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[Repost] The Lights of Lakarian City

Count Zero

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Due to trampledamage's contest entry this month, this story came up in the discussion and trampledamage wanted to read it, so here it is:

The Lights of Lakarian City

On the outskirts of what, just one day ago, used to be a city of millions, a man sits on a pile of rubble, staring into the slow sunset.
He really should get going like all the others but he has already been walking for miles today. All the way from the prison camp to the city – to the ruins of the city, to be precise. He had never been to Lakarian City and most of his knowledge about it came from what was in the Federation databases. Until recently, it had been famous for its amusement park and other worldly pleasures. So, seeing its lights off in the distance from the most miserable place of his life had always seemed exceptionally cruel.
For nearly five years he had been in the hands of the Cardassian prison system, the object of abuse by sadistic guards, his fate depending on the whims of people deformed into something like monsters by life long indoctrination. The last one, Legate Krelek, had found delight in having him play an elaborate Cardassian card game for the lives of prisoners. Naturally, Krelek often won and had him watch the prisoners whose lives he had lost being put to death.
He thought this was the life he'd lead until he'd die an untimely and probably painful death. And this certainty was almost harder to bear than everything else, this hopelessness. Because, after all these years, he had given up hope of ever being rescued like Kira had promised him. How naive he had been, back then. In this state of utter despair the lights of Lakarian City had seemed to personally taunt him. How was it possible that over there, people enjoyed themselves and went about their lives while only a few miles away, all these terrible things happened?
Now, the lights of Lakarian City had been put out, probably forever considering the total destruction around him. Yesterday, the city had been levelled by the Jem' Hadar, its inhabitants killed. When the bombing had started the guards at the camp became so scared that most of them ran off. The prisoners had used this opportunity to free themselves.
But what was he about to do, now? He was still stranded on Cardassia, in the middle of a devastating war and a relief effort for the city wasn't very likely to start anytime soon. Thinking about this, he roamed through the heaps of rubble from which smoke rose, smelling terribly, like burned flesh – a smell he'd never forget.
On one of the large heaps that had probably been a house, a Cardassian woman knelt and digged in the debris with her bare hands. For a while he just stood there, watching, until she noticed him and startled. He could read the result of all the propaganda in her eyes. To her, he was a criminal and a terrorist, who had comitted terrible crimes against the Cardassian people. She recovered quickly from the shock, though, and relaxed a little as she realized that she wasn't in any imminent danger.

"I guess, it doesn't make any sense, does it?", she suddenly said, sounding slightly desperate. She added, "They're all dead, aren't they?"

He searched for an adequate answer but all he could come up with was a meaningless "Well...".

She sat down, about to start crying or worse, so he sat beside her, offering her the bottle of Kanar he had looted from the Legate's personal supply. Surprisingly, it did cheer her up a little. For a while they continued to just sit there. She was staring in the distance and he was looking at her delicate face.

"What's your name?"

"Ilana."

"Mine's Tom. I'll help you searching."

Even though he didn't really know why, they both continued digging, under the light of a small lamp Ilana had brought with her. Later that evening, Tom looked up from the rubble and saw many similiar lights shining in the city.
 
Wow.

The focus on the imagery of the lights...for some reason it really evoked the way the Twin Towers are memorialized annually, in the Tribute of Light (the twin sets of floodlights aimed straight at the sky).

The other image that comes to mind is this, which I am currently using as my wallpaper (warning--very large image...if you don't have a widescreen monitor, you may end up doing a lot of scrolling). Just look at the ghostly city on the hill, and the way the light streams forth. Click it to zoom in:

http://www.sheezyart.com/view/1984633/

I may be wrong...but it sounds like this version of Thomas Riker may learn--for all the horrors the Cardassians have committed, especially to him personally--that he can't hold all of that against every single Cardassian. He's seen now exactly where such attitudes lead, like when the Founders and the Jem'Hadar decided every Cardassian must suffer for the actions of the rebels. I think, too, that seeing such destruction is going to bring about a major shift in his mindset.

The Thomas Riker I remember from the series was--partly due to isolation on that planet for so long, perhaps--very self-centered. Everything in his life seemed fixated upon HIS identity, HIS desires, HIS problems. And while I can understand his having a lot of difficulties with what happened to him, the result was that I don't think he really gave any consideration to others. This act of compassion towards Ilana may be a start of something new in that regard. I hope to see your version rescued...but not before he spends a longer time helping with the recovery effort and focusing on relieving others' misery instead of his own.

I also find myself wanting to know more about this woman. All 2 million inhabitants of Lakarian City (that were actually present at the time of the bombing) are dead, I think I remember--so I wish I knew who she was, where she came from, and who she's looking for under all the rubble.

EXCELLENT work.
 
Thank you for the kind and thoughtful review. :)
The story could (and maybe) should have been longer, adding more detail to both Tom and Ilana but at the time I wanted to keep it deliberately vague. And since I almost never manage to finish the stories I start writing, I kept it short.
You're right about Tom's attitude towards the Cardassians, but I think he doesn't hold what happened to him against every Cardassian. There were Cardassian prisoners with him in the camp. And he does try to help Ilana in her despair.
I had a back story and some further plot points for a possible continuation of the story, but I never got around to writing it. It would have first continued on Cardassia and with the Starfleet relief effort.
(I imagined Tom to later pursue a musical career as part of an entertainment group consisting of Ilana, another Cardassian from the camp (an officer with comedic talent which landed him in the camp) and an innocuous Founder in exile. They would travel around and thus allow us a different view on the Federation and the Trekverse, but now that I write this down, it sounds way too Doctor Whoish...)
As for Ilana: We hear of the city being destroyed but not how far the destruction is spread. There might be suburbs or villages still intact in the vicinity. Not all of the city's inhabitants would have been present when it was destroyed. Ilana is one of those people and she's looking for her family in the rubble.

Some thoughts on Tom Riker: I think that fate has dealt him a really shitty hand. First, he's stuck on this planet for years, then he finds someone else has taken his place and then he has to spend several hellish years in a Cardassian prison camp. Also, he has to deal with a very unique identity problem. Who is he? The real Riker or just a copy? This aspect of his story is the most fascinating for me. It's like a Greek tragedy or an ancient myth. Anyway, he's pretty traumatised and has issues. This would come up in a continued story sooner or later.
 
You're very welcome!

I hope I didn't come off as suggesting Tom didn't have a right to have issues. He definitely does. But I think having to focus on others' issues instead of his own will be a very good thing for his growth as a person. Having a more selfless purpose--and one separate from Will Riker--is another very positive thing for him, in my book. And I think as his experiences and his purpose diverges further and further from Will, that might eventually help him to get a separate sense of self, far more than any of that Maquis stuff ever could.
 
No, don't worry, your post didn't come off like that. And I think you're right.
 
About your idea for continuing Riker's story...IF you were to pick up the "service" theme I've been discussing, what you describe kind of evokes Bob Hope and the USO for some reason. Though I'm not sure how long it would take for the troops to accept some of the people in Riker's troupe that you describe--especially the Founder.
 
Wonderful story - thanks for re-posting it. The story you've created for Tom is close to the one I imagine for him as canon Trek has left him - in that he was so naive to believe he'd be rescued when - as we viewers have discovered - no-one ever thought of him again.

I like your idea of the entertainment troupe - it suits Tom's need to do something completely different from everything he's experienced so far, and I can well believe that there'd be other people in that situation too.
 
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