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[Aug. Challenge] "The Devil You Know"

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hellsgate

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"The Devil You Know"

(Part 1)

Stardate:

58613.58828006087

Old Calendar Date:

12 August 2381

2301 Hours


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The U.S.S. Al-Rasheed glid through conventional space at one-third impulse. The crew had been instructed to conduct passive scans of neighboring sectors along the formerly Romulan Neutral Zone where it faces the Cardassian Union. Rumours of a “Typhon Pact” had been spreading like wildfire through interstellar trucks stops. Rumors which carried on to Starfleet Transport Command headquarters and then onto San Francisco itself.

The Dominion and The Borg were every bit as fresh on everyone’s mind today as they’d been six years ago.

Many of the Federation’s military / trading partners still weren’t entirely comfortable resuming business as usual. Captain Ara Bagram brought the Al-Rasheed out of warp upon arriving at the beginning of their search grid. The priority at this point was to track wayward freighters that hadn’t made their estimated times of arrival at Copernicus Station but submitted flight plans at their ports of origin. Their Chief Medical Officer arrived on the bridge with a deck of cards, shuffling and distributing them across hir console.

Tanner 216, A Hermat General Practitioner with movie star looks and a moderately-vulgar, shoot-from-the-hip style that’s won hir popularity contests and bragging rights all over the Academy. But, its also earned hir the rueful attention of Starfleet Medical’s Ethics Committee on more than one occasion. Captain Bagram had no other choice but to accept this motley crew from hell or settle for a desk job administrating “The Boneyard” at Rashanar near the Ontailian Homeworld.

The Norway-Class starship had scarcely left its construction facility four months ago. She was still somewhat of a rattletrap of components strewn all over her deck. Powerful; as she’d been modeled on the Defiant-Class, but a touch more user-friendly in terms of habitable volume and social supports.

The Al-Rasheed’s first officer (whom doubled as the Al-Rasheed’s Tactical Officer,) is a tall, broad-shouldered Tenctonese with a quirky obsession with Terran humor. Don’t sit down without looking for a whoopy cushion, and don’t be surprised if the replicator in your quarters tells you to “get it yourself” every so often. It was mentioned in his transfer request that he’s a fellow transfer from the CoE and considered something of a self-discipline problem.

Their pilot turned out to be an idealistic young Ferengii female; the Chief Engineer, a pudgy Zakdorn with a typical “You’re almost stupid enough to be amusing” hautiness. The reason for this arranged marriage was apparently, “If you can survive this, you can survive anywhere.”

Their long-term assignment: to keep an ear perked for intelligence pertaining to The Typhon Pact while repairing the infrastructure damage taken to Federation and Alpha Quadrant Alliance property over the duration of The Dominion War. Salvage/Towing, Restoring Communications, Offering Medical Assistance, Demolishing Obsolete Navigation Hazards, and frequently escorting relief convoys.

The Typhon Pact was an alliance of six interstellar states formed in the wake of the Borg Invasion of 2381 as an opposing force to the United Federation of Planets and its allies. The pact consisted of the Romulan Star Empire, Tzenkethi Coalition, Breen Confederacy, Gorn Hegemony, Tholian Assembly and the Holy Order of the Kinshaya, all of which had hostile relations with the Federation and/or Klingon Empire in their previous history and all of which had typically previously maintained xenophobic and isolationist policies.

The Pact formed shortly after the Borg invasion, the Tholian Ambassador Tezrene cited the Federation President Nanietta Bacco as the inspiration; when she summoned Ambassadors from numerous states during the invasion to form an alliance to resist the Borg. The Pact states had no desire to ally with the Federation or the Klingons, but could see the wisdom in her suggestion and formed their own government to as a new major power against the might of the Federation.

Vessels from the founding states formed the Pact at meetings in the Typhon Expanse, this included the creation of a new joint currency and sharing of cloaking technology between the member states. One of the Pact's earliest activities was to employ the Ferengi Sekki to orchestrate a number of schemes to destabilise the Federation and slow down their rebuilding efforts, in an act of vengeance against the Federation for outbidding the Tholians to employ mercenaries to defend against the Borg in the invasion.

