May Challenge - ENT: "Countdown"

[Goliath]

Your story was good-until the last paragraph. Then it stepped into greatness. The countdown framework worked really well, too.

I'm glad you liked the last paragraph--it was a late addition.

At first, the story was just going to end with Arhcer's reflections. But then I got the idea to flash back to Russell's childhood, and it just seemed so fitting. Yet another contingency--the first link in the chain.

And you did an excellent job on Archer-"No, leave it in" was exactly the character's style. Bravo!

Thanks!

 

[trampledamage]

Wow.

I didn't know the story of the XCV330, but I didn't need to - for such a compact form, you packed in all the information you needed. A wonderful story.