elements at the asteroid’s core, coupled with the centrifugal force of the body’s faster-than-normal rotation combined to give the planetoid near Earth-like gravity.

Centrifugal Force pushes objects away from the center of rotation. That plus rapid rotation would actually lessen the effects of gravity on the asteroid's surface. You should have just left it at the heavy elements in the core.
 
Awesome chapter! Pava La'aragos was at his self-tormenting finest!

Gotta pick a nit, though:

The heavy elements at the asteroid’s core, coupled with the centrifugal force of the body’s faster-than-normal rotation combined to give the planetoid near Earth-like gravity.

Centrifugal Force pushes objects away from the center of rotation. That plus rapid rotation would actually lessen the effects of gravity on the asteroid's surface. You should have just left it at the heavy elements in the core.
Oops, I stand corrected! Much obliged for the catch. I'll be sure to fix that in the permanent Ad Astra version.
 
I'll say this for you Gibraltar, you have a fantastic body of work that is a credit to your ability to write quality, interesting and exciting fanfiction that keeps readers coming back for more.

It's not too far a jump from the work you're producing to the Star Trek stuff that can be found on the shelves of bookshops, and a lot of it is better than some of the Star Trek books I've read in years gone by.
 
I'll say this for you Gibraltar, you have a fantastic body of work that is a credit to your ability to write quality, interesting and exciting fanfiction that keeps readers coming back for more.

It's not too far a jump from the work you're producing to the Star Trek stuff that can be found on the shelves of bookshops, and a lot of it is better than some of the Star Trek books I've read in years gone by.
Much obliged for the kind words, sir. I hope you're enjoying the series. :)
 
Michael D. Garcia and I have been working on a crossover adventure.

The prologue and first chapter of The Chains of Error are now up at Ad Astra. Due to mature themes in the story, it's being rated equivalent to NC-17.

Here is the link: http://adastra.shadowknightonline.com/viewstory.php?sid=232

Please feel free to post feedback either here, or at Ad Astra... or both. :)

Gibraltar, I'm afraid to tell you that your link didn't work. Sorry to be the bearer of bad news. :)
 
I've now caught up with this whole story. I think it's fantastic. You've built everything up to a climax really well and the characters are all very distinctive and very interesting.
 
I've now caught up with this whole story. I think it's fantastic. You've built everything up to a climax really well and the characters are all very distinctive and very interesting.
Thanks for the compliment. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. :)
 
As much as I have (in the past) feared for Sandhurst's sanity, I'm beginning to worry about Pava. I can easily see him going off the deep end, indulging self-destructive tenden . . .

What's that? Oh, right. I forgot - he's done that before. Several times. Never mind. ;)

Seriously, a very intense couple of chapters with your usual well-written battle sequences. I do feel for Pava, though - he must be weary of the centuries of fighting over forgotten causes and out-living friends and enemies alike.

T'Ser seems to be acting more reserved than when she served on Bluefin. Perhaps it's a combination of maturity and a greater sense of responsibility in her new role. Or she is still getting to know her new ship-mates. That's not a criticism by the way, just an observation.

Sandhurst continues to impress me. The reluctant Captain now seems destined to a greater role and responsibility - admiral's pips, perhaps? :eek: Strange days.
 
Sandhurst is becoming even stronger and sometimes almost frighteningly strong--but I still like him. I think that in these post-Dominion War days, he represents Starfleet's growing-up into realizing once again that they are...they must be...a military, not UN peacekeepers as people like Picard would like it.

I remain convinced that your Sandhurst and my Spirodopoulos, even if not perhaps agreeing on everything politically, could come to an understanding with each other and perhaps develop a strong respect, even if not friendship. I am at least sure we would not have a nasty dynamic like the one between Sandhurst and Glover. ;)
 
As much as I have (in the past) feared for Sandhurst's sanity, I'm beginning to worry about Pava. I can easily see him going off the deep end, indulging self-destructive tenden . . .

