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"The beginning after the end" (Cardassian short story)

TerokNor

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This is a try to write a very small story with my fave character in it.
Thanks a lot to Thor Damar for grammar and spell checking and to Nerys Ghemor for the advice to let Damar be also blunt spoken in after-life. :)


The beginning after the end

Justice, Damar thought as he looked up at the remains of the pillar before him, blackend by the hungry mouths of a thousand hot flames. Was this justice? Was this what his people deserved for bringing misery to others?
For weeks now he had wandered through the darkness and the ruins of what had been his home.
Under some of the crushed buildings, bodies still lay rotting. Whole families, who had found their graves in their houses, the one place where they should have felt safe.
Was it night? Was it day? There was no way of telling. No sun beam found its way down to Cardassia´s surface any longer. The thick dust which lingered like a deadly shadow over everything did its best to prevent that.
Two Cardassians crossed his way. A young woman and a small girl. Their eyes were haunted and hungry, their breaths came out in little clouds as they rubbed their hands together in the attempt to warm them.
How cold is it? Damar wondered, staring after them. Though he could not feel what they felt, he shivered when the memory of the coldness grabbed his soul.
He didn´t know where to go and so he sat down on a pile of rubble with a sigh. What was he to do?

For a long time he just sat there staring into nothingness, when suddenly something small danced through the air in front of him and landed on the stones by his feet. He looked at it in confusion, but when he bent down to study it more closely it was already gone.
He looked back up and saw another small thing coming down from the darkness above... and then another ... and another, till the air was filled with uncountable waves of them.
Damars eyes grew big. Was this ... snow? It couldn´t be! It never snowed on Cardassia! How should his people survive such weather, when most of them not even had a true shelter to go to? Damar felt panic rising within him. He didn´t rebel to destroy his people. He had wanted them to be free again, but this was not what he had imagined. He had to help them!

"You can´t." A soft voice behind him said as Damar turned around in startled surprise. "You can´t help them anymore Damar. You did your true duty to Cardassia when you, as their leader, started to dream again. They will remember that."
"But ..." Damar started and then looked around helplessly. "Look around, Ziyal. Look at what Cardassia has become"

"I know." Ziyal said sadly. "But out of the ashes a new Cardassia will arise. And maybe, it will be much more like the Cardassia that you dreamed about in the end ... and like the Cardassia I used to dream about. That is a wonderful thought, isn´t it?"
Damar nodded. "It is ... though I didn´t see it the way when ..." Suddenly Damar´s face turned into the hard scowl that Ziyal remembered so well. "Why are you here Ziyal? Why do you give a damn?" he growled.

Ziyal came closer and studied him intensely. The regret in his eyes was easy to see and behind his hard demeanor she knew there was nothing but shame and pain for what he had done to her.

"I have seen how you have grown and that is why I am here to forgive you." she said simply.

Damar´s expression softened again as he stared at her in wonder, trying to find the words that could express what this meant to him, but like it had been so often in his life, the right words would not come.
Ziyal smiled in understanding. "Come now", she said, "I think, someone is waiting for you."

And with this she floated away towards a group of Cardassians, from which suddenly a small boy sprang and came running into his fathers arms.

-The End-

TerokNor

 
Justice? Where was justice in murdering people who had nothing to do with the Central Command's decisions and were victims of their own government and the Obsidian Order? What were they guilty of? Being born in the wrong place? They would conveniently disappear without a trace if they did anything that those two ruling powers had such a wish...

This was NOT justice and Garak's words at the end of the show pisses me off. I'm hope Damar doesn't share this sick opinion.

This story would fit the last challenge of Redemption :)

I'm very happy I refused tow write a "winter" story and made you do it, because mine certainly wouldn't be that good. You put a lot of heavy subjects into this short impression. I can imagine Saratt painting it :)
 
As I said to TerokNor after proofreading the initial story, I found this to be a wonderfully powerful short piece and I have to admit that I did tear up at the last sentence as Damar is reunited with his son.

