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ST: Gibraltar - Gravity

Oh my GAWDSSSSSSSSSSSS!!

That was sheer brilliance. Loved it. Real heart in the mouth stuff! What a scene, what a bloody brilliant scene. And Ashok?! He is just PURE win and awesomeness!

I really want to give a review that is like informed and deep and thoughtful - but hell no - that just bloody rocked!!

Time to insert the Bolian thumbs up!

:bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian::bolian:
 
I think I might have a little bit of a character crush on Ashok now. Not so much for his brilliance -- though that WAS brilliant ... it was the nonchalant "Hmm, seems my father was wrong about me after all; can I get you a beverage?" afterward that clinched it. He's suddenly pure awesome. Iden is impressed. ;)

As for the rest of it, wow, what a nail-biter! Poor Olivia was in so far over her head and just reacting to things (reminds me of a certain Lt. j.g. I know on another ship that shall remain nameless). Lucky for her, the chief engineer knows what the hell he's doing.

Awesome stuff. Glad to have you back!
 
:lol: That was great! All it needed was Ashok turning to Sandhurst at the end and asking, "Boxers or briefs?"

Seriously, a nice (albeit tense) segment. Juneau managed to survive without losing it completely, but she continues to struggle with command-level decisions.

Looking forward to more!
 
BWAAAHAHAAH! I called it right--riding the explosion! AWESOME! And Ashok saves the day...he should remember this one always, whenever he starts trying to doubt himself again. :)

Can't wait to see where this goes next!
 
Thanks to you all for the terrific feedback on the last couple of segments. :) It feels good to be getting reacquainted with my characters after nearly a year-long dry spell. Here's hoping I can keep building on this momentum. :techman:
 
Ashok's "can I offer you a beverage" line just has to go down as an instant classic. Yeah, we've just come within a hair length of death and I pulled out this super awesome maneuver which saved everybody's butt ... but how about refreshments?

The epitome of cool.

It stands in stark contrast to poor Juneau, who is so clearly in over her head here. Poor girl is definitely a far cry away from being command material at least when she is 'herself'.

Terrific stuff.
 
Gravity - Chapter 6, Part I

Chapter 6

Sandhurst entered Sickbay expecting to find a buzz of activity as the surgical teams attended to the rematerialized survivors from Harrier. Instead he discovered a subdued atmosphere and only one of the Border Service personnel visible under the clamshell support frame of the primary diagnostic bed. He spotted Taiee making notes on an oversized medical padd as she spoke in hushed tones with one of Gibraltar's two Mark I emergency medical holograms.

He stepped to the side and waited patiently, having long ago learned that Sickbay was the province of the CMO and she reigned supreme here. Taiee would brook no interruptions that might endanger the health of her patients. After a few moments the compactly built woman with her short brown hair and expressive eyes turned to acknowledge Sandhurst's presence. Her demeanor was grim, and the captain's heart lurched at the possible implications.

"Sir, I regret to report that only three of the five people you beamed off the scout ship have survivable injuries." Taiee was always direct when delivering bad news, electing not to sugar coat the unfortunate realities of their work. "The other two are terminal, or they would be if I'd rematerialized them. At present, I believe leaving them in the pattern buffer is the most humane course of action." She fixed Sandhurst with the icily professional detachment that she reserved for just such occasions. "I'm going to need corroborating command-level approval to disable the Heisenberg compensators prior to rematerialization."

Sandhurst nodded slowly as the import of what she was requesting settled onto his shoulders. Two of the Border Service members could not be saved. If they were beamed back into existence, they would die shortly thereafter, likely in great pain, confusion, and fear. Taiee was seeking permission to rematerialize those people only to a molecular level of precision, not the sub-atomic degree that was necessary to fully reintegrate living tissue. What was beamed back would be, in essence, just their deceased bodies. Because this did not qualify as a medical emergency due to the terminal diagnosis, a command officer's counter-signature was required for the procedure.