What's that? Oh, right. I forgot - he's done that before. Several times. Never mind. ;)

Seriously, a very intense couple of chapters with your usual well-written battle sequences. I do feel for Pava, though - he must be weary of the centuries of fighting over forgotten causes and out-living friends and enemies alike.

T'Ser seems to be acting more reserved than when she served on Bluefin. Perhaps it's a combination of maturity and a greater sense of responsibility in her new role. Or she is still getting to know her new ship-mates. That's not a criticism by the way, just an observation.

Sandhurst continues to impress me. The reluctant Captain now seems destined to a greater role and responsibility - admiral's pips, perhaps? :eek: Strange days.
Heh, I think admiral's pips would be a long way off, if ever.

T'Ser's demeanor is part the new responsibility of command, coupled with being the new person in the crew. She's feeling her way around the position, and taking more than a few lessons from Captain Akinola's example.

Thanks for the comments! :)

Sandhurst is becoming even stronger and sometimes almost frighteningly strong--but I still like him. I think that in these post-Dominion War days, he represents Starfleet's growing-up into realizing once again that they are...they must be...a military, not UN peacekeepers as people like Picard would like it.

I remain convinced that your Sandhurst and my Spirodopoulos, even if not perhaps agreeing on everything politically, could come to an understanding with each other and perhaps develop a strong respect, even if not friendship. I am at least sure we would not have a nasty dynamic like the one between Sandhurst and Glover. ;)
Thank you for the feedback!

I also think Donald and Spiros would get along famously, and respect each other's differences.
 
The Chains of Error - Chapter 10 (Part 1)

Barely sixty seconds after Lar’ragos injected Galmesh with the stimulant ampoule, the Klingon began to stir. He opened his eyes, blinked rapidly as he fought to get his bearings, and then sat up suddenly to find the El Aurian sitting against a nearby boulder with his arms folded across his chest.

“You shot me,” Galmesh snarled. “During an honor duel, you shot me!”

“Honor doesn’t concern me,” Lar’ragos said, making a show of examining his fingernails. “And as your understanding of the concept leaves a great deal to be desired, I settled for expediency over tradition.”

“You Ha'DI bah,” Galmesh raged, “I’ll kill you!”

Lar’ragos made a face, as one might do to a particularly exasperating child. “You tried that already. It didn’t work out too well for you.”

Galmesh began to scramble to his feet.

Lar’ragos abandoned his languid pose and moved to intercede, sweeping the backs of the Klingon’s knees with his leg as Galmesh struggled to rise. The maneuver sent the Maquis crashing heavily to the unyielding rock beneath him once again.

“I did not tell you stand,” Lar’ragos observed coldly.

As Lar’ragos stepped back, Galmesh reached to his uniform belt and then flung something towards the Starfleet officer with practiced speed.

Pava jerked his head to the side and allowed the throwing knife to whistle harmlessly past. “You’re not paying attention, Colonel,” he persisted.

Galmesh sprang to his feet and rushed him. Lar’ragos gracefully side-stepped the attack and cuffed the Klingon upside the head as he stumbled clumsily past. “I can do this all day,” he chuckled darkly. “Hell, I could do this until you died of old age, Galmesh.”

The Maquis cell leader kept his feet, barely, and wheeled around towards Lar’ragos as he drew his d’k tagh.

In response, the lighthearted expression on Lar’ragos’ face vanished, replaced by something altogether harder and more severe. “I thought I told you to stay down.”

Galmesh lunged forward with the knife, twisting and slashing out at the last second to transform what had appeared to be a thrust into a deadly slice towards Pava’s abdomen.

Lar’ragos jumped back as the blade came within millimeters of his stomach. Galmesh was still slightly groggy from the sedative, and he was growing angry and impatient with the mocking Starfleet officer. As a result, he overextended on his lunge, leaving himself off-balance and momentarily vulnerable to counter-attack.

His opponent capitalized on this by reaching out to slap Galmesh almost playfully across the face while bleating, “You brute!”