The Cardassian reaction to the snow is beautifully done, they see it as a threat not something that could possibly be fun. (I think that a lot of people in my country might agree with them:lol:)

As for Garak's little speech, I saw it as bitter sarcasm aimed at the very notion that the genocide was in any way a fitting punishment and a wry (but very angry) acceptance of the smug self righteous judgment of the allies. Which was amply demonstrated by Martok's disgusting celebration over the deaths of millions.
With Corat Damar it was entirety a by product of self loathing and despair.

Once again you have created a wonderful addition to the growing field of Cardassian lit. (I won't say Cardie-lit, dammit!:cardie:)
 
I didn't get the idea Damar thought it was justice for the Cardassian people. More like he thought it was justice for himself, to have to witness such horrible things, like his punishment is to have to be tormented with that horror, even in death. :(

Very good story, TerokNor, as I said before. I'm glad you posted this. My only suggestion is to make sure you put in line breaks for the paragraphs so people can better appreciate it. :)
 
After reading it again I realised I forgot to write about one more thing... Seems like for a moment Damar wonders if it wasn't him who brought it all to the Cardassian people. That his rebellion caused this, that he is also to blame.

You can't blame a victim for being a victim. The butchers are to be blamed.

Thor Damar used a word I couldn't find before: powerful. This story is so short, but it carries a lot in it!
 
I think its a bit of both... for the justice aspect. Here he might think, that he sort of made many mistakes and also about Kiras sentences "What kind of people gives those orders?"...so about generally the things his people have done to others.
He is in despair and grief about seeing his planet so destroyed, in thraumatic shock so to say. His people are free again...and I am sure he does feel joy for this... but seeing the destruction must have been a hard thing.

Thanks for reading. :)

And Mr. D. Senior... I do agree with what you said about the people in your country. Though... this year it seems the coping is better, isn´t it? Last year when London got hit by a snowflake and the chaos broke out your neigbours were highly amused...uhm..in a friendly, non-offending way of course. ;)

TerokNor
 
I think its a bit of both... for the justice aspect. Here he might think, that he sort of made many mistakes and also about Kiras sentences "What kind of people gives those orders?"...so about generally the things his people have done to others.
He is in despair and grief about seeing his planet so destroyed, in thraumatic shock so to say. His people are free again...and I am sure he does feel joy for this... but seeing the destruction must have been a hard thing.

Thanks for reading. :)

And Mr. D. Senior... I do agree with what you said about the people in your country. Though... this year it seems the coping is better, isn´t it? Last year when London got hit by a snowflake and the chaos broke out your neigbours were highly amused...uhm..in a friendly, non-offending way of course. ;)

TerokNor

You don't need to apologize Damar Jr;), we're always bad at snow and very cold weather, which is pretty funny if you consider the fact that if it wasn't for the Normans we would be a Scandinavian Island. plus we're on the same latitude as parts of Russia so we should start getting used to colder climates.
Gulf stream has really spoiled us...

(Also it was like a thousand snowflakes and some ice, wars and terrorism we can take but the winter always does for the Brits:guffaw:.

BTW, isn't laughing at us the international sport on the Continent?)
 
How do you get an idea like that? We LOVE you and want to EMBRACE you in our big, happy family. *gives a weyounish smile* :p

TerokNor

P.S. I personally like England and Scottland (the rest I haven´t seen yet). The athmosphere in the places I visited always gave me a feeling of home.
 
" We are all one with the European Union, British, German, Polish...

{interrupted by a harsh voice which asserts agreement in a hard to understand voice}


...and French. And we will do whatever the European council deems worthy! Do I make myself understood?"

(;))
 
RUNNNNN! Better to (live free or) die than be assimilated!

Extra points to whoever gets the reference in parentheses above.
 
BTW, isn't laughing at us the international sport on the Continent?)

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:guffaw::bolian::lol:.


Ah, how I love my fellow Europeans right now.

As they say in Lakarian city:
"To laugh along with former enemies is truly the greatest gift that civilization hath bought us..."
 
Well, if I wondered about the Cardassian fanatics taking over I don't any more. Fait Accompli, I believe the phrase is.

Great tale in so little a space. I love stuff like this. You did a great job!
 
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