Taiee walked to the compartment's primary view screen and reconfigured it into an access display as Sandhurst moved to join her. "Computer, recognize Chief Medical Officer Lieutenant Issara Taiee." The computer responded in the affirmative and she looked to Sandhurst expectantly.

Sandhurst paused for a brief moment to give his next words the weight they deserved, seeing as they would effectively result in the deaths of two Starfleet personnel. "Computer, recognize Captain Donald Sandhurst."

"Recognized," it responded.

Taiee began, "Computer, I hereby authorize the disabling of the Heisenberg compensators for the rematerialization of transporter patterns One-Seven-One-A and One-Seven-Two-A, identified as Petty Officer 2nd Class Trosham Yallk, and Ensign Thomas Booker."

"Warning, this procedure will result in the cessation of life functions for both individuals. Are you certain you wish to continue?"


"Affirmative," Taiee said with practiced resolve.

"Authorization from a command officer is required to initiate this procedure,"
the computer continued in its infuriatingly nonchalant tone.

"Authorization granted, confirmation Sandhurst-beta-charlie-three-seven-oh-one," the captain added.

"Select specific location for transport."


"Ship's morgue. Stasis tanks five and nine," Taiee said, completing the macabre transaction.

"Transport complete to specified locations,"
the computer informed them.

Taiee pressed her thumb to the display screen as she instructed, “Log time of death for both subjects concurrent with time of rematerialization in ship’s morgue.”

“Time of death logged for both subjects as seventeen-hundred twenty-three hours Federated Standard Time.”

Both Sandhurst and Taiee bowed their heads for a long moment in silent acknowledgement of the sacrifice of their now deceased comrades. Finally, very much wanting to change the subject, Sandhurst gestured towards the primary exam table. "Is that Lieutenant Trumbley?"

"Yes, sir."

"Is she in any condition to receive the news regarding her ship and crew?"

Taiee hesitated, tapping her padd against her side idly as she considered that. "Physically, she's fine. I revived her about twenty minutes ago, and since then she's been pretty persistent about finding out what happened to her people."

"No time like the present," Sandhurst murmured.

Taiee looked over her shoulder at where the Border Service officer was being treated by the EMH. "If you'd like, Captain, I can break the news to her."

Sandhurst grasped her shoulder lightly. "Thank you for the offer, Doc, but this is one of those responsibilities we captains have to attend to." It would be the third time in the past year that he had to inform a commanding officer that their ship and members of their crew had been lost in the line of duty. He reflected mordantly that this sad duty never got any easier.

"Bad day," Taiee observed sadly.

"No," Sandhurst replied, shaking his head. "We saved three people today, Doc. That's a win in anyone's book." He looked to the exam table again as he girded himself for the unpleasant notification. "If you'll excuse me."

*****

Ferengi Marauder, Prince of Profit


DaiMon Junt watched their approach to Hades' Apex with anticipation. The information he had obtained from his Romulan source had proved correct, verified by the presence of the aging Starfleet escort now parked in orbit around the station. There was opportunity here, he knew. Desperation bred such opportunity, and a man obsessed with his family's legacy might do nearly anything in order to see his plans come to fruition. Fortunately for Junt, he had begun sewing the seeds of discord in this place some time ago.

*****

Verrik had resumed his post aboard Gibraltar after their return from the Harrier rescue, and now looked up from his tactical board to announce, "Lieutenant, the D'Kora-class marauder we detected earlier is now on an intercept course with Hades' Apex."

Juneau was seated at the Ops station, despite being the duty officer on watch. She was more at home at her own post, rather than feeling like the undeserving center of attention in the captain's chair. She turned back towards the Vulcan officer. "Anything we need to worry about?"

"I'm picking up routine comms traffic between the station and the Ferengi ship, broadcast in the clear. No challenge has been issued. It appears to be a routine and expected approach, Lieutenant."

"Okay, Mister Verrik."

"I would note, however," the security chief continued, "that the marauder has some rather exotic armaments whose effective firepower is on par with that of a Romulan D'Deridex-class warbird."

