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Star Trek: The Beginning

Admiral James Kirk

Writer
Admiral
”Penelope, I am going where so many have
gone before - to the place where all
paths lead, and all journeys end. Please
know, my love, that if I do nothing
else...that at least...I go there boldly.”

-Tiberius Chase
September 18, 2159
D-Day Minus 1



I was surprised to see that there was no talk around here for AICN's review of Erik Jendressen's screenplay for the proposed prequel Star Trek: The Beginning. I figure since it hasn't been discuss you guys might like to. If you want to read the review click the link. If you just want to read the story then read on. :)

It begins on Earth during August-September 2159 (this would place it between ENTERPRISE and ORIGINAL SERIES continuity).

The human race has a lot going on: the United Earth Stellar Navy (UESN) is a military attempting to find its place in the changing political landscape, and hone its interaction with a recently formed Coalition of Planets. Earth is changing…politics are changing. Extraterrestrials are becoming accepted and common members of our society, but this is also altering the way humans think, and the way things are done.

There’s talk of UESN merging with Starfleet, which would essentially militarize the exploration-based Starfleet. “Peace is too important to be left to politicians” intones one Commodore.

The NX-Omega is ready to fly – the first Warp 8 capable ship ever built (Warp 8 was the maximum warp stated for THE ORIGINAL SERIES Enterprise).

And…oh, yeah! There’s that mammoth Romulan attack fleet approaching Earth using a trajectory which conceals it behind Earth’s moon.

There’s one character we’ve seen before in TREK - it’s Andorian Commander Shran. He’s the blue dude with antennae played by Jeffrey Combs in ENTERPRISE.

Another character we’ve heard about (but never seen) also appears. Skon. Who is Skon? There’s a line in STAR TREK III: THE SEARCH FOR SPOCK in which Vulcan High Priestess refers to Sarek (Spock’s dad) as “Sarek, child of Skon…” Skon appears here as a Vulcan Ambassador to Earth. I.e. Spock’s grandfather is a principal character in THE BEGINNING.

The NX-02 (Columbia) – also seen in ENTERPRISE - appears twice in the script. It’s in an orbital shipyard and gets blasted pretty thoroughly.

References are made to Archer & Enterprise being at Risa (TREK’s “pleasure planet”). Figures; they’re as ineffectual as always.

Denobluans ( Dr. Flox’s species from ENTERPRISE) are seen, but don’t play a critical role.

MACO (Military Assault Command Operations – the supertroopers introduced in ENTERPRISE) are present, and do play a role.

Tellarites (the pig guys) appear.

There are several allusions to the future TREK universe, which are mentioned below.

This is principally the story of Tiberius Chase. He’s the UESN’s best pilot but can’t get into Starfleet because of his family’s bad rep. He has the heart of a warrior and the soul of a poet. He’s extremely talented and highly ambitious, but he’s being held back in life because of his family name. The Chase clan, it seems, is associated with a para-military militia here on Earth who fear for the purity of the human race…they feel our gene pool will be contaminated because too many alien species are coming to Earth.

I.e. they are Terran isolationists, who’ve fashioned a cult-like community in the Muhlig-Hoffman Mountains in Antarctica. They found a place once used by Nazis who escaped to the remote locale after World War II. There is Nazi tech around them – like prototype aircraft shaped like saucers. Tiberius left this funky bunch…his urge to see what’s out there…to grow and expand…was too strong to resist. Despite this defiance, many around him still will not trust him. They’re all about embracing new life and new civilizations, but aren’t sure what he’s about.

Tiberius is in love with Penelope Gardner, an Admiral’s daughter. Penelope is “a school teacher from Iowa”. For those who don’t remember, James Tiberius Kirk is from Iowa. There’s a lot we can infer from the above few paragraphs. My conjecture is that these are Jim Kirk’s ancestors, and that the “Kirk” family name may have been adopted to escape the shadow of the Chase legacy. Could be wrong about this, though.

Tiberius rides a Harley Davidson Aero-Bike.

Other characters include (but are not limited to) Lieutenant Jaxx. Skal – the Vulcan who designed the NX-Omega’s warp engine. Admiral Gardner (Penelope’s dad – who struggles valiantly to marshal Earth’s defenses against the Romulans). Ensign Ogg (Maori from New Zealand), Otto (Tiberius’ father).

