EAT BROCCOLI PUFFS! (English Commercial)

[Danoz]

http://www.facebook.com/v/927769824904

So I'm having my students in Japan create commercials in English, but I promised them I would do my own as an example first ... so here you have my... best attempt

Let me know what you think! Had fun making this.

--Daniel

 

[RoJoHen]

They should play that during the next Super Bowl.

 

[Yeoman Randi]

Fun! What a great way to teach your students. You sound like a cool teacher.

 

[Deckerd]

Good advert but you'll never get me to eat a broccoli head with milk.

 

[Jadzia]

For a commercial I think it's too long. Commercials move fast. Aim for 30 seconds. I would cut it something like this:

0-4 bed
4-7 up/yawn
7-13 cereal
13-21 exercises (2 seconds per scene)
21-26 basketball slow-mo
26-27 show the cereal again here
27-30 text

 

[trekkiedane]

http://www.facebook.com/v/927769824904

So I'm having my students in Japan create commercials in English, but I promised them I would do my own as an example first ... so here you have my... best attempt

Let me know what you think! Had fun making this.

--Daniel

Is there some trick to watching that?

Whenever I click on that link my media player starts (ah! -so it's a video!-?) but the only thing I get to see is an image of very small padlock

 

[RJDiogenes]

I have those same pajamas!

 

[Danoz]

Yeah it's definitely way too long for a "real commercial" -- I think maybe I'll do another edit to show at the end of the year with the student's presentations so that mine takes up less time. As for now, showing this a couple times will just take up some class time and hopefully get them thinking about their projects in a creative way.

Right now this is more like some sort of infomercial/80's montage

 

[Danoz]

OH, Please do me a favor and check out the refrigerator. Tell me somebody noticed the awesome Captain Picard pencil drawing my brother did me for Christmas!!!

Anybody?

 

[RJDiogenes]

Wow. That's pretty impressive.

 

[An Officer]

That was a lot of fun. Reminded me of Rocky.

It's really difficult to edit your own work, isn't it? Since you have spent so much time and effort making it, you want to keep as much as possible. I guess that's why it's useful to have an editor who is not part of the filming process. Great job anyway, made me laugh! You must be pretty fit to do some of those moves, especially the pull-ups! Did you film that by yourself, just you and a tripod? If so, kudos.

 

[auntiehill]

OH, Please do me a favor and check out the refrigerator. Tell me somebody noticed the awesome Captain Picard pencil drawing my brother did me for Christmas!!!

Anybody?

Yes, I noticed that right off. It's like a geek magnet.

Awesome commercial. But it could be shortened, to give it much punch.

 

[Sephiroth]

Eat recycled food, it's good for the environment, and it's OK for you.

 

[M'Sharak]

OH, Please do me a favor and check out the refrigerator. Tell me somebody noticed the awesome Captain Picard pencil drawing my brother did me for Christmas!!!

Anybody?

I would, but it's not working for me at all - it's just a black screen, no picture.

 

[Danoz]

OH, Please do me a favor and check out the refrigerator. Tell me somebody noticed the awesome Captain Picard pencil drawing my brother did me for Christmas!!!

Anybody?

I would, but it's not working for me at all - it's just a black screen, no picture.

Try this!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DcUBOoLRfEI

 

[M'Sharak]

OH, Please do me a favor and check out the refrigerator. Tell me somebody noticed the awesome Captain Picard pencil drawing my brother did me for Christmas!!!

Anybody?

I would, but it's not working for me at all - it's just a black screen, no picture.

Try this!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DcUBOoLRfEI

OK, that did the trick, and the Picard drawing is indeed awesome.

I'll echo what others said, though, about making it shorter. What you've got is a good length for a short film or music video, but commercial airtime is money, and it's typically sold in bits of 15 or 20 or 30 seconds. Commercial writing and production is about packing the message into the shortest time possible.

Your basic idea could still work, I think, but it wants to be drastically compressed. You may also be able to work this into your students' learning project: once they get the hang of conceiving and assembling their TV spots, they can take it further by editing the message (language + images) down to only its most essential parts.

 

[scotpens]

For a commercial I think it's too long. Commercials move fast. Aim for 30 seconds.

You’re probably too young to remember 60-second commercials.

But yes, two-and-a-half minutes is an awkward length -- too long for a standard TV spot, too short for an infomercial.

 

[Jadzia]

I know commercials come all different lengths. Some we have in the England are 60 seconds, some are 15 seconds, but most are 30.

I have some old video tapes with recordings from the early 90s. I found it funny to look back at how commercial breaks were done. One ad break per half hour, and just 2 or 3 adverts per break. And how relaxing they all were ~ commercials of today are so hyperactive in comparison!

 

[scotpens]

^^ You think commercials from the early ’90s were slow-paced compared to today’s? Check out some of these:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wbiofcuTZBo&nofeather=True

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Co7dvbhtsJg&nofeather=True

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oeas5jtffpM&nofeather=True

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o83xxWCel8g&nofeather=True

 

[Jadzia]

^ There was a definite theme of things being clean and fresh in the 1950s.

Now excuse me while I go try my first cigarette... yes, I think that's what I want to do.