Juneau frowned. "How the hell does a trade ship sporting those kinds of weapons get permission to enter a Federation system?"

"Unknown, sir," Verrik replied. "Our database does confirm that the Prince of Profit has unrestricted access rights to Federation territory. All licenses and inspection certificates are properly logged and up to date."

Juneau turned back to the viewer where the Ferengi ship was now on visual. Though it retained the traditional horse-shoe shape of the D'Kora-class, this vessel appeared more dreadnaught than merchant hauler. The typical orange color-scheme of Ferengi designs had been abandoned in favor of dark gray ablative armor plating whose symmetry was broken by raised blisters containing a host of additional weapons ports to include disruptor cannons, phaser emitters, missile batteries and torpedo bays.

"Well," Juneau noted dryly, "somebody's got friends in high places."

*****
 
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Agggghh! That's it? :eek:

Okay, first of all, that entire scene in sickbay was gut-wrenching to the point I had to take a moment. It makes perfect sense that with transporter technology being what it is, they would choose to do what they did -- but it also is just so counter to my own instincts and beliefs ... it just hurt to read it. That's not a slam at all -- good writing makes people feel things, and that sequence definitely engaged both my emotions and my mind. Well done. And poor Sandhurst. His job just never gets any easier.

I also wanted to mention Olivia sitting at Ops ... I really feel for her. I have a soft spot for characters like her, characters who are good, well-intentioned people but imperfect and not quite up to what life is throwing their way. She's very real and it makes her alter ego all the more jarring. I suppose whatever they're caught up in right now is not of sufficient intrigue to the Section, or maybe she'd have switched by now ... all the same, she seems so overwhelmed it makes me want to hug her.

As for the Ferengi -- well, keep going! I want to know what happens next! :bolian:
 
Odd as it may sound, the scene in Sickbay gives me renewed hope for Sandhurst. Sure, losing those two Border Dogs was tragic, but the Captain showed a remarkable level of maturity and perspective dealing with their deaths. No doubt his personal demons are still inside, but he's managing to keep them at bay for now. Donald has really grown and those four pips fit him well.

Very troubling having a Ferengi ship, armed to the teeth (ears?) and transiting freely in Federation space. That can't be good and hints at something very sinister.

Unlike Sandhurst, Juneau still lacks the confidence for command. I hope she can rise to the occasion without the help of her alter-ego.

Good stuff!
 
As for the scene in sickbay...I think I would have to know JUST how bad these injuries were. I would also want to know what these officers had in their living wills--I would imagine Starfleet keeps those on file for every officer. Basically, if they had a DNR or something similar, then I would see it as honoring their own stated wishes.

Which wouldn't make it any easier on Sandhurst, that's for sure.

I agree with TLR in that I think Sandhurst is REALLY coming into his own as a captain. But then, contrary to what he himself thought, I've always thought he had it in him all along, and I've been rooting for him from day one. :)

BTW--I don't think Juneau has the alter-ego anymore...I think it transferred to one of the Vulcans.
 
I must be the only one who kept thinking of those obnoxious computer windows during that scene in sickbay. I just couldn't help it, when the computer asked if they were sure they wanted to proceed, in my mind I was seeing Sanhurst hovering over the OK and CANCEL buttons. I know, wrong imagery.

It was a hard hitting segment though.

And yeah, a Ferengi ship on par with a warbird is not going to create any problems for Gibraltar at all ...
 
Thanks to you all for the terrific feedback on the last couple of segments. :) It feels good to be getting reacquainted with my characters after nearly a year-long dry spell. Here's hoping I can keep building on this momentum. :techman:

Indeed! Great solution and you are really building Ashok into someone I want to know more about.
 
I must be the only one who kept thinking of those obnoxious computer windows during that scene in sickbay. I just couldn't help it, when the computer asked if they were sure they wanted to proceed, in my mind I was seeing Sanhurst hovering over the OK and CANCEL buttons.