Tiberius has graduated UESN academy but his efforts to get into prestigious Starfleet are being stonewalled. He occupies his time by courting (and banging) Penelope (the Admiral’s daughter) while the NX-Omega Warp Tests are being conducted at the Saturn Flight Range (Chase was expected to fly the mission, but got canned from that as well). He’s a little lost, and finds himself increasingly lacking in purpose: he’s deeply devoted to a system which does not view him with affection.

While hanging out one morning with Penelope, Tiberius can’t peel his eyes from the sky. There’s something different about the sky this day…he’s not sure what it is. Then he sees the tiny speck of light, an odd star in a clear morning sky. But the star unleashes beams of death towards Earth: Romulans are attacking us, wrecking full-scale devastation in very short order!

But this isn’t even the PRIMARY attack force, which (we learn via Vulcan intelligence) is a little over two weeks away. At this point, segments of the movie are identified by superimposed titles (i.e. “D-Day Minus 3”, “D-Day Minus 2”, etc.)

Attacks on Honolulu, Beijing, Moscow, Athens, Cairo, London, New York, Los Angeles, San Francisco, and the Lisbon Power Station are either referenced or seen. A mammoth, ongoing space battle between Earth forces (UESN and Starfleet), factions who rush to Earth’s defense (Tellarites, Andorians under Commander Shran, Vulcans) ensues. The line against the Romulans is being held, but barely. Think TREK space conflict on the scale of a George Lucas film (the opening of EPISODE III comes to mind).

UESN and Starfleet facilities swing into action globally. We see Subterranean Facilities (SUBFACs) in Victoria, Paris, and China assembling munitions, churning out fighter craft, processing war supplies, etc. – action is set in several of these facilities.

What do these damn Romulans want? Our surrender. Why? Seems those green blooded bastards have been engaging in ethnic cleansing across the galaxy – they want to ride the universe of their wussy Vulcan offshoots once and for all. They’ve been moderately successful thus far, but Earth won’t surrender its Vulcan population (a defiance for which the Romulans were thoroughly unprepared, hence the need for the second wave of ships). Earth’s response to the Romulan demand for surrender? “Nuts”.

But…the truth of the matter is…we’re slowly, and certainly, losing & don’t stand a chance when the other Romulans get here. Reinforcements won’t reach us quickly enough. And Tiberius Chase doesn’t like to lose…

He hatches a plan…a foolhardy, dangerous plan no one will listen to: he wants to fly to the heart of the Romulan Star Empire and wreck havoc there before the primary Romulan attack fleet arrives “offshore Earth”. He wants to fragment the Romulans’ war making capability from within.

The higher-ups will not listen to him & summarily dismiss him. But a few folks are willing to embrace his glorious madness.

Chase and his bizarre, make-shift crew (including Skal – the Vulcan Warp Engine designer mentioned above) acquire a nuke from the Antarctica isolationists, then hijack a small ship called the U.S.S. Spartan - forcibly staffing it with hostages taken at its Saturn Drydock anchorage. Some of these hostages are confined to quarters, as they’re unwilling to participate in such a direct violation of orders. Others begin to understand that even a desperate, crazy, final hope for victory is better than no hope at all – and become willing crew members (and accomplices).

The brave little Spartan and her misfit crew leave our solar system with its nuclear bomb on a lonely trek to Romulus – where danger, uncertainty, and probable defeat await.

What is my opinion on this script? Short and sweet: I loved the idea. In a way I think this is the prequel Enterprise should have been. A story about a mankind still a little rough around the edges and a hero who comes from the worst that humanity has to offer but becomes the progenitor of the best. Epic space battles galore and a Dirty Dozen style mission behind enemy lines! Man what isn't to like? I'd love to see a Star Trek movie that dared to kick everyones asses and this movie might have been it. It was certainly a much braver and more daring story than Nemesis. I'm hoping one day this script gets produced or at the very least gets adapted into a novel. I think it's a kickass concept and a great way of taking Star Trek someplace different and yet familiar at the same time. Of course your mileage may vary.
 
