Hi guys, I am an avid fan of Trek and a hobbyiest screenplay writer. While I cannot write screenplays that will make it on screen (I will most likely NOT be hired for a Star Trek movie) in the theaters or as a fan film (They are VERY expensive and CBS has the whole fifteen minute rule) So I have adapted one of my screenplays to radio form. I have everything I need to make it (Sound effects, audio editing software etc so I do not need money) Will CBS sue me if I put it on ITunes for free? And if they won't, would anyone be interested in being voice actors? I don't need high quality, and I will be fine with some background noise.
Below is the script, tell me what you think about my first draft for episode one!
Science Officer: Sarorn Tar- Andorian, Female
Engineering Officer: Jake Williams- Human, Male
Nav Officer: Hareb- Tellarite, Male
Comms Officer: Sakorn Tasi- Vulcan, Female
Chronos Captain: Gregor Staper- Human, Male.
HGWells Captain: Lucy Phelan- Human, Female
Wells Officer One: Sorenek- Vulcan, Male
Wells Officer Two: Jackson Roren- human/vulcan, male.
Wells Officer Three: Yoredian Trawes- Unknown Species, Female.
Admiral- Vulcan, Male
Captain
Captain: Captain’s log, Stardate 2213. The Chronos is stuck on more patrol missions around the Klingon border. We are currently orbiting around Tayahx 5. My science officer, Sarorn Tar, is losing hope we will ever get to use our new advanced sensors.
*cue Beep*
Science officer (through Comm): Sir, our advanced tachyon sensors have picked up some strange activity.
Captain: On my way.
*door hiss*
Tactical Officer: Captain on the bridge.
*sitting down sound effect*
Captain: What is the source of the tachyons?
Science officer: We can’t tell yet, sir.
Captain: What is our distance to the Tachyon emission?
Navigation Officer: 1,000 km. About twenty minutes at one sixteenth impulse.
Captain: Lay in a course at one sixteenth impulse. Alert me when we arrive.
Navigation officer: Yes, sir.
*door hiss*
Narrator: Meanwhile on the USS H.G Wells.........
*Red alert sound effect, damage sound effect*
Wellscaptain: What the hell just happened!?!
WellsOfficer 1: Our sensors detected a tachyon flare, just before we moved over a hundred lightyears.
WellsCaptain: Hail Starfleet.
WellsOfficer 2: No response.
WellsCaptain: Do we have control of our ship?
WellsOfficer 1: Only partial control, ma’am. The Borg have fused some of the circuits.
WellsCaptain: What do we have?
WellsOfficer 3: Impulse control and life support management.
*Que explosion sound*
Borg voice: Resistance is futile.
*myriad screaming*
*Cue dramatic BOOM followed by TOS bridge swoosh*
Captain: Status?
Navigation officer: We are standing still 5km from the source.
Science Officer: Finally, something exciting happens.
Captain: I am as bored as you are, Lieutenant Tar. Activate main viewscreen.
TOS Bridge beep.
Science Officer: What is that?
TOS Comm beep.
Captain: Bridge to engineering.
Engineering officer: Here, Captain.
Captain: Activate your viewscreen. What do you think, Lieutenant Williams?
Engineering officer: It looks like some kind of Federation ship, but it’s nothing i’ve every seen before.
Captain: Thank you, Lieutenant Williams. Bridge out.
*comm beep*
Captain: Hail them.
Comm officer: No response.
Captain: Can you tap into the ship’s computer?
Comm officer: Yes, sir.
Captain: Alright, download the crucial data.
Tactical officer: Captain, the ship’s warp core is going to breach in about two minutes.
Captain: How long till the download is complete?
Comm Officer: Just about a minute.
*One minute later*
Tactical officer: Sir, I overestimated. The warp core is about to breach!
Comm officer: Sir, download complete.
Captain: Lay in a course, mark 8-19-5. Maximum warp, Engage!
*Cue Music, and warp sound followed by warp core explosion*
Borg Collective Voice: Borg sleeper virus- Transfer complete. 23d century ship core-species 5618. Activating now.
*TOS ambient bridge sounds*
Captain: Message Starfleet command. Alert me if they respond.
Navigation Officer: Yes, Sir!
*TOS door hiss*
Comms officer (Through Comm): Sir, we are being hailed by Starfleet.
Captain: Pipe them through.
Comms Officer (Through Comm): Yes sir.
