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February Challenge - The First Day

Gibraltar

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The drizzling rain was so damnably cold that the young man thought he could feel his bones freezing as he and his fellows stood at attention in the muddy field under heavy grey skies. Clouds of steam rose from their combined breath, curlicues of vapor ascending from their sweat soaked heads following the ten kilometer run that had signified the first of many challenges to face them during their time in basic training.

The sergeant major who strode onto the mockery of a parade ground glared at the collective rabble, a mish-mash of conscripts, recruits, and a few unfortunate souls who’d been Shanghaied out of Murial’s seedier drinking establishments. “What a sad assortment,” he assessed gravely. “To think that the empire’s future rests in the hands of you shit-heels makes me queasy.”

The grizzled giant walked down the line, making the occasional pointed observation about a recruit’s size or physical characteristics. Eventually he came to a stop in front of the young man. “Poet, you’re still with us? I didn’t think you’d survive the run.”

The young man barked reflexively, “Sir, yes sir!”

“Did you compose a moving sonnet for the brigade during your leisurely jog?” the sergeant major asked, leaning in so close to the young man that he could smell the rank scent of eidleberry tobacco on the non-com’s breath.

“Sir, no sir!”

The sergeant raised an eyebrow, staring deep into the young man’s eyes. “You don’t like me, do you Poet?”

“Sir… uh… yes, sir!” The man blinked, realizing his error. “I mean no… uh… no, sir!”

Laughing heartily, the sergeant major stepped back, addressing the rest of the formation. “Poor Poet! He’s come to us because he has nowhere else to go. Someone ate his planet, isn’t that terrible?”

There was a smattering of laughter from down the line as the sergeant continued, “His people were so busy painting and singing and studying the wonders of the universe that they couldn’t be bothered to arm themselves. When the hordes finally arrived on their doorstep, his people tried to talk their way out of being annihilated. And what do you think that got them?”

“That got them dead, Sergeant Major!” was the unanimous reply, save for the young man who held his tongue.

“Let that be your first lesson,” the sergeant major roared. “What you do not control and cannot defend against will kill you!”

Leaning in toward the young man again, the sergeant major growled, “Your people died because they were weak, Poet. Just like you.”

Forgetting himself, the young man replied hotly, “That’s not true!”

“No?” the sergeant major replied with mock dismay, “it’s not?”

“Sir, no sir!” the young man managed to blurt, working mightily to reign in his churning emotions.

“Tell me, Poet, do you think your whore of a mother and that pathetic coward who called himself your father died clinging to each other in the wreckage of their house? Or do you wonder if perhaps the cyborgs didn’t take them?” The non-com raised his hands dramatically towards the horizon, as if painting a picture with words, “Can you see them now, soulless zombies with wires and tubes sticking out of them, shuffling around their mighty ships, forever trapped in their own heads as they lay waste to countless worlds?”

The young man snapped, letting loose a guttural cry of rage as he charged the instructor. He’d barely moved a foot before he found himself sailing through the air to land heavily in freezing mud, unable to breath from the lightening-quick strike the sergeant major had delivered to his midsection just before flipping him up and over his shoulder.

The young man lay in the cloying mud, gasping for breath and clutching at his stomach. As his vision cleared, he could see the sergeant major looking down at him. “You’re angry, Poet. That’s good. Anger I can work with.” He gestured for two other men in formation to come forward and pull the young man to his feet. “Welcome to the Hekosian Royal Army, Mister… “

“Lar’ragos,” the young man croaked, still fighting for air.

The sergeant major shook his head, “I prefer Poet, don’t you?” Taking the young man’s silence as approval, the instructor turned his back and began moving down the line. “Remember, Poet, always cheat, always win. The only unfair fight is the one you lose. The advice comes too late for the rest of your people, but you just might be salvageable.”

“Sir...” the young man coughed, “Yes sir!”
 
Nicely done. I liked the feel of a boot camp you presented with the active descriptions and point-of-view storytelling, though I wasn't sure with whom to really empathize with until near the end of the piece. I certainly enjoyed the imagery you employed throughout the entire piece.

My only nit is the response boots give to a Sergeant Major. I think a Sergeant Major would balk at being called 'sir'. :) They do work for a living, don't they? Also, having a sergeant major review boots is a big honor. Did they do something special? :)

-- ZC
 
At boot, it's more important to instill in the recruits that they're bottom rung on the ladder, hence addressing anyone superior, non-com or commissioned officer, as 'sir.'

And the sergeant major was making the rounds to see the newest batch of recruits.

Glad you liked it! :)
 
Gibraltar said:
At boot, it's more important to instill in the recruits that they're bottom rung on the ladder, hence addressing anyone superior, non-com or commissioned officer, as 'sir.'

And the sergeant major was making the rounds to see the newest batch of recruits.

Glad you liked it! :)

Well, in the American military, having interacted with non-comms personally, I've raised the ire of calling a sergeant major 'sir'. Just the one time. I never did it again. :) After that, it was always, "Yes, Sergeant Major."

-- ZC
 
Zefram_Cochrane said:
Gibraltar said:
At boot, it's more important to instill in the recruits that they're bottom rung on the ladder, hence addressing anyone superior, non-com or commissioned officer, as 'sir.'

And the sergeant major was making the rounds to see the newest batch of recruits.

Glad you liked it! :)

Well, in the American military, having interacted with non-comms personally, I've raised the ire of calling a sergeant major 'sir'. Just the one time. I never did it again. :) After that, it was always, "Yes, Sergeant Major."

-- ZC
True enough, but this was four hundred years ago on the far side of the galaxy. The Hekosian Royal Armed Forces have some quirks. ;)
 
Ah, I didn't get the Hekosian Royal part. I must have missed that in the reading.

-- ZC
 
First off, I loved the story. Seeing a 'weak' Lar'ragos certainly was interesting. It speaks volumes about his character and is motivation to be that character.

Now, I have to chime in on the 'sir' thing. :)

In the US, it varies as if you should call your instructor in Basic Training "sir" or not. In the Army, it's "drill sergeant." In the Marines, you do...and better...call them "sir". ;)
 
Great intro story for Pava! And a reminder that all of our ST "heroes" started as lowly recruits or plebes somewhere.

I thought you nailed the D.I. The goal of basic is to break down the recruits - physically and mentally - and rebuild them into something stronger in both regards.

A quick, enjoyable story and very fitting for the challenge!
 
Very nice. Reminded me a little of the Camp Currie scene in Heinlein's Starship Troopers. :thumbsup:
 
A very good character vignette of everybody's favorite tough guy being not so tough.

I liked it.
 
An excellent account of how our favorite antenna chomping El-Aurian got his start. Nothing like a tough DI to put the fear of God into anyone.
 
Always love these tantalizing little glimpses into Pava's history and how he became the quirky little almost-psycho we all know and love. :evil:
 
Great story. It really grabs your attention and you managed to convey the atmosphere at the camp very well.
 
It's always nice to delve into Pava's background. I agree with Dnoth that its interesting to see Lar'ragos at a time in his life when he's not so badass.
 
Pava has always had a sense of 'damaged goods' about him. Its nice to see him as a young, angry man with a cause.
 
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