Sekki's plots included arming the Breen and Kinshaya with new disruptors, shutting down a dilithium mine in the Maxia Zeta system by infecting it with farantine, disrupting work to upgrade a topaline mine on Capella IV by encouraging the activities of a Capellan terrorist and souring relations between the Federation and Zalda by creating a scenario in which it appeared Zalda was refusing refugees. These various plots led Professor Sonek Pran and the U.S.S. Aventine to piece together what was going on and eventually discover the Pact had formed.

Knowledge of the Pact's formation prompted the Federation and Klingon Empire to invite the Imperial Romulan State, Ferengi Alliance, Talarian Republic and Cardassian Union to ally with the Empire and Federation in an expansion of the Khitomer Accords. (From the novel, “A Singular Destiny” by Keith R.A. DeCandido.)


 
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Right now, it just feels like a summary of everything you can read over in the spoiler threads over in the TrekLit forum. I don't really have a sense of how this crew plays into anything, or even what they're doing...just...a lot of information.
 
That's good as I'm trying to build-up suspense. I'm trying not to fall into the same traps as a lot of non-pro's I used to read in the old homepage-based fics that got deleted by Viacom's legal-threats. Stories that essentially blew their load too quickly by starting & ending their stories within a paragraph or two, as a result of mary-sue's coming-up with impossibly easy trekno-babble conclusions.

I want to provide the interstellar landscape (at the jump-off point from "canon": Trek Lit / TV / Movies,) first & then fill in everything else after. I want my stories to be in an understandable time and place, despite being in their own corner of the Trek universe.

I want to set-up a "cinematic" feeling to my story with characters you could see yourself having a Raktajino with in Ten Forward; or, developing a headache in Sickbay from hearing the Red Alert klaxons & wondering why they still work when everything else attached to the respective EPS/ODN systems have been thoroughly blown to smithereens already.
 
But isn't there a 3500 word limit? How are you going to do all that in 3500 words?
 
Kes: Focus more on the content's quality rather than the technicalities. I'm sure that the Mods aren't that concerned about the word limit as the quality of the writing; and, whether or not I'll ever get more than one or two votes at the end of it.
 
Kes: Focus more on the content's quality rather than the technicalities. I'm sure that the Mods aren't that concerned about the word limit as the quality of the writing; and, whether or not I'll ever get more than one or two votes at the end of it.

Part of the challenge is meeting the word limit. I'm not a mod, but we didn't just throw out the word limit as a suggestion. It's a qualifier. If it's over the word limit, it doesn't meet the requirements of the challenge.
 
I remember you complaining back in the last vote that no one voted for you other then yourself, hellsgate. The self-voting issue aside I think you would be more likely to get votes if you completed a story for the challenge. I seriously doubt anyone would think that an incomplete story would warrant a vote over the half a dozen or more completed works by the other entrants.

The Typhon Pact was an alliance of six interstellar states formed in the wake of the Borg Invasion of 2381 as an opposing force to the United Federation of Planets and its allies. The pact consisted of the Romulan Star Empire, Tzenkethi Coalition, Breen Confederacy, Gorn Hegemony, Tholian Assembly and the Holy Order of the Kinshaya, all of which had hostile relations with the Federation and/or Klingon Empire in their previous history and all of which had typically previously maintained xenophobic and isolationist policies.

The Pact formed shortly after the Borg invasion, the Tholian Ambassador Tezrene cited the Federation President Nanietta Bacco as the inspiration; when she summoned Ambassadors from numerous states during the invasion to form an alliance to resist the Borg. The Pact states had no desire to ally with the Federation or the Klingons, but could see the wisdom in her suggestion and formed their own government to as a new major power against the might of the Federation.

