Title suggestions needed (Star Trek and TNG reboots)

[DigificWriter]

Hi, all. I've been in a fairly creative mood lately, and decided to try to come up with rebooted/re-imagined concept pitches for the various series in the Star Trek franchise, and was able to come up with story ideas for reboots of Enterprise, the original Star Trek, and Star Trek: The Next Generation. However, I was only happy with the title of my first reboot (the ENT one, which I decided to simply title "Star Trek"), and am therefore in need of title suggestions for my Star Trek and TNG reboots; the idea behind both is to have the titles reflect the idea that they are progressions of the story of my ENT reboot (set in the 23rd and 24th centuries, respectively), as well as the 'ship lineage' of each (since both they and the ENT reboot feature ships named Enterprise).

For reference, here are the 'concept pitches' for my TOS and TNG reboots, sans titles.

Untitled "Star Trek: The Original Series" Reboot
The Premise:
A spin-off of "Star Trek" (my rebooted version of Star Trek: Enterprise), this series is a reboot of Gene Roddenberry's original "Star Trek", and deals with the adventures of the FFS (Federation Starship) Enterprise NCC-1701 and her crew.

The Characters:

Captain Christopher Pike, Commanding Officer
Commander James Tiberius Kirk, Executive Officer
Commander Spock, Chief Science Officer
Lieutenant Commander Montgomery Scott, Chief Engineering Officer
Doctor (Lieutenant Commander) Leonard ‘Bones’ McCoy, Chief Medical Officer
Lieutenant Hikaru Sulu, Chief Armory Officer
Lieutenant Nyota Uhura, Chief Communications Officer
Ensign Pavel Chekov, Chief Navigation Officer​

The Technology:​

The FFS Enterprise NCC-1701 is a Constitution-class vessel that has been designated as the ‘flagship’ of the United Federation of Planets, and is equipped with the latest, state-of-the-art technology, including a food replication system, fully functioning transporters, and the latest upgrade of the warp engine that is capable of propelling the ship at speeds in excess of Warp Factor 9.

Untitled "Star Trek: The Next Generation" Reboot
The Premise:
A spin-off of "Star Trek", this series is a reboot of "Star Trek: The Next Generation", and deals with the adventures of the FSS Enterprise NCC-1701-C and her crew.

The Characters:
Captain Jean-Luc Picard, Commanding Officer
Commander William T. Riker, Executive Officer
Doctor (Commander) Beverly Crusher, Chief Medical Officer
Lieutenant Commander Data, Chief Science Officer
Lieutenant Commander Deanna Troi, Chief Counselor
Lieutenant Commander Geordi La Forge, Chief Engineering Officer
]Lieutenant Tasha Yar, Chief Tactical Officer
Lieutenant Worf, Chief Operations Officer
Ensign Ro Laren, Chief Flight Control Officer

The Technology:
The FSS Enterprise NCC-1701-C is a Galaxy-class vessel and is one of the first vessels built specifically to accommodate the families of its crewmembers. As such, the ship is equipped with a variety of ‘creature comforts’, including the latest in state-of-the-art holographic recreation technology and a full-service ‘lounge’ (Ten Forward), as well as the latest advances in defensive, offensive, and warp technology.

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Note: I posted this topic here because I wasn't quite sure where it fit.

 

[Trelane]

we need a pilot episode synopsis before we can offer a title. we need to know if events play out as they did before or will there be slight adjustments?

 

[Frank Force]

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[fish11111111111]

The last Battlefield continuation

Luke I beamed down to the planet,.. with Bale in pursuit,.. still obsessed with bringing lokai to his warped sense of justice,,, once on the planet they were still chasing each other,,,
looking around,,, they saw bodies corpse all over the place,./Buildings turned up side down,.;/Cars all burnt out buses burnt up,./Tracks weren't tracks anymore for the trains,./
The roofs on buildings were off,, it almost looked like a complete waste land,.. burnt grass and trees were everywhere,,, extremely included water polluted,. These were the basics of the dead planet,, that Lukai & bale,. Complete destruction,.. on their home planet,..
but in the shadow's,./Something was moving and it wasn't Lukai or Bale,, they came up from the underground,.. that was deep the in cheron,. The tunnels went on for miles,..
it was very dark perfectly circle,, and some parts of the tunnel there were lights that shone in the way,.. to a city deep within cheron,.//And some lights were down there as well,. Luke I was the first to arrive,.. needed a place to lay low,.//Bale was still on top of cheron,..

I think this is a pretty good start for a story don't you

 

[fish11111111111]

I apologize for this spell lokai & Bele name wrong,,, sorry about that,.//

now where were we;;;

well lukai was on top of cheron,,,, looking around for bele,, didn't know at that time where he went,.,. He said to himself,.,. He could be hiding anywhere.... there was plenty of places to hide,... knowing that it was only two people left on the planet,,, figuring everyone was dead,./Which of course they weren't all dead ,. Thinking it's James T. Kirk's fault in the first place,, with all the things he said on the enterprise,, well they were fighting,, he decided to himself that he would look under every thing that he can find,, anything that was broken,,,, anything at all like for instance car, building. buses. And everything,,, looking at the water said to himself I not want to drink.,,, he found some liquid and food,,, that would last him a couple of day's or more,., Meanwhile back into the tunnel's other cheron,.// Lokai found some people and a leader,.. they showed lokai around,,, and told him how they became underground of cheron,., They went further into the tunnel,,, Intel they came up on a marvelous marble... Of glory,, it was so smooth,, that it's enriched with the marble,,, it's almost like the leader of the pack said over a here you got to see this,,, not that far in the distance,,, more more trouble was going on,,, and more fighting,,,, when he almost thought to himself,, that he thought the were only two people left on the planet,,, when they all went underground that was the biggest amazement of all,,,, looking around he figures he better stay low,,, just in case he was being found,,., Which he did not want not at this point in time,,, they shared some of their food with him and water the best he ever tasted,,, next to what he had on the enterprise,,,

I'll leave it here cannot get back to it later

 

[Sandoval]

Like reading Shakespeare...

 

[fish11111111111]

Like reading Shakespeare...

maybe it reads like this Shakespeare at least I am trying and I think that's the most important thing

 

[Sandoval]

If you could separate the text into paragraphs that would go a long way to making it easier to read. Perhaps start a new paragraph when each person speaks and so forth.

 

[captcalhoun]

the FFS Enterprise? is that cuz the admiralty are always saying

"For Fuck's Sake Enterprise!"

REALLY think you might wanna reconsider that prefix. Either FS Enterprise (Federation Starship) or FSS (Federation Star Ship) or even UFS (United Federation Starship)