Admiral (Through Comm): Hello Captain Staper.
Captain: Yes sir.
Admiral (Through Comm): Lets skip through the pleasantries. Starbase 31 detected emissions just like the ones you detected, however the channel went dark just afterwards. You are being diverted from patrol to investigate.
*Theme Music*
Below is the script, tell me what you think about my first draft for episode one!
Science Officer: Sarorn Tar- Andorian, Female
Engineering Officer: Jake Williams- Human, Male
Nav Officer: Hareb- Tellarite, Male
Comms Officer: Sakorn Tasi- Vulcan, Female
Chronos Captain: Gregor Staper- Human, Male.
HGWells Captain: Lucy Phelan- Human, Female
Wells Officer One: Sorenek- Vulcan, Male
Wells Officer Two: Jackson Roren- human/vulcan, male.
Wells Officer Three: Yoredian Trawes- Unknown Species, Female.
Admiral- Vulcan, Male
Captain
Captain: Captain’s log, Stardate 2213. The Chronos is stuck on more patrol missions around the Klingon border. We are currently orbiting around Tayahx 5. My science officer, Sarorn Tar, is losing hope we will ever get to use our new advanced sensors.
*cue Beep*
Science officer (through Comm): Sir, our advanced tachyon sensors have picked up some strange activity.
Captain: On my way.
*door hiss*
Tactical Officer: Captain on the bridge.
*sitting down sound effect*
Captain: What is the source of the tachyons?
Science officer: We can’t tell yet, sir.
Captain: What is our distance to the Tachyon emission?
Navigation Officer: 1,000 km. About twenty minutes at one sixteenth impulse.
Captain: Lay in a course at one sixteenth impulse. Alert me when we arrive.
Navigation officer: Yes, sir.
*door hiss*
Narrator: Meanwhile on the USS H.G Wells.........
*Red alert sound effect, damage sound effect*
Wellscaptain: What the hell just happened!?!
WellsOfficer 1: Our sensors detected a tachyon flare, just before we moved over a hundred lightyears.
WellsCaptain: Hail Starfleet.
WellsOfficer 2: No response.
WellsCaptain: Do we have control of our ship?
WellsOfficer 1: Only partial control, ma’am. The Borg have fused some of the circuits.
WellsCaptain: What do we have?
WellsOfficer 3: Impulse control and life support management.
*Que explosion sound*
Borg voice: Resistance is futile.
*myriad screaming*
*Cue dramatic BOOM followed by TOS bridge swoosh*
Captain: Status?
Navigation officer: We are standing still 5km from the source.
Science Officer: Finally, something exciting happens.
Captain: I am as bored as you are, Lieutenant Tar. Activate main viewscreen.
TOS Bridge beep.
Science Officer: What is that?
TOS Comm beep.
Captain: Bridge to engineering.
Engineering officer: Here, Captain.
Captain: Activate your viewscreen. What do you think, Lieutenant Williams?
Engineering officer: It looks like some kind of Federation ship, but it’s nothing i’ve every seen before.
Captain: Thank you, Lieutenant Williams. Bridge out.
*comm beep*
Captain: Hail them.
Comm officer: No response.
Captain: Can you tap into the ship’s computer?
Comm officer: Yes, sir.
Captain: Alright, download the crucial data.
Tactical officer: Captain, the ship’s warp core is going to breach in about two minutes.
Captain: How long till the download is complete?
Comm Officer: Just about a minute.
*One minute later*
Tactical officer: Sir, I overestimated. The warp core is about to breach!
Comm officer: Sir, download complete.
Captain: Lay in a course, mark 8-19-5. Maximum warp, Engage!
*Cue Music, and warp sound followed by warp core explosion*
Borg Collective Voice: Borg sleeper virus- Transfer complete. 23d century ship core-species 5618. Activating now.
*TOS ambient bridge sounds*
Captain: Message Starfleet command. Alert me if they respond.
Navigation Officer: Yes, Sir!
*TOS door hiss*
Comms officer (Through Comm): Sir, we are being hailed by Starfleet.
Captain: Pipe them through.
Comms Officer (Through Comm): Yes sir.
Admiral (Through Comm): Hello Captain Staper.
Captain: Yes sir.
Admiral (Through Comm): Lets skip through the pleasantries. Starbase 31 detected emissions just like the ones you detected, however the channel went dark just afterwards. You are being diverted from patrol to investigate.
*Theme Music*
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