No, you're not the only one. ;)
 
After such an awesome scene of action and win, with Ashok's cool quip at the end, we can hardly get much further from it with this dire situation for Sandhurst and the underplayed emotional scene presented. It takes skill to write both well and more skill to make them work within the one story and after each other. Congratulations on terrific writing, storytelling and pace/plot development. Brave choices made by you the writer and of course brave and horrific choices made by the characters all too.
 
Cue the "Beach Boys": Let's go surfing now...a very well done scene with Ashok stealing the show. And then you shift gears as we see that not everyone made it--a very hard decision made by both Sandhurst and Taiee--but the right decision.

And now we have a souped-up Ferengi commerce raider...
 
Gravity - Chapter 6

Chapter 6, Part II

Hades' Apex


Though DaiMon Junt was no stranger to sumptuous excess, even he had to admit that the backdrop to Aldo Ramirez’s office was as breathtaking as it was imposing. He judged that it was no doubt a tactic designed to undermine a potential opponent’s confidence, an effort to mesmerize and awe them with the panorama while distracting them from matters at hand. Junt decided at that moment that Ramirez was cagy enough to maximize his own ‘home-field’ advantage.

The dark, troubled disk of Acheron hung there in space, blacker even than the surrounding cosmos except for the angry flashes of lightening that constantly blazed across its upper atmosphere in great swaths.

Ramirez stood from behind the great desk, stepping around it to offer that most human of greetings, the handshake. Junt shook the offered appendage with a strength and confidence that Ramirez had not expected. “DaiMon, welcome back to Hades’ Apex. To what do we owe the pleasure?” He gestured for Junt to be seated across from him as he resumed his place behind the enormous desk.

Junt settled into the chair as he regarded Ramirez appraisingly, taking measure of the man’s reputed business savvy. “I know your time is valuable, Mr. Ramirez, so I won’t waste it. Rumor has it that you’re a man with problems. I am in the problem solving business. It seems fortuitous that we should have found each other at what appears to be a critical crossroads for your company.”

Ramirez leaned back in his chair as he brought a hand to his face and idly tapped just above his lip with his index finger. “You’ve stopped here to trade any number of times in the past year and a half, DaiMon, but this is the first time you’ve ever requested a meeting with me. Why now?”

“The circumstances seem more favorable now that you might entertain my offer.”

The human lowered his hand and let it fall into his lap. He inclined his head slightly. “And what offer might that be?”

“A question first, if I may be so bold,” Junt rejoined.

Ramirez bobbed his head in silent assent.

“Your operation produces more heavy gaseous elements than nearly any other like sized industry in or near Federation space. You do business with the Orions, Chrysalians, Boslic, even the Stacius Guild, yet you’ve shied away from trading with the Ferengi. May I ask why?”

Ramirez leveled his piercing gaze on the daimon, returning the Ferengi captain’s scrutiny in kind. “Certainly. In the past decade I’ve signed four separate export agreements with the Ferengi. Every single time I’ve ended up having the carpet pulled out from under me due to ‘unforeseen financial circumstances.’ Invariably, some seemingly insignificant detail in the fine print ends up being exploited in order to undercut my profit margin on the deal, and always to the advantage of the Ferengi. A veritable army of lawyers and a legal database only three AI points away from full sentience weren’t sufficient to protect my company from Ferengi duplicity.”

A slow nod was Junt’s initial response. “Yes,” he said after a prolonged pause, “we are adept at such things, regretfully.”

“So you can see,” Ramirez continued, “my incentive for dealing with Ferengi middlemen is nil.”

“I do not doubt you have been unfairly treated by my brethren, Mr. Ramirez, and for that I apologize. However, I stand by my own reputation, which is not insignificant.”

Ramirez dipped his head, awarding Junt the point. “Of course. You gained much notoriety during the war. Who hasn’t heard of the Ferengi brigand audacious enough to raid Dominion convoys and Cardassian settlements, handing over your prisoners and plunder for nothing more than potentially worthless post-war trade concessions by the Federation and the Klingons? Rather bold, really, gambling that the Alpha Quadrant powers would be victorious. If I’m not mistaken, the Ferengi futures markets were all trading on speculation that the Dominion was going to triumph.”

