Star Trek: Republic

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by MasterArminas, Mar 4, 2012.

  1. theonering

    theonering Lieutenant Junior Grade Red Shirt

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    After reading everyone else's criticism, I'd still have to say I prefer the original ending.
    But I would be the first in line to read the sequel no matter which ending you choose to build on.
    My only advice to you would be to stick with your guns. And follow through on the vision you have for the story going forward. Remember... They are your characters, it's your universe. The rest of us are just along for the ride.
     
  2. TrekkieMonster

    TrekkieMonster Commodore Premium Member

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    I also have to vote for the original ending. I can see where the second version might leave you a bit more flexibility in the future but, to be honest, it just seems a bit too ... tame, if you will, for the story you told. If your Dahlgren wasn't who you portrayed him to be, this "gentler" ending would be fine, but I personally feel your original was more fitting for the story you told. Just my 2 cents worth.

    And I, too, will be looking forward to the sequel, regardless.
     
  3. Gibraltar

    Gibraltar Rear Admiral Rear Admiral

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    Okay, having now read both, I have to agree with the others who liked the original ending better. Mar’s dark ambition was cut off at the knees by Dahlgren, and justifiably so. I almost considered his threat to kill the ambassador to be going too far, but in the face of her threats to his children’s safety… that’s where the kid gloves come off.

    The original ending was truer to your characters, and I for one don’t think for a second that Mar isn’t still searching for some way to undermine Dahlgren’s reputation and that of Republic as a whole.

    This was a rollicking, swashbuckling tale of intrigue, adventure, and of tainted honor reclaimed though glorious deeds.

    Consider me onboard for the further missions of Captain Dahlgren and the good ship Republic! :techman:
     
  4. MasterArminas

    MasterArminas Commander Red Shirt

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    All right, then. The original ending it shall be. Thank you all and I am glad that you enjoyed the tale.

    Master Arminas
     
  5. MasterArminas

    MasterArminas Commander Red Shirt

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    Just a quick update: I have begun an outline for Star Trek: Republic (Book II: Blood Ties). First snippet/chapter/prologue (whatever) should be up by June 1.

    Master Arminas
     
  6. Gibraltar

    Gibraltar Rear Admiral Rear Admiral

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    Outstanding news!! :techman:
     
  7. CeJay

    CeJay Commodore Commodore

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    Looking forward to it.