Galmesh roared and threw himself sideways into Lar’ragos, heedless of the consequences of such an inelegant maneuver. The commando yielded to Galmesh’s mass, grabbing hold of the Klingon’s knife arm as he did so and using Galmesh's momentum to his advantage. Galmesh found himself suddenly flipped off his feet to land with a bone-jarring impact against an outcropping of rock. He rolled away, gaining separation from Lar’ragos as he tried to assess his injuries and formulate some kind of defense.

It was only after he had struggled back into a standing position that he realized his d’k tagh was now in Lar’ragos’ hand.

“Say, look at that!” Lar’ragos exclaimed, holding the blade aloft. “You’re supposed to keep a grip on these things, right?” His smile was saccharine-sweet, and Galmesh could feel his blood beginning to boil.

The Starfleet officer grasped the knife gingerly by the blade and tossed it onto the ground at Galmesh’s feet. “I’ll give you a do-over, Colonel. It’s only sporting.”

Galmesh knelt to pick up the knife, taking a moment to regain his breath as he did so. “Why do you seek to humiliate me? Why will you not fight me honorably?”

“Oh, like you fought so gallantly against the crew of the Amberjack?” Lar’ragos shook his head fractionally. “You slaughtered those people like a stock-yard full of helpless cattle. You toyed with them and belittled their sacrifices. I intend for you to taste some of what that must have felt like.”

Galmesh took his eyes off Lar’ragos for the merest fraction of a second in order to grasp the d’k tagh. When he stood, he found the other man had vanished.

Lar’ragos executed a devastating side kick from behind his opponent that caught Galmesh in the back and sent the larger man sprawling face first onto the rocky ground. “Keep your head in the game, Colonel,” Pava taunted.

Galmesh coughed and re-affixed his rebreather mask to his face as he slowly regained his feet. Three of his transverse ribs were broken, and he could barely flex his left hand. The muscles in his right buttock and thigh were tightening, threatening to leave him lame within minutes if he did not find a way to finish this battle quickly.

“You know, my captain wanted me to offer you terms for an honor duel. If I won, you’d have had to reveal where the rest of your cell is hiding.”

Galmesh grunted in response, limping towards Lar’ragos as he brushed his fingertips against the raised blisters on his uniform’s belt buckle. “I’d never have agreed to those terms. Your captain must not understand Klingon ways.”

Nodding in reluctant agreement, Lar’ragos conceded, “That’s a true statement.” He opened his arms, inviting the warrior to attack as he stood his ground. “Nevertheless, you will tell me what I want to know before we’re done here.”

“Doubtful,” Galmesh rejoined as he ejected two spheres into his hand from his belt buckle that he then flung at Lar’ragos’ feet. They exploded impressively, sending out a dazzling flare of light and heat with a concussive wave that sent Lar’ragos sprawling onto his back.

Galmesh was on him in a flash, leaping onto the smaller man only to find Lar’ragos’ boot firmly in his stomach as the smaller man grabbed him by the upper arms. Galmesh was launched up and over the El Aurian’s head, where he bounced off a sizeable boulder before landing in an unmoving heap.

The Klingon renegade awoke moments later to find Lar’ragos strapping his rebreather mask back onto him as he squatted over the semi-conscious Klingon. The Starfleet officer’s uniform was burned, as was half his face and his left arm and hand. “Welcome back, Colonel. No Gre’thor for you just yet, I’m afraid.”

Certain his death was near, Galmesh gurgled, “I… I killed… your woman.”

Lar’ragos picked him up with surprising ease and flung Galmesh against a nearby rock face. The Maquis slumped dazedly at the bottom, watching the other man’s predatory approach, utterly helpless to defend against what was to come. “So you did,” Lar’ragos confirmed, “after we killed yours.”

Galmesh closed his eyes briefly, the image of Sataem’s beauty and ferocity imprinted upon his soul as if he’d been branded by an iron.

