Some of the background in the novels works well. Other stuff like the second crewman dying on the transporter being Kirk's ex wife really doesn't.
For the latter, was there a cut scene with Kirk and 'Ciana' before the tram docks? When Kirk exits, the woman next to him looks at him with a smile like she knows him, but he just exits without looking at her or saying anything to her. I'm assuming this was the same woman who dies in the transporter accident.