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Blast from the Past: The TrekBBS Crime Drama Thread

doubleohfive

doubleohfive

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In keeping with my recent data recovery, I have been scouring the folders full of word files. I came across the script we worked out for the opening of the crime drama thread back in '06.

Enjoy.


The following is a PM mark devries sent me after the initial hard drive crashed, detailing who everyone was going to be, what the setting of the series would be, etc:


Here it is, you mugs, the definitive cast list for Untitled: TrekBBS Unit, our new show.

JonathanWally: good cop.

DeVario: bad cop.


These two are partners, and every episode they do serious damage to public and private property, but end up catching the bad guy or disarming the bomb whatever, rescue the girl the beautiful girl in danger, and after their boss screams at them for all the damage they've caused, they get commendations. They hang out at the neighborhood bar frequented by the other characters.

ShamelessMcBundy: Huggy Bear type street informant. Gets shot by mob boss in season four and leaves show to head up the spin-off.

Red Fenix: JW and D's hot boss

Rosemary: the kind but sassy after-hours bartender who doles out wisdom.

005: moody loner who only hangs out at night, patrolling the streets and helping the helpless. Joins the show in the middle of the first season to "spice up ratings." May or may not be a vampire.

Venardhi: young charming millionaire socialite who secretly rules the criminal underworld of the city with an iron fist. Dates startraveller for seasons 1 and 2. In the 4th season he loses his true love and learns that the only thing that can truly bring him happiness is justice.

Pingfah: pilot episode's murder victim. startraveller's boyfriend. May have faked his own death, only to return and wreak revenge on Venardhi.

startraveller: Pingfah's girlfriend—er, make that ex-girlfriend—turned mob-boss arm-candy. Has bouts of insanity after finding her lover dead in the bathtub. After dating Venardhi for seasons 1 and 2, turns to (by now more experienced and grizzled) 005. Bitter about being tossed aside for Venardhi's true love, she brings evidence of his actions to the police, where the few honest cops hatch a plan to bring the mob boss down. This leads to Ms. Truelove's death and Venardhi's eventual turn to vigilantism.

Scatta: second episode's murder victim. Possible connections to first murder victim? Questions remain unanswered.

BearsDiscoverFire : hot assassin chick. Caught in the season finale, after leaving a trail of bodies all over town. She lulls the prison guard with seductive moves, wallops him in the head with his own nightstick, cuts the barb wire with the pliers hidden in her (presumably prison issue) bustier, and jumps the fence...to begin her killing spree anew, just in time for the season opener. Or Sweeps Week. Whichever, depending on our ratings at that point.

galleywest: slightly nutty but always helpful scientist/lab tech. The cops/private investigators/lawyers call her when they need information or have a gruesome body that needs identification. She's the lab tech who magically has all the answers at her fingertips. Wears Converse sneakers and glasses. Works in "The Lab" with Ohappydagger and lvsxy808.

Quo Vadimus: The bright, up-and-coming cop/detective tragically shot/killed before the opening credits of every episode. Detective Redshirt, essentially. Or one of Venardhi's expendable thugs.

Tim M: the oft-ignored rookie detective who often solves the crime long before the main characters even come close to the answer, but never get credit for it.

Crash: the woman who is having an affair with the (as yet un-cast) Irish Catholic priest struggling with the bottle.

SmoothieX: the tough, no-nonsense District Attorney who doles out sage advice and makes the difficult decisions. Sips brandy in his mahogany paneled, lawbook-lined office. Not a drunk, but likes to drink to "take the edge off." He and SuperGrover are old pals.

Ushaan: shadowy informant. Wears trenchcoat and fedora. His identity is revealed in one of the season finales or during Sweeps Week.

Ohappydagger : dour-yet-sardonic, slightly creepy forensic pathologist. Works in "The Lab" with galleywest and lvsxy808.

lvsxy808: queeny guy who hums show-tunes to himself while doing forensics and flirting harmlessly with the hot detective. Works in "The Lab" with Ohappydagger and galleywest.

SuperGrover: Jim Rockford style private detective. He and SmoothieX are old pals.


Mark de vries: I'll play the Irish Catholic priest in whose church cops and criminals interact in a non-violent manner (to ensure that, I'm keeping a shotgun under the altar. Fully licensed, of course). But I keep being distracted by the lovely Crash. And the bottle.


And that's all I have so far. Culled from these very pages, it was! Tim M and 005, you switched yours a couple of times so I took the liberty of choosing your roles.

So when do we get paid??
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And now, the teaser we all wrote:





The TrekBBS Detective Show

T’BONZ (Voiceover).
Legend tells of a dark city, where corruption and greed and crime and villainy ruled the streets. So reads the irony of Elysian City… it literally was hell on earth. The only thing stopping it from descending into chaos? Two officers of the law… JonathonWally and DeVario.

TITLE ON BLACK SUPER:
“Elysian City. Yesterday.”