Above him, Lar’ragos smiled, the burns on his face weeping fluid like tears. The Listener shared the image haunting Galmesh’s memories. “Yes… there she is.” A dark smile took shape upon Pava’s lips. “How tragic. You never knew she bore your child, did you?”

“What?” Galmesh croaked.

“Yes, your Romulan lover was pregnant with your child. No accounting for taste, I suppose.” Lar’ragos kicked Galmesh savagely in the gut and the wheezing Klingon slumped over onto his side, gritting his teeth against the agony of the blow. “You were taking orders from the Romulan Tal Shiar and making war against your empire’s ally. And if that weren’t bad enough, you took your handler to your bed and then were feeble-minded enough to fall in love with her.” Lar’ragos chortled at that.

“Now, what would the House of Gresh’k do with such a revelation, eh, Colonel? Discommodation to be sure, I’d think, lest their enemies on the High Council discover your misdeeds and use them to their advantage.”

“No,” Galmesh gasped as he reached for another knife. This one, a small poison-coated dagger, slid from a hidden sheath under the breastplate of his armor. “You will not sully my name or that of my house!” He drove the knife towards his own throat, only to have that hand intercepted by Lar’ragos’ foot and ground into the rock to the tune of snapping bones.

“You die when I say, Klingon, and not a moment sooner,” Lar’ragos said without rancor.

His chest heaving, blood gurgled from Galmesh’s nose and mouth, flecking his beard. “Then kill me… and be done with it.”

“No,” Lar’ragos replied. “You will tell me where the rest of your cell can be found, and then you will confess to all your crimes against both the Federation and Cardassia. You will willingly stand trial for those crimes, and you will accept the sentence of a lifetime spent in confinement as penance.”

Galmesh stared up at him, the hatred in his eyes so potent that it was an almost physical presence between the two men. “I will die first.”

Lar’ragos released the pressure on Galmesh’s crushed hand ever so slightly. The poisoned blade quivered there in the weak light, a beacon of hope and escape denied him. “And I would be only too happy to allow you to take your own life, but it will be your family that suffers the consequences.”

“How…” Galmesh gasped, “how so?”

“I still have a few friends in the empire, Colonel. Some of them are in the So’taj. Once Imperial Intelligence learns of your treachery, your family’s house will be dissolved, they will forfeit their seat on the High Council, their lands and property will be stripped from them, and they’ll be banished from Klingon society.”

Galmesh groaned from pain both real and imagined as he considered Lar’ragos’ words.

“Your wife, your children, your brothers and sisters, all cast to the winds without so much as a Cardassian lek between them. I imagine that your family’s rivals on the High Council would be sure to take advantage of such circumstances. Perhaps your sons and daughters will enjoy mining for dilithium on Rura’Penthe.”

He squat down next to Galmesh, brushing a few strands of the Klingon’s hair out of his eyes almost tenderly. In a low, nearly seductive tone, Lar’ragos whispered, “And I solemnly vow that those of your children who survive your enemies’ reprisals will not survive mine.”

“You are… Starfleet,” Galmesh murmured, blood dribbling over his lower lip and down his chin. “You are bluffing.”

Lar’ragos sighed with genuine sadness. “Would that it were so.” He touched his burned and gnarled hand to the Klingon’s cheek softly. “Share this memory with me, Galmesh. See what I’m capable of. Drink from my cup of sin…”

In that instant Galmesh absorbed a scant particle of the El Aurian’s long life and tasted from the bitter fount at the center of Lar’ragos’ being.

Galmesh’s agonized howl pierced the surrounding mists and reverberated off the rocky outcroppings for a long time before dying away completely.

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Re: The Chains of Error - Chapter 10 (Part 1)

Pava Lar'ragos dismantling a Klingon barehanded? Priceless.


Nice One.
 
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I also think Donald and Spiros would get along famously, and respect each other's differences.

In some ways, after Lakesh, I suspect the idea of being with a "Cardassian-sympathizer," as Spirodopoulos could be called if someone were looking for the more unflattering term, would not be as offputting as it would've been before.
 
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