Vessels from the founding states formed the Pact at meetings in the Typhon Expanse, this included the creation of a new joint currency and sharing of cloaking technology between the member states. One of the Pact's earliest activities was to employ the Ferengi Sekki to orchestrate a number of schemes to destabilise the Federation and slow down their rebuilding efforts, in an act of vengeance against the Federation for outbidding the Tholians to employ mercenaries to defend against the Borg in the invasion.

Sekki's plots included arming the Breen and Kinshaya with new disruptors, shutting down a dilithium mine in the Maxia Zeta system by infecting it with farantine, disrupting work to upgrade a topaline mine on Capella IV by encouraging the activities of a Capellan terrorist and souring relations between the Federation and Zalda by creating a scenario in which it appeared Zalda was refusing refugees. These various plots led Professor Sonek Pran and the U.S.S. Aventine to piece together what was going on and eventually discover the Pact had formed.

Knowledge of the Pact's formation prompted the Federation and Klingon Empire to invite the Imperial Romulan State, Ferengi Alliance, Talarian Republic and Cardassian Union to ally with the Empire and Federation in an expansion of the Khitomer Accords. (From the novel, “A Singular Destiny” by Keith R.A. DeCandido.)
This is copied and pasted straight off the Memory Beta wiki article on the Typhon Pact, you should be clearer about that.
 
I'm sure that the Mods aren't that concerned about the word limit as the quality of the writing.

Bolding mine. I'm the only mod here ;)

If the challenge has a limit, in order to qualify it has to stay in that limit. Much like the AV contests have size limits, and if an AV goes over the size limit, it is disqualified. That is not to say that you can't develop this story any way and length you want, but it would have to be outside of the writing challenge.
 
Plagiarism?

As co-runner of the contest, I'm gonna lay it out to you straight. Either write something original and submit THAT as your entry--NOTHING with copied sections--or get disqualified.

Make up your mind--the choice is yours.
 
Plagiarism?

As co-runner of the contest, I'm gonna lay it out to you straight. Either write something original and submit THAT as your entry--NOTHING with copied sections--or get disqualified.

Make up your mind--the choice is yours.

I'll second that. I don't mind if a quote or two from something is used if it's relevant, but if it is, cite it.
 
I'll third this. Someone worked hard on that description. Please give credit where credit is due. Plagiarism is theft, and theft is not okay.
 
Wow, hellsgate, I see a pattern here. First you complain that your story doesn't get voted for, now you are copying someone elses work? I'll be honest, I've used a line or too in say... a briefing between characters. Memory Alpha and Beta are good for official, briefing style bits of information. But I'll still do my best to paraphrase it. Direct copies are not cool.
 
Ok, no need to pile on. I think just one "cite when you use someone else's words" will do.
 
I think there's enough potential here to do a really interesting story, plaigarism allegations aside. It starts out okay and then turns into like a list of stuff. Keep it on the Al-Rashid and the crew, show and don't tell us about them, and it could turn out to be a nice story or fanfic series.
 
*rolling my eyes*

Yes, I established my time period that way. Get over it.

Nobody is going to "get over it" if the work isn't cited or mostly original with just a few cited quotes. I honestly didn't think it needed to be stated in the challenge that the work should be original and not copied and pasted from another site to qualify, but if that's what it takes, then that's what it takes. Original work only or it doesn't qualify. I believe Nerys Ghemor already said the same thing.

Weren't you the one who said something to the effect that people using canon characters were being lazy writers? How lazy is it not to do your own work?
 
*rolling my eyes*

Yes, I established my time period that way. Get over it.

You need to cite words you've taken from another site.

I know 'plagarism' technically in fan fiction is a slippery slope...we take characters and situations from other writer's work (the screen writer) and expand on it. I think we all understand that.

Copy and pasting from another site without citing is plagarism. I believe, if the posters co-running the challenge disqualify it for this, that is their right.

You can, of course, continue your creative original work if you wish :techman:
 
*rolling my eyes*

Yes, I established my time period that way. Get over it.

Hey guy I'm trying to give you the benefit of the doubt. You could just as easily establish the time period by actually writing about it as opposed to making a list.
 
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