Generic, derivative and uninspired. It bored me. Clearly the studio was just letting Berman and Kerner burn up their development budgets to give them something to do.
 
Nothing about it made me sit up and take notice, either. Of course, I can say the same about most of the rumors I've heard so far about this current project. The best I can say for The Beginning is that it's no worse than time travelling Romulans from the 24th century on a mission to assassinate Jimmy Kirk, the Smartest Kid on Earth.
 
^ If one may invoke GR's ST:TMP novelization, Kirk's academy class was the first one selected on the basis of "limited intellectual agility". :D

TGT
 
I just rediscovered my TMP novelization in a seldom-used closet. I may have to pull it out and re-read 'cause it diverged significantly from the movie. Not the essential plot, but a lot of the character details were never canonized, despite the fact the novelization is credited to Roddenberry himself.

Heh...I read it days before the premiere. It still has the original printing price sticker on it: $2.50. :) Two small cover creases and a little yellowing of the pages, but it's still intact.
 
The God Thing said:
^ If one may invoke GR's ST:TMP novelization, Kirk's academy class was the first one selected on the basis of "limited intellectual agility". :D

TGT

An allusive gag but yep. And Kirk's middle name came from his grandpappy's fascination with the emperor, not from his porn star monickered great grandpappy (maybe his real name was Tiberius DiCesare...) I love where his parents got James from: "love instructor," it's so Logan's Run! :thumbsup:

Ah, the TMP novelization, from back when Star Trek was still SF and not a sui generis franchise. Indeed, it may be the last moment when that was true.
 
I think it sounds BEYOND cheesy. Although, it would have been nice to have a period story with new characters rather than the Abrams complete recast.
 
Earth's response to the Romulan demands: "Nuts!"? Star wars-style spacebattles? Nazi hideouts in Antarctica, complete with flying saucers? A fight against the odds, won by one man's violations of orders, who happens to have just the rioght connections and means to get the job done? Superimposed countdown to armageddon?

Sounds quite derivative...
 
Mark de Vries said:
Earth's response to the Romulan demands: "Nuts!"? Star wars-style spacebattles? Nazi hideouts in Antarctica, complete with flying saucers? ]A fight against the odds, won by one man's violations of orders, who happens to have just the rioght connections and means to get the job done? Superimposed countdown to armageddon?

Sounds quite derivative...
Yeah, at first glance it reads like WW2 in space. Aside from the Nazi stuff and "nuts," the trip to Romulus seems inspired by the Doolittle Raid. Doolittle's been inspiring sci fi feats for decades, from Starbuck & Apollo's raid on a basestar (a.k.a. Luke's raid on the Deathstar) to Space Above & Beyond's raid on the Chig homeworld.

That said, even the Doolittle raiders were inspired by centuries of examples and myths about lone heroes descending into the beast's layer to strike at its heart.

Yeah, it's derivative. It's one of the oldest stories around. But really, what isn't derivative? Name any story and someone's bound to cite you several prior iterations of that same story. What matters is whether it would've been executed well.

That said, since those were some of the same people who brought us Insurrection, Nemesis, Voyager and Enterprise, I doubt it would have been.
 
I read the script review and was waiting for "April Fool" at the end of it.

Thank goodness it didn't go into production and I hope that the door didn't hit Rick Berman and Erik Jendersen on the way out.

As others pointed out, it's a re-enactment of World War II in the "Star Trek" universe. It seems that the inclusion of Nazi wonder weapons cache in Antarctica is a way to beat us over the head with the analogy.

I shrug my shoulders and ask why would the Romulans want to ethnic cleanse the Vulcans? What's the point? I could understand the desruction of the Vulcan military and the conquering of Vulcan by the Romulans. But an ethnic cleansing of the followers of Surak?

Ah, it's because the Romulans are the Nazis in this tale.
Trek just loves space Nazis!

Then the script has canon droppings so that "Star Trek" can be placed in this re-enactment of World War II.

The creation of Tiberius Chase is a way around Starfleet's, and humanity's, higher morality. A nuclear attack on the Romulan homeworld doesn't seem very Trek-like.
 