FADE UP FROM BLACK:

EXT. ALLEY – NIGHT
Its dark. A lone figure races down the length of the alley, stumbling past hobos, knocking trash cans over. As the figure comes to the end of alley, into the light at the dead end, we see it is a panic-stricken GOJI. He tries to open the only door, but its locked. [FONT=Wingdings]L[/FONT] He turns around, looking back the way he came, an expression of utter terror emblazoned upon his face.

GOJI
I promise! I won’t tell anyone! Not even Suzuki! Please! Please…. Don’t hurt me!


But its too late. We see the dark muzzle of a big black gun raised, partially obscuring Goji’s face.

GOJI
No!


The Killer’s finger presses down on the trigger

GOJI
Please!

The gun blasts off, silencing poor Goji.

EXT. ALLEY – LATER (DAWN)
Uniformed police officers are everywhere, scouring the scene. Cameras flashing, recording images of the crime scene. Police captain REDFENIX makes her way through the scene, leading JONANTHONWALLY and DeVARIO to the dead body.

JONATHONWALLY
Jesus. What happened?

REDFENIX
Don’t know exactly yet. OhHappyDagger and her team are working on it back at the lab as we speak.

DeVARIO
He looks familiar… Jesus! Is that Goji?

JONATHONWALLY
Mother of Christ… who would sack poor Goji?

REDFENIX
It’s your job to find out. Goji was a low rent perp, running Suzuki Ami porn to the underground hobos here. Not exactly the kind of thing one gets murdered for.

DeVARIO
Any witnesses?

REDFENIX
Just one. Name’s Pingfah. He’s waiting down at the end of the alley.

As DeVario and RedFenix continue, JonathonWally looks beyond the craziness and sees PINGFAH at the open end of the alley, getting into a nicely restored Dodge Charger.

JONATHONWALLY
He’s leaving!

Almost on instinct, both JonathonWally and DeVario leap through the mass of police unis and back into their cruiser. RedFenix calls after them…

REDFENIX
Bring that car back in one piece!

DeVARIO
Here we go again!

And JonathonWally floors it.

EXT. CITY STREET – DAWN
The cruiser peels out into traffic, speeding along in between random cars. Pingfah’s car ZOOMS down the city block barely missing pedestrian passersby and running several red lights.

DeVARIO (on loudspeaker)
Pingfah, pull over NOW!

Sirens are blaring. Pingfah hooks a right onto the on ramp to Interstate 69 (:devil:) and guns his engine to the maximum it will take him. The Charger almost glides up the ramp, ascending the hill nicely. In hot pursuit now, the police cruiser is right behind him! Pingfah’s Charger reaches the top of the ramp and soars into the air, nearly flying over traffic on the highway. He lands unceremoniously and his car, damaged by the landing, wobbles a bit…

INT. POLICE CRUISER – DAWN

JONATHONWALLY
Holy shit, he’s gonna burn out!


DeVARIO (on loudspeaker)
Pingfah! You are ordered to pull over! You’re car will never make it--

But its too late.

Pingfah’s Charger zigzags out of control and sideswipes a minivan up against the highway wall, and the two cars hurtle into a physical barrier, finally stopped.

DeVARIO (on loudspeaker)
HOLY TITTY SHIT!

Smoke rises from the hood of the Charger. The Minivan is on its side. Inside the Charger, Pingfah, all bloodied from the impact through the windshield awakens in time to see the gasoline ignite from the sparks flying off the minivan. The two cars erupt in a fantastically gruesome explosion! The police cruiser slows to a stop. JonathonWally gets on the radio as DeVario exits, armed, checking for survivors:

JONATHONWALLY
This is One-Adam-J-12… requesting immediate assistance! We need fire trucks and ambulances NOW!

DeVario comes back to the car.

DeVARIO
Its no use man. They’re all dead.

FADE OUT:

END TEASER
 
Haha nice. I actually don't even recall the second one, whoever wrote it clearly had it in for me :lol:

But now I am hailing it as one of my greatest performances.
 
Oh 005 you read my mind!!

I was thinking of this on another board I post on and wanted to get something like that going on over there. You rule!
 
Speak of the devil! I just mentioned this in the "I remember when..." thread. :D

Wish we had continued with this.
 
I fully intend to finish the script I started with that teaser. Maybe after, even have everyone record their lines as mp3s and edit it together as a podcast / audio "drama."
 
I would like to join the cast! I would like:

To have a small scene then get killed off, but later I come back as my identical twin brother, complete with goatee.
 
Somehow I imagine being dead is going to cut into any profits I might see from future installments. :(
 
doubleohfive said:
I fully intend to finish the script I started with that teaser. Maybe after, even have everyone record their lines as mp3s and edit it together as a podcast / audio "drama."
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I'm so down for that!

Goji said:
Somehow I imagine being dead is going to cut into any profits I might see from future installments. :(
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Hmm, in the course of the investigation into your murder, we can see your past and how it all happened. You can probably be in like, 5 or so episodes.
 
I remember that I had signed up for one of these, but it never went off the ground. If you actually do the voices and stuff doubleoh, that would be awesome.
 
Hey, is there a spot in the cast for wacky comic relief?

If so, count me in. But: I must be driving a Pontiac Fiero and I must catch fire any time I am shown driving said car.
 
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