“Sometimes the greatest profits go to those daring enough to oppose conventional wisdom.” Junt flashed a toothy smile composed of razor sharp bridgework.

Ramirez offered a guarded smile of his own in response. “Why are you here, DaiMon?” he asked finally.

“If I could solve the mystery of your vexing disappearances for you, would that be worth something?”

The dark brown irises of Ramirez’s eyes continued to probe the Ferengi’s stare, searching for any signs of deception. “I suppose that depends.”

A long moment stretched out between the two men. Finally, Junt deigned to ask, “On what, precisely?”

“On whether you’re the cause of these incidents in the first place. It wouldn’t be the first time one of your people had created a problem in order to solve it for a price.”

“True,” Junt conceded. “Allow me to counter with a question of my own… would it matter?”

Ramirez frowned. “What?”

“Would it matter whether or not I had manufactured the problem, so long as I was able to correct it?”

The fixed gaze of the human businessman hardened perceptibly. “You’re toying with me.”

“Absolutely not,” Junt answered coolly. “And I categorically deny having anything to do with these disappearances. I’m merely pointing out that the causal factors of your predicament are irrelevant, so long as I’m able to provide you the solution you so desperately need.”

“Who says I’m desperate?” Ramirez feinted, secretly startled by the Ferengi’s keen grasp of his circumstances.

“You’ve extended discrete feelers not only to Starfleet, but you’ve even gone as far as communicating with the Romulans in order to complete your fickle particle fountain. Your conversation with that Nero fellow was rather… enlightening. Seems his government is allowing him to dabble in proscribed Borg technology to engineer their next generation of mining ships. The fact that you’d even consider such a thing smacks of desperation.”

Ramirez’s cheeks colored, his ire percolating now. “Those were privileged conversations,” he growled.

“All’s fair in love, war, and business,” Junt offered. “One-hundred and eighty-seventh rule of acquisition.” The Ferengi made a show of settling more comfortably into his chair. “One would assume that if you are that desperate to complete work on your new mining rig, and your labor relations with your workers’ union are as bad as is rumored, such a spate of vanishings among your employees would threaten to unravel the very delicate tapestry you’ve woven around this world, Mr. Ramirez.”

Aldo struggled with the urge to touch his foot to the hidden panel on the inside of his desk that would bring his security detachment flooding into the office. He wanted to eject this arrogant Ferengi, as much for the daimon’s conceited presumption as for the fact that Junt was absolutely, undeniably correct in his assertions.

Instead, he fought to control his breathing and clear his mind. Ramirez could not afford to allow Junt to live rent free inside his head. “And if you were able to solve this problem for me, DaiMon, what would be your price?”

“Nothing exorbitant, I assure you,” Junt purred. “I would be seeking trade concessions that would allow me to act as your broker for any and all business conducted with or through members of the Ferengi Alliance.”

“Making my product less competitive due to what will undoubtedly be a significant markup by yours truly,” Ramirez observed dryly. “Hardly a boon to my business model.”

“Not at all, Ramirez,” Junt said, emphasizing his point with a mollifying raised hand. “Three percent on all transactions made through my network of contacts, no more.”

Ramirez raised a disbelieving eyebrow. “Three percent? Really?”

“Indeed. You see, I believe in a diversified portfolio of ventures. I do not, how do the Klingons say, put all my gagh on one platter. Such diversification allows me to aggregate my profits from numerous concurrent operations, and avoids bleeding my suppliers of their own earnings. In that way, we all remain solvent, and we all continue to profit from our business relationships as our networks grow and expand.”

A wan smile took shape on Ramirez’s face. “You talk a good game, DaiMon, I’ll grant you that.”

“I don’t play games, Mr. Ramirez,” Junt shot back with an icy conviction that Aldo found disconcerting coming from a Ferengi. “You’re the one whose business empire is teetering on the event horizon of a singularity. Think of all you stand to lose here, the hopes and dreams of your father and grandfather, all reduced to cinders on your watch. How unnecessarily tragic.”