Cartoonist said:
That said, since those were some of the same people who brought us Insurrection, Nemesis, Voyager and Enterprise, I doubt it would have been.

Some of the same people who brought us TNG, DS9 and "First Contact" as well. :cool:
 
Starship Polaris said:
Cartoonist said:
That said, since those were some of the same people who brought us Insurrection, Nemesis, Voyager and Enterprise, I doubt it would have been.

Some of the same people who brought us TNG, DS9 and "First Contact" as well. :cool:
Yeah, I hear that all the time, but those were all earlier. If we could go back in time to the early Nineties (the pre-burnout years) and ask those guys to write new Trek, I'd be all for it.
 
Earlier? DS9 was concurrent with Voyager and Insurrection. First Contact was concurrent with VOY, Braga went from "Threshold" to that movie.

Still, there was a general burn-out as the years wore on, no doubt about it. Many of the old guard stuck around too long.
 
^^^Yeah but Voyager was still a halfway decent show when First Contact premeiered.
 
Kegek said:
Earlier? DS9 was concurrent with Voyager and Insurrection.
Yeah, and I felt that Voyager, the one Braga was heavily involved with, wasn't in the same league as DS9. The show got worse as it went along.

First Contact was concurrent with VOY, Braga went from "Threshold" to that movie.
Yeah, what happened to him after that? One good movie followed by two lackluster ones (and preceded by another lackluster one). A television run that got progressively worse as it went along and only improved in ENT's final season (sadly it was too late) when they brought in a different show runner. That's not the kind of batting average that would've given me hope for "The Beginning."

Still, there was a general burn-out as the years wore on, no doubt about it. Many of the old guard stuck around too long.
I completely agree.

By the way, I'd like to agree with the poster who said he would've preferred this concept over ENT, but the whole genocide angle makes it impossible for me to buy that Balance of Terror conceit that the Federation had no idea Romulans and Vulcans were related (and if the Federation never found out the motive for the genocide, I think that would diminish the story).
 
I thought it would have been pretty neat. It really was a fresh take on Trek. Sure, the story as presented in the summary (and not the actual script) is a little wobbly in some places...but at least it was something different and probably would have been a good shot in the arm, creatively. Further drafts, I'm sure, would have punched up the story and allowed it to flow better.

Also, we are just getting information from a summary. Not the actual script. Summaries can make something sound suckier than it actually is. Not that this is the case, but I am just pointing it out.


Cartoonist said:
Yeah, what happened to him after that? One good movie followed by two lackluster ones

Which Braga had NOTHING to do with.

A television run that got progressively worse as it went along and only improved in ENT's final season (sadly it was too late) when they brought in a different show runner.

Well, I liked Enterprise and thought it got better as it went along, but that's another debate for another forum. :p

That's not the kind of batting average that would've given me hope for "The Beginning."

Again...something that he had NOTHING to do with...and something that, as revealed later, Berman had little involvement with.
 
Broccoli said:
I thought it would have been pretty neat. It really was a fresh take on Trek. Sure, the story as presented in the summary (and not the actual script) is a little wobbly in some places...but at least it was something different and probably would have been a good shot in the arm, creatively. Further drafts, I'm sure, would have punched up the story and allowed it to flow better.

Also, we are just getting information from a summary. Not the actual script. Summaries can make something sound suckier than it actually is. Not that this is the case, but I am just pointing it out.


Cartoonist said:
Yeah, what happened to him after that? One good movie followed by two lackluster ones

Which Braga had NOTHING to do with.

A television run that got progressively worse as it went along and only improved in ENT's final season (sadly it was too late) when they brought in a different show runner.

Well, I liked Enterprise and thought it got better as it went along, but that's another debate for another forum. :p

That's not the kind of batting average that would've given me hope for "The Beginning."

Again...something that he had NOTHING to do with...and something that, as revealed later, Berman had little involvement with.
If you'll read my earlier posts, you'll realize "him" in my last post was a typo, as I was referring all along to more than one person. I'm no Braga-hater. I loved the series Threshold. But other than First Contact, I rarely enjoyed his contributions to Trek.

And yes, I thought Enterprise was great in season four. Under Manny Coto.
 
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