Unfortunately, Fajo had that positronic personal shielding that flings Data across the room if he gets too close.
Re-Write the Ending!
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Unfortunately, Fajo had that positronic personal shielding that flings Data across the room if he gets too close.
My thoughts on this one:
After realizing the brilliance of Data's premise for the game, instead of rage quitting and stalking out of the room like a spoiled 5 year old, Kohlrami congratulates him on his strategic thinking. It should be commonly understood among strategema players that if you cannot win, playing for a stalemate is entirely legitimate.
Maybe less satisfying than "I busted him up", but seems more realistic for a grandmaster player.
Or he had until Data simply throws another one of the art object at it and destroys it.
Measure of a Man
It doesn't change anything, but I would have loved if Worf had sneaked his way into Data's quarters to offer to help him get off the ship if the trial didn't go his way. Sort of like how he offered to help Riker rescue Soren in The Outcast. Would've been a nice touch. Maybe even Picard and/or Geordie could've shown up too.
It doesn't change anything, but I would have loved if Worf had sneaked his way into Data's quarters to offer to help him get off the ship if the trial didn't go his way. Sort of like how he offered to help Riker rescue Soren in The Outcast. Would've been a nice touch. Maybe even Picard and/or Geordie could've shown up too.
Alas, you'd have to rewrite more than the denouement for that one.
Though in the same vein, I wish "Peak Performance" had let the battle simulation play itself out, instead of involving the Ferengi. "Measure" showed how awesome it could be when Picard and Riker fought it out instead of working together. It would have been nice to see it again.
Though in the same vein, I wish "Peak Performance" had let the battle simulation play itself out, instead of involving the Ferengi. "Measure" showed how awesome it could be when Picard and Riker fought it out instead of working together. It would have been nice to see it again.
This probably happened offscreen about an hour later, after Kolrami had time to calm down. It was clear he thought no one could even keep up with him, and had an overdeveloped opinion of his own prowess. Kolrami was presented as someone who was willing to admit when he was wrong, he just didn't think he could be proven so.
"Pen Pals" - Have Picard put a reprimand on Data's record. Nothing court-martial worthy, but having virtually violated the Prime Directive, a reprimand of this nature might have been at least a small reason to possibly explain why he stayed a Lt. Cmdr. for 15 years.
Everything else about the episode remains, but only add a few lines that reflect this and saying it may cause Data to move up further for quite a while. 10-15 seconds of screen time... and to fit this into the episode, you can cut shorter one or two of the shots of the Enterprise exterior so it doesn't effect episode length. (Hell, this might even save them some money.)
Everything else about the episode remains, but only add a few lines that reflect this and saying it may cause Data to move up further for quite a while. 10-15 seconds of screen time... and to fit this into the episode, you can cut shorter one or two of the shots of the Enterprise exterior so it doesn't effect episode length. (Hell, this might even save them some money.)
Interestingly enough, this sort of piggybacks on my suggestion with Data. Picard did say he'll deal with Data later. Given that it did risk Geordi's life, a reprimand could have happened.
A way to end "Nightingale" as a moment of growth instead of regression...
Harry ends up in the mess hall again. Neelix asks him what he wants for lunch. Harry asks him what he recommends. Neelix admonishes him, and Harry reminds him that if command has taught him one thing, it's that he should know when to trust his crewmates.
I'd also add in a scene before that where Janeway debriefs Harry after the mission. He tells her that command is harder than he thought. Janeway explains that yes, it is. But the day will come when he's ready for it, and for now, he's ready to take the next step. She hands him (or pins on) his long awaited JG's pip and congratulates him.
Honestly, I never bought into the whole "someone has to be the ensign" crap. But if the production team did, would half a season without one be that big a deal?
Harry ends up in the mess hall again. Neelix asks him what he wants for lunch. Harry asks him what he recommends. Neelix admonishes him, and Harry reminds him that if command has taught him one thing, it's that he should know when to trust his crewmates.
I'd also add in a scene before that where Janeway debriefs Harry after the mission. He tells her that command is harder than he thought. Janeway explains that yes, it is. But the day will come when he's ready for it, and for now, he's ready to take the next step. She hands him (or pins on) his long awaited JG's pip and congratulates him.
Honestly, I never bought into the whole "someone has to be the ensign" crap. But if the production team did, would half a season without one be that big a deal?
somewhat like with worf, a reprimand will be appear in your record. less about the reprimand, more that picard was disappointed in them.
hee hee hee.
the children shall lead. instead of showing the children the evil of the angel. after the angel appears, kirk uses a flying two footed drop kick to take the angel to the ground. then kirk smacks the angel around with a folding metal chair.
this would have been a great improvement
These Are The Voyages
PICARD: Will, what have I told you about these "inspired by actual events" holos you insist on watching?
RIKER (sheepishly): To read the historical documents instead.
PICARD: Face palm):I shutter to think what they got wrong in this one.
THE END
PICARD: Will, what have I told you about these "inspired by actual events" holos you insist on watching?
RIKER (sheepishly): To read the historical documents instead.
PICARD: Face palm):I shutter to think what they got wrong in this one.
THE END
Kirk: "What does a Angel need with a starship?"
Threshold
Paris wakes up in his quarters and says “Wow, what a ridiculous dream. What kind of mushrooms were those Neelix served us?”
Paris wakes up in his quarters and says “Wow, what a ridiculous dream. What kind of mushrooms were those Neelix served us?”
Some people have theorized that Kolrami, the arrogant master strategist, was a stand-in for Steve Cole, the arrogant strategy game designer who has design credit for Star Fleet Battles. When Picard records his final log, he says "we have officially ended our first Starfleet battle simulation". If there's anything to this, Kolrami's behavior is spot on.
I think I would have changed the ending of Course: Oblivion, so that at least the 'real' Voyager crew gets the logs of the 'fake' crew.
Then again, you could perhaps argue that them not succeeding in even that was the entire point of the episode (i.e. showing the utter futility of their entire existence when seen from an 'external' point of view), so perhaps this one is against the rules -- not sure.
The Tuvix case always felt like a somewhat fake dilemma to me. Transporter clones have been repeatedly accidentally created in Starfleet's past, no doubt all instances were thoroughly investigated, and hence, it probably must have been within their capacity to recreate Tuvok and Neelix without sacrificing Tuvix, had Janeway really wanted to. (Though I understand that keeping him within the series beyond the single episode probably would have been undesirable for story telling reasons).
Then again, you could perhaps argue that them not succeeding in even that was the entire point of the episode (i.e. showing the utter futility of their entire existence when seen from an 'external' point of view), so perhaps this one is against the rules -- not sure.
The Tuvix case always felt like a somewhat fake dilemma to me. Transporter clones have been repeatedly accidentally created in Starfleet's past, no doubt all instances were thoroughly investigated, and hence, it probably must have been within their capacity to recreate Tuvok and Neelix without sacrificing Tuvix, had Janeway really wanted to. (Though I understand that keeping him within the series beyond the single episode probably would have been undesirable for story telling reasons).
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I guess O’Brian spending virtual years in an alien prison wasn’t during his tenure.
indeed it was.