Ramirez blanched, despite himself. “Starfleet is already investigating this matter,” he croaked, hating the anxiety that had crept into his voice.

“I don’t fear a bit of healthy competition,” Junt chortled, clearly savoring Ramirez’s evident discomfort. “If they can solve the puzzle before my people can, so be it. However, if I can deliver a solution to you first, what have you to lose? Through my contacts, I can open even more previously untapped markets for your product. Starfleet will only maintain the status quo.”

Junt stood gracefully, offering a polite bow. “Think on it, Mr. Ramirez. Profit or security? Progress or stagnation? Which shall it be?”

With that, DaiMon Junt strode confidently out of Aldo Ramirez’s extravagant office.

*****

USS Gibraltar

Juneau had to crane her neck to see the display over Ashok’s broad shoulder. “What have you got?”

As data scrolled up the screen dominating the Bolian’s attention, he replied, “Lieutenant Taiee requested that I review the sensor telemetry from our shuttle at the time of the emergency transport. According to Lieutenant Trumbley, Harrier had a crew compliment of six. We only beamed five off the ship. A Tiburonian petty officer named Huu’Sau-Nuwi is unaccounted for.”

Juneau looked askance at the engineer. “He probably suffered terminal injuries before you caught up with the ship.”

Ashok shook his head fractionally. “No. The captain utilized a broad-spectrum transport protocol, designed to encompass any complex biological matter onboard Harrier. That would have included any recently deceased tissue from a crew member who had just expired due to traumatic injuries.”

“Meaning?”

“Meaning, Lieutenant, the sixth crew member that was aboard the ship before it lost power was no longer there when we beamed the others away.”

"Escape pod?" she postulated.

"All accounted for," he repied. "And sensors confirmed all exterior airlocks on Harrier were sealed."

Juneau frowned, the fullness of her lips making the expression appear more of a fuming pout. “What happened to him, then?”

“That... is a very good question,” Ashok rumbled with evident frustration.

*****
 
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Hey, a new chapter! Hooray! Very well written as usual. And a new mystery to boot. Hopefully, you won't leave us hanging as long as the last time. :)
 
OMG, this was fantastic. The little tidbits you throw in there!
a legal database only three AI points away from full sentience
That deserves its own story. The whole idea of rating AI for sentience and purposely limiting it is something that's in the backdrop of my story, too, but I haven't had time to explore it much. But in one line, you really sort of fleshed it out.

And Nero and Borg tech? Whoa. Where is that going? I wonder if we'll be seeing more about that in this story.

And now we have a missing crewman.

Junt really impressed and kind of scared me, here -- just as he did Ramirez. Your writing really captured their reactions and mental games very well. I also loved the descriptions of Ramirez's office. This wasn't a blow-things-up kind of chapter, but I found it exciting anyway, and worth the wait.
 
Terrific stuff as usual. Junt is the kind of smart Ferengi who doesn't seem to be motivated only by his greed for latinum. In other words: the most dangerous kind. Ramirez is clearly playing right into his hands even if it seems clear that the man doesn't trust the Ferengi.

And the mystery deepends. Is this going to be a race for the solution? Well it better not turn into a fight cuz Gibraltar will end up as the underdog. Not that Sandhurst and crew know any other way.
 
Have I told you how much I love Junt? Does this man have Cardassian blood? Sometimes he reminds me of Garak: shrewd, powerful, and knows everything going on around him. Honestly, if the Ferengi had been like this from the start, they could have been a true, worthy adversary of the Federation, not a laughingstock. This guy is no coward or idiot, and whether it's for right or wrong, he is willing to really, truly put his ass on the line instead of cringing and shrieking when the going gets tough.

Oddly enough, I think he and Nog have a lot in common, though Nog's idealism sets him apart and makes his intentions indisputable.

And now Juneau has a missing-person case on her hands...

(The Nero comment was awesome too.)
 
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